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Grrarr at 20:53, 31 March 2013

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	I wonder why Daiya has to treat every single person like that...		I wonder why Daiya has to treat every single person like that...

	"Hahaha! He’s just trying to warn you that hovering over Maria-chan might ~~piss~~ her ~~off~~!"<!--EEE: were you thinking of transposing “off-putting” here? Alternatively, “annoy her” if “piss her off” seems too vulgar-grrarr--><!-- well, just meant to say that she might be, well, put off, annoyed, disgusted, when someone keeps following her. Piss off works well, but yeah, might be a tad bit too vulgar. -EEE --> Haruaki says, trying to smooth over the conflict. Let’s set aside how successful he is...<!--libedit-grrarr-->		"Hahaha! He’s just trying to warn you that hovering over Maria-chan might annoy her!"<!--EEE: were you thinking of transposing “off-putting” here? Alternatively, “annoy her” if “piss her off” seems too vulgar-grrarr--><!-- well, just meant to say that she might be, well, put off, annoyed, disgusted, when someone keeps following her. Piss off works well, but yeah, might be a tad bit too vulgar. -EEE --> Haruaki says, trying to smooth over the conflict. Let’s set aside how successful he is...<!--libedit-grrarr-->

	"Shut up! And stop calling her 'chan,' you dope!" Asami-san roars as Haruaki starts patting her head with an oddly soft smile. "Don't think you can treat me like a child just because I'm short! And stop touching me!"		"Shut up! And stop calling her 'chan,' you dope!" Asami-san roars as Haruaki starts patting her head with an oddly soft smile. "Don't think you can treat me like a child just because I'm short! And stop touching me!"
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	'''Riko Asami''':<br />		'''Riko Asami''':<br />
	One of Maria Otonashi's numerous fans that have emerged after the entrance ceremony. She is stubborn but cheerful.<!-- I don't have her in mind as very cheerful, though... --><!--yeah, no kidding- captioning fail on part of original JP magazine staff? It’s like those back cover blurbs for books that are totally off/demonstrate that someone at the publisher’s totally dropped the ball. Or…irony? :P-grrarr--><!-- That's why I never read the outlines on the back! HAHA...haha... Anyway, who knows, maybe she's a happy girl between the lines, when she's alone with Maria? -EEE -->		One of Maria Otonashi's numerous fans that have emerged after the entrance ceremony. She is stubborn but cheerful.<!-- I don't have her in mind as very cheerful, though... --><!--yeah, no kidding- captioning fail on part of original JP magazine staff? It’s like those back cover blurbs for books that are totally off/demonstrate that someone at the publisher’s totally dropped the ball. Or…irony? :P-grrarr--><!-- That's why I never read the outlines on the back! HAHA...haha... Anyway, who knows, maybe she's a happy girl between the lines, when she's alone with Maria? -EEE --><!--Hah...you have a ... charitable interpretation there, I think :P -grrarr-->

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EusthEnoptEron at 09:59, 31 March 2013

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	I wonder why Daiya has to treat every single person like that...		I wonder why Daiya has to treat every single person like that...

	"Hahaha! He’s just trying to warn you that hovering over Maria-chan might piss her off!"<!--EEE: were you thinking of transposing “off-putting” here? Alternatively, “annoy her” if “piss her off” seems too vulgar-grrarr--> Haruaki says, trying to smooth over the conflict. Let’s set aside how successful he is...<!--libedit-grrarr-->		"Hahaha! He’s just trying to warn you that hovering over Maria-chan might piss her off!"<!--EEE: were you thinking of transposing “off-putting” here? Alternatively, “annoy her” if “piss her off” seems too vulgar-grrarr--><!-- well, just meant to say that she might be, well, put off, annoyed, disgusted, when someone keeps following her. Piss off works well, but yeah, might be a tad bit too vulgar. -EEE --> Haruaki says, trying to smooth over the conflict. Let’s set aside how successful he is...<!--libedit-grrarr-->

