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	''But I believe that, right now, this is necessary.''		''But I believe that, right now, this is necessary.''

	When he’d been just a regular boy from a rural village, when he’d been made to kill others as a slave, both the harboured hatred and the intent to kill had been real, but at the same time it was also true that he couldn’t gain victory if he wanted to protect the lives of ~~the~~ each and every enlisted soldier.		When he’d been just a regular boy from a rural village, when he’d been made to kill others as a slave, both the harboured hatred and the intent to kill had been real, but at the same time it was also true that he couldn’t gain victory if he wanted to protect the lives of each and every enlisted soldier.

	Under the fiery sky, like oil in flames, Orba was too shocked ~~too~~ move, his heart burning with that contradiction.		Under the fiery sky, like oil in flames, Orba was too shocked to move, his heart burning with that contradiction.

	“What seems to be troubling you?”		“What seems to be troubling you?”

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	There were tears in the soldier’s eyes as he announced this in a loud voice. This was his earnest hope. At the moment, Ryucown’s followers were nothing more than rebels – no matter how much more they suffered for their country or how pure their intentions were. However, in order to anchor their name for the future, no, in order to change the course of Garbera’s future, he needed to have Princess Vileena.		There were tears in the soldier’s eyes as he announced this in a loud voice. This was his earnest hope. At the moment, Ryucown’s followers were nothing more than rebels – no matter how much more they suffered for their country or how pure their intentions were. However, in order to anchor their name for the future, no, in order to change the course of Garbera’s future, he needed to have Princess Vileena.

	If he was just able to win her over, he could take over the political movement through the Garberan royal lineage. She was highly popular and revered like an idol, allowing him to ~~would~~ gain the nation’s support. Moreover, Ryucown was convinced that the princess had the most strong-hearted spirit among those in the royal family.		If he was just able to win her over, he could take over the political movement through the Garberan royal lineage. She was highly popular and revered like an idol, allowing him to gain the nation’s support. Moreover, Ryucown was convinced that the princess had the most strong-hearted spirit among those in the royal family.

	“She hasn’t been harmed, has she?”		“She hasn’t been harmed, has she?”

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	However, he – a man who stood stock still and carried the colour of the distant flames in his eyes – had no intention to use it in the least. It was there only because his followers had begged him to prepare one at all costs.		However, he – a man who stood stock still and carried the colour of the distant flames in his eyes – had no intention to use it in the least. It was there only because his followers had begged him to prepare one at all costs.

	He was clad in armour and armed with a sword slung on his back. He was tall, and although he was young, he had the kind of grandeur that didn’t allow others close. He didn’t move an ~~much~~ and stood there with a hand to his trimmed beard, looking much like one of the heroes in the paintings that decorated castle corridors.		He was clad in armour and armed with a sword slung on his back. He was tall, and although he was young, he had the kind of grandeur that didn’t allow others close. He didn’t move an inch and stood there with a hand to his trimmed beard, looking much like one of the heroes in the paintings that decorated castle corridors.

	He was originally a knight from the Kingdom of Garbera, the general of the Second Air Fleet, Ryucown. Once longing for national fame, the man who’d received hatred and disdain from Mephius and was the object of fear stood staring at the fires that showed the feats of his strategy.		He was originally a knight from the Kingdom of Garbera, the general of the Second Air Fleet, Ryucown. Once longing for national fame, the man who’d received hatred and disdain from Mephius and was the object of fear stood staring at the fires that showed the feats of his strategy.

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	“But a civil war will ruin the country instead. Why would you let such a useless battle drag on?”		“But a civil war will ruin the country instead. Why would you let such a useless battle drag on?”
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	“I’m not letting it drag on. Actually, the opening of this battle will end in a major victory for us. And our victory will have a huge, lasting impact. Garbera will fear more rebels rising up against them in their country, and it will become impossible to move a huge force. In order to protect their honour, Mephius too will have no choice but to take to the field. Once they realise that they can’t easily win, they will make it their reason to immediately pull back their forces. And when that happens, only one last thorough strike will be needed to finish things off.”		“I’m not letting it drag on. Actually, the opening of this battle will end in a major victory for us. And our victory will have a huge, lasting impact. Garbera will fear more rebels rising up against them in their country, and it will become impossible to move a huge force. In order to protect their honour, Mephius too will have no choice but to take to the field. Once they realise that they can’t easily win, they will make it their reason to immediately pull back their forces. And when that happens, only one last thorough strike will be needed to finish things off.”
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	Further outside, twice, thrice – they could hear the sound of cannon fire.		Further outside, twice, thrice – they could hear the sound of cannon fire.



