Golden Time:Volume3 Chapter4 - Revision history

L.kostas: Chapter 4 header

2014-04-14T04:34:10Z

Chapter 4 header

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	==Chapter 4==		<noinclude>
			==Golden Time 3: Chapter 4==
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			===Chapter 4===
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	It seemed like Kouko had ended up catching a cold after the drinking party in Banri's room.		It seemed like Kouko had ended up catching a cold after the drinking party in Banri's room.
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	She quietly nodded.		She quietly nodded.

	She had a [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Scrunchie scrunchy] held in her mouth. She then busied herself with flinging her long hair back with both her hands, twisted her hair, then wrapped it into a nicely coiled bundle. <!-- twisted her hair seems repetitive, not sure if "it" would be all right -->		She had a <span class="plainlinks">[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Scrunchie scrunchy]</span> held in her mouth. She then busied herself with flinging her long hair back with both her hands, twisted her hair, then wrapped it into a nicely coiled bundle. <!-- twisted her hair seems repetitive, not sure if "it" would be all right -->

	''Considering that we haven't seen each other in a while, she's surprisingly cold, huh?'', thought Banri as he peered into the white face of Kouko.		''Considering that we haven't seen each other in a while, she's surprisingly cold, huh?'', thought Banri as he peered into the white face of Kouko.

	"Why?", asked Kouko after bundling up her hair beautifully, like magic, with a single scrunchy<ref>'''Kouko's hair bun:''' [http://www.wikihow.com/Do-a-Quick-and-Easy-Hair-Bun Here's] a visual aid to supplement my crappy description.<br/><br/></ref>. That smiling face. The perfect Kaga Kouko smile.		"Why?", asked Kouko after bundling up her hair beautifully, like magic, with a single scrunchy<ref>'''Kouko's hair bun:''' <span class="plainlinks">[http://www.wikihow.com/Do-a-Quick-and-Easy-Hair-Bun Here's]</span> a visual aid to supplement my crappy description.<br/><br/></ref>. That smiling face. The perfect Kaga Kouko smile.

	Even though she didn't seem really different, it felt like she was being unusually distant.		Even though she didn't seem really different, it felt like she was being unusually distant.
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	The third-year instructed the club members to open the boxes.		The third-year instructed the club members to open the boxes.

	Upon opening the boxes, inside them were used, worn-out [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Geta_(footwear) geta-clogs] and kasa-hats<ref>'''Kasa-hats:''' Old-fashioned, eastern, conical hats made of straw and bamboo for to protect the head/face against rain, snow and sun. See [http://ja.wikipedia.org/wiki/%E7%AC%A0 this].<br/><br/></ref> for the girls. All of them had the names of other universities written with markers, and while Kosshi-senpai handed them out one by one, he said,		Upon opening the boxes, inside them were used, worn-out <span class="plainlinks">[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Geta_(footwear) geta-clogs]</span> and kasa-hats<ref>'''Kasa-hats:''' Old-fashioned, eastern, conical hats made of straw and bamboo for to protect the head/face against rain, snow and sun. See <span class="plainlinks">[http://ja.wikipedia.org/wiki/%E7%AC%A0 this]</span>.<br/><br/></ref> for the girls. All of them had the names of other universities written with markers, and while Kosshi-senpai handed them out one by one, he said,

	"All these are on loan to us, so please make sure not to lose them! And take care of them properly!"		"All these are on loan to us, so please make sure not to lose them! And take care of them properly!"

L.kostas: added chapter 4 beginning illustration

2014-01-27T08:52:16Z

added chapter 4 beginning illustration

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	It seemed like Kouko had ended up catching a cold after the drinking party in Banri's room.		It seemed like Kouko had ended up catching a cold after the drinking party in Banri's room.

Larethian at 17:18, 26 November 2013

2013-11-26T17:18:04Z

L.kostas: a few corrections

2013-11-26T15:27:21Z

a few corrections

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	The long awaited practice day of the Festival-Research club.		The long awaited practice day of the Festival-Research club.