	"Shut up! And stop calling her 'chan,' you dope!" Asami-san roars as Haruaki starts patting her head with an oddly soft smile. "Don't think you can treat me like a child just because I'm short! And stop touching me!"		"Shut up! And stop calling her 'chan,' you dope!" Asami-san roars as Haruaki starts patting her head with an oddly soft smile. "Don't think you can treat me like a child just because I'm short! And stop touching me!"
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	'''Riko Asami''':<br />		'''Riko Asami''':<br />
	One of Maria Otonashi's numerous fans that have emerged after the entrance ceremony. She is stubborn but cheerful.<!-- I don't have her in mind as very cheerful, though... --><!--yeah, no kidding- captioning fail on part of original JP magazine staff? It’s like those back cover blurbs for books that are totally off/demonstrate that someone at the publisher’s totally dropped the ball. Or…irony? :P-grrarr-->		One of Maria Otonashi's numerous fans that have emerged after the entrance ceremony. She is stubborn but cheerful.<!-- I don't have her in mind as very cheerful, though... --><!--yeah, no kidding- captioning fail on part of original JP magazine staff? It’s like those back cover blurbs for books that are totally off/demonstrate that someone at the publisher’s totally dropped the ball. Or…irony? :P-grrarr--><!-- That's why I never read the outlines on the back! HAHA...haha... Anyway, who knows, maybe she's a happy girl between the lines, when she's alone with Maria? -EEE -->

Grrarr at 03:27, 31 March 2013

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	"I can learn ''so much'' ~~from~~ watching a certain ~~someone~~. For example ~~that~~ there's nothing as sickening as obstinacy grounded on selfishness," Daiya says without flinching ~~while looking~~ straight into Asami's eyes.		"I can learn ''so much'' by watching a certain person. For example, there's nothing as sickening as obstinacy grounded upon selfishness," Daiya says without flinching as he looks straight into Asami's eyes.

	"...Are you picking a fight with me?"		"...Are you picking a fight with me?"
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	"Oh? So you were aware of your self-centered behavior? Looks like you're beyond hope!"		"Oh? So you were aware of your self-centered behavior? Looks like you're beyond hope!"

	"~~You~~...! ~~Be careful what you say~~...!"		"Hey...! Watch your mouth...!"<!--EEE: I’m assuming this is supposed to sound casual, and not formal? That is, old version wasn’t erroneous - just stiff…-grrarr-->

	I wonder why Daiya has to be like that ~~to each and every person~~...		I wonder why Daiya has to treat every single person like that...

	"Hahaha! He just ~~wants~~ to warn you that hovering over Maria-chan might ~~put~~ her off!" Haruaki says, trying to smooth ~~down differences—whether or not~~ he is ~~successful aside~~.		"Hahaha! He’s just trying to warn you that hovering over Maria-chan might piss her off!"<!--EEE: were you thinking of transposing “off-putting” here? Alternatively, “annoy her” if “piss her off” seems too vulgar-grrarr--> Haruaki says, trying to smooth over the conflict. Let’s set aside how successful he is...<!--libedit-grrarr-->

	"Shut it! And stop calling her 'chan,' you dope!" Asami-san roars as Haruaki starts patting her head with ~~a strangely~~ soft smile. "Don't think you can treat me like a child just because I'm short! And stop touching me!"		"Shut up! And stop calling her 'chan,' you dope!" Asami-san roars as Haruaki starts patting her head with an oddly soft smile. "Don't think you can treat me like a child just because I'm short! And stop touching me!"

	Haruaki~~, however,~~ ignores her protests and continues ~~patting~~ her head.		However, Haruaki ignores her protests and continues to pat her head.

	"Hah... this guy just won't listen..."		"Hah... this guy just won't listen..."
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	Suddenly, I notice that someone is ~~gazing~~ at those three. Miyazaki-kun, our class president, is watching them with a sour look.		Suddenly, I notice that someone is staring at those three people. Miyazaki-kun, our class president, is watching them with a sour look.