	=== Part 3 ===		=== Part 3 ===

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	“Orba, are you done with the mask?”		“Orba, are you done with the mask?”
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	“Ahh,” a strained smile appeared on his face due to Ran’s direct words. “How are the dragons?”		“Ahh,” a strained smile appeared on his face due to Ran’s direct words. “How are the dragons?”
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	“What do you mean?”		“What do you mean?”

	~~“It~~ means that ~~it’s likely~~ Ryucown ~~would knowingly~~ go after ~~Mephius~~.” ~~<!-- unsure -->~~		““It means that Ryucown is more than aware that Mephius will go after him.”

	“So you’ve set up some sort of trap? But even so, why do you handle it all so indifferently. What if they fear, and merely tremble and watch, not doing a thing?”		“So you’ve set up some sort of trap? But even so, why do you handle it all so indifferently. What if they fear, and merely tremble and watch, not doing a thing?”
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	“Those damn Garberans.”		“Those damn Garberans.”

	He slammed his fist down on the ~~operating console~~. Those backstabbing Garberans and the charge of Ryucown’s army could of course not be unrelated. The thought that it might even be possible that they had planned all of this from the start flashed across the minds of the Mephian leaders. They could have tried to lure the Mephian army away from the very beginning, and staged this entire scenario of Ryucown’s army rebelling.		He slammed his fist down on the controls. Those backstabbing Garberans and the charge of Ryucown’s army could of course not be unrelated. The thought that it might even be possible that they had planned all of this from the start flashed across the minds of the Mephian leaders. They could have tried to lure the Mephian army away from the very beginning, and staged this entire scenario of Ryucown’s army rebelling.

	“Reassign the battle formations right away. Start attacking Ryucown’s army up front and the Garberan forces at our flank!”		“Reassign the battle formations right away. Start attacking Ryucown’s army up front and the Garberan forces at our flank!”
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	“Go, go!!”		“Go, go!!”

	“Make way! ~~If you don’t,~~ you’ll get trampled!”		“Make way! Or else you’ll get trampled!”

	Those dragons must have been lying low ever since sunset, biding their time in the grove on the other side of the river, and Ryucown’s forces and even Rogue himself hadn’t seen that coming.		Those dragons must have been lying low ever since sunset, biding their time in the grove on the other side of the river, and Ryucown’s forces and even Rogue himself hadn’t seen that coming.

	It appeared to be a trick the one girl named Hou Ran had taught them that made this possible. ~~Could one~~ person make such a difference ~~on the battlefield or not?~~		It appeared to be a trick the one girl named Hou Ran had taught them that made this possible. It was hard to believe a person on the battlefield could make such a difference as she did.

	Having fallen into such a sudden pincer attack, Ryucown’s troops fell into chaos.		Having fallen into such a sudden pincer attack, Ryucown’s troops fell into chaos.
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	“Both make little difference,” Vileena loudly confessed with all the vigour of she’d been holding in. “It makes little difference to our citizens. Just how many thousands of people will become the victim of your single-minded plans, thoughts, and pride?”		“Both make little difference,” Vileena loudly confessed with all the vigour of she’d been holding in. “It makes little difference to our citizens. Just how many thousands of people will become the victim of your single-minded plans, thoughts, and pride?”

	Vileena didn’t even realize those were the exact same words Prince Gil had used against her before. Ryucown, on the other hand, ~~raised his chest~~.		Vileena didn’t even realize those were the exact same words Prince Gil had used against her before. Ryucown, on the other hand, showed no quarter.

	“Isn’t your royal family raised from a pile of corpses? Let’s end this childish argument. Having the true pride of Garbera, I took action only because I want to make a nation of true knights. Look at the world, princess. This is a conflict that will end a government of treachery, oppression and double-crossing. It’s only pure-minded knights who can truly save this world.”		“Isn’t your royal family raised from a pile of corpses? Let’s end this childish argument. Having the true pride of Garbera, I took action only because I want to make a nation of true knights. Look at the world, princess. This is a conflict that will end a government of treachery, oppression and double-crossing. It’s only pure-minded knights who can truly save this world.”
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	“What do you mean?”		“What do you mean?”

