Madan no Ou to Vanadis:Volume 08 Prologue - Revision history

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Scr.zero at 03:26, 17 February 2014

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	In other words, it was something different that saved him from the night sea.		In other words, it was something different that saved him from the night sea.

	Tigre picked up the bow that he put at his feet. Though it was an heirloom, Tigre learned just about a year ago that it possessed a mysterious power. That power often saved the youth from predicaments.		Tigre picked up the bow that he put at his feet. Though it was a heirloom, Tigre learned just about a year ago that it possessed a mysterious power. That power often saved the youth from predicaments.

	As he looked around at his surroundings, a light could be seen ten steps ahead. Tigre was walking up to there while staggering. He did not yet have power in his legs.		As he looked around at his surroundings, a light could be seen ten steps ahead. Tigre was walking up to there while staggering. He did not yet have power in his legs.

Extraone: /* Prologue */

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	He recovered his consciousness. At the same time, he thought that it was cold, the root of his teeth shivered with a chattering sound.		He recovered his consciousness. At the same time, he thought that it was cold, so much so that the root of his teeth shivered with a chattering sound.

	His body shook, too. Rounding his back, as he tightly hugged himself, he first had to endure the cold. He even thought that his body was frozen.		His body shook, too. Rounding his back, as he tightly hugged himself, he first had to endure the cold. He even thought that his body was frozen.

	~~It was when the time of~~ about a count of 1000 passed ~~that~~ his mood ~~had settled~~ down. It was much better compared to the coldness of the night sea, and lukewarm air probably gave him warmth. The youth finally raised his body.<!-- たっぷり一千を数えられthe るぐらいの時間が過ぎたころ。-->		Only after about a count of 1000 had passed did his mood settle down. It was much better compared to the coldness of the night sea, and lukewarm air probably gave him warmth. The youth finally raised his body.<!-- たっぷり一千を数えられthe るぐらいの時間が過ぎたころ。-->

	His view was pitch-black and nothing could be seen. He put the bow, which he was tightly grasping, nearby and took off his cold clothes, ~~which were~~ dripping wet with the sea water. He also took off his trousers and underwear and ~~squeezed~~ them. Since he did not have enough strength now, he could not ~~squeeze~~ them as ~~well~~ as he wanted.		His view was pitch-black and nothing could be seen. He put the bow, which he was tightly grasping, nearby and took off his cold clothes, dripping wet with the sea water. He also took off his trousers and underwear and wringed them. Since he did not have enough strength now, he could not wring them as dry as he had wanted.

	As he felt pain to his head and touched it, there was something which appeared to be a wound. Though there was no slippery sensation, his hair was also wet. He sniffed the smell of the hand which touched the wound, and judged that blood seemed to have stopped.		As he felt pain to his head and touched it, there was something which appeared to be a wound. Though there was no slippery sensation, his hair was also wet. He sniffed the smell of the hand which touched the wound, and judged that blood seemed to have stopped.

Npeace at 06:06, 1 February 2014

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	He recovered his consciousness. At the same time, he thought that it was cold~~. The~~ root of his teeth shivered with a chattering sound.		He recovered his consciousness. At the same time, he thought that it was cold, the root of his teeth shivered with a chattering sound.

	His body shook, too. Rounding his back, as he tightly hugged himself, he first had to endure the cold. He even thought that his body was frozen.		His body shook, too. Rounding his back, as he tightly hugged himself, he first had to endure the cold. He even thought that his body was frozen.
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	When he became aware of what that light was, Tigre unintentionally frowned.		When he became aware of what that light was, Tigre unintentionally frowned.

	It was surrounded by a wall on three sides there, and several things like short stones pillars respectively extended from the floor and ceiling. All the stones pillars reached only to Tigre’s knees and the surface ~~were~~ rugged as if ~~shaving~~ a rock.<!-- 石柱はどれもTigreの膝ぐらいまでしかなく、表面は岩を削りだしたかのようにごつごつしていた。-->		It was surrounded by a wall on three sides there, and several things like short stones pillars respectively extended from the floor and ceiling. All the stones pillars reached only to Tigre’s knees and the surface was rugged as if shaved from a rock.<!-- 石柱はどれもTigreの膝ぐらいまでしかなく、表面は岩を削りだしたかのようにごつごつしていた。-->

	Most of the stones pillars were pitch-black, but several other than that were wrapped in a white light. This was where the light came from.		Most of the stones pillars were pitch-black, but several other than that were wrapped in a white light. This was where the light came from.

