Zuruumi: A few more grammar fixes

2024-08-21T17:24:07Z

A few more grammar fixes

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	Reiri’s eyes trickled out tears.		Reiri’s eyes trickled out tears.

	Kizuna reached out his ~~hand~~ at their honey pots that were overflowing with sexual fluid.		Kizuna reached out his hands at their honey pots that were overflowing with sexual fluid.

	“Hyaann!”		“Hyaann!”
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	“Guh! AHAAAAAAAAaNNNAAAAAAN!”		“Guh! AHAAAAAAAAaNNNAAAAAAN!”

	He was advancing through the caves of soft flesh that were feverishly slippery. Reiri’s one was also tight, but Nayuta’s one was so narrow that it made him ~~wondered~~ if his finger really could enter.		He was advancing through the caves of soft flesh that were feverishly slippery. Reiri’s one was also tight, but Nayuta’s one was so narrow that it made him wonder if his finger really could enter.

	“Guuh!”		“Guuh!”

	Nayuta showed a pained expression and her body ~~bended~~.		Nayuta showed a pained expression and her body bent.

	“……Kaa-san?”		“……Kaa-san?”
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	“Ufufu……this is because I was reborn. Since my body became like this, receiving this kind of stimulation is the first time. But――”		“Ufufu……this is because I was reborn. Since my body became like this, receiving this kind of stimulation is the first time. But――”

	Nayuta embraced Kizuna’s neck. Her disarrayed hair was clinging on her sweaty cheek. Her white skin and blushing cheek looked really lewd.		Nayuta embraced Kizuna’s neck. Her disarrayed hair was clinging to her sweaty cheek. Her white skin and blushing cheek looked really lewd.

	“Mother whose first is stolen by the son is also not too bad.”		“Mother whose first is stolen by the son is also not too bad.”
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	Nayuta answered with a red face.		Nayuta answered with a red face.

	“By materializing this Corruption Armament, the Core will also get improved. And then the improved Core will be installed by a person possessing the ability as a machine god. In order to realize that install, we will use the supply of magic power of our kind, an existence that is close to me and Kizuna. These three factors are necessary.”		“By materializing this Corruption Armament, the Core will also get improved. And then the improved Core will be installed by a person possessing the ability of a machine god. In order to realize that install, we will use the supply of magic power of our kind, an existence that is close to me and Kizuna. These three factors are necessary.”

	“That is……”		“That is……”

	Kizuna looked alternately at Nayuta and Reiri’s ~~face~~.		Kizuna looked alternately at Nayuta and Reiri’s faces.

	“That’s right. This is different from common Climax Hybrid. Till the end this is an act for the sake of obtaining Eros’s Corruption Armament and reinstalling the Core. Eros’s Corruption Armament will be a weapon created by Reiri and I, and then Kizuna, by the three of us. And then this is exactly――”		“That’s right. This is different from the common Climax Hybrid. Till the end, this is an act for the sake of obtaining Eros’s Corruption Armament and reinstalling the Core. Eros’s Corruption Armament will be a weapon created by Reiri and I, and then Kizuna, by the three of us. And then this is exactly――”

	Nayuta bent her sweaty body flexibly.		Nayuta bent her sweaty body flexibly.
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	“Shi, shit-! Even I!”		“Shi, shit-! Even I!”

	He once more pushed in his fingertips into the bodies of the two.		He once more pushed his fingertips into the bodies of the two.

	“Kya♥……ahn!”		“Kya♥……ahn!”
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	“Ah, aah♥, a, AAAAAAAAAA♥!”		“Ah, aah♥, a, AAAAAAAAAA♥!”

	Reiri was surely near her limit. Her body warped and convulsed twitchingly. Each time she twitched her large breasts were shaking shiveringly, her sweat became grains of light that scattered around her.		Reiri was surely near her limit. Her body warped and convulsed twitchingly. Each time she twitched her large breasts were shaking shiveringly, and her sweat became grains of light that scattered around her.

	Nayuta shrunk her body and endured the pain. However her stiffness was gradually taken and her body slackened. Her inside that was only stiffness now changed into softness that enveloped Kizuna. And then with a carnal face, she crooked her leg in fretfulness.		Nayuta shrunk her body and endured the pain. However, her stiffness was gradually taken and her body slackened. Her inside that was only stiffness now changed into softness that enveloped Kizuna. And then with a carnal face, she crooked her leg in fretfulness.

	“Au, fuah, ahn, aah♥”		“Au, fuah, ahn, aah♥”
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	“Ne, Nee-chan. I, I too, am no good already!”		“Ne, Nee-chan. I, I too, am no good already!”

	Nayuta ~~slide~~ up her body and peered at Kizuna’s face.		Nayuta slid up her body and peered at Kizuna’s face.

	“Kaa-san……?”		“Kaa-san……?”
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	“NHaa♥ AAAAAAAAA♥♥, KIZUNAaAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA♥♥!!”		“NHaa♥ AAAAAAAAA♥♥, KIZUNAaAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA♥♥!!”

	Reiri welcomed her climax and her body bent backwards. The tips of her ~~breast~~ quavered. Her thighs that closed as if to hold down Kizuna’s hand ~~was~~ convulsing quaveringly. And then from the valley there, hot liquid spurted out like pee.		Reiri welcomed her climax and her body bent backwards. The tips of her breasts quavered. Her thighs that closed as if to hold down Kizuna’s hand were convulsing quaveringly. And then from the valley there, hot liquid spurted out like pee.

