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	While I was trying to escape reality, Maxine took a large and swaying step forward in silence and with emotionless eyes. This makes me want to take a step of equal distance backwards. This is too horrible. I don't know if the one being humiliated is the one apologizing or the one being apologized to. If it weren't for Saralegui, I would have rejected something so embarrassing from the start.		While I was trying to escape reality, Maxine took a large and swaying step forward in silence and with emotionless eyes. This makes me want to take a step of equal distance backwards. This is too horrible. I don't know if the one being humiliated is the one apologizing or the one being apologized to. If it weren't for Saralegui, I would have rejected something so embarrassing from the start.

	Crop Pony with his special beard, pales even further and approaches me with staggering steps. I could feel the other three ~~demons~~ aside from me tensing up in preparation of a trick. However, the human man filled with despair falls to his knees and bows his head so deeply his forehead touches the floor.		Crop Pony with his special beard, pales even further and approaches me with staggering steps. I could feel the other three mazoku aside from me tensing up in preparation of a trick. However, the human man filled with despair falls to his knees and bows his head so deeply his forehead touches the floor.

	Wolfram hurriedly says in a small voice, "... What are you doing, Yuuri?"		Wolfram hurriedly says in a small voice, "... What are you doing, Yuuri?"

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	I actually called him without even an honorific. Although my pretense at calmness is still holding, the truth is I’m a nervous wreck inside.		I actually called him without even an honorific. Although my pretense at calmness is still holding, the truth is I’m a nervous wreck inside.

	But no wonder. The enemy is a natural born royal, receiving kingly training since childhood, a boy who’d grown up watching the back of his father and previous king for seventeen years, a man noble amongst nobles. In comparison, even though I’m praised and raised up by the people who surround me, i stumbled onto the throne through a lottery. I have absolutely never been taught how to stand above others.		But no wonder. The enemy is a natural born royal, receiving kingly training since childhood, a boy who’d grown up watching the back of his father and previous king for seventeen years, a man noble amongst nobles. In comparison, even though I’m praised and raised up by the people who surround me, I stumbled onto the throne through a lottery. I have absolutely never been taught how to stand above others.

	Though I have met other people of high stature in the past, like Mr. Hyscliff and Belar the Second, back then I wasn’t using my true identity as Shibuya Yuuri to face them and was instead hiding under false pretenses. This is my first time going leader to leader, king to king one-on-one like this. This time what I say might be taken as the opinion of all the mazoku. If I only act self-deprecatingly, then all the people of Shin Makoku will be laughed at.		Though I have met other people of high stature in the past, like Mr. Hyscliff and Belar the Second, back then I wasn’t using my true identity as Shibuya Yuuri to face them and was instead hiding under false pretenses. This is my first time going leader to leader, king to king one-on-one like this. This time what I say might be taken as the opinion of all the mazoku. If I only act self-deprecatingly, then all the people of Shin Makoku will be laughed at.

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	Aside from the soldiers standing guard at the entrance and Saralegui’s personal guard, there are a few more of his men in the room, and one of them is a familiar face.		Aside from the soldiers standing guard at the entrance and Saralegui’s personal guard, there are a few more of his men in the room, and one of them is a familiar face.

	He has Shou Shimaron’s standard hairstyle and a textbook beard, plus a drawn, wan face and thin single-lidded eyes. Maybe it’s due to his appearance, but rather than saying he gives off an overall impression of strength, it’d be better to say he’s like a sharp weapon. And last of all, there’s that memorable army uniform of yellow and ~~blow crossed,~~ as well as that cheek with even more scars than last time.		He has Shou Shimaron’s standard hairstyle and a textbook beard, plus a drawn, wan face and thin single-lidded eyes. Maybe it’s due to his appearance, but rather than saying he gives off an overall impression of strength, it’d be better to say he’s like a sharp weapon. And last of all, there’s that memorable army uniform of yellow and blue as well as that cheek with even more scars than last time.

	This person is the king of Shou Shimaron’s loyal lapdog, Nigel ~~Weiss~~ Maxine.		This person is the king of Shou Shimaron’s loyal lapdog, Nigel Weisz Maxine.

	~~His~~ is the ~~real~~ Cropped Ponytail, but ~~I’ve already given him a~~ cute ~~nickname~~.		He is the original Cropped Ponytail, but like I would ever shorten that into something cute.