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	Tigre picked up the bow that he put at his feet. Though it was an heirloom, Tigre learned just about a year ago that it possessed a mysterious power. That power often saved the youth from predicaments.		Tigre picked up the bow that he put at his feet. Though it was an heirloom, Tigre learned just about a year ago that it possessed a mysterious power. That power often saved the youth from predicaments.

	As he looked around at his surroundings, a light could be seen ten steps ahead. Tigre was walking up to there while staggering. He ~~had~~ not yet have power in his legs.		As he looked around at his surroundings, a light could be seen ten steps ahead. Tigre was walking up to there while staggering. He did not yet have power in his legs.

	When he became aware of what that light was, Tigre unintentionally frowned.		When he became aware of what that light was, Tigre unintentionally frowned.
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	It was surrounded by a wall on three sides there, and several things like short stones pillars respectively extended from the floor and ceiling. All the stones pillars reached only to Tigre’s knees and the surface were rugged as if shaving a rock.<!-- 石柱はどれもTigreの膝ぐらいまでしかなく、表面は岩を削りだしたかのようにごつごつしていた。-->		It was surrounded by a wall on three sides there, and several things like short stones pillars respectively extended from the floor and ceiling. All the stones pillars reached only to Tigre’s knees and the surface were rugged as if shaving a rock.<!-- 石柱はどれもTigreの膝ぐらいまでしかなく、表面は岩を削りだしたかのようにごつごつしていた。-->

	Most of the stones pillars were pitch-black, but several other than that were wrapped in a white light. This was where the light came.		Most of the stones pillars were pitch-black, but several other than that were wrapped in a white light. This was where the light came from.

	『It has been a while.』		『It has been a while.』

Tasear: added a comma

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added a comma

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	His body shook, too. Rounding his back, as he tightly hugged himself, he first had to endure the cold. He even thought that his body was frozen.		His body shook, too. Rounding his back, as he tightly hugged himself, he first had to endure the cold. He even thought that his body was frozen.

	It was when the time of about a count of 1000 passed that his mood had settled down. It was much better compared to the coldness of the night sea, and lukewarm air probably gave him warmth. The youth finally raised his body.<!-- ~~たっぷり一千を数えられるぐらいの時間が過ぎたころ。~~-->		It was when the time of about a count of 1000 passed that his mood had settled down. It was much better compared to the coldness of the night sea, and lukewarm air probably gave him warmth. The youth finally raised his body.<!-- たっぷり一千を数えられthe るぐらいの時間が過ぎたころ。-->

	His view was pitch-black and nothing could be seen. He put the bow, which he was tightly grasping, nearby and took off his cold clothes, which were dripping wet with the sea water. He also took off his trousers and underwear and squeezed them. Since he did not have enough strength now, he could not squeeze them as well as he wanted.		His view was pitch-black and nothing could be seen. He put the bow, which he was tightly grasping, nearby and took off his cold clothes, which were dripping wet with the sea water. He also took off his trousers and underwear and squeezed them. Since he did not have enough strength now, he could not squeeze them as well as he wanted.
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	The peaceful scenery of the hometown, where he was born and raised, and the smile of the silver- haired girl flashed simultaneously across his mind. Both were irreplaceable things for the youth. And then, the face of important people floated in his head.		The peaceful scenery of the hometown, where he was born and raised, and the smile of the silver- haired girl flashed simultaneously across his mind. Both were irreplaceable things for the youth. And then, the face of important people floated in his head.

	『Oh yeah~~. The~~ direction facing the sea will probably be good.』		『Oh yeah, the direction facing the sea will probably be good.』

	Was it because she saved him when he fell into the sea? After a little thought, Tigre expressed his wish.		Was it because she saved him when he fell into the sea? After a little thought, Tigre expressed his wish.

