Absolute Duo:Volume 1 Chapter 1 - Revision history

RikiNutcase at 09:25, 13 January 2015

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	The chairman moved on without any mercy.		The chairman moved on without any mercy.

	[Fight, ~~<<{{Furigana\|《Exceed》\|~~Children chosen by heaven~~}}>>~~!! And grasp hold of your own future with your own hands!!]		[Fight, El Seed(Children chosen by heaven)!! And grasp hold of your own future with your own hands!!]

	Her sharp words. At the same time the sound of the bell rang throughout not only the auditorium, but the whole school.		Her sharp words. At the same time the sound of the bell rang throughout not only the auditorium, but the whole school.
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	And those who are willing to fight, that had accepted this test shouted out the 《word that carried strength》, and there were blue-white 《Flames》 released from various places.		And those who are willing to fight, that had accepted this test shouted out the 《word that carried strength》, and there were blue-white 《Flames》 released from various places.

	Sword, spear, bow and many other weapons had appeared within my sight. When they took the weapons in their hands and they swung them towards their opponents~~, the~~ sound of the battle and weapons colliding echoed throughout the auditorium.		Sword, spear, bow and many other weapons had appeared within my sight. When they took the weapons in their hands and they swung them towards their opponents.

			The sound of the battle and weapons colliding echoed throughout the auditorium.

	Under that situation, we were the only ones that were standing silently while looking at each other—.		Under that situation, we were the only ones that were standing silently while looking at each other—.
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	(This is an 《Exceed》………….! The talk about crossing the boundaries of humans wasn’t exaggerated at all.)		(This is an 《Exceed》………….! The talk about crossing the boundaries of humans wasn’t exaggerated at all.)

	“You have a nice body. Do you perhaps practice something? A little martial arts?”		“You have a nice body. Do you perhaps practice something?"

			"A little martial arts?”

	“Yes. For me it’s Kendo.”		“Yes. For me it’s Kendo.”

Anaxagoras: Consistency, grammar, wording & sticking to set terminologies. Also commas.

2015-01-13T06:44:23Z

Consistency, grammar, wording & sticking to set terminologies. Also commas.

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	There were also those who were standing there because they still hadn’t realized it.		There were also those who were standing there because they still hadn’t realized it.

	And those who are willing to fight, that had accepted this test shouted out the 《word that carried strength》, and there were blue-white ~~《Flame》~~ released from various places.		And those who are willing to fight, that had accepted this test shouted out the 《word that carried strength》, and there were blue-white 《Flames》 released from various places.

	Sword, spear, bow and many other weapons had appeared within my sight. When they took the weapons in their hands and they swung them towards their opponents.		Sword, spear, bow and many other weapons had appeared within my sight. When they took the weapons in their hands and they swung them towards their opponents, the sound of the battle and weapons colliding echoed throughout the auditorium.

	~~The~~ sound of the battle and weapons colliding echoed throughout the auditorium.

	Under that situation, we were the only ones that were standing silently while looking at each other—.		Under that situation, we were the only ones that were standing silently while looking at each other—.
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	And the one who finally spoke was Imari.		And the one who finally spoke was Imari.

	“I don’t like the sentence 'It can’t be helped' but—there is something I must accomplish. In order to reach that goal, I want to enroll in this academy at all ~~cost~~. So—.”		“I don’t like the sentence 'It can’t be helped' but—there is something I must accomplish. In order to reach that goal, I want to enroll in this academy at all costs. So—.”

	Imari looked sharply and straight into my eyes, and then shouted.		Imari looked sharply and straight into my eyes, and then shouted.
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	“I can’t give up on this path!”		“I can’t give up on this path!”

	She put her hand to her chest, and ~~《Astar》~~ appeared due to 《word that carried strength》.		She put her hand to her chest, and 《Aster》 appeared due to the 《word that carried strength》.

	The ~~《Flame》 that was glowing in~~ blue-white was Imari’s 《Soul》 and her 《Will》 to fight.		The blue-white glowing 《Flame》 was Imari’s 《Soul》 and her 《Will》 to fight.

	Imari grabbed it without hesitation.		Imari grabbed it without hesitation.

