Gekkou:Volume 1 Bitter Chocolate - Revision history

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[Bitter Chocolate]

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	Unable to keep the conversation going, we shared a few seconds of silence.		Unable to keep the conversation going, we shared a few seconds of silence.

	Then Mirai-san lost interest and disappeared into the kitchen, seeking an outlet for her vexation: "~~Saruwatarii~~!!"		Then Mirai-san lost interest and disappeared into the kitchen, seeking an outlet for her vexation: "Saruwatari!!"

	Tsukimori, however, had turned away from me and was standing still—an indecisive attitude that didn't match the image I had of her.		Tsukimori, however, had turned away from me and was standing still—an indecisive attitude that didn't match the image I had of her.

EusthEnoptEron: Removed unnecessary category.

2014-02-28T15:31:28Z

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BladeUnderHeart at 04:26, 14 April 2013

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	After Tsukimori started working at Victoria, Usami also became a frequent sight in the shop.		After Tsukimori started working at Victoria, Usami also became a frequent sight at the shop.

	With her being very communicative, it didn't take long until she was well-liked by both the staff and the manager, and by now she was a proper regular. Thanks to that I was permanently on tenterhooks, afraid that Mister Kujirai might offer her a position.		With her being very communicative, it didn't take long until she was well-liked by both the staff and the manager, and by now she was a proper regular. Thanks to that I was permanently on tenterhooks, afraid that Mister Kujirai might offer her a position.
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	"Taking photographs is prohibited in this establishment. If you do not abide by this rule, I will have to request that you leave," I explained in an official-sounding tone, whereupon Usami puffed up her cheeks and stowed her phone away into her bag, but not without hissing: "Miser!"		"Taking photographs is prohibited in this establishment. If you do not abide by this rule, I will have to request that you leave," I explained in an official-sounding tone, whereupon Usami puffed up her cheeks and stowed her phone away into her bag, but not without hissing: "Miser!"

	~~Accidentally a~~ laugh escaped my lips.		A laugh accidentally escaped my lips.

	"Cheer up, Usami. I can't consent to the photograph, but I'll treat you to dessert instead."		"Cheer up, Usami. I can't consent to the photograph, but I'll treat you to dessert instead."

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2011-12-15T02:49:26Z

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Andrewgr: corrected awkward/unclear phrasing

2011-10-26T22:07:51Z

corrected awkward/unclear phrasing

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	On my part, I was still uncomfortable, sensing a bitter aftertaste on my tongue even now that the conversation was over.		On my part, I was still uncomfortable, sensing a bitter aftertaste on my tongue even now that the conversation was over.

	It wasn't irritation that originated from earnestness towards Usami ~~as mentioned by~~ Mirai-san.		It wasn't irritation that originated from the earnestness towards Usami that Mirai-san had mentioned.

	Sure enough, a part of me disliked it when people rashly meddled in others' love affairs. However, such situations were common and nowhere near rare, and I would have been able to dodge or adapt respectively, hiding my feelings as I used to do so unhesitatingly until now.		Sure enough, a part of me disliked it when people rashly meddled in others' love affairs. However, such situations were common and nowhere near rare, and I would have been able to dodge or adapt respectively, hiding my feelings as I used to do so unhesitatingly until now.

Andrewgr: make tense consistent

2011-10-26T22:06:12Z

make tense consistent

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	I chose to do a reset of my feelings and bring Usami her order because I thought I would only waste time if I got lost in a labyrinth of thoughts.		I chose to do a reset of my feelings and bring Usami her order because I thought I would only waste time if I got lost in a labyrinth of thoughts.

	However, there was one discovery I made: a new kind of emotion towards Tsukimori was about to be born.		However, there was one discovery I had made: a new kind of emotion towards Tsukimori was about to be born.

	I didn't know the name of that emotion yet, though.		I didn't know the name of that emotion yet, though.