	“Ah, it’s you! Crop Pony!”		“Ah, it’s you! Crop Pony!”

	Crap, I ~~actually~~ said it ~~out loud…~~		Crap, I said it again…

	Maxine is the man who made Caloria hell on earth. If it ~~wasn’t~~ for this man ~~using~~ a ~~royal decree as~~ the ~~starting gun, ridiculously performing experiments~~, that tragedy in the south ~~east~~ area of the continent ~~wouldn’t~~ have ~~happened—As in, using~~ us, on the ~~north bank of the Kalongba river~~ as guinea pigs, and ~~activating~~ the most evil of all weapons, ~~‘Ends~~ of the ~~Earth’~~.		Maxine is the man who made Caloria hell on earth. If it wasn't for this man running a careless experiment by the order of the king, that tragedy in the south west area of the continent wouldn't have happened. He had used us, who had been travelling north on the Longerbal River, as guinea pigs and opened the most evil of all weapons, ‘the End of the Land.'

	~~And not using a~~ wrong key from goodness knows where~~, either~~.		Using the wrong key he got from goodness knows where.

	~~…It~~ was that certain someone’s left arm.		… It was that certain someone’s left arm.

	Speaking of experiments, I wonder what those experiment partners are doing now? Is Gwendal being played around like a toy by Miss Anissina? Maybe he’s even letting loose blood-curdling screams now? I try to think about the happy life I led in Covenant Castle, but seeing the worst man in Shou Shimaron, I can’t relax no matter what.		Speaking of experiments, I wonder what those experiment partners are doing now? Is Gwendal being played around with like a toy by Miss Anissina? Maybe he’s even letting loose blood-curdling screams now? I try to think about the happy life I led in Covenant Castle, but seeing the worst man in Shou Shimaron, I can’t relax no matter what.

	~~At this moment,~~ Josak ~~taps~~ the arm ~~I’d~~ twisted behind my back ~~lightly,~~ and Wolfram is frowning slightly to. The only one who ~~doesn’t~~ recognize Crop Pony is Günter. But ~~today’d~~ Nigel ~~Weiss~~ Will-Never-Die Maxine ~~isn’t~~ the same as usual~~, he’s~~ blinking non-stop~~, and that’s just too~~ unnatural. Those thin lips, usually curved into a cruel smile, are now ~~twitching oddly, doesn’t it feel like~~ the ~~sense of defeat of someone who’s failed so many times he~~ was ~~scolded, and even branded~~ as ~~‘useless’~~ within his country?		Josak lightly places his fingertips on the the arm I'd twisted behind my back and Wolfram is frowning slightly too. The only one who doesn't recognize Crop Pony is Günter. But today's Nigel Weisz Will-Never-Die Maxine isn't the same as usual. He's blinking non-stop. It's unnatural. Those thin lips which are usually curved into a cruel smile are now twisted in a troubled way.

			I wonder if he's been blamed for the repeated failures and was labelled as incompetent within his country.

	“Eh, you know Maxine?”		“Eh, you know Maxine?”
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	“It’s this scum who turned Caloria into hell on earth.”		“It’s this scum who turned Caloria into hell on earth.”

	But the one who ordered Maxine isn’t anyone else. It’s the king of Shou Shimaron, Saralegui. Ad that same man is right before me now, even smiling gently.		But the one who ordered Maxine isn’t anyone else. It’s the king of Shou Shimaron, Saralegui. And that same man is right before me now, even smiling gently.

	“Speaking of that, Caloria ~~even accepted~~ Shin Makoku’s help during that crisis~~. I’m~~ really grateful for your ~~side’s~~ aid and assistance~~, so here I’m representing Caloria’s appointed ruler~~ in ~~presenting to you my gratitude~~. After all, back then that was still my territory.		“Speaking of that, Caloria received Shin Makoku’s help during that crisis, didn't they? I'm really grateful for your free aid and assistance. Let me thank you in place of a representative of Caloria. After all, back then that was still my territory."

	~~I really don’t understand~~ the ~~true~~ meaning behind ~~those~~ words. ~~Did~~ he ~~purposely take the extra effort to say that? Or~~ is he sincerely grateful? ~~But when I see~~ his innocent smile, ~~I naturally~~ accept his words.		It's difficult to find the hidden meaning behind words. Is he saying we did something unwanted or is he sincerely grateful? Judging by his innocent smile, it seems fine to accept his words at face value.

