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Talk:Oda Nobuna no Yabou:Volume1 Chapter1

2013-10-29T04:36:03Z

Mr Retro: A few questions about this translation...

A few things that I didn't feel comfortable trying to edit on my own:
- Around line 791-ish, Nobuna uses the word "pet," but later (line 819-ish) she expresses confusion at Yoshiharu's use of the same word. My guess is that the nuance between "petto" (in katakana) and whatever the Japanese word for pet is (haven't learned that one yet, :D) was lost in translation. Perhaps add a tl note? Otherwise, it definitely doesn't read correctly as is.
- At line 895-ish, it doesn't seem like Yoshiharu is the one who actually "barked." Isn't he saying that in his head? Or is he actually saying this to Nobuna?
- A small consistency thing that kind of bugs me is that ellipses and dashes tend to vary in style and length quite a bit (formatted ellipses combined with periods, 3-5 length dashes, etc.). Are these differences intentional? If not, I think it'd be a good idea to pick a style for each and use it throughout the whole series.

I think that's pretty much it, thanks!

Also, it'd probably be good to check some of the more involved edits I made (as noted in my edit summary). These are spots that didn't make much sense when read in English (due to issues with syntax, structure, or phrasing), so I made greater changes. I'm fairly confident I didn't change the meaning, but they could be stylistically different than what the translators and editors might want.

[[User:Mr Retro|Mr Retro]] ([[User talk:Mr Retro|talk]]) 23:36, 28 October 2013 (CDT)

Talk:Ore no Imōto ga Konna ni Kawaii Wake ga Nai:Volume 6 Chapter 3

2013-06-26T18:27:29Z

Mr Retro: Created page with "Might Kyousuke be saying "Cerberus" (as in the three-headed dog monster from Greek mythology) at note 23? That would seem to fit with the dark, gothic kind of setting that "M..."

Might Kyousuke be saying "Cerberus" (as in the three-headed dog monster from Greek mythology) at note 23? That would seem to fit with the dark, gothic kind of setting that "Maschera" apparently has, and it seems to fit his line, too. Evidently, it can be pronounced with a hard "k" sound rather than the "s" sound that might be more familiar ("ker-ber-us" rather than "ser-ber-us"), and spelling it "kerberos" is also valid according to the Wikipedia entry.

I also wonder if Kuroneko is just saying the name of the character that Kyousuke is cosplaying as at note 24.
[[User:Mr Retro|Mr Retro]] ([[User talk:Mr Retro|talk]]) 13:27, 26 June 2013 (CDT)

Talk:Itsuka Tenma no Kuro Usagi:Volume 1 Chapter 5

2013-06-20T01:53:47Z

Mr Retro: Created page with "So, I noticed that an ellipsis is generally being used to show when narration or a character's speech is being cut off or interrupted. Like this: It's too dangero......" But..."

So, I noticed that an ellipsis is generally being used to show when narration or a character's speech is being cut off or interrupted. Like this:

It's too dangero......"
But Taito then said.
"It would be fine. I'll get it done without a glitch. This time, I can't let it end like the way it did in the past. I'll protect you properly this time."
"But."
"I said it's not a problem."
"............ uhn."

When Taito responds to Saitohimea's "It's too dangero..." and "But" it seems that he would be cutting her off. There are a few other instances throughout this chapter where this happens, and I'd like to suggest changing any ellipses to dashes ("---" is what is being used in this translation). It's just a formatting thing, but ellipses are most often used to show when a period of time passes or when a character responds with silence. So, it doesn't read quite right when ellipses are used for the interruptions and such.

Also, I've noticed that, when a character says something like "*some statement*, right?" it is often written as "*some statement* right?" So, I have been adding in the comma. If there's a particular reason for keeping it the other way, I'll gladly stop.

[[User:Mr Retro|Mr Retro]] ([[User talk:Mr Retro|talk]]) 20:53, 19 June 2013 (CDT)