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OtonashiDiva: little fix

2017-03-22T00:48:22Z

little fix

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	"Ah, it's Se-chan! Se-chan!"		"Ah, it's Se-chan! Se-chan!"

	The ten year olds surrounded Ashino Seiji, and when they called him Se-chan, he smiled. I wonder if ~~they'll~~ call me that too? Se-chan... Senpai. No way, he ~~must have escaped getting~~ hit ~~by him by~~ a ~~hair~~. All the boys surrounded the cart carrying the cakes, like it was a camp fire.		The ten year olds surrounded Ashino Seiji, and when they called him Se-chan, he smiled and replied 'Hey.' I wonder if I should call him that too? Se-chan... Senpai. No way, he would hit me in a second. All the boys surrounded the cart carrying the cakes like it was a camp fire.

	"They're going home after this, right?"		"They're going home after this, right?"

OtonashiDiva at 00:18, 22 March 2017

2017-03-22T00:18:15Z

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	I was lying facing down, turning only my head towards my mother. My arms spread at an angle of 20 degrees, making my head look like the end of a giant arrow. Cianfrocco and Zinter<ref>Name of Yuuri's dogs, they're also the names of the baseball players. Cianfrocco: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Archi_Cianfrocco ; Zinter: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Alan_Zinter</ref> laid comfortably in the space between my arms and body.		I was lying facing down, turning only my head towards my mother. My arms spread at an angle of 20 degrees, making my head look like the end of a giant arrow. Cianfrocco and Zinter<ref>Name of Yuuri's dogs, they're also the names of the baseball players. Cianfrocco: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Archi_Cianfrocco ; Zinter: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Alan_Zinter</ref> laid comfortably in the space between my arms and body.

	"... you have some really long hairs growing from under your armpit"		"... you have some really long hairs growing from under your armpit."

	"It's their fault that I can't get up."		"It's their fault that I can't get up."

OtonashiDiva: some proofreading

2017-03-22T00:14:03Z

some proofreading

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RedGlassesGirl at 20:25, 25 November 2015

2015-11-25T20:25:43Z

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	It was right before the big summer tournament.		It was right before the big summer tournament.

	~~'''''~~" The height of your elbow is slowly dropping. If you continue to throw, you'll elbow will start hurting before January"~~''''~~		"The height of your elbow is slowly dropping. If you continue to throw, you'll elbow will start hurting before January"

	Right at that time, Ashino had had some X-rays taken at the hospital, so he found out that his right shoulder's joint was slightly loose. That's why he kept lowering his elbow. Since the director didn't tell him what to do, I advised him to see a specialist, to let him know how he could pitch safely.		Right at that time, Ashino had had some X-rays taken at the hospital, so he found out that his right shoulder's joint was slightly loose. That's why he kept lowering his elbow. Since the director didn't tell him what to do, I advised him to see a specialist, to let him know how he could pitch safely.

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2015-10-13T14:50:38Z

Created page with "===Change<ref>Oh, how I struggled with this title! The original in katakana is 'CONVERT'. But CONVERT is used in the sentences as 'change', so I used change. But this is not a..."

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