	“Technically, ~~it’s what~~ we were supposed to do ~~anyway~~. Although we ~~could not lend a hand in time~~, ~~but~~ we were ~~willing to offer financial assistance, only to be~~ rejected by Flynn ~~Gilbert~~. Of course, we still have manpower and machinery standing by ~~there to this day, so we can give our help at any given time~~. Now ~~we’re just waiting for~~ Flynn to soften ~~up…~~ Oh, yeah, ~~she’s already~~ the leader of an entire country~~, seems like~~ I ~~shouldn’t~~ simply call her Flynn anymore.”		“Technically, it was something we were supposed to do immediately. Although we belatedly offered financial assistance, we were rejected by Flynn Gilbit. Of course she will accept us someday, so we still have manpower and machinery standing by. Now if only Flynn would soften up... Oh yeah, she's the leader of an entire country now. I can't simply call her Flynn anymore.”

	He shrugs his shoulders like a child who was scolded, making him look even younger than his actual age.		He shrugs his shoulders like a child who was scolded, making him look even younger than his actual age.
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	“I’m sorry!”		“I’m sorry!”

	Saralegui suddenly puts both palms onto the desk~~. And~~ lowers his pale golden head.		Saralegui suddenly puts both palms onto the desk and lowers his pale golden head.

	“I’m really very sorry. ~~Although everyone knew~~ that a terrible calamity ~~might~~ strike ~~once we open~~ the box~~, especially~~ using an uncertain key, making the power even more impossible to control. We ~~even knew~~ that ~~by doing this,~~ we could never the desired result~~, but still…”~~		“I’m really very sorry. Everyone knows that a terrible calamity will strike if the box is opened. Especially using an uncertain key, making the power even more impossible to control. We should have known that we could never attain the desired result!”

	Without raising his head, he ~~continue~~ yelling, leaving no space for anyone to interject.		Without raising his head, he continued yelling, leaving no space for anyone to interject.

	“Ever since we got the box by some unique chance, I’ve told my men time and again, to guard the box carefully, and utterly. Its overwhelming power is indeed very attractive, but I understand clearly that we humans have no way to control a power that defies the laws of this world, surpasses the human intelligence. But I still… could not believe in the power of a legendary box. I thought that man could overthrow the gods, and that victory in war comes not from some box, but from the power of humanity. I thought that the people and all my men understood me, and agreed with me, were willing to follow me…”		“Ever since we got the box by some unique chance, I’ve told my men time and again, to guard the box carefully, and utterly. Its overwhelming power is indeed very attractive, but I understand clearly that we humans have no way to control a power that defies the laws of this world, surpasses the human intelligence. But I still… could not believe in the power of a legendary box. I thought that man could overthrow the gods, and that victory in war comes not from some box, but from the power of humanity. I thought that the people and all my men understood me, and agreed with me, were willing to follow me…”
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	I’m completely subdued by Saralegui’s presence. Forget fighting back, I can’t even open my mouth to agree.		I’m completely subdued by Saralegui’s presence. Forget fighting back, I can’t even open my mouth to agree.

	“But a few of the more superstitious ~~soldiers…~~ could not fight the temptation of that power. ~~hey~~ were attracted by the holy power of the ~~‘Ends~~ of the ~~Earth’,~~ and brazenly took action without considering the ~~consequences…~~ No, they did it for the country, and for the people of Shou Shimaron. ~~But still, whenever~~ I think ~~about~~ the ~~terrifying outcome~~, I ~~know I can’t just turn a blind eye to their crime~~. ~~Even~~ though ~~it’s~~ the ~~sudden~~ action of a few soldiers, ~~but I had noticed long ago yet failed~~ to ~~stop them, so I should take up all the responsibility, the responsibility that I, who had failed~~ my ~~duties~~ as king~~, must carry~~. I ~~was only watching the country’s~~ land and ~~borders, but I failed to grasp~~ my ~~minister’s~~ hearts. This happened because I(informal) ... I (formal) ~~could~~ not ~~reach them~~. As a result, the ~~violent~~ soldiers ~~ended up doing such a dreadful thing… Don’t~~ you think so, Maxine?”		“But a few of the more superstitious soldiers... could not fight the temptation of that power. They were attracted by the holy power of the 'the End of the Wind' and brazenly took action without considering the consequences... No, they did it for the country and for the people of Shou Shimaron. When I think of it as the result of that, I can't blame them. Also, even though it was the reckless action of a few soldiers, not realizing it and stopping them is my crime. Not being able to fulfil my duty as king is my fault. I failed at keeping an eye on all of my country's land and at grasping all of my minister's hearts. This happened because I(informal) ... I (formal) did not lead as a king. As a result, I did something dreadful to the soldiers... Don't you think so, Maxine?”