	Banri sent a mail asking, "Will you be coming today?", but there was no reply, and he concluded that Kouko was still staying in bed that ay.		Banri sent a mail asking, "Will you be coming today?", but there was no reply, and he concluded that Kouko was still staying in bed that day.

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	Thus, during noon, he was surprised to see ~~Koukou~~ at the usual gathering place, the rehearsal room of a district facility.		Thus, during noon, he was surprised to see Kouko at the usual gathering place, the rehearsal room of a district facility.

	"Huh? I thought you were resting at home."		"Huh? I thought you were resting at home."
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	Linda was yet to be seen.		Linda was yet to be seen.

	"Tada ~~Banrii~~, you didn't show up much recently, did you?" <!-- was that meant to be double i? -->		"Tada Banri, you didn't show up much recently, did you?" <!-- was that meant to be double i? -->

	One of the upperclassmen guys suddenly rubbed Banri's buttocks from behind. ''Hiyh'', Banri jumped, and to avoid exposing his back, he turned around to evade by making a wide circular step, like that of a sumo wrestler. However,		One of the upperclassmen guys suddenly rubbed Banri's buttocks from behind. ''Hiyh'', Banri jumped, and to avoid exposing his back, he turned around to evade by making a wide circular step, like that of a sumo wrestler. However,
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	The door opened and a third-year upperclassman appeared. Linda also came in along with the upperclassman,		The door opened and a third-year upperclassman appeared. Linda also came in along with the upperclassman,

	"Hey!? ~~Who~~ on earth are those guys bullying Banri!"		"Hey!? Why on earth are those guys bullying Banri!"

	Driving away those who had been pinning down Banri, Linda grabbed his hand and pulled him up. Exerting strength, then letting go of that hand, ''bishi!'', with both of them almost synchronized. They smiled at each other, face-to-face, a proof of their friendship. The sign of the secret relationship they shared and kept from the rest. ...... while there was no real need for them to keep it a secret, neither was there any real need to explain everything right from the beginning, was what Banri thought.		Driving away those who had been pinning down Banri, Linda grabbed his hand and pulled him up. Exerting strength, then letting go of that hand, ''bishi!'', with both of them almost synchronized. They smiled at each other, face-to-face, a proof of their friendship. The sign of the secret relationship they shared and kept from the rest. ...... while there was no real need for them to keep it a secret, neither was there any real need to explain everything right from the beginning, was what Banri thought.
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	Everyone had rigid movements due to the geta-clogs they weren't accustomed to, had their faces hidden with the kasa-hats, were wearing similar-looking T-shirts and similar pants. Within this circle where each individual's hairstyle was not even distinguishable, Kouko had been dancing 'normally'. Without getting called the golden robot, erh, ~~C3P~~-O, in ridicule, she had completely erased her presence within this faceless dancer crowd.		Everyone had rigid movements due to the geta-clogs they weren't accustomed to, had their faces hidden with the kasa-hats, were wearing similar-looking T-shirts and similar pants. Within this circle where each individual's hairstyle was not even distinguishable, Kouko had been dancing 'normally'. Without getting called the golden robot, erh, C-3PO, in ridicule, she had completely erased her presence within this faceless dancer crowd.

	An ''Orhh!'' came from somewhere, accompanied by applause, to which Kouko's face turned red beneath her kasa-hat.		An ''Orhh!'' came from somewhere, accompanied by applause, to which Kouko's face turned red beneath her kasa-hat.
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	He took her stuff with his left hand, and grabbed her hand with his right. When he pulled Kouko, she too started running, and for now, the two of them escaped to the edge of the eaves of a stationary shop which had its shutters closed.		He took her stuff with his left hand, and grabbed her hand with his right. When he pulled Kouko, she too started running, and for now, the two of them escaped to the edge of the eaves of a stationary shop which had its shutters closed.

