Absolute Duo:Volume 2 Chapter 3 - Revision history

RikiNutcase at 13:38, 25 January 2015

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	Luckily, there weren't many people in the shop since it's after lunch time, and thanks to there being many dividing panels, it's not like people could see us. It'~~s unacceptable in that there was~~ a window but, ~~since~~ there was an atrium on the ~~first~~ floor ~~in front of the 3 story building instead of a road,~~ we ~~weren~~'t ~~likely to be~~ noticed ~~from outside~~.		Luckily, there weren't many people in the shop since it's after lunch time, and thanks to there being many dividing panels, it's not like people could see us. It isn't as good as a window but, there was no road in front of this shop which is located on the 3rd floor but rather it's an atrium until the 1st floor so we probably won't get noticed at all.

	(Well, I guess this situation is alright…………?)		(Well, I guess this situation is alright…………?)

JFerg: /* Part 1 */

2014-08-22T19:08:26Z

Part 1

Redak: How about you check the forum first? Undo revision 371840 by Simon (talk)

2014-07-21T20:36:07Z

How about you check the forum first? Undo revision 371840 by Simon (talk)

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Simon: Reverting the changes made to the characters name., replaced: Julie → Yurie (59)

2014-07-21T20:26:01Z

Reverting the changes made to the characters name., replaced: Julie → Yurie (59)

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Acolyte at 21:30, 20 July 2014

2014-07-20T21:30:00Z

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	“I see. It’s the first time you visited a Japanese city.”		“I see. It’s the first time you visited a Japanese city.”

	~~“Ya~~---. That is why I am looking forward to it.”		“Ja---. That is why I am looking forward to it.”

	Julie moved her viewpoint, from the sea outside the window--------, to me and nodded.		Julie moved her viewpoint, from the sea outside the window--------, to me and nodded.
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	“Th-that’s why I told you.”		“Th-that’s why I told you.”

	~~“Ya~~-Ya-----……..”		“Ja-Ja-----……..”

	After I said that while feeling a little embarrassed, Julie also hung her head downwards in embarrassment.		After I said that while feeling a little embarrassed, Julie also hung her head downwards in embarrassment.
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	“That’s because there was a big mall in my hometown. Well, let’s see the floor guide and confirm the location of the shop for now.”		“That’s because there was a big mall in my hometown. Well, let’s see the floor guide and confirm the location of the shop for now.”

	~~“Ya~~---…………..”		“Ja---…………..”

	I urged Julie, who was still a little blank at the moment, as I opened the guide map I took from a nearby help kiosk, I furrowed my eyebrows in bewilderment.		I urged Julie, who was still a little blank at the moment, as I opened the guide map I took from a nearby help kiosk, I furrowed my eyebrows in bewilderment.
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	“Julie, please be careful not to get separated because of the crowd.”		“Julie, please be careful not to get separated because of the crowd.”

	~~“Ya~~---”		“Ja---”

	<nowiki></nowiki>Kokukoku Julie nodded and grabbed my sleeves tightly.		<nowiki></nowiki>Kokukoku Julie nodded and grabbed my sleeves tightly.
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	“I’ll say this just in case; don’t expect a good sense from me.”		“I’ll say this just in case; don’t expect a good sense from me.”

	~~“Ya~~---. It is okay.”		“Ja---. It is okay.”

	I don’t know what she meant by "it's okay" but Julie nodded and opened the curtain wider.		I don’t know what she meant by "it's okay" but Julie nodded and opened the curtain wider.
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	“Err………I think it’s nice. Extremely.”		“Err………I think it’s nice. Extremely.”

	~~“Ya~~---. I think I will buy this too then.”		“Ja---. I think I will buy this too then.”

	Maybe she liked my response, Julie slightly narrowed her eyes and confined herself within the changing room a third time.		Maybe she liked my response, Julie slightly narrowed her eyes and confined herself within the changing room a third time.
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	“It looks refreshing so why not?”		“It looks refreshing so why not?”

	~~“Ya~~---, it is very soothing. Well, this too……………”		“Ja---, it is very soothing. Well, this too……………”

	She bought all 3 clothes she tried in the end.		She bought all 3 clothes she tried in the end.
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	“Errr………..what will you do, Julie? Will you try it on?”		“Errr………..what will you do, Julie? Will you try it on?”