	From Kizuna’s thing ~~that was~~ seized by Reiri’s slender fingers, life energy surged out vigorously. Reiri accepted that white splash with her chest.		From Kizuna’s thing seized by Reiri’s slender fingers, life energy surged out vigorously. Reiri accepted that white splash with her chest.

	It awakened Reiri’s climax even more and Reiri drowned inside the waves of climax that repeated many times over. The flying proof of love so hot that it felt like it would scald what it touched drew parabolic arc and rained down on Nayuta’s back too. When she felt that heat on her back, it was at the same time when she drank down the saliva of Kizuna from their entangled tongues.		It awakened Reiri’s climax even more and Reiri drowned inside the waves of climax that repeated many times over. The flying proof of love so hot that it felt like it would scald what it touched drew a parabolic arc and rained down on Nayuta’s back too. When she felt that heat on her back, it was at the same time when she drank down the saliva of Kizuna from their entangled tongues.

	And then, she also welcomed her climax.		And then, she also welcomed her climax.
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	<nowiki>“♥~~~~~~~~~~~♥♥♥♥♥”</nowiki>		<nowiki>“♥~~~~~~~~~~~♥♥♥♥♥”</nowiki>

	The two who were exchanging passionate kiss with their tongues licking each other also gulped down each other’s coquettish voice along with each other’s saliva.		The two who were exchanging a passionate kiss with their tongues licking each other also gulped down each other’s coquettish voice along with each other’s saliva.

	And then radiant light was emitted from the body of the three.		And then radiant light was emitted from the body of the three.
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	The light shining in multicolor.		The light shining in multicolor.

	It filled their field of vision to the limit, brightness that felt like it would swallow even the world.		It filled their field of vision to the limit, a brightness that felt like it would swallow even the world.

	‘――How, beautiful.’		‘――How, beautiful.’

Zuruumi: Grammar fixes

2024-08-21T17:13:30Z

Grammar fixes

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	And then Reiri’s throat gulped. Nayuta made an exaggerated troubled gesture.		And then Reiri’s throat gulped. Nayuta made an exaggerated troubled gesture.

	“Raising up this kind of siblings, as a mother I feel complicated. ~~Did~~ the way I ~~raise~~ you two mistaken I wonder?”		“Raising up this kind of siblings, as a mother I feel complicated. Was the way I raised you two mistaken I wonder?”

	Reiri took off ~~and~~ threw away ~~her jacket~~ and untied her necktie.		Reiri took off her jacket, threw it away, and untied her necktie.

	“I don’t remember being raised up by you.”		“I don’t remember being raised up by you.”

	She pulled down her skirt and there was only her underwear left. She hesitated for a moment, but she immediately circled her hand to her back and unfastened the hook of her bra. Her imprisoned breasts spilled down at once. It shook like jelly, shaking up and down. ~~That~~ large breasts which ~~was~~ far from a Japanese person in average didn’t submit to gravity and pointed up.		She pulled down her skirt and there was only her underwear left. She hesitated for a moment, but she immediately circled her hand to her back and unfastened the hook of her bra. Her imprisoned breasts spilled down at once. It shook like jelly, shaking up and down. Those large breasts which were far from a Japanese person in average didn’t submit to gravity and pointed up.

	And then she put her hand on the panty that wrapped her large ass before pulling it down smoothly, she then slipped it off her toes. The body of his sister that was without a single string covering it made Kizuna’s thing react even further. It twitched in pulsation as if to demand that body. Looking at that motion, Nayuta narrowed her eyes.		And then she put her hand on the panty that wrapped her large ass before pulling it down smoothly, she then slipped it off her toes. The body of his sister that was without a single string covering it made Kizuna’s thing react even further. It twitched in pulsation as if to demand that body. Looking at that motion, Nayuta narrowed her eyes.
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	“My, how greedy, Fine, I will take this side then.”		“My, how greedy, Fine, I will take this side then.”

	She grasped at under that thing, at the two balls wrapped by limp skin.		She grasped under that thing, at the two balls wrapped by limp skin.

	“Uwaa! O, oi! That is……-”		“Uwaa! O, oi! That is……-”

Naiwayo: Edited image's translation (Worlds on grey boxes were misplaced).

2016-07-20T21:33:22Z

Edited image's translation (Worlds on grey boxes were misplaced).

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	:''Transparent cubes: World''		:''Transparent cubes: World''

	:''Right top corner box: ~~Thanatos’s~~ world''		:''Right top corner box: Hokuto’s world''

	:''Right bottom corner box: ~~Odin’s~~ world''		:''Right bottom corner box: Osiris’s world''

	:''Left top corner box: ~~Hokuto’s~~ world''		:''Left top corner box: Thanatos’s world''

	:''Left bottom corner box: ~~Osiris’s~~ world''		:''Left bottom corner box: Odin’s world''

	:''Left white box: Atlantis (AU)''		:''Left white box: Atlantis (AU)''

RS: external edits added

2016-07-12T07:16:57Z

external edits added

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RS: unedited version

2016-07-11T17:43:06Z