	And at ~~the~~ around the same time, ''Zahh'', a loud sound was heard, and the rain suddenly became heavy. It was a pelting downpour.		And at around the same time, ''Zahh'', a loud sound was heard, and the rain suddenly became heavy. It was a pelting downpour.

	With the droplets forming a smoke-like white at the feet, salarymen either used their briefcase or newspapers to cover their heads, dashing; the middle school girls from a nearby private school were screaming, "Kyaaaaa!", and for some reason broke into roars of laughter, then the mass of them ran off along the road that led to the station.		With the droplets forming a smoke-like white at the feet, salarymen either used their briefcase or newspapers to cover their heads, dashing; the middle school girls from a nearby private school were screaming, "Kyaaaaa!", and for some reason broke into roars of laughter, then the mass of them ran off along the road that led to the station.
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	''Is she going to carry on?''		''Is she going to carry on?''

	"...... like I've been telling you! I don't get you! Seriously, what's wrong with you all of a sudden! Did I do anything do you, Kaga-san!?"		"...... like I've been telling you! I don't get you! Seriously, what's wrong with you all of a sudden! Did I do anything to you, Kaga-san!?"

	He returned in a voice which, no softer than the drumming rain, perhaps felt a little strong. Kouko quivered.		He returned in a voice which, no softer than the drumming rain, perhaps felt a little strong. Kouko quivered.

Larethian: many thanks to georgi for doing a quick proof

2013-11-26T06:07:09Z

many thanks to georgi for doing a quick proof

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	Some time later, Banri awoke fully and, "just what I would expect of girls", was the thought that greeted him. Kouko and Chinami had washed up, collected the trash into trash bags, and with that, had returned some order to the room.		Some time later, Banri awoke fully and, "just what I would expect of girls", was the thought that greeted him. Kouko and Chinami had washed up, collected the trash into trash bags, and with that, had returned some order to the room.

	It was about nine when Yanagisawa and 2D-kun were awakened, ~~I think~~. Yanagisawa totally missed the timing for taking out his trash, and in the end, the three guys skipped school, hung out and spent the rest of the day in lethargy.		It was about nine when Yanagisawa and 2D-kun were awakened, he supposed. Yanagisawa totally missed the timing for taking out his trash, and in the end, the three guys skipped school, hung out and spent the rest of the day in lethargy.

	A message from Kouko came in the evening, and Banri got to know that she had caught a cold. And because Kouko said that she wasn't feeling well, they couldn't meet up and spend the weekend together, something which had been routine for them since they started dating. She didn't call back even after missing his calls, nor message back, but, thinking that it wouldn't be nice to keep disturbing her rest, he left a voice mail and left her alone thereafter.		A message from Kouko came in the evening, and Banri got to know that she had caught a cold. And because Kouko said that she wasn't feeling well, they couldn't meet up and spend the weekend together, something which had been routine for them since they started dating. She didn't call back even after missing his calls, nor message back, but, thinking that it wouldn't be nice to keep disturbing her rest, he left a voice mail and left her alone thereafter.
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	Linda was yet to be seen.		Linda was yet to be seen.

	"Tada Banri, you didn't show up much recently, did you?" <!-- was that meant to be double i? -->		"Tada Banri~i<!-- this is supposed to be double 'i' here, dragged out, I decided to add another ~ for emphasis instead of leaving the double 'ii'-->, you didn't show up much recently, did you?" <!-- was that meant to be double i? -->

	One of the upperclassmen guys suddenly rubbed Banri's buttocks from behind. ''Hiyh'', Banri jumped, and to avoid exposing his back, he turned around to evade by making a wide circular step, like that of a sumo wrestler. However,		One of the upperclassmen guys suddenly rubbed Banri's buttocks from behind. ''Hiyh'', Banri jumped, and to avoid exposing his back, he turned around to evade by making a wide circular step, like that of a sumo wrestler. However,
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	The door opened and a third-year upperclassman appeared. Linda also came in along with the upperclassman,		The door opened and a third-year upperclassman appeared. Linda also came in along with the upperclassman,

