Noskillatall: grammar , typos etc

2012-04-03T01:01:28Z

grammar , typos etc

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	After that, I sank into deep slumber once again, while Ayaka walked quietly out of the room.		After that, I sank into deep slumber once again, while Ayaka walked quietly out of the room.

	If so, the dream of the ~~rooptop……~~		If so, the dream of the rooftop……

	I really wasn’t sure. And can such a thing happen anyways? I couldn’t have spoken out loud what I said in my dream, while I can’t prove that Ayaka did say anything as well.		I really wasn’t sure. And can such a thing happen anyways? I couldn’t have spoken out loud what I said in my dream, while I can’t prove that Ayaka did say anything as well.
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	I parked my bike carefully when I reached the ramen shop, and I spaced out in front of the portiere for quite some time. Though I didn’t have much expectations, I immediately found out that Ayaka was not in the shop. There was only one silhouette left at the other side of the portiere— Min-san.		I parked my bike carefully when I reached the ramen shop, and I spaced out in front of the portiere for quite some time. Though I didn’t have much expectations, I immediately found out that Ayaka was not in the shop. There was only one silhouette left at the other side of the portiere— Min-san.

	I really wasn’t in the ~~mod~~ to open the door and walk in, so I just walked around to the back alley. There wasn’t anyone at the kitchen backdoor.		I really wasn’t in the mood to open the door and walk in, so I just walked around to the back alley. There wasn’t anyone at the kitchen backdoor.

	Everyone was probably looking around for Ayaka today as well. I sat alone on the second step of the back stairs, taking out my phone to check for messages. Of course, I didn’t receive Ayaka’s message, while there were a lot of messages from the gang members who helped to search for Ayaka instead. When I realized that there was no progress after I finished reading all of the messages, I heaved a long sigh.		Everyone was probably looking around for Ayaka today as well. I sat alone on the second step of the back stairs, taking out my phone to check for messages. Of course, I didn’t receive Ayaka’s message, while there were a lot of messages from the gang members who helped to search for Ayaka instead. When I realized that there was no progress after I finished reading all of the messages, I heaved a long sigh.
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	“You’re very strong! Though you might not know it yet, I know.”		“You’re very strong! Though you might not know it yet, I know.”

	“If you’re talking about the matter that I’m ~~not~~ known as one of the Four Heavenly Kings because I defeated Tetsu-senpai, then please don’t. It feels really idiotic.”		“If you’re talking about the matter that I’m now known as one of the Four Heavenly Kings because I defeated Tetsu-senpai, then please don’t. It feels really idiotic.”

	“I’m not talking about that. Think about it yourself……”		“I’m not talking about that. Think about it yourself……”
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	“Why? Why do you care so much about Ayaka?”		“Why? Why do you care so much about Ayaka?”

	“I’m the one who should be questioning you why you’re asking me so many questions! Of course it’s because I’m worried of her! Because Ayaka is my……!”		“I’m the one who should be questioning you why you’re asking me so many questions! Of course it’s because I’m worried about her! Because Ayaka is my……!”

	“Your……?”		“Your……?”
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	Was he really murdered?		Was he really murdered?

	“From a certain perspective, he was. At least, Hayano Tomohiko understood that there is a possibility of such an interpretation, so that’s how the first changes in the case were caused. If not, the truth of this case is actually quite simple, and should have been revealed four years ago. Because of the overlapping thoughts of many people, the truth was hidden. As for me, I am going to expose the buried words of the deceased under the sunlight right now. Hayano Tomohiko, and also Minagawa Kengo— there are two people in total who should hear their words. One of them is you— Hayano Kaoruko.”		“From a certain perspective, he was. At least, Hayano Tomohiko understood that there was a possibility of such an interpretation, so that’s how the first changes in the case were caused. If not, the truth of this case is actually quite simple, and should have been revealed four years ago. Because of the overlapping thoughts of many people, the truth was hidden. As for me, I am going to expose the buried words of the deceased under the sunlight right now. Hayano Tomohiko, and also Minagawa Kengo— there are two people in total who should hear their words. One of them is you— Hayano Kaoruko.”

