Horizon:Volume 1 Chapter 02 - Revision history

Muton at 20:19, 12 February 2015

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	Murmuring it again, Toori took one of the scrolls and held it up to Sanyou and Oriotorai.		Murmuring it again, Toori took one of the scrolls and held it up to Sanyou and Oriotorai.

	“Won’t it be alright if we cover it with this? It’d be like a massive sliding door. What do you think, ~~sensei~~?”		“Won’t it be alright if we cover it with this? It’d be like a massive sliding door. What do you think, Sensei?”

	“I guess.” Oriotorai said, as Toori unrolled the scroll of Japanese paper in front of her.		“I guess.” Oriotorai said, as Toori unrolled the scroll of Japanese paper in front of her.

Muton at 04:27, 11 February 2015

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	'''Houjou — Alliance of Indian Countries — Tokai ~ [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kant%C5%8D_region Kanto]:''' The long-lived of the Houjou have an automaton-based civilization. They are the ones behind the Alliance.		'''Houjou — Alliance of Indian Countries — Tokai ~ [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kant%C5%8D_region Kanto]:''' The long-lived of the Houjou have an automaton-based civilization. They are the ones behind the Alliance.

	'''Uesugi - Sviet Rus - [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hokuriku_region Hokuriku]:''' The Sakra<ref>An epithet of Indra, god of thunder. This implies that “Raitei-san“ controls lightning too.</ref>Raitei-san does a good job in ruling this land with fear.		'''Uesugi - Sviet Rus - [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Hokuriku_region Hokuriku]:''' The Sakra<ref>An epithet of Indra, god of thunder. This implies that “Raitei-san“ controls lightning too.</ref> Raitei-san does a good job in ruling this land with fear.

	'''Aki — K.P.A Italia — [http://ja.wikipedia.org/wiki/%E7%80%AC%E6%88%B8%E5%86%85%E5%9C%B0%E6%96%B9 Setouchi]:''' Alliances of cities led by the head of the Tsirhc Catholics, the Pope.		'''Aki — K.P.A Italia — [http://ja.wikipedia.org/wiki/%E7%80%AC%E6%88%B8%E5%86%85%E5%9C%B0%E6%96%B9 Setouchi]:''' Alliances of cities led by the head of the Tsirhc Catholics, the Pope.
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	Toori: “Sis! Sis! Teach us about… uhh, what was it called? Mu-Muchachi’s A…Aninstrative…Invasions! Ah, that last part sounds erotic!”<ref>In ~~japanese~~, Toori was using the alternative readings of each kanji here. <span xml:lang="ja">武(mu), 蔵(kura), の(no), 行(kou), 政(masa), 区(ku), 分(fun). The right reading for 武蔵の行政区分</span> is Musashi no Gyousei Kubun.</ref>		Toori: “Sis! Sis! Teach us about… uhh, what was it called? Mu-Muchachi’s A…Aninstrative…Invasions! Ah, that last part sounds erotic!” <ref>In Japanese, Toori was using the alternative readings of each kanji here. <span xml:lang="ja">武(mu), 蔵(kura), の(no), 行(kou), 政(masa), 区(ku), 分(fun). The right reading for 武蔵の行政区分</span> is Musashi no Gyousei Kubun.</ref>

	Kimi: “Fufufu, my foolish brother, your super forced joke is simply wonderful. Musashi’s Administrative Divisions, then?”		Kimi: “Fufufu, my foolish brother, your super forced joke is simply wonderful. Musashi’s Administrative Divisions, then?”

Muton: Combining and shifting edits.

2015-02-11T04:21:03Z

Combining and shifting edits.

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Txtracer: English [UK] -> English [US], mostly

2014-12-08T01:24:12Z

English [UK] -> English [US], mostly

Txtracer: hairy subjects

2014-12-07T06:40:28Z

hairy subjects

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	''Especially when we got to the foundation of Roman Empire; that famous line Julius Caesar spoke to Brutus during his assassination, “[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Et_tu,_Brute%3F You again, Brutus?]<ref group="1C">Note that history was being repeated here, thus Caesar used the word “again“.</ref>, was very memorable. The assassination of key figures leads to their protection through ‘retirement’, and I explained that concept very thoroughly.''		''Especially when we got to the foundation of Roman Empire; that famous line Julius Caesar spoke to Brutus during his assassination, “[http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Et_tu,_Brute%3F You again, Brutus?]<ref group="1C">Note that history was being repeated here, thus Caesar used the word “again“.</ref>, was very memorable. The assassination of key figures leads to their protection through ‘retirement’, and I explained that concept very thoroughly.''