	The 《Flame》 changed into a long stick like shape, and then—right after giving out a strong glow, a 《Blade》 that had a beautiful curve was within Imari’s hand.		The 《Flame》 changed into a long, stick-like shape, and then—right after giving out a strong glow, a 《Blade》 that had a beautiful curve was within Imari’s hand.

	“Tooru, you bring out your 《Blaze》 too………!”		“Tooru, you bring out your 《Blaze》 too………!”
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	(----------Uh! Fast!!)		(----------Uh! Fast!!)

	Thanks to explosive ~~power~~ powered up by the 《Lucifer》, the distance of a few meters disappeared in an instant.		Thanks to the explosive strength powered up by the 《Lucifer》, the distance of a few meters disappeared in an instant.

	“Kuh!”		“Kuh!”
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	When I suddenly took a back step to dodge it, the swung down 《Blade》 grazed my clothes and slashed the floor.		When I suddenly took a back step to dodge it, the swung down 《Blade》 grazed my clothes and slashed the floor.

	The deep slash mark left on the floor was not something that could be thought of from a girl’s physical strength.		The deep slash mark left on the floor was not something that could be thought of coming from a girl’s physical strength.

	(This is an 《Exceed》………….! The talk about crossing the boundaries of humans wasn’t exaggerated at all.)		(This is an 《Exceed》………….! The talk about crossing the boundaries of humans wasn’t exaggerated at all.)

	“You have a nice body. ~~Are~~ you perhaps ~~doing~~ something?”		“You have a nice body. Do you perhaps practice something? A little martial arts?”

	“A little martial arts.”

	“Yes. For me it’s Kendo.”		“Yes. For me it’s Kendo.”
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	I returned a small smile back to Imari who was taking a sword stance.		I returned a small smile back to Imari who was taking a sword stance.

	“Fufu, thank you. Although it is offensive to say that after dodging. ………….~~but~~ I won’t miss next time.”		“Fufu, thank you. Although it is offensive to say that after dodging. ………….But I won’t miss next time.”

	Imari’s eyes turned serious again.		Imari’s eyes turned serious again.
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	The flow did not stop even though I dodged.		The flow did not stop even though I dodged.

	Immediately, the 2nd and 3rd slash ~~was~~ released------		Immediately, the 2nd and 3rd slash were released------

	But, I safely avoided all of those slashes.		But, I safely avoided all of those slashes.
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	When I called over to her, Imari slackened her expression with a fuu and made a smile.		When I called over to her, Imari slackened her expression with a fuu and made a smile.

	“If you want me to admit defeat then, you have to fight properly Tooru. That is what manners are.”		“If you want me to admit defeat, then you have to fight properly, Tooru. That is what manners are.”

	I was convinced after I saw that smiling face, and those eyes filled with strong determination.		I was convinced after I saw that smiling face, and those eyes filled with strong determination.
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	I was being called the <<Irregular>> and this 《Blaze》 was the only defensive type in this world------Imari saw the <<Shield>> and could not hide her surprise.		I was being called the <<Irregular>> and this 《Blaze》 was the only defensive type in this world------Imari saw the <<Shield>> and could not hide her surprise.

	“Just as what you can see. So sorry but, I am going to use----this guy to win.”		“Just as what you can see. So, sorry, but I am going to use----this guy to win.”

	I clenched my fist strongly to show it to Imari.		I clenched my fist strongly to show it to Imari.
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	“Are you okay, Imari? ''It didn’t hit'', so I think you won’t get wounded though……..”		“Are you okay, Imari? ''It didn’t hit'', so I think you won’t get wounded, though……..”

	I approached Imari who was still down, and knelt down.		I approached Imari who was still down, and knelt down.
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	It’s a technique that can easily break one or two bones if it hit but, the power was not that simple anymore now that I gained the <<Lucifer>>.		It’s a technique that can easily break one or two bones if it hit but, the power was not that simple anymore now that I gained the <<Lucifer>>.

	That’s why by stopping immediately it would end with-------a wind pressure that was originally only strong enough to stagger someone but, I would have never thought that its power increased into something that could send someone flying.		That’s why by stopping immediately it would end with-------a wind pressure that was originally only strong enough to stagger someone, but, I would have never thought that its power increased into something that could send someone flying.

