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EusthEnoptEron: Removed unnecessary category.

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Removed unnecessary category.

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Mane: Word use

2013-12-02T00:50:51Z

Word use

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	After making sure that Ukai had left, Kamogawa scowled alternately at Usami and me.		After making sure that Ukai had left, Kamogawa scowled alternately at Usami and me.

	“Who was the irresponsible guy that ~~proposed~~ me ~~as the~~ class officer at the beginning of the term again?”		“Who was the irresponsible guy that nominated me for class officer at the beginning of the term again?”

	Just this once I was grateful for that irresponsible personality of his, though.		Just this once I was grateful for that irresponsible personality of his, though.

EusthEnoptEron at 08:05, 26 August 2013

2013-08-26T08:05:42Z

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	I looked to my side and found Usami with watery eyes. She not only gave the feeling of “born to be a little sister,” but actually had an elder brother.		I looked to my side and found Usami with watery eyes. She not only gave the feeling of “born to be a little sister,” but actually had an elder brother.

	~~“You’re quite a sissy~~, ~~aren’t you?~~” I said ~~and~~ produced a handkerchief.		“Come on, don't cry,” I said as I produced a handkerchief.

	“Just look at how she’s keeping calm though she’s bound to be sad in reality! If it was me, I wouldn’t be able to…”		“Just look at how she’s keeping calm though she’s bound to be sad in reality! If it was me, I wouldn’t be able to…”

EusthEnoptEron: Changed Yōko back to Youko

2012-08-26T10:26:09Z

Changed Yōko back to Youko

Jonathanasdf: navbar

2011-12-15T02:48:02Z

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Andrewgr: Making it clear who is speaking, otherwise it seems like Nonomiya is talking until you get to the following line

2011-10-26T04:32:56Z

Making it clear who is speaking, otherwise it seems like Nonomiya is talking until you get to the following line

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	But while knowing it was pretty tactless, I couldn’t help being under the impression that her white face, now accentuated by her mourning dress, looked even more sensual than at school.		But while knowing it was pretty tactless, I couldn’t help being under the impression that her white face, now accentuated by her mourning dress, looked even more sensual than at school.

	“I see. At any rate, be sure not to over-strain yourself and feel free to consult me anytime.”		“I see. At any rate, be sure not to over-strain yourself and feel free to consult me anytime.” Ukai patted her on the shoulder.

	Ukai patted her on the shoulder.

	“Thank you for coming as well, Chizuru, Nonomiya-kun.”		“Thank you for coming as well, Chizuru, Nonomiya-kun.”

Andrewgr: changing tense to agree with previous sentence

2011-10-26T04:31:43Z

changing tense to agree with previous sentence

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	“Thank you very much for your thoughtfulness. However, I have it in mind to attend school normally from the day after tomorrow because I think it will help me to distract myself.” She smiled weakly. “…I am a little anxious about leaving my mother alone at home, as she has been hit especially hard, but her siblings and my father's siblings both assured me that they will be supporting her for a while.”		“Thank you very much for your thoughtfulness. However, I have it in mind to attend school normally from the day after tomorrow because I think it will help me to distract myself.” She smiled weakly. “…I am a little anxious about leaving my mother alone at home, as she has been hit especially hard, but her siblings and my father's siblings both assured me that they will be supporting her for a while.”

	Tsukimori seemed exhausted. From the looks of it, she ~~hasn’t~~ been sleeping properly.		Tsukimori seemed exhausted. From the looks of it, she hadn’t been sleeping properly.

	But while knowing it was pretty tactless, I couldn’t help being under the impression that her white face, now accentuated by her mourning dress, looked even more sensual than at school.		But while knowing it was pretty tactless, I couldn’t help being under the impression that her white face, now accentuated by her mourning dress, looked even more sensual than at school.

Andrewgr: more natural phrasing

2011-10-26T04:30:28Z

more natural phrasing

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	Ukai first expressed his deepest sympathy before assuring her: “Don’t be concerned about school. Take your time and return when you’re comfortable.”		Ukai first expressed his deepest sympathy before assuring her: “Don’t be concerned about school. Take your time and return when you’re comfortable.”

	“Thank you very much for your thoughtfulness. However, I have it in mind to attend school normally from the day after tomorrow because I think it will help me to distract myself.” She smiled weakly. “…I am a little anxious about leaving my mother alone at home, as she has been hit especially hard, but her siblings and my father's siblings ~~respectively~~ assured me that they will be supporting her for a while.”		“Thank you very much for your thoughtfulness. However, I have it in mind to attend school normally from the day after tomorrow because I think it will help me to distract myself.” She smiled weakly. “…I am a little anxious about leaving my mother alone at home, as she has been hit especially hard, but her siblings and my father's siblings both assured me that they will be supporting her for a while.”

	Tsukimori seemed exhausted. From the looks of it, she hasn’t been sleeping properly.		Tsukimori seemed exhausted. From the looks of it, she hasn’t been sleeping properly.

Andrewgr: correct word

2011-10-26T04:28:45Z

correct word

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	–Life’s interesting because there’s a limit to it. The thrill of not knowing when it ends is what gives you the awareness of being alive.		–Life’s interesting because there’s a limit to it. The thrill of not knowing when it ends is what gives you the awareness of being alive.

	At first glance it might seem ~~contradicting~~ that death, the antithesis of life, highlights the value of life, but it actually makes sense. I even conceived the idea that most things in the world might work in a similar way.		At first glance it might seem contradictory that death, the antithesis of life, highlights the value of life, but it actually makes sense. I even conceived the idea that most things in the world might work in a similar way.