	''Third years have to choose their ~~path of advancement~~, so it was pretty bad...''		''Third years have to choose their future career paths, so it was a pretty bad mistake...''

	''This is my third year as a teacher. I had taught the first and second years, so this is my first time teaching third years.''		''This is my third year as a teacher. I had taught the first and second years, so this is my first time teaching third years.''

	''Will it be alright? The lives of my students really depend on this.''		''Will it be alright? The future lives of my students really depend on this.''

	“...”		“...”
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	However, this group of students did not make up even half the class. The rest of them had either blonde or brown hair, and there were also students with red and white hair.		However, this group of students did not make up even half the class. The rest of them had either blonde or brown hair, and there were also students with red and white hair.

	...There are also a lot of people that don’t have any hair or who, in other words, don’t meet the prerequisites at all.		''...There are also a lot of people that don’t have any hair or who, in other words, don’t meet the prerequisites to be described as having "hair" at all.

	The majority of half-dragons and devils have scales and shells instead of skin, so they don’t have hair. The majority of slimes and spirits are the same. Conversely, half-beasts have hair all over their bodies, in tortoise-shell patterns or stripes, long and short. The varieties are rich.		The majority of half-dragons and devils have scales and shells instead of skin, so they don’t have hair. The majority of slimes and spirits are the same. Conversely, half-beasts have hair all over their bodies; some in tortoise-shell patterns or stripes, some long and some short. The varieties are rich.

	''When I look at them, a slight anxiety wells up in my heart.''		''When I look at them, a slight anxiety wells up in my heart.''

Txtracer: the anime uses 'review' which makes more sense than 'opinion' in a classroom setting...the original translation 'presentation' is also probably OK

2014-12-07T06:24:50Z

the anime uses 'review' which makes more sense than 'opinion' in a classroom setting...the original translation 'presentation' is also probably OK

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	If the punishment you announced was heavy, then your grades would go up every time you could answer.		If the punishment you announced was heavy, then your grades would go up every time you could answer.

	In addition, a special characteristic of Oriotorai’s class was the ~~‘opinion’~~.		In addition, a special characteristic of Oriotorai’s class was the ‘review’.

	“Alrighty then; the Far East history for today is going to be about the ‘Harmonic Unification War’, the circumstances leading to the Divine States’ provisional occupation.”		“Alrighty then; the Far East history for today is going to be about the ‘Harmonic Unification War’, the circumstances leading to the Divine States’ provisional occupation.”
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	Oriotorai was sitting in a chair beside the teacher’s desk.		Oriotorai was sitting in a chair beside the teacher’s desk.

	“Suzu~ It’s fine if you just talk about what you know, so please give us your ~~opinion~~.”		“Suzu~ It’s fine if you just talk about what you know, so please give us your review.”

	“Ah? Eh?...Sensei, ah, um, y-yes. T-The Harmonic Unification War?”		“Ah? Eh?...Sensei, ah, um, y-yes. T-The Harmonic Unification War?”
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	Suzu shrunk back, a soft exclamation on her lips. Seeing this, Oriotorai waved her hand lightly.		Suzu shrunk back, a soft exclamation on her lips. Seeing this, Oriotorai waved her hand lightly.

	“Well, it’s fine, you were more than able to make up for it in your explanation after. And there’s no punishment when you fail in the ~~‘opinion’~~. But...there was an idiot that said he’d get punched in your stead, right?”		“Well, it’s fine, you were more than able to make up for it in your explanation after. And there’s no punishment when you fail in the ‘review’. But...there was an idiot that said he’d get punched in your stead, right?”

	Oriotorai picked up the notebook of the attendance record that was lying on top of the teacher’s table. She checked its contents.		Oriotorai picked up the notebook of the attendance record that was lying on top of the teacher’s table. She checked its contents.

Txtracer at 06:19, 7 December 2014

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	While speaking, she started to write on the blackboard.		While speaking, she started to write on the blackboard.