	But even so she did not get hurt, so I made a relieved sigh.		But even so she did not get hurt, so I made a relieved sigh.
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	She was looking towards us------no, ''towards me''.		She was looking towards us------no, ''towards me''.

	Her {{Furigana\|red eyes\|Ruby eyes}} filled with a certain amount of strong determination ~~was~~ clearly looking at me.		Her {{Furigana\|red eyes\|Ruby eyes}} filled with a certain amount of strong determination were clearly looking at me.

	But, that only occurred for an instant.		But, that only occurred for an instant.
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	The silver girl, holding those black bladed swords----<<Double>> in each hand looked like she had jet black wings and our hearts were taken away by that scene.		The silver girl, holding those black bladed swords----<<Double>> in each hand looked like she had jet black wings and our hearts were taken away by that scene.

	After a while of feeling that time slowing down-----		After a while of feeling that time was slowing down-----

	The Angel holding those dark colored wings, crossed her swords together before landing to the ground.		The Angel holding those dark colored wings, crossed her swords together before landing to the ground.

Anaxagoras: consistency & better furigana placement

2015-01-13T06:13:10Z

consistency & better furigana placement

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	The chairman moved on without any mercy.		The chairman moved on without any mercy.

	[Fight, ~~El Seed(~~Children chosen by heaven)!! And grasp hold of your own future with your own hands!!]		[Fight, <<{{Furigana\|《Exceed》\|Children chosen by heaven}}>>!! And grasp hold of your own future with your own hands!!]

	Her sharp words. At the same time the sound of the bell rang throughout not only the auditorium, but the whole school.		Her sharp words. At the same time the sound of the bell rang throughout not only the auditorium, but the whole school.

Anaxagoras: Consistency edit. /* Chapter 1 『To this 《Shield》———』 */

2015-01-13T06:03:40Z

Consistency edit. Chapter 1 『To this 《Shield》———』

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	Refers to those who were given the biological enhancement nanomachine called 《Lucifer》 which was made by the organization called Dawn Institute several years ago.		Refers to those who were given the biological enhancement nanomachine called 《Lucifer》 which was made by the organization called Dawn Institute several years ago.

	By injecting it to those who ~~were 《Adept》~~ (one in every one-thousand people), they would be able to attain a body which surpasses the limits of a human, and also due to their enhanced mentality, they would also attain the ability to manifest their 《Soul》 into the weapon called 《Blaze》.		By injecting it to those who had the 《Adapt》 (one in every one-thousand people), they would be able to attain a body which surpasses the limits of a human, and also due to their enhanced mentality, they would also attain the ability to manifest their 《Soul》 into the weapon called 《Blaze》.

	However, this issue was told to us for the first time immediately before receiving 《Lucifer》 today. That is why I replied to Imari in this fashion despite seeing 《Blaze》 with my own eyes. I still did not have the feeling that I had sublimated to become a 《Exceed》.		However, this issue was told to us for the first time immediately before receiving 《Lucifer》 today. That is why I replied to Imari in this fashion despite seeing 《Blaze》 with my own eyes. I still did not have the feeling that I had sublimated to become a 《Exceed》.

Anaxagoras: /* Chapter 1 『To this 《Shield》———』 */

2015-01-13T05:54:01Z

Chapter 1 『To this 《Shield》———』

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	“N-Normally, people won’t say that even if it comes to mind……!”		“N-Normally, people won’t say that even if it comes to mind……!”

	~~“It is~~?”		“Is that so?”

	“Of course it is—”		“Of course it is—”
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	Refers to those who were given the biological enhancement nanomachine called 《Lucifer》 which was made by the organization called Dawn Institute several years ago.		Refers to those who were given the biological enhancement nanomachine called 《Lucifer》 which was made by the organization called Dawn Institute several years ago.

	By injecting it to those who were ~~《Adapt》~~ (one in every one-thousand people), they would be able to attain a body which surpasses the limits of a human, and also due to their enhanced mentality, they would also attain the ability to manifest their 《Soul》 into the weapon called 《Blaze》.		By injecting it to those who were 《Adept》 (one in every one-thousand people), they would be able to attain a body which surpasses the limits of a human, and also due to their enhanced mentality, they would also attain the ability to manifest their 《Soul》 into the weapon called 《Blaze》.

