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[Orange & Wine]: Comment on bath and me

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	"Welcome home, darling. Would you like to take a bath? Or would you rather like... me?"		"Welcome home, darling. Would you like to take a bath? Or would you rather like... me?" <!-- Isn't it typically a bath, meal, or me? The meal is even mentioned later on. Or is it like that in the original? -->

2014-06-05T15:01:39Z

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	Not a soul was to be seen in the dark and cold residential area. The ~~unceasing~~ rain falling upon us conjured up a sense of isolation in me, notwithstanding that Tsukimori was by my side.		Not a soul was to be seen in the dark and cold residential area. The ceaseless rain falling upon us conjured up a sense of isolation in me, notwithstanding that Tsukimori was by my side.

	We hurried up the long, steep stairs, at which end ''that'' house awaited us—with its very unique geometrical design that made it stand out from the rest of the rich neighborhood.		We hurried up the long, steep stairs, at which end ''that'' house awaited us—with its very unique geometrical design that made it stand out from the rest of the rich neighborhood.

2014-02-28T15:32:18Z

Removed unnecessary category.

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2011-12-15T02:50:15Z

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2011-10-27T04:17:23Z

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	Neither can I deny that this was a pretext to explore her house on my own.		Neither can I deny that this was a pretext to explore her house on my own.

	"We'd should probably search separately. I'll look through the room of your father."		"We should probably search separately. I'll look through the room of your father."

	But it's also true that I wanted to do a good deed, much as it didn't suit me, and help her out at least a little after seeing her behaving with such maturity.		But it's also true that I wanted to do a good deed, much as it didn't suit me, and help her out at least a little after seeing her behaving with such maturity.

2011-10-27T04:15:37Z

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	She opened one of the doors alongside the corridor. The instant the door went open, I could smell the overly sweet scent of perfume.		She opened one of the doors alongside the corridor. The instant the door went open, I could smell the overly sweet scent of perfume.

	The walls were covered with white wallpaper, a curtain decorated with lace, a dressing table ~~put at~~ the wall and a dresser that was laden with countless makeup goods. It was obviously the room of her mother.		The walls were covered with white wallpaper, a curtain decorated with lace, a dressing table against the wall and a dresser that was laden with countless makeup goods. It was obviously the room of her mother.

	"You get on well with your mother, don't you?"		"You get on well with your mother, don't you?"

2011-10-27T04:14:18Z

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	For example—a bit of new information about the recipe.		For example—a bit of new information about the recipe.

	I was aware that I was being indiscreet. However, in all honesty I was fond of that kind of mood. I was enjoying a thrill comparable to detective work or exploring of a cave for a treasure.		I was aware that I was being indiscreet. However, in all honesty I was fond of that kind of mood. I was enjoying a thrill comparable to detective work or exploring a cave for a treasure.

	"It looks like there is nothing here. Maybe in her room...?" said Tsukimori gloomily and left the kitchen, wordlessly followed by me.		"It looks like there is nothing here. Maybe in her room...?" said Tsukimori gloomily and left the kitchen, wordlessly followed by me.

2011-10-27T04:10:33Z

"underway" doesn't make sense; "by the time" implies duration, which is appropriate here

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	We hurried up the long, steep stairs, at which end ''that'' house awaited us—with its very unique geometrical design that made it stand out from the rest of the rich neighborhood.		We hurried up the long, steep stairs, at which end ''that'' house awaited us—with its very unique geometrical design that made it stand out from the rest of the rich neighborhood.

	Tsukimori had tried countless times calling her home phone and her mother's mobile phone ~~underway~~, but the only voice she got to hear was the response of the answering machine. Because of pressing restlessness, I suspect, I heard none of her easygoing remarks anymore at the time we reached our destination.		Tsukimori had tried countless times calling her home phone and her mother's mobile phone on the way, but the only voice she got to hear was the response of the answering machine. Because of pressing restlessness, I suspect, I heard none of her easygoing remarks anymore by the time we reached our destination.

	Pathetic though it was, I found myself unable to find the right words to console her.		Pathetic though it was, I found myself unable to find the right words to console her.