	He ~~moves~~ his gaze to me and says ~~blankly~~: "Always enjoying yourselves, aren't you? Good for you."		He shifts his gaze toward me and blankly says: "Always enjoying yourselves, aren't you? Good for you guys."



	'''Ryuu Miyazaki''':<br />		'''Ryuu Miyazaki''':<br />
	The ~~class~~ president of Kazuki's class. He is considered reliable and exemplary.		The president of Kazuki's class. He is considered to be a reliable and exemplary student.<!--mild improvement, w/ unavoidable meaning drift from implied “person” to explicit “student”- can tweak more if meaning drift is excessive-grrarr-->


	'''Daiya Oomine''':<br />		'''Daiya Oomine''':<br />
	An unrestrained and ~~high-pressure~~ friend of Kazuki's who ~~dyes his~~ hair ~~silver~~ and ~~wears~~ piercings. ~~However, he~~ is shrewd and ~~of great help when it counts~~. He and Kokone Kirino ~~have known each other since~~ childhood.		An unrestrained and volatile friend of Kazuki's who has silver-dyed hair and several piercings. He is shrewd and can be depended on in a pinch. He and Kokone Kirino are childhood friends.<!--libedit-grrarr-->


	'''Haruaki Usui''':<br />		'''Haruaki Usui''':<br />
	A cheerful but frivolous baseball ace. ~~Contrary to what~~ his ~~playfulness may suggest~~, he can get very ~~heated~~ when it comes to his friends.		A cheerful but frivolous baseball ace. In spite of his playful nature, he can get very worked up when it comes to his friends.


	'''Riko Asami''':<br />		'''Riko Asami''':<br />
	One of Maria Otonashi's numerous fans that have emerged after the entrance ceremony. She is stubborn but cheerful.<!-- I don't have her in mind as very cheerful, though... -->		One of Maria Otonashi's numerous fans that have emerged after the entrance ceremony. She is stubborn but cheerful.<!-- I don't have her in mind as very cheerful, though... --><!--yeah, no kidding- captioning fail on part of original JP magazine staff? It’s like those back cover blurbs for books that are totally off/demonstrate that someone at the publisher’s totally dropped the ball. Or…irony? :P-grrarr-->

EusthEnoptEron at 22:51, 30 March 2013

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	"I can learn ''so much'' from watching a certain someone. For example, there's nothing as sickening as ~~egocentric~~ obstinacy," Daiya says without flinching while looking into Asami's eyes.		"I can learn ''so much'' from watching a certain someone. For example that there's nothing as sickening as obstinacy grounded on selfishness," Daiya says without flinching while looking straight into Asami's eyes.

	"...~~are~~ you picking a fight with me?"		"...Are you picking a fight with me?"

	"~~You think that I'm talking about you~~? ~~Does that mean that~~ you were aware of your self-centered behavior? Looks like you're beyond hope~~, huh.~~"		"Oh? So you were aware of your self-centered behavior? Looks like you're beyond hope!"

	"~~How~~... ~~How dare~~ you...!"		"You...! Be careful what you say...!"

	I wonder why Daiya has to be like ~~this~~ to each and every person...		I wonder why Daiya has to be like that to each and every person...

	"Hahaha! He just wants to ~~give~~ you ~~a piece of advice because~~ hovering over Maria-chan might put ~~you out of~~ her ~~favor~~!" Haruaki ~~goes~~ to ~~Daiya's rescue, though it's questionable whether that effect was achieved~~.		"Hahaha! He just wants to warn you that hovering over Maria-chan might put her off!" Haruaki says, trying to smooth down differences—whether or not he is successful aside.

	"~~Hands off~~! And stop calling her ~~with that over-friendly~~ 'chan,' you ~~idiot~~!" Asami-san roars ~~when~~ Haruaki ~~puts on~~ a strangely soft smile ~~and starts patting her head,~~ "Don't treat me like a child just because I'm short! And stop touching me!"		"Shut it! And stop calling her 'chan,' you dope!" Asami-san roars as Haruaki starts patting her head with a strangely soft smile. "Don't think you can treat me like a child just because I'm short! And stop touching me!"

