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Mane: Apostrophe

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	"Oh you're a trip! You're joking, right? Didn't you agree quite a lot to my doubts?"		"Oh you're a trip! You're joking, right? Didn't you agree quite a lot to my doubts?"

	"Indeed, I did agree. Insofar that the case could also be viewed in such an interesting light. Thanks to you I could catch a glimpse of how professional detectives deduce things by drawing one logical conclusion upon another. But that's all. My confidence in Tsukimori won`t be swayed just by your assumptions."		"Indeed, I did agree. Insofar that the case could also be viewed in such an interesting light. Thanks to you I could catch a glimpse of how professional detectives deduce things by drawing one logical conclusion upon another. But that's all. My confidence in Tsukimori won't be swayed just by your assumptions."

	When I smiled, he glared at me for just a split-second.		When I smiled, he glared at me for just a split-second.
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	I was unable to answer him right away.		I was unable to answer him right away.

	Konan had assured me he`d drop this case. And he was surely not someone who broke promises.		Konan had assured me he'd drop this case. And he was surely not someone who broke promises.

	But still I just couldn't bring myself to let anyone else know about the murder recipe.		But still I just couldn't bring myself to let anyone else know about the murder recipe.

BladeUnderHeart: Tense, word choice, word order changes for more natural english

2013-04-15T07:53:02Z

Tense, word choice, word order changes for more natural english

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MiY4Gi: /* [Bye-Bye] */

2012-09-25T15:09:15Z

[Bye-Bye]

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	On the boundary separating light and darkness, a tall man with the appearance of a gigolo grinned daringly, a cigarette dangling from his mouth.		On the boundary separating light and darkness, a tall man with the appearance of a gigolo grinned daringly, a cigarette dangling from his mouth.

	"Ya! Quite unexpected to have you call out me. What happened?"		"Ya! Quite unexpected to have you call me out. What happened?"

	His voice resounded from the concrete all around us.		His voice resounded from the concrete all around us.
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	Konan stared into the air with an odd light in his eyes, originating from ecstasy.		Konan stared into the air with an odd light in his eyes, originating from ecstasy.

	"It's such a tremulous excitement when their masks crumble! It feels as if I were able to sneak a peek at the true nature of us humans. Bare emotions tell the truth much eloquently than any justification."		"It's such a tremulous excitement when their masks crumble! It feels as if I were able to sneak a peek at the true nature of us humans. Bare emotions tell the truth much more eloquently than any justification."

	When he finished, I couldn't suppress a sneer anymore.		When he finished, I couldn't suppress a sneer anymore.
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	But it was his peculiar kind of grin that looked dead serious.		But it was his peculiar kind of grin that looked dead serious.

	"—Because that's ~~what~~ I've chosen to live my life ~~like~~."		"—Because that's how I've chosen to live my life."

	When I took another glance at his "grin", I came to think that that way of smiling must be the embodiment of his nature.		When I took another glance at his "grin", I came to think that that way of smiling must be the embodiment of his nature.

Jonathanasdf: navbar

2011-12-15T02:51:42Z

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SyQadelic at 22:28, 26 October 2011

2011-10-26T22:28:49Z

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	It was a sinister item indeed, of which a single bite would certainly cause nausea to any man like me without physical defense against sweet words.		It was a sinister item indeed, of which a single bite would certainly cause nausea to any man like me without physical defense against sweet words.

	If you write such a dangerous thing with your very own hands, with all your wit can offer, during an entire long night, then ~~you're~~ life cannot be assured anymore. Even if you survived it, you would be scarred for life with a horrendous trauma.		If you write such a dangerous thing with your very own hands, with all your wit can offer, during an entire long night, then your life cannot be assured anymore. Even if you survived it, you would be scarred for life with a horrendous trauma.

	An actual survivor states that living became hard just a few minutes after starting to write.		An actual survivor states that living became hard just a few minutes after starting to write.