	“What I mean is that this body has already exchanged its wedding vows.”		“What I mean is that this body has already exchanged its wedding vows.”<ref>What she means is that she already has sexual intercourse. The term for 'exchange wedding vows' (夫婦の契り) can also mean 'have sex as a husband and wife'.</ref>

	It was a lie, and obviously Vileena couldn’t help but feel repulsed inside. However, she didn’t hesitate in the least. She wanted to completely crush this Ryucown, who seemed to be utterly possessed by something.		It was a lie, and obviously Vileena couldn’t help but feel repulsed inside. However, she didn’t hesitate in the least. She wanted to completely crush this Ryucown, who seemed to be utterly possessed by something.

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	== Chapter 6: Battle of Zaim Fortress ==		== Chapter 6: Battle of Zaim Fortress ==
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	An iron mask, imitating the face of a tiger, glittered dully under the lights of the room.		An iron mask, imitating the face of a tiger, glittered dully under the lights of the room.



	=== Part 2 ===		=== Part 2 ===

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	The ship, which was still just starting to move, was being aimed at with bombs that fell like rain. Twice, thrice – and Simon’s legs continued to shake.		The ship, which was still just starting to move, was being aimed at with bombs that fell like rain. Twice, thrice – and Simon’s legs continued to shake.



			Meanwhile, at Zaim Fortress.

			There was a hall in the upper part of the fort. Surrounded outside by balconies on all four sides, one could see the fires of war raging over the soldiers. Behind the balcony looking out over the area, was a single airship was stored away out of sight. It was meant to evacuate the commander if, by any chance, the fortress would happen to fall.

			However, he – a man who stood stock still and carried the colour of the distant flames in his eyes – had no intention to use it in the least. It was there only because his followers had begged him to prepare one at all costs.

			He was clad in armour and armed with a sword slung at his back. He was tall, and although he was young he had the kind of grandeur that didn’t allow others close. He didn’t move an much and stood there with a hand to his trimmed beard, looking much like one of the heroes in the paintings that decorated castle corridors.

			He was originally a knight from the Kingdom of Garbera, the general of the Second Air Fleet, Ryucown. Once longing for national fame, the man who’d received hatred and disdain from Mephius and was the object of fear stood staring at the fires that showed the feats of his strategy.

			It was a surprise attack he had made in sync with the Garberan camp. Having slipped agitators into their midst had borne its fruits. According to their last reports, the number of generals and their soldiers that had decided to rebel, no more than a hundred, would start a surprise attack on this moonless night. I would also cause turmoil at the Garberran headquarters, probably convinced that Mephius was surrounded by enemies, and they might not be able to quickly come to Mephius’ aid.

			First you read the lines, then comes the strategy. Before you strike a blow, be sure that you will hit the mark. It could likely be the last move you made.

			Just then,

			“Milord,”

			A soldier turned up in the hall, put his heels together, and bowed. Ryucown still held the position of a military guard, but ever since he lead an army of a thousand followers, they had all started calling him a ‘lord’. In the end, they were all comrades who had ducked under many blades and run through rains of gunfire together.

			There were many people among them who had lost comrades or family member because of Mephius. And, although it was most likely because of Ryucown’s talents, it tightened their bonds like iron.

			“Allow me to congratulate you. The soldiers have returned from Dhum just now.”

			“Oh, is that so?”

			“Yes. Princess Vileena has also been brought along safely.”

			There were tears in the soldier’s eyes as he announced this in a loud voice. This was his earnest hope. At the moment, Ryucown’s followers were nothing more than rebels – no matter how much more they suffered for their country or how pure their intentions were. However, in order to anchor their name for the future, no, in order to change the course of Garbera’s future, he needed to have Princess Vileena.

			If he was just able to win her over, he could take over the political movement through the Garberan royal lineage. She was highly popular and revered to like an idol, allowing him to would gain the nation’s support. Moreover, Ryucown was convinced that the princess had the most strong-hearted spirit among those in the royal family.