	~~“Ya~~--. If Tooru says so.”		“Ja--. If Tooru says so.”

	…………It was a mistake to go with this flow.		…………It was a mistake to go with this flow.
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	“U-nn………well since we are outside, let’s wander around for a bit then.”		“U-nn………well since we are outside, let’s wander around for a bit then.”

	~~“Ya~~--. That’s true.”		“Ja--. That’s true.”

	Nonetheless, as expected, we had a lot of baggage so we decided to stop by the delivery counter first.		Nonetheless, as expected, we had a lot of baggage so we decided to stop by the delivery counter first.
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	“…………….Are you perhaps going to feed me?”		“…………….Are you perhaps going to feed me?”

	~~“Ya—♪Ahnn~~.”		“Ja—♪Ahnn.”

	“N-no, doing that in front of people is a little……….”		“N-no, doing that in front of people is a little……….”
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	“Eh? Again?”		“Eh? Again?”

	~~“Ya~~---. There is still too much left. So, Ahhnn.”		“Ja---. There is still too much left. So, Ahhnn.”

	“Hahaha……okay.”		“Hahaha……okay.”

Mashiro: /* Chapter 3 『That Is a Good Idea』 */

2014-07-20T16:10:53Z

Chapter 3 『That Is a Good Idea』

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RikiNutcase at 01:32, 11 April 2014

2014-04-11T01:32:16Z

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	At the same time with the leader saying that, the guys slightly lowered their hips.		At the same time with the leader saying that, the guys slightly lowered their hips.

	“Let’s give him a ~~light one~~!”		“Let’s give him a small lesson!”

	“-----!!”		“-----!!”

RikiNutcase at 01:31, 11 April 2014

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	…………And while I was recalling that back, the curtain slightly opened and Yurie suddenly brought her face out.		…………And while I was recalling that back, the curtain slightly opened and Yurie suddenly brought her face out.

	“Tooru. I have finished changing……..~~can you see it?” <!--~~can you have a look?~~-->~~		“Tooru. I have finished changing……..can you have a look?"

	“I’ll say this just in case; don’t expect a good sense from me.”		“I’ll say this just in case; don’t expect a good sense from me.”
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	The shop attendant and I let out a shocked voice at the same time and Yurie silently showed herself.		The shop attendant and I let out a shocked voice at the same time and Yurie silently showed herself.

	The clothes Yurie tried on was a ~~cooling<!--~~refreshing~~?-->~~, basic, white, one piece.		The clothes Yurie tried on was a refreshing, basic, white, one piece.

	The sleeves were opened wide and the arranged white lace has emphasized the girlishness.		The sleeves were opened wide and the arranged white lace has emphasized the girlishness.
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	Although the shop attendant opened her eyes wide when we said~~<!--~~wanted~~-->~~ to buy 12 clothes (+3 pair of shoes), she made an even more shocked expression when we told her we would pay with a credit card.		Although the shop attendant opened her eyes wide when we said we wanted to buy 12 clothes (+3 pair of shoes), she made an even more shocked expression when we told her we would pay with a credit card.

	She probably would have never thought students like us would pay with a card.		She probably would have never thought students like us would pay with a card.

	~~But the instant we handed the student card which also has the function of a credit card in it, ["Aah, it’s that school………….."] the attendant muttered.~~		But the instant we handed the student card which also functions as a credit card, ["Aah, it’s that school………….."] the attendant muttered.
	~~<!--~~But the instant we handed the student card which also functions as a credit card, ["Aah, it’s that school………….."] the attendant muttered.~~-->~~

	I became curious on how she knew about it and asked her. It seems several people like us come over here to buy stuff every year.		I became curious on how she knew about it and asked her. It seems several people like us come over here to buy stuff every year.
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	Although it was more or less embarrassing for me at the beginning, we talked with each other while looking at the shops until I naturally forgot about it.		Although it was more or less embarrassing for me at the beginning, we talked with each other while looking at the shops until I naturally forgot about it.