EusthEnoptEron at 22:32, 15 July 2011

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	"...you've got me there. You're completely right. Can't counter that," he pulled a new cigarette from the pocket of his jacket<!--innentasche/jackentasche verkürzt ausdrückbar?--> while smiling lopsidedly and put it into his mouth, "To tell the truth, the department chief and the station chief, well, let's just say the bigwigs, are bugging me all the time because they want me to do my work properly. My colleagues have already given up though, since it's nothing new for them, heh!"		"...you've got me there. You're completely right. Can't counter that," he pulled a new cigarette from the pocket of his jacket<!--innentasche/jackentasche verkürzt ausdrückbar?--> while smiling lopsidedly and put it into his mouth, "To tell the truth, the department chief and the station chief, well, let's just say the bigwigs, are bugging me all the time because they want me to do my work properly. My colleagues have already given up though, since it's nothing new for them, heh!"

	A small light flared up in the darkness. Konan had lit the cigarette with a ~~pale blue~~<!-- clear blue, evtl. nicht Farbe gemeint?--><!--als gigolo könnte er ja auch ein zippo oder so haben...das halt nicht, sondern blass/pastell-blau? wirkt auch billiger als ein "klares" aquamarin oder so--><!-- Könnte auch sein, dass es der Name des Clubs ist, der zuvor erwähnt wurde. Stand als クリアーブルー da, btw. --><!-- Google is your friend in Japanese, too. Two of the first five hits for クリアーブルー http://bandh-r.org/bandh/7.1/HE-CBLUE-SET/ typical are for pregnancy test kits. So change to 'a lighter advertising some sleazy product' --><!-- mhhh... I saw those, too, when I researched, but I can't believe that he would carry around a lighter with pregnancy test kit advertisement on it. As a counter-argument, there are also lighters like this one http://calamel.jp/_/item/1003689360 or it may have really just been a color declaration. --><!-- I'm not buying it in either literal or figurative senses. Why? 1. If the lighter were a clear, blue color, why wouldn't it be 'sora no aoi no raitaa (don't have the IME on this machine)?' 2. I find it pretty unlikely that the Zippo Clear Blue model is so common in Japan that it's known by its model name. I might believe 'Zippo lighter' but I wouldn't believe that. Further, 3. Zippos are pretty expensive. Konan has already made a big deal out of the fact that he could afford an Audi but not something more expensive. He dresses cheap and loud. Why would he have an expensive, subtle lighter. So much for the Zippo. 4. Last and most telling, Konan has a lighter in one other scene described. It's advertising a hostess club. Given that his character doesn't suddenly do anything else subtle, why would the lighter be deliberately described as it was unless it were a reinforcement of the existing trait. I can certainly imagine that the staff at a hostess club might have such a lighter laying around and he has already demonstrated that he lifts lighters from hostess clubs. As a small suffix, the ClearBlue home pregnancy test was heavily advertised in the US in the '90s. I remember the ads on TV. I remember making ''jokes'' about the ads on TV. They were that common. I would not be surprised to find out that the product was heavily advertised in contraception-backward Japan as well. Conclusion, it's a lighter advertising a home pregnancy test and it specifically mentioned to make him look sleazy, just like the first lighter was. -->, ~~cheap~~ lighter.		A small light flared up in the darkness. Konan had lit the cigarette with a lighter advertising some sleazy product<!-- clear blue, evtl. nicht Farbe gemeint?--><!--als gigolo könnte er ja auch ein zippo oder so haben...das halt nicht, sondern blass/pastell-blau? wirkt auch billiger als ein "klares" aquamarin oder so--><!-- Könnte auch sein, dass es der Name des Clubs ist, der zuvor erwähnt wurde. Stand als クリアーブルー da, btw. --><!-- Google is your friend in Japanese, too. Two of the first five hits for クリアーブルー http://bandh-r.org/bandh/7.1/HE-CBLUE-SET/ typical are for pregnancy test kits. So change to 'a lighter advertising some sleazy product' --><!-- mhhh... I saw those, too, when I researched, but I can't believe that he would carry around a lighter with pregnancy test kit advertisement on it. As a counter-argument, there are also lighters like this one http://calamel.jp/_/item/1003689360 or it may have really just been a color declaration. --><!-- I'm not buying it in either literal or figurative senses. Why? 1. If the lighter were a clear, blue color, why wouldn't it be 'sora no aoi no raitaa (don't have the IME on this machine)?' 2. I find it pretty unlikely that the Zippo Clear Blue model is so common in Japan that it's known by its model name. I might believe 'Zippo lighter' but I wouldn't believe that. Further, 3. Zippos are pretty expensive. Konan has already made a big deal out of the fact that he could afford an Audi but not something more expensive. He dresses cheap and loud. Why would he have an expensive, subtle lighter. So much for the Zippo. 4. Last and most telling, Konan has a lighter in one other scene described. It's advertising a hostess club. Given that his character doesn't suddenly do anything else subtle, why would the lighter be deliberately described as it was unless it were a reinforcement of the existing trait. I can certainly imagine that the staff at a hostess club might have such a lighter laying around and he has already demonstrated that he lifts lighters from hostess clubs. As a small suffix, the ClearBlue home pregnancy test was heavily advertised in the US in the '90s. I remember the ads on TV. I remember making ''jokes'' about the ads on TV. They were that common. I would not be surprised to find out that the product was heavily advertised in contraception-backward Japan as well. Conclusion, it's a lighter advertising a home pregnancy test and it specifically mentioned to make him look sleazy, just like the first lighter was. --><!-- 1. Deliberately using English words/adjectives is sometimes a means of making the text more interesting, so I wouldn't be too surprised to find an English color name. I have to agree on your second point, though. It was actually pretty hard to find that lighter and most likely it's really just a coincidence that it exists with that name. Anyway, I didn't know ClearBlue was that widely known. In that case I think we can go with your suggestion, since it pretty much nails what the lighter is. -->.