Tasear: The comma was needed there. Also in that same setence "was" is conjugated incorrectly, It should actually be "were".

2014-01-31T08:19:03Z

The comma was needed there. Also in that same setence "was" is conjugated incorrectly, It should actually be "were".

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	When he became aware of what that light was, Tigre unintentionally frowned.		When he became aware of what that light was, Tigre unintentionally frowned.

	It was surrounded by a wall on three sides there, and several things like short stones pillars respectively extended from the floor and ceiling. All the stones pillars reached only to Tigre’s knees, and the surface ~~was~~ rugged as if shaving a rock.<!-- 石柱はどれもTigreの膝ぐらいまでしかなく、表面は岩を削りだしたかのようにごつごつしていた。-->		It was surrounded by a wall on three sides there, and several things like short stones pillars respectively extended from the floor and ceiling. All the stones pillars reached only to Tigre’s knees and the surface were rugged as if shaving a rock.<!-- 石柱はどれもTigreの膝ぐらいまでしかなく、表面は岩を削りだしたかのようにごつごつしていた。-->

	Most of the stones pillars were pitch-black, but several other than that were wrapped in a white light. This was where the light came.		Most of the stones pillars were pitch-black, but several other than that were wrapped in a white light. This was where the light came.

Winseb at 02:30, 31 January 2014

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	『In the night sea?』		『In the night sea?』

	With fear and coldness brought back in his mind, Tigre body trembled on its own. He would die this time for sure. However, he could not afford to be in a place like this forever. He entreated.		With fear and coldness brought back in his mind, Tigre's body trembled on its own. He would die this time for sure. However, he could not afford to be in a place like this forever. He entreated.

	“Can’t you do it other than by sea?”		“Can’t you do it other than by sea?”

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Undo revision 324919 by Dual Blades (talk) The first change makes the sentence a run-on, and the change to LeitMeritz does not follow the name/terminology page.

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	He recovered his consciousness. At the same time, he thought that it was cold ~~the~~ root of his teeth shivered with a chattering sound.		He recovered his consciousness. At the same time, he thought that it was cold. The root of his teeth shivered with a chattering sound.

	His body shook, too. Rounding his back, as he tightly hugged himself, he first had to endure the cold. He even thought that his body was frozen.		His body shook, too. Rounding his back, as he tightly hugged himself, he first had to endure the cold. He even thought that his body was frozen.
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	Tigre was taken aback by the short question. Where did he want to go back to?		Tigre was taken aback by the short question. Where did he want to go back to?

	Alsace? ~~Leit Meritz~~? Brune? Or Zchted?		Alsace? LeitMeritz? Brune? Or Zchted?

	The peaceful scenery of the hometown, where he was born and raised, and the smile of the silver- haired girl flashed simultaneously across his mind. Both were irreplaceable things for the youth. And then, the face of important people floated in his head.		The peaceful scenery of the hometown, where he was born and raised, and the smile of the silver- haired girl flashed simultaneously across his mind. Both were irreplaceable things for the youth. And then, the face of important people floated in his head.

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	He recovered his consciousness. At the same time, he thought that it was cold~~. The~~ root of his teeth shivered with a chattering sound.		He recovered his consciousness. At the same time, he thought that it was cold the root of his teeth shivered with a chattering sound.

	His body shook, too. Rounding his back, as he tightly hugged himself, he first had to endure the cold. He even thought that his body was frozen.		His body shook, too. Rounding his back, as he tightly hugged himself, he first had to endure the cold. He even thought that his body was frozen.
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	Tigre was taken aback by the short question. Where did he want to go back to?		Tigre was taken aback by the short question. Where did he want to go back to?

	Alsace? ~~LeitMeritz~~? Brune? Or Zchted?		Alsace? Leit Meritz? Brune? Or Zchted?

	The peaceful scenery of the hometown, where he was born and raised, and the smile of the silver- haired girl flashed simultaneously across his mind. Both were irreplaceable things for the youth. And then, the face of important people floated in his head.		The peaceful scenery of the hometown, where he was born and raised, and the smile of the silver- haired girl flashed simultaneously across his mind. Both were irreplaceable things for the youth. And then, the face of important people floated in his head.