	After that, Yurie looked at the ferret in the pet shop nearby with her eyes glittering, and played a free to play virtual game in one corner of the game shop; ~~we were passing a fun and peaceful time enough for us to forget the tough training we go through regularly.~~		After that, Yurie looked at the ferret in the pet shop nearby with her eyes glittering, and played a free to play virtual game in one corner of the game shop; we were passing time peacefully and with enough fun for us to forget the tough training we go through daily.
	~~<!--~~we were passing time peacefully and with enough fun for us to forget the tough training we go through daily.~~-->~~
	“Now that I think back, Miyabi told me the gelato on the first floor is recommended.”		“Now that I think back, Miyabi told me the gelato on the first floor is recommended.”

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	“Errrr…………”		“Errrr…………”

	Luckily, there weren't many people in the shop since it's ~~off from<!--~~ after~~-->~~ lunch time, and thanks to there being many dividing panels, it's not like people could see us. It's unacceptable in that there was a window but, since there was an atrium on the first floor in front of the 3 story building instead of a road, we weren't likely to be noticed from outside.		Luckily, there weren't many people in the shop since it's after lunch time, and thanks to there being many dividing panels, it's not like people could see us. It's unacceptable in that there was a window but, since there was an atrium on the first floor in front of the 3 story building instead of a road, we weren't likely to be noticed from outside.

	(Well, I guess this situation is alright…………?)		(Well, I guess this situation is alright…………?)

Drowzycow: /* Chapter 3 『That Is a Good Idea』 */ some suggestions

2014-04-10T22:05:18Z

Chapter 3 『That Is a Good Idea』: some suggestions

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Drowzycow: basic grammar

2014-04-10T21:11:02Z

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	My warning was useless and Yurie’s balance collapsed, making her fall on her butt.		My warning was useless and Yurie’s balance collapsed, making her fall on her butt.

	~~…………on~~ top of my lap.		…………On top of my lap.

	Her hair swayed and a nice smell tickled my nasal cavity.		Her hair swayed and a nice smell tickled my nasal cavity.
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	“Yurie, please be careful not to get separated because of the crowd.”		“Yurie, please be careful not to get separated because of the crowd.”

	“Ya---“		“Ya---”

	<nowiki></nowiki>Kokukoku Yurie nodded and grabbed my sleeves tightly.		<nowiki></nowiki>Kokukoku Yurie nodded and grabbed my sleeves tightly.
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	The shop attendant and I let out a shocked voice at the same time and Yurie silently showed herself.		The shop attendant and I let out a shocked voice at the same time and Yurie silently showed herself.

	The ~~clothe~~ Yurie tried on was a cooling, basic, white, one piece.		The clothes Yurie tried on was a cooling, basic, white, one piece.

	The sleeves were opened wide and the arranged white lace has emphasized the girlishness.		The sleeves were opened wide and the arranged white lace has emphasized the girlishness.
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	“Ya--. If Tooru says so.”		“Ya--. If Tooru says so.”

	~~…………it~~ was a mistake to go with this flow.		…………It was a mistake to go with this flow.

	“…………….Yurie. Don’t you think you are buying too much?”		“…………….Yurie. Don’t you think you are buying too much?”
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	“N-no, it’s true I said them but, I think all of it is just a little…………..”		“N-no, it’s true I said them but, I think all of it is just a little…………..”

	“But, this one looks very matching and this one is very nice, this one is cooling and-------“		“But, this one looks very matching and this one is very nice, this one is cooling and-------”

	Yurie lined up my comments one by one without making any mistakes.		Yurie lined up my comments one by one without making any mistakes.
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	It will probably be alright after some time, but the influence would probably come back during dinner time this time if we were to do that.		It will probably be alright after some time, but the influence would probably come back during dinner time this time if we were to do that.

	~~“……………why~~ don’t we try buying as much gelato as you can eat for now? If you cannot finish then I will eat the leftovers.”		“……………Why don’t we try buying as much gelato as you can eat for now? If you cannot finish then I will eat the leftovers.”

	Because of me forgetting, her disappointed look was really pitiful and after I brought up an idea-------		Because of me forgetting, her disappointed look was really pitiful and after I brought up an idea-------
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	“…………….Are you perhaps going to feed me?”		“…………….Are you perhaps going to feed me?”

	~~“Ya—♪Ahnn”~~		“Ya—♪Ahnn.”

	“N-no, doing that in front of people is a little……….”		“N-no, doing that in front of people is a little……….”
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	“Eh? Again?”		“Eh? Again?”