	The Crop Pony standing by the window side, his shoulders are shaking really violently, and he’s biting his lip without a word.		The Crop Pony standing by the window side, his shoulders are shaking really violently, and he’s biting his lip without a word.

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	“H-h-h-h-h-how did things come to this? Don’t tell me Your—Your Majesty revealed your identity of your own accord?”		“H-h-h-h-h-how did things come to this? Don’t tell me Your—Your Majesty revealed your identity of your own accord?”
	“Of course not, I’m not that stupid yet. He just saw through me. Logically in the foggy condition of the bath, he shouldn’t have been able to tell the color of my eyes. Josak immediately covered my head with a towel too. But we still got found out easily. Maybe I have some other mazoku quality besides my hair and eyes?”
			“Of course not, I’m not that stupid yet. He just saw through me. Logically in the foggy condition of the bath, he shouldn’t have been able to tell the color of my eyes. Josak immediately covered my head with a towel too. But we still got found out easily. Maybe I have some other mazoku quality besides my hair and eyes?”

	“It must be… Your Majesty’s beautiful appearance and noble aura, and the perfect parts that the lower class people can never even hope of having…”		“It must be… Your Majesty’s beautiful appearance and noble aura, and the perfect parts that the lower class people can never even hope of having…”

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	Because by the time I finally manage to change into my clothes, Saralegui’s messenger is already standing by the door.		Because by the time I finally manage to change into my clothes, Saralegui’s messenger is already standing by the door.

	He passes on a declaration, “His Majesty wishes to dine with ~~milords”~~.		He passes on a declaration, “His Majesty wishes to dine with milords.”

	What will come has come, we’re going to have breakfast with the king of Shou Shimaron. Dining with a hotshot isn’t something you can deal with just be saying, “It’s really delicious~” or “Thanks for your hospitality—”. That’s to say, this isn’t just a simple gathering and meal, it’s actually an invitation to a summit of leaders with toast in front of us.		What will come has come, we’re going to have breakfast with the king of Shou Shimaron. Dining with a hotshot isn’t something you can deal with just by saying, “It’s really delicious~” or “Thanks for your hospitality—”. That’s to say, this isn’t just a simple gathering and meal, it’s actually an invitation to a summit of leaders with toast in front of us.

	We were meant to have a few more days before reaching the castle in the capital Saralegui, and it ~~ever~~ occurred to us that we’d face our challenge on short notice in this hotel, so we didn’t have time for any mental preparations whatsoever.		We were meant to have a few more days before reaching the castle in the capital Saralegui, and it never occurred to us that we’d face our challenge on short notice in this hotel, so we didn’t have time for any mental preparations whatsoever.

	Besides, the dueling card now has changed from Günter versus Saralegui, to me versus Saralegui. The saddest part is Günter, who was so ecstatic to be appointed “Special Ambassador of Shin Makoku with Full Authority under the Orders of the Maou”, has been abruptly pulled down from the main character’s seat. Just thinking about that, causes his cold sweat and tears to flow nonstop.		Besides, the dueling card now has changed from Günter versus Saralegui, to me versus Saralegui. The saddest part is Günter, who was so ecstatic to be appointed “Special Ambassador of Shin Makoku with Full Authority under the Orders of the Maou”, has been abruptly pulled down from the main character’s seat. Just thinking about that, causes his cold sweat and tears to flow nonstop.
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	Because this is my first ever high level summit, my words come out sounding strangled.		Because this is my first ever high level summit, my words come out sounding strangled.

	Meeting him again in a bright area, he’s still the pretty boy I imagined him to be. Just like at the bath, Saralegui is wearing pale colored glasses. Since they’re tiny things meant to protect his eyes, they don’t hurt his beauty at all. Overall, he still has a young girl’s slender figure, and fair smooth skin, so these aren’t illusions by the mixed magic after all.		Meeting him again in a bright area, he’s still the pretty boy I imagined him to be. Just like in the bath, Saralegui is wearing pale colored glasses. Since they’re tiny things meant to protect his eyes, they don’t hurt his beauty at all. Overall, he still has a young girl’s slender figure, and fair smooth skin, so these aren’t illusions by the mixed magic after all.