	"Hey!? ~~Why on earth~~ are ~~those guys~~ bullying Banri!"		"Hey!? Who are the ones bullying Banri!"<!-- it's actually 'who' here, but I guess retaining every single nuance and word makes it sound strange, so I liberalized to smoothen it -->

	Driving away those who had been pinning down Banri, Linda grabbed his hand and pulled him up. Exerting strength, then letting go of that hand, ''bishi!'', with both of them almost synchronized. They smiled at each other, face-to-face, a proof of their friendship. The sign of the secret relationship they shared and kept from the rest. ...... while there was no real need for them to keep it a secret, neither was there any real need to explain everything right from the beginning, was what Banri thought.		Driving away those who had been pinning down Banri, Linda grabbed his hand and pulled him up. Exerting strength, then letting go of that hand, ''bishi!'', with both of them almost synchronized. They smiled at each other, face-to-face, a proof of their friendship. The sign of the secret relationship they shared and kept from the rest. ...... while there was no real need for them to keep it a secret, neither was there any real need to explain everything right from the beginning, was what Banri thought.
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	That's right. Coming next month, it would finally be the debut of the Festival Research club's Awa-dance.		That's right. Coming next month, it would finally be the debut of the Festival Research club's Awa-dance.

	Even when I termed it a debut, it was more like just a matter of getting to blend in with the Awa-dance group from other universities, a so called Ren-group<ref>'''Ren-groups:''' A Ren-group or just Ren(連) to be precise, is just an Awa-dance term meaning group/clique with each group/clique either having a famous identity in Awa-dance culture, or comprising of specific demographics. For example, in the later case, a Corporate-Ren could be a group made up of office and corporate people, while a University-Ren would be made up of university students, which is the Ren that the Omaken (the Festival Research club) will be joining. During the dance festival itself, the different Rens will form up in a procession.<br/><br/></ref>, to participate as dancers in a dance procession which relies on large numbers, but still, a debut was a debut. Everyone would be dancing in the procession along the commercial district in midday.		Even when it was termed as a debut, it was more like just a matter of getting to blend in with the Awa-dance group from other universities, a so called Ren-group<ref>'''Ren-groups:''' A Ren-group or just Ren(連) to be precise, is just an Awa-dance term meaning group/clique with each group/clique either having a famous identity in Awa-dance culture, or comprising of specific demographics. For example, in the later case, a Corporate-Ren could be a group made up of office and corporate people, while a University-Ren would be made up of university students, which is the Ren that the Omaken (the Festival Research club) will be joining. During the dance festival itself, the different Rens will form up in a procession.<br/><br/></ref>, to participate as dancers in a dance procession which relies on large numbers, but still, a debut was a debut. Everyone would be dancing in the procession along the commercial district in midday.

	"We have neither musical instruments nor lanterns. Well, you will get used to it."		"We have neither musical instruments nor lanterns. Well, you will get used to it."
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	''I wonder what Linda thought when she chanced upon me that day?'' The sudden desire to ask Linda about it came to Banri's mind.		''I wonder what Linda thought when she chanced upon me that day?'' The sudden desire to ask Linda about it came to Banri's mind.

	The girls in the rehearsal room had put on the collected kasa-hats and were all dressed in similar T-shirts. With merely many lips parted into smiles lined up, from just a glance alone, I could no longer distinguish one from the other.		The girls in the rehearsal room had put on the collected kasa-hats and were all dressed in similar T-shirts. With merely many lips parted into smiles lined up, from just a glance alone, he could no longer distinguish one from the other.

	"Let's form a line and start practice to try getting used to these."		"Let's form a line and start practice to try getting used to these."