	“Ya---. There is still too much left. So, ~~Ahhnn”~~		“Ya---. There is still too much left. So, Ahhnn.”

	“Hahaha……okay.”		“Hahaha……okay.”
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	I then found out the really problematic situation happened right after that.		I then found out the really problematic situation happened right after that.

	“Tooru, ~~Ahhn”~~		“Tooru, Ahhn.”

	Between the south and north hall-------in a place called Harbor Street where many people pasts by, Yurie brought the gelato to my mouth.		Between the south and north hall-------in a place called Harbor Street where many people pasts by, Yurie brought the gelato to my mouth.

	~~“………eh~~?”		“………Eh?”

	“It's very delicious so I am sharing with you. That’s why Tooru, please. ~~Ahnnn”~~		“It's very delicious so I am sharing with you. That’s why Tooru, please. Ahnnn.”

	Inside, within the presence of a crowd of people, Yurie smiled as if she was not bothered about them at all.		Inside, within the presence of a crowd of people, Yurie smiled as if she was not bothered about them at all.
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	“That’s nice. Then, teach us some pinning skills too.”		“That’s nice. Then, teach us some pinning skills too.”

	“……………..no thanks. Let’s go, Miyabi.”		“……………..No thanks. Let’s go, Miyabi.”

	Finally at this moment, Tomoe recognized the guys’ intentions and even though she took Miyabi and left the spot-----		Finally at this moment, Tomoe recognized the guys’ intentions and even though she took Miyabi and left the spot-----
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	The thought that revived in his mind, was the talk that was taught in class last time.		The thought that revived in his mind, was the talk that was taught in class last time.

	'''“The <<Blaze>> cannot be manifested as a weapon with complex ~~structure”~~'''		'''“The <<Blaze>> cannot be manifested as a weapon with complex structure.”'''

	That talk wasn’t a lie and, '''a <<Gun>> type <<Blaze>> is impossible originally'''.		That talk wasn’t a lie and, '''a <<Gun>> type <<Blaze>> is impossible originally'''.

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	I probably made her think I was trying to trick her due to embarrassment.		I probably made her think I was trying to trick her due to embarrassment.

	A male and a female together, what’s more even though we entered the shop and started looking at clothes, Julie was still grabbing my sleeves and it’s true that it wouldn’t strange for her to misunderstand.		A male and a female together, what’s more even though we entered the shop and started looking at clothes, Julie was still grabbing my sleeves and it’s true that it wouldn’t be strange for her to misunderstand.

	Rather, even if I am a 3rd person here, we definitely would be thought of as a couple.		Rather, even if I am a 3rd person here, we definitely would be thought of as a couple.
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	The shop attendant and I let out a shocked voice at the same time and Julie silently showed herself.		The shop attendant and I let out a shocked voice at the same time and Julie silently showed herself.

	The clothes Julie tried on was a refreshing, basic, white, one piece.		The clothes Julie tried on was a refreshing, basic, white one piece.

	The sleeves were opened wide and the arranged white lace has emphasized the girlishness.		The sleeves were opened wide and the arranged white lace has emphasized the girlishness.
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	“Tooru. What do you think about this?”		“Tooru. What do you think about this?”

	It's black this time, opposite to the one piece from just ~~now~~. Looking at that figure, the attendant and I made an sound of admiration again.		It's black this time, opposite to the one piece from just before. Looking at that figure, the attendant and I made an sound of admiration again.

	The skirt was short and it has a lot of frills as its characteristic, thanks to it being black, it made Julie’s silver hair attractive and it suited her very much.		The skirt was short and it has a lot of frills as its characteristic, thanks to it being black, it made Julie’s silver hair attractive and it suited her very much.
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	“Ja--. If Tooru says so.”		“Ja--. If Tooru says so.”





	…………It was a mistake to go with this flow.		…………It was a mistake to go with this flow.
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	“Nai. I am only buying the clothes Tooru said were nice.”		“Nai. I am only buying the clothes Tooru said were nice.”

	“N-no, it’s true I said them but, I think all of it is just a little…………..”		“N-no, it’s true I said I liked them, but I think all of it is just a little…………..”

	“But, this one looks very matching and this one is very nice, this one is cooling and-------”		“But, this one looks very matching and this one is very nice, this one is cooling and-------”