	I wonder if she understands what Alice is talking about.		I wonder if she understands what Alice is talking about.
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	And this gap was coincidentally located opposite to the greenhouse backdoor.		And this gap was coincidentally located opposite to the greenhouse backdoor.

	I am very familiar to this secret path.		I am very familiar with this secret path.

	That’s because everything started from here. The poppy flowers that became the raw material of Angel Fix, and Ayaka who cultivated them unknowingly. Ayaka’s brother, Toshi, smuggled out the raw material from this path.		That’s because everything started from here. The poppy flowers that became the raw material of Angel Fix, and Ayaka who cultivated them unknowingly. Ayaka’s brother, Toshi, smuggled out the raw material from this path.
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	“What…… is this? Why is there a path like this? But then, so what?”		“What…… is this? Why is there a path like this? But then, so what?”

	Kaoruko-senpai said in contempt. That’s right as well, senpai doesn’t know anything. This is just a whole lot of empty words. That’s because the only people who ~~knows~~ of this secret route ~~was~~ the organization manufacturing Angel Fix, the NEET Detective Squad who went after them and Hirasaka-gumi. Even the police ~~doesn’t~~ know about it.		Kaoruko-senpai said in contempt. That’s right as well, senpai doesn’t know anything. This is just a whole lot of empty words. That’s because the only people who know of this secret route are the organization manufacturing Angel Fix, the NEET Detective Squad who went after them and Hirasaka-gumi. Even the police don’t know about it.

	“Actually, there’s another person who knew about this.” Alice answered my mumblings. “…… The person who created this path.”		“Actually, there’s another person who knew about this.” Alice answered my mumblings. “…… The person who created this path.”
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	I fixed my gaze on the metal door at the other side of the wall once again.		I fixed my gaze on the metal door at the other side of the wall once again.

	“As long as that object is in the greenhouse, there is a chance that it would be found out. But moving such a large item out of the school is too hard, so that’s why he made a hole on the wall. I’m guessing that this part of the wall was already nearing collapse, because it would always be rammed on every time the backdoor is opened. But enlarging the hole so much that even a blackboard could pass through was probably done single-handedly by Minagawa Kengo.”		“As long as that object is in the greenhouse, there is a chance that it would be found out. But moving such a large item out of the school is too hard, so that’s why he made a hole in the wall. I’m guessing that this part of the wall was already nearing collapse, because it would always be rammed on every time the backdoor is opened. But enlarging the hole so much that even a blackboard could pass through was probably done single-handedly by Minagawa Kengo.”

	~~Beause—~~ nobody knew about what he did. A lonely expression suddenly appeared on Alice’s face.		Because— nobody knew about what he did. A lonely expression suddenly appeared on Alice’s face.

	The lost words of the dead that nobody could find, Alice found them. Using Tetsu-senpai’s words, piecing together the numerous fragments.		The lost words of the dead that nobody could find, Alice found them. Using Tetsu-senpai’s words, piecing together the numerous fragments.
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	Senpai asked weakly.		Senpai asked weakly.

	“That is correct, everything was ~~did~~ for this matter. If the greenhouse is torn down, everything that Minagawa Kengo did will be exposed under the sunlight. A large object like a blackboard cannot be handled by one person alone, so he could only move it to the deserted boundary of the cemetery, letting it rot naturally. If the secret pathway is found out, someone might just reach this place, so that’s why he founded the Gardening Club. Besides that— there’s probably another symbolic reason that they must protect the greenhouse for.”		“That is correct, everything was done for this matter. If the greenhouse is torn down, everything that Minagawa Kengo did will be exposed under the sunlight. A large object like a blackboard cannot be handled by one person alone, so he could only move it to the deserted boundary of the cemetery, letting it rot naturally. If the secret pathway is found out, someone might just reach this place, so that’s why he founded the Gardening Club. Besides that— there’s probably another symbolic reason that they must protect the greenhouse for.”

	Alice looked at the top of the triangular greenhouse roof, a sharp expression on her face.		Alice looked at the top of the triangular greenhouse roof, a sharp expression on her face.
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	''The blackboard collapsed—''		''The blackboard collapsed—''

	“That’s enough, ~~narumi~~.”		“That’s enough, Narumi.”