	“As regards to the recreation of history, Testament was given the same status as the principal scripture of the Former Earth Age. However, because gods truly existed in the age when humanity ascended, to the humans all Christian religions lost their status. Therefore in history creation, the Christian religions do not worship God...”		“As regards to the recreation of history, the Testament was given the same status as the principal scripture of the Former Earth Age. However, because gods truly existed in the age when humanity ascended, to the humans who had returned all Christian religions lost their status. Therefore in history creation, the Christian religions do not worship God...”

	She wrote.		She wrote.
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	**'''Protestant:''' M.H.R.R. Favours the entire Testament. Subdued but very good at commerce.		**'''Protestant:''' M.H.R.R. Favours the entire Testament. Subdued but very good at commerce.
	**'''Orthodoxia:''' Sviet Rus. Favours holy paintings. Russian interpretation of Catholicism.		**'''Orthodoxia:''' Sviet Rus. Favours holy paintings. Russian interpretation of Catholicism.
	**'''Anglican Church:''' Mainly England. Divorce is legal. Officially ~~a protestant~~ but inclines towards Catholic.		**'''Anglican Church:''' Mainly England. Divorce is legal. Officially Protestant but inclines towards Catholic.


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	*'''No-Testament'''		*'''Non-Testament'''
	**'''Dunhi<ref group="1C">Hinduism.</ref>:''' India. The cycle of life and death. Curry.		**'''Dunhi<ref group="1C">Hinduism.</ref>:''' India. The cycle of life and death. Curry.
	**'''Oat<ref group="1C">Taoism.</ref>:''' China. Full of sages. Ramen.		**'''Oat<ref group="1C">Taoism.</ref>:''' China. Full of sages. Ramen.

Txtracer: many small fixes; one reorganization for clarity

2014-12-07T05:49:37Z

many small fixes; one reorganization for clarity

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Strike Forcer at 18:48, 17 April 2014

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	While speaking, she started to write on the blackboard.		While speaking, she started to write on the blackboard.

	“As regards to the recreation of history, Testament was given the same status as the principal scripture of the Former Earth Age. However, because gods truly existed in the age when humanity ascended to the humans, all Christian ~~churches~~ lost their status. Therefore in history creation, the Christian ~~churches~~ do not worship God...”		“As regards to the recreation of history, Testament was given the same status as the principal scripture of the Former Earth Age. However, because gods truly existed in the age when humanity ascended to the humans, all Christian religions lost their status. Therefore in history creation, the Christian religions do not worship God...”

	She wrote.		She wrote.
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	“The majority of Testamental religions outside of the Far East are just the backwards reading of the names of their counterparts of the Former Earth Age. This connotes the fact that they are truly different from their counterparts in the Former Earth Age, but the origin stems from the people who had moved to the Altered Space “The Harmonic World”. They read the name backwards because they took the meaning of its inverse as a blessing, that they would one day be able to leave this different world, like they had in the past.		“The majority of Testamental religions outside of the Far East are just the backwards reading of the names of their counterparts of the Former Earth Age. This connotes the fact that they are truly different from their counterparts in the Former Earth Age, but the origin stems from the people who had moved to the Altered Space “The Harmonic World”. They read the name backwards because they took the meaning of its inverse as a blessing, that they would one day be able to leave this different world, like they had in the past.

	The Testament-worshipping ~~Tsirch~~ denomination and its variant, the Mlasi domination, kept the backwards reading even after leaving the Harmonic Divine States to avoid the confusion that would result from a change. The current principal Testament ~~churches~~ are...”		The Testament-worshipping Tsirhc denomination and its variant, the Mlasi domination, kept the backwards reading even after leaving the Harmonic Divine States to avoid the confusion that would result from a change. The current principal Testament religions are...”

71.252.208.164: Tenses?

2014-04-17T04:35:18Z

Tenses?

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	''Third years have to choose their path of advancement, so it was pretty bad...''		''Third years have to choose their path of advancement, so it was pretty bad...''

	''This ~~was~~ my third year as a teacher. I had taught the first and second years, so this ~~was~~ my first time teaching ~~the~~ third ~~year~~.''		''This is my third year as a teacher. I had taught the first and second years, so this is my first time teaching third years.''

	''Will it be alright? The lives of my students really depend on this.''		''Will it be alright? The lives of my students really depend on this.''

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	She rapped the blackboard and circled the word ‘Testament’ twice to ~~emphasise~~ it.		She rapped the blackboard and circled the word ‘Testament’ twice to emphasize it.

