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2009-08-02T17:36:21Z

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	“Sakura-kun is one------big------idiot.”		“Sakura-kun is one------big------idiot.”




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2009-07-06T16:45:18Z

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	“…… Sabato…… Sabato ever since that time, had to starve, living under that bridge, it was so cold and dark……”		“…… Sabato…… Sabato ever since that time, had to starve, living under that bridge, it was so cold and dark……”

	I only realized it after hearing what she said. She was still wearing our school uniform which is red like wine. Could it be that------		I only realized it after hearing what she said. She was still wearing our school (St. Guernica's Academy) uniform which is red like wine. Could it be that------

	“The suspicious character that was living under the bridge near the school recently…… that was Sabato-chan……”		“The suspicious character that was living under the bridge near the school recently…… that was Sabato-chan……”

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2009-07-06T16:40:34Z

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2009-07-05T23:54:56Z

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2009-07-05T23:52:22Z

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	“Stop it Dokuro-chan! Please, just go and sleep……”		“Stop it Dokuro-chan! Please, just go and sleep……”

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	Inside the bathroom decorated with pink tiles and with a lot of steam------		Inside the bathroom decorated with pink tiles and with a lot of steam------

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2009-07-05T23:42:05Z

[Insert a black Star here, new part]: Minor editing of the grammar variety

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	“Stop it Dokuro-chan! Please, just go and sleep……”		“Stop it Dokuro-chan! Please, just go and sleep……”

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	Inside the bathroom with a lot of steam ~~and decorated with pink tiles~~------		Inside the bathroom decorated with pink tiles and with a lot of steam------

	Shizuki wipes her face with both her hands, and breathes out.		Shizuki wipes her face with both her hands, and breathes out.

			Then, once again placing her body into the bathtub up to her shoulders, she looks at the ceiling becoming clouded with steam, thinking back on all the things that had happened today.

	~~Then once again placing her body into the bathtub up to her shoulders, looking at the ceiling that becomes clouded by steam, thinking back on all the things that happened today.~~		Once she closes her eyes, she gives off a long sigh.

	Once she closes her eyes, she gives off a long sigh.

	~~Shizuki takes in air again, and looks at her left hand, stretched from the bathtub and clenched into a fist~~.

	And before her own eyes, slowly ~~straighten~~ her fingers.		Shizuki takes in air again, and looks at her left hand, stretched from the bathtub and clenched into a fist.
			And, before her own eyes, she slowly straightens her fingers.
	~~In her palm, lies a little silver ring that was soaked wet~~.

			In her palm, lies a little silver ring that is soaking wet.

	When they were escaping from the cinema, a tiny box fell out from Sakura’s pocket.		When they were escaping from the cinema, a tiny box fell out from Sakura’s pocket.

	She picked it up, and wanted to call out to Sakura, but her voice was stuck in her throat.		She picked it up, and wanted to call out to Sakura, but her voice was stuck in her throat.

	Because the cover was open.		Because the cover was open.

	Inside the box, was a ring that she ~~has~~ always dreamt of having.		Inside the box, was a ring that she had always dreamt of having.

	After inhaling in the steam, under the natural echoing effects of a bathroom, Shizuki ~~says~~------		After inhaling in the steam, under the natural echoing effects of a bathroom, Shizuki said------

	“Sakura-kun is one------big------idiot.”		“Sakura-kun is one------big------idiot.”

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2009-07-05T23:19:32Z

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	“Hey, Sakura-kun! Don’t sleep! Wake up! Hey, wake up and play with me!”		“Hey, Sakura-kun! Don’t sleep! Wake up! Hey, wake up and play with me!”

	The sight of Shizuki’s back appears in my mind, a sigh comes out automatically from deep within my throat.		The sight of Shizuki’s back appears in my mind and a sigh comes out automatically from deep within my throat.

	“Sigh……”		“Sigh……”

			”Sakura-kun~”

	~~”Sakura-kun~”~~		Lying on the blanket since morning until now, I was vigorously being shaken by Dokuro with a force comparable to a level eight earthquake.

	Lying on the blanket since morning until now, I was vigorously being ~~shook~~ by Dokuro with a force comparable to a level eight earthquake.

	~~After that------~~

	~~We offer the weak and fainted Sabato as a tribute to the one in charge of the cinema, and escaped from there~~.

	~~In whole, the date was a failure. (“Date Complete. Failure!” the special effects wordings appear)~~		After that------

			We offered the weak and fainted Sabato as a tribute to the one in charge of the cinema, and escaped from there.

			In whole, the date was a failure. (“Date Complete. Failure!” the special effects wordings appear)

	And all that ruckus that happened in the cinema ends there……		And all that ruckus that happened in the cinema ends there……

	“Sigh~ Where did it go……”		“Sigh~ Where did it go……”

	The tiny box in my pocket disappeared.		The tiny box in my pocket disappeared.

			I give off such a super big sigh that even my soul almost seems to be squeezed out with it.

			…… That must look very compatible with Shizuki.

	~~I give off that super big sigh that even my soul almost seems to be squeezed out with it.~~		“That is enough, Sakura-kun, you have been sighing all up till now! That way, your good luck is going to run off!”