	The first thing that attracts my attention is his hair color. Silky gold hair cascades down his shoulders like a waterfall, sparkling under the morning sunlight. Different from Wolfram and Madam Cheri’s HONEY BLONDE hair, his is a pale and gentle color as though one drop of golden dye was added to white. Although it’s easy to categorize them together, each has its own merits when you look closely.		The first thing that attracts my attention is his hair color. Silky gold hair cascades down his shoulders like a waterfall, sparkling under the morning sunlight. Different from Wolfram and Madam Cheri’s HONEY BLONDE hair, his is a pale and gentle color as though one drop of golden dye was added to white. Although it’s easy to categorize them together, each has its own merits when you look closely.
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	Wolfram kicked the back of my foot. Calm down, me. Quick, remember when you were chosen as the substitute oath-declarer at the Summer Games, and how you practiced every day for it. Although since I was only the substitute, when it came to the actual day all I could do was sit and listen.		Wolfram kicked the back of my foot. Calm down, me. Quick, remember when you were chosen as the substitute oath-declarer at the Summer Games, and how you practiced every day for it. Although since I was only the substitute, when it came to the actual day all I could do was sit and listen.

	I have to be calm and ~~carefully~~ when conversing with this boy king, and try to find out what kind of character he is. Or perhaps to let Wolfram and Günter get a better picture, I should try and glean as much information as I can. Like whether he’s a good guy or a bad guy, or if he’s a person we can trust.		I have to be calm and careful when conversing with this boy king, and try to find out what kind of character he is. Or perhaps to let Wolfram and Günter get a better picture, I should try and glean as much information as I can. Like whether he’s a good guy or a bad guy, or if he’s a person we can trust.

	“… Likewise. I’m sincerely very happy we can have breakfast together, Your Majesty Saralegui.”		“… Likewise. I’m sincerely very happy we can have breakfast together, Your Majesty Saralegui.”
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	“But a few of the more superstitious soldiers... could not fight the temptation of that power. They were attracted by the holy power of the 'the End of the Wind' and brazenly took action without considering the consequences... No, they did it for the country and for the people of Shou Shimaron. When I think of it as the result of that, I can't blame them. Also, even though it was the reckless action of a few soldiers, not realizing it and stopping them is my crime. Not being able to fulfil my duty as king is my fault. I failed at keeping an eye on all of my country's land and at grasping all of my minister's hearts. This happened because I(informal) ... I (formal) did not lead as a king. As a result, I did something dreadful to the soldiers... Don't you think so, Maxine?”		“But a few of the more superstitious soldiers... could not fight the temptation of that power. They were attracted by the holy power of the 'the End of the Wind' and brazenly took action without considering the consequences... No, they did it for the country and for the people of Shou Shimaron. When I think of it as the result of that, I can't blame them. Also, even though it was the reckless action of a few soldiers, not realizing it and stopping them is my crime. Not being able to fulfil my duty as king is my fault. I failed at keeping an eye on all of my country's land and at grasping all of my minister's hearts. This happened because I(informal) ... I (formal) did not lead as a king. As a result, I did something dreadful to the soldiers... Don't you think so, Maxine?”

	The Crop Pony standing by the window side~~, his~~ shoulders are shaking really violently, and he’s biting his lip without a word.		The Crop Pony is standing by the window side. His shoulders are shaking really violently and he’s biting his lip without a word.

	“Why aren’t you replying?”		“Why aren’t you replying?”
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	But then why exactly am I, as someone who won the throne through a lottery, cheering on the boy king of a country we have tense relations with? Is it like Miss Anissina said and Shin Makoku's intel department is for decoration purposes only?		But then why exactly am I, as someone who won the throne through a lottery, cheering on the boy king of a country we have tense relations with? Is it like Miss Anissina said and Shin Makoku's intel department is for decoration purposes only?

	“Thank you. You really a nice guy, Yuuri.”		“Thank you. You really are a nice guy, Yuuri.”

	“Mmph!”		“Mmph!”

	Saralegui raises his head to look at me, the eyes behind those ~~lens~~ already moist.		Saralegui raises his head to look at me, the eyes behind those lenses already moist.

	“Mmm! Nah… I’m really not as good as you think!”		“Mmm! Nah… I’m really not as good as you think!”