	Haruaki, however, ignores her protests and continues patting her ~~hair~~.		Haruaki, however, ignores her protests and continues patting her head.

	"Hah... this guy just won't listen..."		"Hah... this guy just won't listen..."

	"~~Yeah,~~ I won't listen no matter what you say!"		"Hell yeah! I won't listen no matter what you say!"

	"That's nothing to brag about..."		"That's nothing to brag about..."


	Suddenly, I notice that someone is gazing at those three. ~~Miyazawa~~-kun, our class ~~committee chairman~~, is watching them with a sour ~~face~~.		Suddenly, I notice that someone is gazing at those three. Miyazaki-kun, our class president, is watching them with a sour look.

	He moves his gaze to me and says ~~expressionlessly,~~ "Always ~~having a lot of fun~~, aren't you ~~guys~~? Good for you."		He moves his gaze to me and says blankly: "Always enjoying yourselves, aren't you? Good for you."



			'''Ryuu Miyazaki''':<br />
			The class president of Kazuki's class. He is considered reliable and exemplary.


			'''Daiya Oomine''':<br />
			An unrestrained and high-pressure friend of Kazuki's who dyes his hair silver and wears piercings. However, he is shrewd and of great help when it counts. He and Kokone Kirino have known each other since childhood.


			'''Haruaki Usui''':<br />
			A cheerful but frivolous baseball ace. Contrary to what his playfulness may suggest, he can get very heated when it comes to his friends.


			'''Riko Asami''':<br />
			One of Maria Otonashi's numerous fans that have emerged after the entrance ceremony. She is stubborn but cheerful.<!-- I don't have her in mind as very cheerful, though... -->

Mane: Made sentence slightly more concise

2012-03-26T21:42:07Z

Made sentence slightly more concise

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	I wonder why Daiya has to be like this to each and every person...		I wonder why Daiya has to be like this to each and every person...

	"Hahaha! He just wants to give you a piece of advice because hovering over Maria-chan might put you out of favor ~~with her~~!" Haruaki goes to Daiya's rescue, though it's questionable whether that effect was achieved.		"Hahaha! He just wants to give you a piece of advice because hovering over Maria-chan might put you out of her favor!" Haruaki goes to Daiya's rescue, though it's questionable whether that effect was achieved.

	"Hands off! And stop calling her with that over-friendly 'chan,' you idiot!" Asami-san roars when Haruaki puts on a strangely soft smile and starts patting her head, "Don't treat me like a child just because I'm short! And stop touching me!"		"Hands off! And stop calling her with that over-friendly 'chan,' you idiot!" Asami-san roars when Haruaki puts on a strangely soft smile and starts patting her head, "Don't treat me like a child just because I'm short! And stop touching me!"

Mane: Fix grammar error made in a previous change

2012-03-26T21:39:43Z

Fix grammar error made in a previous change

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	I wonder why Daiya has to be like this to each and every person...		I wonder why Daiya has to be like this to each and every person...

	"Hahaha! He's just wants to give you a piece of advice because hovering over Maria-chan might put you out of favor with her!" Haruaki goes to Daiya's rescue, though it's questionable whether that effect was achieved.		"Hahaha! He just wants to give you a piece of advice because hovering over Maria-chan might put you out of favor with her!" Haruaki goes to Daiya's rescue, though it's questionable whether that effect was achieved.

	"Hands off! And stop calling her with that over-friendly 'chan,' you idiot!" Asami-san roars when Haruaki puts on a strangely soft smile and starts patting her head, "Don't treat me like a child just because I'm short! And stop touching me!"		"Hands off! And stop calling her with that over-friendly 'chan,' you idiot!" Asami-san roars when Haruaki puts on a strangely soft smile and starts patting her head, "Don't treat me like a child just because I'm short! And stop touching me!"