Andrewgr: make it easier to follow who's saying what in this long exchange of dialog

2011-10-26T22:03:59Z

make it easier to follow who's saying what in this long exchange of dialog

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	I couldn't keep my expression from loosening, which was only reasonable. Usami's straightforward reactions had a sort of stress-alleviating effect on me—probably because I had to deal with peculiar, to say the least, persons during my usual day.		I couldn't keep my expression from loosening, which was only reasonable. Usami's straightforward reactions had a sort of stress-alleviating effect on me—probably because I had to deal with peculiar, to say the least, persons during my usual day.

	"You're like a child that's playing with its favorite toy."		"You're like a child that's playing with its favorite toy." With her chin propped up on her hand, Mirai-san grinned lopsidedly.

	With her chin propped up on her hand, Mirai-san grinned lopsidedly.

	"Why, I would never think of her as a toy!" I answered while arranging the bills after I had communicated the order to Saruwatari-san.		"Why, I would never think of her as a toy!" I answered while arranging the bills after I had communicated the order to Saruwatari-san.
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	"At any rate, it's true that I'm quite fond of her."		"At any rate, it's true that I'm quite fond of her."

	"How rare for you to admit something that easily."		"How rare for you to admit something that easily." Mirai-san stared at me, surprised.

	Mirai-san stared at me, surprised.

	"It all depends on who it is about! Her straightforwardness causes me to be honest as well."		"It all depends on who it is about! Her straightforwardness causes me to be honest as well."
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	"That twisted personality you mention all the time would surely be twisted even more if ''you'' were my girlfriend," I thought without actually saying it.		"That twisted personality you mention all the time would surely be twisted even more if ''you'' were my girlfriend," I thought without actually saying it.

	"—That sounds quite realistic to me."		"—That sounds quite realistic to me." Before I knew it, Tsukimori was standing next to me. "As far as I see, Chizuru is interested in you, too, Nonomiya-kun," said Tsukimori with that mature smile she was so good at.

	Before I knew it, Tsukimori was standing next to me.

	"As far as I see, Chizuru is interested in you, too, Nonomiya-kun," said Tsukimori with that mature smile she was so good at.

	"Oh? So she's not averse, either? I didn't know Nonomiya was such a lady-killer."		"Oh? So she's not averse, either? I didn't know Nonomiya was such a lady-killer."
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	Unlike Mirai-san, who didn't know that Tsukimori had asked me to go out with her, I completely failed to understand why she would encourage a relationship with Usami.		Unlike Mirai-san, who didn't know that Tsukimori had asked me to go out with her, I completely failed to understand why she would encourage a relationship with Usami.

	"Why don't you just go for her?"		"Why don't you just go for her?" Mirai-san didn't miss out on that delicious chance.

	Mirai-san didn't miss out on that delicious chance.

	"It's not my place to decide on that. Or am I just ignorant and love involves only one person?"		"It's not my place to decide on that. Or am I just ignorant and love involves only one person?"

Andrewgr: use proper form of word

2011-10-26T21:56:58Z

use proper form of word

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	"But your eye for men needs some serious polishing."		"But your eye for men needs some serious polishing."

	Apparently, her mood ''was'' good; all I got in return for my ~~cynic~~ remark was a sugar-sweet smile.		Apparently, her mood ''was'' good; all I got in return for my cynical remark was a sugar-sweet smile.

	"I really don't think so? You will surely become my dear life partner."		"I really don't think so? You will surely become my dear life partner."

Andrewgr: question for translator

2011-10-26T21:53:43Z

question for translator

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	"I...I will! I will do it so properly!" cried Saruwatari-san, and moved even faster than before.		"I...I will! I will do it so properly!" cried Saruwatari-san, and moved even faster than before.

	"See? Any other guy's like that, right?"		"See? Any other guy's like that, right?" <!-- I don't understand what this sentence is trying to say. -->

	"Are you a devil?"		"Are you a devil?"