	However, this issue was told to us for the first time immediately before receiving 《Lucifer》 today. That is why I replied to Imari in this fashion despite seeing 《Blaze》 with my own eyes. I still did not have the feeling that I had sublimated to become a 《Exceed》.		However, this issue was told to us for the first time immediately before receiving 《Lucifer》 today. That is why I replied to Imari in this fashion despite seeing 《Blaze》 with my own eyes. I still did not have the feeling that I had sublimated to become a 《Exceed》.

Beachbum426 at 00:15, 27 December 2014

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	There most likely must have been someone in the past who asked the same question.		There most likely must have been someone in the past who asked the same question.

	“Tooru, it’s okay. Your feelings alone is enough for me.”		“Tooru, it’s okay. Your feelings alone are enough for me.”

	Imari smiled sadly.		Imari smiled sadly.

JFerg: /* Chapter 1 『To this 《Shield》———』 */

2014-08-22T04:23:58Z

Chapter 1 『To this 《Shield》———』

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Yoyoyo5678 at 16:26, 20 July 2014

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	~~Lucifer~~==Chapter 1 『To this 《Shield》———』==		==Chapter 1 『To this 《Shield》———』==

	===Part 1===		===Part 1===

Yoyoyo5678: according to RikiNutcase request

2014-07-20T12:55:14Z

according to RikiNutcase request

Mashiro at 07:46, 20 July 2014

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	==Chapter 1 『To this 《Shield》———』==		Lucifer==Chapter 1 『To this 《Shield》———』==

	===Part 1===		===Part 1===
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	After we introduced ourselves, Imari began the conversation anew by bringing up what must have been the most discussed topic within the auditorium.		After we introduced ourselves, Imari began the conversation anew by bringing up what must have been the most discussed topic within the auditorium.

	“Hey, Tooru, what was it like for you when you sublimated with ~~《Luciful》~~?”		“Hey, Tooru, what was it like for you when you sublimated with 《Lucifer》?”

	“I thought I was going to burn to death.”		“I thought I was going to burn to death.”
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	《Exceed》——		《Exceed》——

	Refers to those who were given the biological enhancement nanomachine called ~~《Luciful》~~ which was made by the organization called Dawn Institute several years ago.		Refers to those who were given the biological enhancement nanomachine called 《Lucifer》 which was made by the organization called Dawn Institute several years ago.

	By injecting it to those who were 《Adapt》 (one in every one-thousand people), they would be able to attain a body which surpasses the limits of a human, and also due to their enhanced mentality, they would also attain the ability to manifest their 《Soul》 into the weapon called 《Blaze》.		By injecting it to those who were 《Adapt》 (one in every one-thousand people), they would be able to attain a body which surpasses the limits of a human, and also due to their enhanced mentality, they would also attain the ability to manifest their 《Soul》 into the weapon called 《Blaze》.

	However, this issue was told to us for the first time immediately before receiving ~~《Luciful》~~ today, that is why I replied to Imari in this fashion despite seeing 《Blaze》 with my own eyes, I still did not have the feeling that I had sublimated to become a 《Exceed》.		However, this issue was told to us for the first time immediately before receiving 《Lucifer》 today, that is why I replied to Imari in this fashion despite seeing 《Blaze》 with my own eyes, I still did not have the feeling that I had sublimated to become a 《Exceed》.

	(Though I will realise it when I move my body……)		(Though I will realise it when I move my body……)

	I might have realised it sooner if I had tested my body right after I had the ~~《Luciful》~~ given to me, but because of the listless feeling I had due to the burning sensation, I came to the auditorium while having doubts about my 《Soul》 manifesting into a 《Shield》.		I might have realised it sooner if I had tested my body right after I had the 《Lucifer》 given to me, but because of the listless feeling I had due to the burning sensation, I came to the auditorium while having doubts about my 《Soul》 manifesting into a 《Shield》.

	……However, I don’t feel like moving around my body in here.		……However, I don’t feel like moving around my body in here.
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	(—! That’s the girl from before……!?)		(—! That’s the girl from before……!?)

	Without a doubt, the person on stage was the girl who gave me the ~~《Luciful》~~.		Without a doubt, the person on stage was the girl who gave me the 《Lucifer》.