	"...Can you figure why they still let me grandstand?"		"...Can you figure why they still let me grandstand?"

Senile seinen: essay on stupid cigarette lighter...

2011-07-15T02:00:40Z

essay on stupid cigarette lighter...

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	"...you've got me there. You're completely right. Can't counter that," he pulled a new cigarette from the pocket of his jacket<!--innentasche/jackentasche verkürzt ausdrückbar?--> while smiling lopsidedly and put it into his mouth, "To tell the truth, the department chief and the station chief, well, let's just say the bigwigs, are bugging me all the time because they want me to do my work properly. My colleagues have already given up though, since it's nothing new for them, heh!"		"...you've got me there. You're completely right. Can't counter that," he pulled a new cigarette from the pocket of his jacket<!--innentasche/jackentasche verkürzt ausdrückbar?--> while smiling lopsidedly and put it into his mouth, "To tell the truth, the department chief and the station chief, well, let's just say the bigwigs, are bugging me all the time because they want me to do my work properly. My colleagues have already given up though, since it's nothing new for them, heh!"

	A small light flared up in the darkness. Konan had lit the cigarette with a pale blue<!-- clear blue, evtl. nicht Farbe gemeint?--><!--als gigolo könnte er ja auch ein zippo oder so haben...das halt nicht, sondern blass/pastell-blau? wirkt auch billiger als ein "klares" aquamarin oder so--><!-- Könnte auch sein, dass es der Name des Clubs ist, der zuvor erwähnt wurde. Stand als クリアーブルー da, btw. --><!-- Google is your friend in Japanese, too. Two of the first five hits for クリアーブルー http://bandh-r.org/bandh/7.1/HE-CBLUE-SET/ typical are for pregnancy test kits. So change to 'a lighter advertising some sleazy product' --><!-- mhhh... I saw those, too, when I researched, but I can't believe that he would carry around a lighter with pregnancy test kit advertisement on it. As a counter-argument, there are also lighters like this one http://calamel.jp/_/item/1003689360 or it may have really just been a color declaration. -->, cheap lighter.		A small light flared up in the darkness. Konan had lit the cigarette with a pale blue<!-- clear blue, evtl. nicht Farbe gemeint?--><!--als gigolo könnte er ja auch ein zippo oder so haben...das halt nicht, sondern blass/pastell-blau? wirkt auch billiger als ein "klares" aquamarin oder so--><!-- Könnte auch sein, dass es der Name des Clubs ist, der zuvor erwähnt wurde. Stand als クリアーブルー da, btw. --><!-- Google is your friend in Japanese, too. Two of the first five hits for クリアーブルー http://bandh-r.org/bandh/7.1/HE-CBLUE-SET/ typical are for pregnancy test kits. So change to 'a lighter advertising some sleazy product' --><!-- mhhh... I saw those, too, when I researched, but I can't believe that he would carry around a lighter with pregnancy test kit advertisement on it. As a counter-argument, there are also lighters like this one http://calamel.jp/_/item/1003689360 or it may have really just been a color declaration. --><!-- I'm not buying it in either literal or figurative senses. Why? 1. If the lighter were a clear, blue color, why wouldn't it be 'sora no aoi no raitaa (don't have the IME on this machine)?' 2. I find it pretty unlikely that the Zippo Clear Blue model is so common in Japan that it's known by its model name. I might believe 'Zippo lighter' but I wouldn't believe that. Further, 3. Zippos are pretty expensive. Konan has already made a big deal out of the fact that he could afford an Audi but not something more expensive. He dresses cheap and loud. Why would he have an expensive, subtle lighter. So much for the Zippo. 4. Last and most telling, Konan has a lighter in one other scene described. It's advertising a hostess club. Given that his character doesn't suddenly do anything else subtle, why would the lighter be deliberately described as it was unless it were a reinforcement of the existing trait. I can certainly imagine that the staff at a hostess club might have such a lighter laying around and he has already demonstrated that he lifts lighters from hostess clubs. As a small suffix, the ClearBlue home pregnancy test was heavily advertised in the US in the '90s. I remember the ads on TV. I remember making ''jokes'' about the ads on TV. They were that common. I would not be surprised to find out that the product was heavily advertised in contraception-backward Japan as well. Conclusion, it's a lighter advertising a home pregnancy test and it specifically mentioned to make him look sleazy, just like the first lighter was. -->, cheap lighter.