	At that very moment, enthralled by the risky murder recipe—I was most definitely living.		At that very moment, enthralled by the risky murder recipe—I was most definitely living.

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	The first lesson was English, but I don’t remember anything of it. I was pondering the accident of ~~Yōko~~ Tsukimori’s father.		The first lesson was English, but I don’t remember anything of it. I was pondering the accident of Youko Tsukimori’s father.

	I also played with the thought of browsing some news sites on my mobile phone—hidden from the eyes of the teacher, of course—but I decided against it because I was known as a fairly well-behaving student. I kept telling myself that I was keeping the best for last and spent a painful hour like this.		I also played with the thought of browsing some news sites on my mobile phone—hidden from the eyes of the teacher, of course—but I decided against it because I was known as a fairly well-behaving student. I kept telling myself that I was keeping the best for last and spent a painful hour like this.
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	“…too much speed due to the slope…”		“…too much speed due to the slope…”

	There were several text passages that reminded me of the “Feigned Traffic Accident Murder Recipe” as noted in the murder recipe. I couldn’t help getting excited at the thought that ~~“Yōko~~ Tsukimori had executed her murder plan.”		There were several text passages that reminded me of the “Feigned Traffic Accident Murder Recipe” as noted in the murder recipe. I couldn’t help getting excited at the thought that “Youko Tsukimori had executed her murder plan.”

	…and also, I couldn’t help feeling a chill run down my spine when I imagined the accident with that thought in mind.		…and also, I couldn’t help feeling a chill run down my spine when I imagined the accident with that thought in mind.
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	“Moreover, the class officers are required to come along to the funeral as the representatives of the class. I’m counting on you. Okay, homeroom’s closed.”		“Moreover, the class officers are required to come along to the funeral as the representatives of the class. I’m counting on you. Okay, homeroom’s closed.”

	Right when Ukai was about to finish: “Sensei!” Usami raised her hand, “The female class officer is ~~Yōko~~ herself.”		Right when Ukai was about to finish: “Sensei!” Usami raised her hand, “The female class officer is Youko herself.”

	“Aah, you’re right. Well then, Usami, may I ask you?”		“Aah, you’re right. Well then, Usami, may I ask you?”
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	“This is a misunderstanding, Usami. I am merely worried about a fellow classmate who has lost a dear one, you know?” Kamogawa assured us with a meek expression.		“This is a misunderstanding, Usami. I am merely worried about a fellow classmate who has lost a dear one, you know?” Kamogawa assured us with a meek expression.

	“That’s a lie. It’s clear that you only want to meet ~~Yōko~~-san because of your ulterior motives!” claimed Usami.		“That’s a lie. It’s clear that you only want to meet Youko-san because of your ulterior motives!” claimed Usami.

	“No, idiot! I would never have ulterior motives! I simply wish to soothe Tsukimori in these hard times,” he objected instantly, “Well, but sure, I would not be averse to her falling in love with me in the process, heh!”		“No, idiot! I would never have ulterior motives! I simply wish to soothe Tsukimori in these hard times,” he objected instantly, “Well, but sure, I would not be averse to her falling in love with me in the process, heh!”
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	I was, however, surprised at how composed Tsukimori apparently was.		I was, however, surprised at how composed Tsukimori apparently was.

	It was then that I recalled that I had once asked Usami why all the girls called Tsukimori with a “-san” added to her name. Her answer had been: ~~“Yōko~~-san may be the same age as us, but doesn’t she kind of look and behave very maturely? So basically, someone started calling her ~~Yōko~~-san, which then led to the current state.”		It was then that I recalled that I had once asked Usami why all the girls called Tsukimori with a “-san” added to her name. Her answer had been: “Youko-san may be the same age as us, but doesn’t she kind of look and behave very maturely? So basically, someone started calling her Youko-san, which then led to the current state.”

	Indeed. I was almost unsure of who the mother and who the daughter was.		Indeed. I was almost unsure of who the mother and who the daughter was.

	“…I’m so sorry for ~~Yōko~~-san.” <!-- "I feel so sorry for Yoko-san."? -->		“…I’m so sorry for Youko-san.” <!-- "I feel so sorry for Yoko-san."? -->

	I looked to my side and found Usami with watery eyes. She not only gave the feeling of “born to be a little sister,” but actually had an elder brother.		I looked to my side and found Usami with watery eyes. She not only gave the feeling of “born to be a little sister,” but actually had an elder brother.
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	“I feel blessed.”		“I feel blessed.”

	~~“Yōko~~-san…”		“Youko-san…”

	Usami was on the verge of tears again, apparently moved by Tsukimori’s brave behavior.		Usami was on the verge of tears again, apparently moved by Tsukimori’s brave behavior.
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	I poked her head and said: “Shouldn’t you calm down a bit? You wanted to express your condolences properly, right?”		I poked her head and said: “Shouldn’t you calm down a bit? You wanted to express your condolences properly, right?”

	“…Yeah,” Usami nodded teary-eyed. ~~“Um…Yōko~~-san, it will be hard on you, but…i-it will whe hard on yhew, but…”		“…Yeah,” Usami nodded teary-eyed. “Um…Youko-san, it will be hard on you, but…i-it will whe hard on yhew, but…”

	Usami began weeping mid-sentence because she couldn’t bear it anymore.		Usami began weeping mid-sentence because she couldn’t bear it anymore.