	I felt a hand gripping my arm tightly, slender fingers in a black glove sinking into my skin.		I felt a hand gripping my arm tightly, slender fingers in a black glove sinking into my skin.
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	“E- Erm……! S- Sorry! Th……”		“E- Erm……! S- Sorry! Th……”

	The voice separated by a door felt unusually agitated. It’s Ayaka! So she’s okay>		The voice separated by a door felt unusually agitated. It’s Ayaka! So she’s okay?

	I truly thought that she disappeared again.		I truly thought that she disappeared again.
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	“But why? What in the world happened!?”		“But why? What in the world happened!?”

	“I’m not too sure about this as well. Why don’t you ask her yourself? ~~It’s~~ so hard to convince her to go back today, what a relief. She even planned to ask me to bathe every day, what a pain.”		“I’m not too sure about this as well. Why don’t you ask her yourself? It was so hard to convince her to go back today, what a relief. She even planned to ask me to bathe every day, what a pain.”

	“So…… Which means……” A voice came from the other side of the metal door. “It’s a bit…… Please wait until I’m mentally prepared fir……!”		“So…… Which means……” A voice came from the other side of the metal door. “It’s a bit…… Please wait until I’m mentally prepared fir……!”

Ff7 freak at 04:58, 6 February 2012

2012-02-06T04:58:51Z

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	“So what does that mean?”		“So what does that mean?”

	“Who do you think found the blackboard first, and confirmed if it was covered in ~~pain~~? Also, who hung the electric lamp onto the thermostat beforehand? Of course it couldn’t be me, Major or Hiro.”		“Who do you think found the blackboard first, and confirmed if it was covered in paint? Also, who hung the electric lamp onto the thermostat beforehand? Of course it couldn’t be me, Major or Hiro.”

	“Ah……”		“Ah……”
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	Alice frantically hammered my back.		Alice frantically hammered my back.

	~~“really~~, though you wore a sorrowful expression like you were abandoned by the whole world an hour before this, but you have the energy to make fun of me right now. How dumbfounding.”		“Really, though you wore a sorrowful expression like you were abandoned by the whole world an hour before this, but you have the energy to make fun of me right now. How dumbfounding.”

	That’s because—		That’s because—

Zephyrus at 04:15, 6 February 2012

2012-02-06T04:15:50Z

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	I really wasn’t in the mod to open the door and walk in, so I just walked around to the back alley. There wasn’t anyone at the kitchen backdoor.		I really wasn’t in the mod to open the door and walk in, so I just walked around to the back alley. There wasn’t anyone at the kitchen backdoor.

	Everyone was probably looking around for Ayaka today as well. I sat alone on the second step of the back stairs, taking out my phone to check for messages. Of course, I didn’t receive Ayaka’s message, while there were a lot of messages from the gang members who helped to search for Ayaka instead. When I realized that there was no progress after I finished reading all of the messages, I heaved a long sigh.		Everyone was probably looking around for Ayaka today as well. I sat alone on the second step of the back stairs, taking out my phone to check for messages. Of course, I didn’t receive Ayaka’s message, while there were a lot of messages from the gang members who helped to search for Ayaka instead. When I realized that there was no progress after I finished reading all of the messages, I heaved a long sigh.

	Alice sealed herself in her room from that day on, and didn’t let even me inside. To her, Ayaka’s disappearance might be a huge blow to her.		Alice sealed herself in her room from that day on, and didn’t let even me inside. To her, Ayaka’s disappearance might be a huge blow to her.

Zephyrus at 04:09, 6 February 2012

2012-02-06T04:09:33Z

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	And of course, I couldn’t sleep at all.		And of course, I couldn’t sleep at all.

	~~***************~~		<span style="font-size: 300%;"><center>*</center></span>

	Half past five early morning next day.		Half past five early morning next day.

Zephyrus: Chapter 6 complete.

2012-02-06T04:08:26Z

Chapter 6 complete.

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Noskillatall: grammar , typos etc

Ff7 freak at 04:58, 6 February 2012

Zephyrus at 04:15, 6 February 2012

Zephyrus at 04:09, 6 February 2012

Zephyrus: Chapter 6 complete.