	“People currently believe that if we follow the same history as humanity in the past, we will be able to reach the heavens again. They created the Seven Compositions with the Old Testament, which records history Before Christ; and the New Testament, which records the history of Anno Domini.”		“People currently believe that if we follow the same history as humanity in the past, we will be able to reach the heavens again. They created the Seven Compositions with the Old Testament, which records history Before Christ; and the New Testament, which records the history of Anno Domini.”
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	‘Inescapable,’ she began to say.		‘Inescapable,’ she began to say.

	“I-I-Ines...escaping me over and over...~~Goddamnit~~, God failed when he made a character like me!”		“I-I-Ines...escaping me over and over...Goddammit, God failed when he made a character like me!”

	“S-Sanyou-sensei! Don’t get so agitated by reality!!”		“S-Sanyou-sensei! Don’t get so agitated by reality!!”
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	“...This is how things have turned out. In religions like Shinto where multiple gods are necessary, they responded to the new knowledge by shifting the gods’ domains from the gods in the ascension age.		“...This is how things have turned out. In religions like Shinto where multiple gods are necessary, they responded to the new knowledge by shifting the gods’ domains from the gods in the ascension age.

	Because of the fact that gods exist and the belief in the Testament, religious ~~organisations~~ and groups are known as Testamental religions or Testamental conventions; and believers are called Musicians... In the Far East, Shinto is more accurately described as the Shinto faith, and shrines are Shinto conventions. Consequently, people who are able to use its power are Shinto Musicians.”		Because of the fact that gods exist and the belief in the Testament, religious organizations and groups are known as Testamental religions or Testamental conventions; and believers are called Musicians... In the Far East, Shinto is more accurately described as the Shinto faith, and shrines are Shinto conventions. Consequently, people who are able to use its power are Shinto Musicians.”

	This was not all.		This was not all.
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	*'''Pro-Testament. Tsirhc branches:'''		*'''Pro-Testament. Tsirhc branches:'''
	**'''Sion:''' Primarily demons. They ~~favour~~ the Old Testament. Nomadic race.		**'''Sion:''' Primarily demons. They favor the Old Testament. Nomadic race.
	**'''Catholic:''' Mainly K.P.A Italia, Tres España, and Hexagone Française. Worships saints.		**'''Catholic:''' Mainly K.P.A Italia, Tres España, and Hexagone Française. Worships saints.
	**'''Protestant:''' M.H.R.R. ~~Favours~~ the entire Testament. Subdued but very good at commerce.		**'''Protestant:''' M.H.R.R. Favors the entire Testament. Subdued but very good at commerce.
	**'''Orthodoxia:''' Sviet Rus. ~~Favours~~ holy paintings. Russian interpretation of Catholicism.		**'''Orthodoxia:''' Sviet Rus. Favors holy paintings. Russian interpretation of Catholicism.
	**'''Anglican Church:''' Mainly England. Divorce is legal. Officially Protestant but inclines towards Catholic.		**'''Anglican Church:''' Mainly England. Divorce is legal. Officially Protestant but inclines towards Catholic.

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	Looking at the class from the back of the classroom, she understood the differences between each one.		Looking at the class from the back of the classroom, she understood the differences between each one.

	The ones born in the Far East and Asia had mainly black hair. There were occasionally people who had dyed their hair, but their base ~~colour~~ was black.		The ones born in the Far East and Asia had mainly black hair. There were occasionally people who had dyed their hair, but their base color was black.

	However, this group of students did not make up even half the class. The rest of them had either blonde or brown hair, and there were also students with red and white hair.		However, this group of students did not make up even half the class. The rest of them had either blonde or brown hair, and there were also students with red and white hair.
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	'''3b:If they can answer, they can gain points corresponding to the punishment that was announced.'''		'''3b:If they can answer, they can gain points corresponding to the punishment that was announced.'''

	Furthermore, each person announces his own punishment at the beginning of each month. The actual contents of the punishment when it needs to be put into practice are, with the exception of the guilty party, discussed by the class and the severity adjusted. As such, ~~favours~~ and connections are important to have beforehand. If they chose a light punishment, it was possible that the conference would increase the weight of the punishment by ten times just for amusement’s sake; so none of them could let their guard down.		Furthermore, each person announces his own punishment at the beginning of each month. The actual contents of the punishment when it needs to be put into practice are, with the exception of the guilty party, discussed by the class and the severity adjusted. As such, favors and connections are important to have beforehand. If they chose a light punishment, it was possible that the conference would increase the weight of the punishment by ten times just for amusement’s sake; so none of them could let their guard down.

