[ch 1] He lay his sports jacket on his shoulders; his shirt
Posted: Mon Aug 07, 2006 10:24 am
He lay his sports jacket on his shoulders; his shirt is wrinkled throughout his chest.
I am guessing the first part should be "His sports jacket layed on his shoulders," and I've changed it to that. I am not sure what to do with the second part, though. --Ryukaiser 05:51, 21 April 2006 (PDT)
I suggest "shirt was wrinkled across his chest" *makes that minor edit* --Psieye 08:55, 21 April 2006 (PDT)
"across" is a good word to use. I concur. --Baltakatei 00:07, 22 April 2006 (PDT)
The passage in question (on page 26 of the novel) is:
「よ、キョン」
後ろから肩を叩かれた。谷口だった。
ブレザーをだらしなく肩に引っかけ、ネクタイをよれよれに結んだニヤケ面で、
「ゴールデンウィークはどっか行ったか？」
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"Hey, Kyon."
From behind, somebody clapped me on the shoulder. It was Taniguchi.
His blazer hung slovenly on his shoulders, his necktie was wrinkled and skewed to one side.
"Where did you go for Golden Week?"
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I've taken the liberty of making this correction in the text. --Freak Of Nature 15:38, 22 April 2006 (PDT)
I am guessing the first part should be "His sports jacket layed on his shoulders," and I've changed it to that. I am not sure what to do with the second part, though. --Ryukaiser 05:51, 21 April 2006 (PDT)
I suggest "shirt was wrinkled across his chest" *makes that minor edit* --Psieye 08:55, 21 April 2006 (PDT)
"across" is a good word to use. I concur. --Baltakatei 00:07, 22 April 2006 (PDT)
The passage in question (on page 26 of the novel) is:
「よ、キョン」
後ろから肩を叩かれた。谷口だった。
ブレザーをだらしなく肩に引っかけ、ネクタイをよれよれに結んだニヤケ面で、
「ゴールデンウィークはどっか行ったか？」
__
"Hey, Kyon."
From behind, somebody clapped me on the shoulder. It was Taniguchi.
His blazer hung slovenly on his shoulders, his necktie was wrinkled and skewed to one side.
"Where did you go for Golden Week?"
__
I've taken the liberty of making this correction in the text. --Freak Of Nature 15:38, 22 April 2006 (PDT)