Mane: Grammar changes to improve both correctness and readability

2012-03-26T20:24:07Z

Grammar changes to improve both correctness and readability

Kadi: Hopefully this is it now...

2011-08-10T15:13:50Z

Hopefully this is it now...

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	"Hahaha! He's just meaning to give you a piece of advice because hovering over Maria-chan might get you out of favor with her!" Haruaki goes to Daiya's rescue, though it's questionable whether that effect was achieved.		"Hahaha! He's just meaning to give you a piece of advice because hovering over Maria-chan might get you out of favor with her!" Haruaki goes to Daiya's rescue, though it's questionable whether that effect was achieved.

	"Hands off! And stop calling her with that over-friendly 'chan', you idiot!" Asami-san roars ~~like that~~ when Haruaki puts on a strangely soft smile and starts patting her head, "Don't treat me like a child just because I'm short! And stop touching me!"		"Hands off! And stop calling her with that over-friendly 'chan', you idiot!" Asami-san roars when Haruaki puts on a strangely soft smile and starts patting her head, "Don't treat me like a child just because I'm short! And stop touching me!"

	Haruaki, however, ignores her protests and continues patting her hair.		Haruaki, however, ignores her protests and continues patting her hair.

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	"I can learn ''so much'' from watching a certain someone. For example ~~that~~ there's nothing as sickening as obstinacy ~~based on egocentricity~~," Daiya says without flinching while looking into Asami's eyes.		"I can learn ''so much'' from watching a certain someone. For example, there's nothing as sickening as egocentric obstinacy," Daiya says without flinching while looking into Asami's eyes.

	"...are you picking a fight with me?"		"...are you picking a fight with me?"

	"~~Feeling~~ that I'm talking about you? Does that mean that you were aware of your self-centered behavior? Looks like you're beyond hope, huh."		"You think that I'm talking about you? Does that mean that you were aware of your self-centered behavior? Looks like you're beyond hope, huh."

	"How... How dare you...!"		"How... How dare you...!"

	I wonder why Daiya has to be like this to each and ~~everyone~~...		I wonder why Daiya has to be like this to each and every person...

	"Hahaha! He's just ~~meaning~~ to give you a piece of advice because hovering over Maria-chan might ~~get~~ you out of favor with her!" Haruaki goes to Daiya's rescue, though it's questionable whether that effect was achieved.		"Hahaha! He's just wants to give you a piece of advice because hovering over Maria-chan might put you out of favor with her!" Haruaki goes to Daiya's rescue, though it's questionable whether that effect was achieved.

	"Hands off! And stop calling her with that over-friendly 'chan', you idiot!" Asami-san roars when Haruaki puts on a strangely soft smile and starts patting her head, "Don't treat me like a child just because I'm short! And stop touching me!"		"Hands off! And stop calling her with that over-friendly 'chan,' you idiot!" Asami-san roars when Haruaki puts on a strangely soft smile and starts patting her head, "Don't treat me like a child just because I'm short! And stop touching me!"

	Haruaki, however, ignores her protests and continues patting her hair.		Haruaki, however, ignores her protests and continues patting her hair.
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	"Hah... this guy just won't listen..."		"Hah... this guy just won't listen..."

	"~~Yeaha~~, I won't listen no matter what you say!"		"Yeah, I won't listen no matter what you say!"

	"That's nothing to brag about..."		"That's nothing to brag about..."


	Suddenly, I notice that someone is gazing at those three. Miyazawa-kun, our class committee chairman, is watching them with a sour face.		Suddenly, I notice that someone is gazing at those three. Miyazawa-kun, our class committee chairman, is watching them with a sour face.

	He moves his gaze to me and says expressionlessly, "Always having a lot of fun, ~~don~~'t you guys? Good for you."		He moves his gaze to me and says expressionlessly, "Always having a lot of fun, aren't you guys? Good for you."