	~~…… That must look very compatible with Shizuki.~~

	“That is enough, Sakura-kun, you have been sighing ~~since just~~ now! ~~This~~ way, your good luck ~~would~~ run off!”

	~~“Dokuro-chan, don’t talk about it! And, don’t wear so little and run everywhere~~!”

	After saying the words that I do not even understand myself, I pull my blankets. In other words, this is all Dokuro’s fault.		“Dokuro-chan, don’t talk about it! And don’t wear so little and run everywhere!”

			After saying the words that I do not even understand myself, I pull my blankets. In other words, this is all Dokuro’s fault.

	“Huh~ But I don’t want to sleep yet! Wake up! I am so bored alone! Yaha------“		“Huh~ But I don’t want to sleep yet! Wake up! I am so bored alone! Yaha------“

	“Wah!!”		“Wah!!”

	The angry Dokuro jumps onto my body. I wriggle like a prawn curling up, and return to normal together with my blanket. Dokuro continues to shake around on the blanket, moving her weight that is just nice.		The angry Dokuro jumps onto my body. I wriggle like a prawn curling up, and return to normal together with my blanket. Dokuro continues to shake around on the blanket, moving her weight that is just nice.

	“Then let me read a book for Sakura-kun to hear!”		“Then let me read a book for Sakura-kun to hear!”

			Suddenly stopping the movements above me, Dokuro opens up my blanket to see my face. My heart feels warm from it. That is because I recall when I was little, the times my mother always read a book for me before sleeping.

			Once I open my eyes, to the light coming from the circular lamp at the ceiling, Dokuro’s face appears, opposing that light. [looks like light shining from behind her? Not sure the actual way to translate it] I rub my eyes, and look at Dokuro.

			“Hmm…… If that is the case, it is still acceptable…… What book are you going to read?”

	Suddenly stopping the movements above me, Dokuro opens up my blanket to see my face. My heart feels warm from it. That is because I recall that when I was little, the times my mother always read a book for me before sleeping.		“Err…… A Dog (Note: The anime “A Dog of Flanders”, Taiwan translates it to Nello and his loyal dog or Nello and Patrasche) [actual text she says “Err…… Nello and…….” Here]……”

	Once I open my eyes, the light coming from the circular lamp at the ceiling, Dokuro’s face appear, opposing that light. [looks like light shining from behind her? Not sure the actual way to translate it] I rub my eyes, and look at Dokuro.

	~~“Hmm…… If that is the case, it is still acceptable…… What book are you going to read?”~~

	“Err…… A Dog (Note: The anime “A Dog of Flanders”, Taiwan translates it to Nello and his loyal dog or Nello and Patrasche) [actual text she says “Err…… Nello and…….” Here]……”

	Dokuro seems like a happy kitten that wants to play a prank, and takes the book out of the bookshelf. However, Dokuro makes a special choice. The book name is A Dog…… [Actual text is “The book name is Nello and……”]		Dokuro seems like a happy kitten that wants to play a prank, and takes the book out of the bookshelf. However, Dokuro makes a special choice. The book name is A Dog…… [Actual text is “The book name is Nello and……”]

	“Slave……” [actual text Dog Slave, put together makes Nello and his Dog Slave]		“Slave……” [actual text Dog Slave, put together makes Nello and his Dog Slave]

			“What!?”

	~~“What!?”~~		”I shall begin reading!”

	”I shall begin reading!”

	~~”Wait, wait a minute!? What did you just say!?”~~

	~~”A long long time ago, in a certain place, there is a boy called Long Long and a dog called Patrasche.~~”

	~~”Yes…… yes.~~”		”Wait, wait a minute!? What did you just say!?”

	~~Dokuro places the opened book on her legs~~, ~~and like~~ a ~~mother~~, ~~puts her emotions into it~~ and ~~start reading~~.		”A long long time ago, in a certain place, there was a boy called Long Long and a dog called Patrasche.”

			”Yes…… yes.”

	“Ah------~~[insert a heart here please]~~ No! Patrasche……Patrasche!”		Dokuro places the opened book on her legs, and like a mother, puts her emotions into it and starts reading.

			“Ah------♥ No! Patrasche……Patrasche!”

	~~”Wah~~! What are you reading! Is that really a normal dog? Don’t play a fool, Dokuro-chan! I won’t be able to sleep like this!”		“Wah! What are you reading?! Is that really a normal dog? Don’t play a fool, Dokuro-chan! I won’t be able to sleep like this!”

	~~”Woof~~------ Woof------ Master, I am a dog……”		“Woof------ Woof------ Master, I am a dog……”

	~~”Stop~~ it Dokuro-chan! Please, just go and sleep……”		“Stop it Dokuro-chan! Please, just go and sleep……”

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2009-07-04T12:52:32Z

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86.43.209.133: /* 2 */ minor edits again, verb tense fixing and changing or removing a few words

2009-07-04T12:13:11Z

2: minor edits again, verb tense fixing and changing or removing a few words

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86.43.209.133: /* 1 */ minor edits, verb tense fixing, some more words removed where they didn't make sense in the context

2009-07-04T11:01:40Z

1: minor edits, verb tense fixing, some more words removed where they didn't make sense in the context

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