	[Welcome to Kouryou Academy, I am the chairman, Sakuya Tsukumo.]		[Welcome to Kouryou Academy, I am the chairman, Sakuya Tsukumo.]
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	(I was already shocked at the giving……)		(I was already shocked at the giving……)

	Even back then, I was thinking why was a girl in a place like this…… then she gave me the ~~《Luciful》~~ and while I was in shock and panicking after having received the 《Blaze》, she disappeared.		Even back then, I was thinking why was a girl in a place like this…… then she gave me the 《Lucifer》 and while I was in shock and panicking after having received the 《Blaze》, she disappeared.

	(I never expected that she would be the chairman of this academy…… But why did a person in such a position go through the trouble of giving it to me……?)		(I never expected that she would be the chairman of this academy…… But why did a person in such a position go through the trouble of giving it to me……?)
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	“Okay. ……Well, chairman Tsukumo originally belonged to the Dawn institute, the organization that built Kouryou Academy, and I heard that she was involved with the research as genetic scientist.”		“Okay. ……Well, chairman Tsukumo originally belonged to the Dawn institute, the organization that built Kouryou Academy, and I heard that she was involved with the research as genetic scientist.”

	“That’s amazing that she is a scientist despite being so small…… Ah, if she is a genetic scientist, then is she involved in ~~《Luciful》~~ in some way?”		“That’s amazing that she is a scientist despite being so small…… Ah, if she is a genetic scientist, then is she involved in 《Lucifer》 in some way?”

	“Not sure. I don’t know that much about it……”		“Not sure. I don’t know that much about it……”

	“……Hmph, she most likely was. The enhancement with ~~《Luciful》~~ is due to alteration of genetics after all.”		“……Hmph, she most likely was. The enhancement with 《Lucifer》 is due to alteration of genetics after all.”

	The one who answered instead of Imari who tilted her head in doubt, was Tora who was supposed to have been facing forward.		The one who answered instead of Imari who tilted her head in doubt, was Tora who was supposed to have been facing forward.
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	The moment we were told about event, I—no, not just me, but there were several gasps from various part of the hall.		The moment we were told about event, I—no, not just me, but there were several gasps from various part of the hall.

	[The traditional event, 《Qualification Ceremony》 that is about to start now will be the entrance test to enter the Kouryou Academy. The winner will be permitted to enter the school, while the loser will be asked to leave immediately after having the ~~《Luciful》~~ retrieved back from them.]		[The traditional event, 《Qualification Ceremony》 that is about to start now will be the entrance test to enter the Kouryou Academy. The winner will be permitted to enter the school, while the loser will be asked to leave immediately after having the 《Lucifer》 retrieved back from them.]

	Unlike us who were in shock, the chairman said an outrageous thing with a calm face.		Unlike us who were in shock, the chairman said an outrageous thing with a calm face.
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	(----------Uh! Fast!!)		(----------Uh! Fast!!)

	Thanks to explosive power powered up by the ~~《Luciful》~~, the distance of a few meters disappeared in an instant.		Thanks to explosive power powered up by the 《Lucifer》, the distance of a few meters disappeared in an instant.

	“Kuh!”		“Kuh!”
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	That was the fight I chose.		That was the fight I chose.

	It’s true the <<~~Luciful~~>> turns humans to <<Exceed>>.		It’s true the <<Lucifer>> turns humans to <<Exceed>>.

	However, I am also the same when it comes to having a physical power up by the sublimation.		However, I am also the same when it comes to having a physical power up by the sublimation.
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	“It’s an impact wave.”		“It’s an impact wave.”

	It’s a technique that can easily break one or two bones if it hit but, the power was not that simple anymore now that I gained the <<~~Luciful~~>>.		It’s a technique that can easily break one or two bones if it hit but, the power was not that simple anymore now that I gained the <<Lucifer>>.

	That’s why by stopping immediately it would end with-------a wind pressure that was originally only strong enough to stagger someone but, I would have never thought that its power increased into something that could send someone flying.		That’s why by stopping immediately it would end with-------a wind pressure that was originally only strong enough to stagger someone but, I would have never thought that its power increased into something that could send someone flying.