			“She hasn’t been harmed, has she?”

			“No.”

			“All right. Bring her in.”

			Soon enough, led by a soldier, Vileena stepped into the hall.

			Her face was as white as paper, but her eyes were at least filled with life as she stared his way.

			His heart was struck by a nostalgic feeling. They had met each other a year ago when they were pledged to engage, but Ryucown was reminded of a time before even that – when Vileena had still been nine years old.

			Coming to her aid when she’d been taken hostage during the rebellion that was caused by Bateaux, Ryucown had slipped into the castle with a scouting party in order to defeat Bateaux. The one who had guided them, had been none other than the princess herself. Although she was still a child, she had proven to be quick-witted, and Ryucown had admired her courageous actions.

			Then, the hero who had taken Bateaux’s head had been invited to kneel before the princess and received a kiss on the cheek.

			It had been about four, five years since then. Naturally, her body had matured all this time. She still hadn’t lost her girlishness yet, but within three years, she would be the beauty that may likely cause trouble not only in Garbera or its surrounding countries, but even in the world across the seas.

			Ryucown gave her a respectful bow.

			“It has been a while, your highness.”

			“General Ryucown. You—”

			Vileena fired the first shot, as if trying to let the vigour in her words mask the hesitation.

			It was as if her heart was in disarray. It looked to him like a small wooden boat with the sails hoisted too high as it rose over tall whitecaps, so that even the helmsman couldn’t predict where it was going.

			About ten minutes before they’d opened hostilities, a man in the guise of a page had suddenly arrived at her private quarters in Dhum and called himself a person ‘from the Garberan camp’. He’d said that a part of Garbera, in concert with Ryucown, had planned to make a surprise attack on Dhum.

			''Princess, I will guide you to Lord Ryucown from here.''

			Vileena had turned pale and foolishly stood up in order to warn the prince.

			''Forgive me.''

			Whether or not he had expected this reaction, the soldier had been quick to respond. Several soldiers who had waited in the back stopped her from making a sound or move, restraining her mouth, arms and legs. While she tried to resist, she slowly felt her consciousness slipping away and figured they’d probably diluted the cloth covering her mouth with a sleeping drug.

			When she came to, she was at Zaim Fortress – the flames were rising up over the soldiers below.

			“You—”

			“I know full well what you want me to do,” Ryucown gently interrupted Vileena’s words.

			The usual vigour wasn’t there in Vileena’s eyes as she stared at him. Here emotions were raging like fire, but for some reason it didn’t come to the outside. Even for her, as had been the case for Ryucown, certain strong emotions were reawakened from over a distance of time.

			One year ago, the two had met when they were pledged to engage. In contrast to the many battles he had faced head-on, he didn’t seem able to look her in the eyes even once, now that he was her fiancé.

			Now, his handsome features had gotten a little thin, and he now wore exhaustion and sorrow on his face, which might have chafed away at his urban refinement, or maybe he’d just gotten an even wilder taste instead. The ash silver armour he wore, had been given to him by the king himself when he’d been bestowed as a full-fledged knight.

			“However, I have to stick to my own beliefs. With all due respect, the people no longer follow the current royal family. I agree that lineage is important, but if we rely only on that, the country will be on the way of decline.”

			“But a civil war will ruin the country instead. Why would you let such a useless battle drag on?”

			“I’m not letting it drag on. Actually, the opening of this battle will end in a major victory for us. And our victory will have a huge, lasting impact. Garbera will fear more rebels rising up against them in their country, and it will become impossible to move a huge force. In order to protect their honour, Mephius too will have no choice but to take to the field. Once they realise that they can’t easily win, they will make it their reason to immediately pull back their forces. And when that happens, only one last thorough strike is needed to finish things off.”

			Outside of the fortress, the battle continued to wage on.

			As the fires of war continued to light up all over the place, defying the darkness of the night, Vileena clenched her tender fists. She did not want to see ''this''. It was exactly because of this that she’d steeled herself and decided to marry into Mephius.

			“I intend to become a martyr to place the foundations for peace,” Ryucown said, showing her his black mantle with red lining. “Please, I want you to entrust that life to me.”

			Further outside, twice, thrice – they could hear the sound of cannon fire.



			=== Part 3 ===

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