	If the punishment you announced was heavy, then your grades would go up every time you could answer.		If the punishment you announced was heavy, then your grades would go up every time you could answer.
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	“A-According to w-what I know...um, in the past the world was divided into the Divine States in reality’s world and t-the Harmonic Divine States w-which had been copied over to Altered Space. T-This was done by controlling the Ley L-Lines. The people of the Divine States lived in the Divine States in reality’s world while the people of the other countries lived in the Harmonic Divine States of the different world. They got along p-pretty well, I think; um, is that fine?”		“A-According to w-what I know...um, in the past the world was divided into the Divine States in reality’s world and t-the Harmonic Divine States w-which had been copied over to Altered Space. T-This was done by controlling the Ley L-Lines. The people of the Divine States lived in the Divine States in reality’s world while the people of the other countries lived in the Harmonic Divine States of the different world. They got along p-pretty well, I think; um, is that fine?”

	“Yeah, you’re fine. To ~~summarise~~, they recreated the descriptions within the Testament in reality and the other world; all the while thinking of a countermeasure to the harsh environment outside the safe Divine States.”		“Yeah, you’re fine. To summarize, they recreated the descriptions within the Testament in reality and the other world; all the while thinking of a countermeasure to the harsh environment outside the safe Divine States.”

	Everyone nodded after Oriotorai spoke. There were some voices that were saying, ‘You were great!’		Everyone nodded after Oriotorai spoke. There were some voices that were saying, ‘You were great!’
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	“I’m pretty sure that that’s what being a teacher’s about,” the class muttered. Despite this, Toori did not show a single sign of caring. He examined the guide, holding it up such that the sunlight passed through it.		“I’m pretty sure that that’s what being a teacher’s about,” the class muttered. Despite this, Toori did not show a single sign of caring. He examined the guide, holding it up such that the sunlight passed through it.

	~~“Goddamnit~~, I can’t go down the committee president route even if I look through the guide! Also, I can’t change the name of the protagonist in this game! I entered in Tenzou’s name for my first playthrough, thinking that I’d get a bad end!”		“Goddammit, I can’t go down the committee president route even if I look through the guide! Also, I can’t change the name of the protagonist in this game! I entered in Tenzou’s name for my first playthrough, thinking that I’d get a bad end!”

	“Why did you choose me, Toori-dono!? I am in charge of blonde girls with big boobs!”		“Why did you choose me, Toori-dono!? I am in charge of blonde girls with big boobs!”
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	“Is that so?”		“Is that so?”

	Having been asked this by Asama, whose twin-~~coloured~~ eyes were opened wide, Oriotorai shrugged and nodded.		Having been asked this by Asama, whose twin-colored eyes were opened wide, Oriotorai shrugged and nodded.

	“I mean, the Seven Mysteries are a part of every Academy, aren’t they? Judging from the rate of Phenomena now, the teachers are worrying that such things might even happen here.”		“I mean, the Seven Mysteries are a part of every Academy, aren’t they? Judging from the rate of Phenomena now, the teachers are worrying that such things might even happen here.”
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	“Strip! Strip! Strip!”		“Strip! Strip! Strip!”

	Sanyou heard these voices from the ~~neighbouring~~ classroom. After a small pause, she also heard cheers of praise.		Sanyou heard these voices from the neighboring classroom. After a small pause, she also heard cheers of praise.

	...Eh? Does that mean someone stripped!? Is that really alright!? Like, isn’t that like child #@*$!?		...Eh? Does that mean someone stripped!? Is that really alright!? Like, isn’t that like child #@*$!?
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	“He’s the emperor’s child after all... There’s no way I’d do anything strange.”		“He’s the emperor’s child after all... There’s no way I’d do anything strange.”

	After he finished speaking voices could be heard from Plum Class, the ~~neighbouring~~ classroom.		After he finished speaking voices could be heard from Plum Class, the neighboring classroom.

	“Sensei! Azuma’s arrived!! And so has the king!!”		“Sensei! Azuma’s arrived!! And so has the king!!”