	"...Can you figure why they still let me grandstand?"		"...Can you figure why they still let me grandstand?"

EusthEnoptEron at 17:46, 12 July 2011

2011-07-12T17:46:54Z

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	"...you've got me there. You're completely right. Can't counter that," he pulled a new cigarette from the pocket of his jacket<!--innentasche/jackentasche verkürzt ausdrückbar?--> while smiling lopsidedly and put it into his mouth, "To tell the truth, the department chief and the station chief, well, let's just say the bigwigs, are bugging me all the time because they want me to do my work properly. My colleagues have already given up though, since it's nothing new for them, heh!"		"...you've got me there. You're completely right. Can't counter that," he pulled a new cigarette from the pocket of his jacket<!--innentasche/jackentasche verkürzt ausdrückbar?--> while smiling lopsidedly and put it into his mouth, "To tell the truth, the department chief and the station chief, well, let's just say the bigwigs, are bugging me all the time because they want me to do my work properly. My colleagues have already given up though, since it's nothing new for them, heh!"

	A small light flared up in the darkness. Konan had lit the cigarette with a pale blue<!-- clear blue, evtl. nicht Farbe gemeint?--><!--als gigolo könnte er ja auch ein zippo oder so haben...das halt nicht, sondern blass/pastell-blau? wirkt auch billiger als ein "klares" aquamarin oder so--><!-- Könnte auch sein, dass es der Name des Clubs ist, der zuvor erwähnt wurde. Stand als クリアーブルー da, btw. --><!-- Google is your friend in Japanese, too. Two of the first five hits for クリアーブルー http://bandh-r.org/bandh/7.1/HE-CBLUE-SET/ typical are for pregnancy test kits. So change to 'a lighter advertising some sleazy product' -->, cheap lighter.		A small light flared up in the darkness. Konan had lit the cigarette with a pale blue<!-- clear blue, evtl. nicht Farbe gemeint?--><!--als gigolo könnte er ja auch ein zippo oder so haben...das halt nicht, sondern blass/pastell-blau? wirkt auch billiger als ein "klares" aquamarin oder so--><!-- Könnte auch sein, dass es der Name des Clubs ist, der zuvor erwähnt wurde. Stand als クリアーブルー da, btw. --><!-- Google is your friend in Japanese, too. Two of the first five hits for クリアーブルー http://bandh-r.org/bandh/7.1/HE-CBLUE-SET/ typical are for pregnancy test kits. So change to 'a lighter advertising some sleazy product' --><!-- mhhh... I saw those, too, when I researched, but I can't believe that he would carry around a lighter with pregnancy test kit advertisement on it. As a counter-argument, there are also lighters like this one http://calamel.jp/_/item/1003689360 or it may have really just been a color declaration. -->, cheap lighter.

	"...Can you figure why they still let me grandstand?"		"...Can you figure why they still let me grandstand?"