Read or Die:Volume1 Prologue - Revision history

112.198.77.196: /* Prologue */

2011-05-06T03:55:35Z

Prologue

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	“Y-yes!”		“Y-yes!”

	Shocked into action, she flung open the front of her coat.		Shocked into action, she flung the front of her coat open. <!-- changed 'she flung open the front of her coat' to 'she flung the front of her coat open' -->

	“?!”		“?!”
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	It was definitely the same paper that he had thrown at her. By all appearances, it was the sort of paper you would find anywhere and where it had stopped the bullet, it looked as if it had been ripped by a cat’s claws. <!-- added 'and' and joined sentence two and three -->		It was definitely the same paper that he had thrown at her. By all appearances, it was the sort of paper you would find anywhere and where it had stopped the bullet, it looked as if it had been ripped by a cat’s claws. <!-- added 'and' and joined sentence two and three -->

	However, before his very eyes that paper had managed to stop the bullet he had just fired.		However, before his very eyes, that paper had managed to stop the bullet he had just fired. <!-- added a comma -->

	“Aaah?!”		“Aaah?!”

Animrbill: Undo revision 89115 by Animrbill (talk) I realized that the third speaker was Woo.

2011-04-04T11:27:44Z

Undo revision 89115 by Animrbill (talk) I realized that the third speaker was Woo.

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	“It’s mine, dammit!”		“It’s mine, dammit!”

	From the woman’s statement to ~~Woo’s~~ and then to ~~the blond’s <!--order -- Woo spoke first. (Animrbill)-->~~was the book’s status revised. As they had no intention of paying, Woo felt no need to hesitate. The finger that pulls the trigger has all the power. The gun’s line of fire shifted to the bridge of the woman’s glasses. <!------------>		From the woman’s statement to the blond’s and then to Woo’s was the book’s status revised. As they had no intention of paying, Woo felt no need to hesitate. The finger that pulls the trigger has all the power. The gun’s line of fire shifted to the bridge of the woman’s glasses. <!------------>

	The woman’s hand shifted to grasp the paper that had struck her chest.		The woman’s hand shifted to grasp the paper that had struck her chest.

Animrbill: /* Prologue */ Change the order in the sentence beginning with "

2011-04-04T11:24:56Z

Prologue: Change the order in the sentence beginning with "

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	“It’s mine, dammit!”		“It’s mine, dammit!”

	From the woman’s statement to ~~the blond’s~~ and then to ~~Woo’s~~ was the book’s status revised. As they had no intention of paying, Woo felt no need to hesitate. The finger that pulls the trigger has all the power. The gun’s line of fire shifted to the bridge of the woman’s glasses. <!------------>		From the woman’s statement to Woo’s and then to the blond’s <!--order -- Woo spoke first. (Animrbill)-->was the book’s status revised. As they had no intention of paying, Woo felt no need to hesitate. The finger that pulls the trigger has all the power. The gun’s line of fire shifted to the bridge of the woman’s glasses. <!------------>

	The woman’s hand shifted to grasp the paper that had struck her chest.		The woman’s hand shifted to grasp the paper that had struck her chest.

Animrbill: /* Prologue */

2011-04-04T03:25:05Z

Prologue

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	Woo’s eyes bulged at the woman’s vehemence. The last time he’d heard a woman raise her voice in anger was when his female schoolteachers had scolded him. Next to him, Lu’s face grew angry out of a sense of brotherhood with his comrade.		Woo’s eyes bulged at the woman’s vehemence. The last time he’d heard a woman raise her voice in anger was when his female schoolteachers had scolded him. Next to him, Lu’s face grew angry out of a sense of brotherhood with his comrade.

	“For decades, for centuries, since antiquity, people from the underworld have thought of paper as something to pass along, to use to communicate, and then, to destroy! Sometimes through intelligence, sometimes through devotion, meaningful thoughts have been drawn from a universe of possibilities! With the depth of feeling that is imparted by such as thing as a book, you call it trash?! You had best take that back!” <!-- You know? I considered myself a bibliomanic until I read/watched this series. -->		“For decades, for centuries, since antiquity, people from the underworld have thought of paper as something to pass along, to use to communicate, and then, to destroy! Sometimes through intelligence, sometimes through devotion, meaningful thoughts have been drawn from a universe of possibilities! With the depth of feeling that is imparted by such a <!--such a thing, not such as thing (Animrbill)-->thing as a book, you call it trash?! You had best take that back!” <!-- You know? I considered myself a bibliomanic until I read/watched this series. -->

	Her angry words built up to a crescendo. However, the expression that drifted across Woo’s face wasn’t of anger, so much as overwhelming surprise.		Her angry words built up to a crescendo. However, the expression that drifted across Woo’s face wasn’t of anger, so much as overwhelming surprise.
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	“Mmph!”		“Mmph!”

	“Thi-this has been incredibly rude of us. As had been said, when it comes to books, she’s more or less one to get too caught up in things... Could I possibly beg your forgiveness in this matter?”		“Thi-this has been incredibly rude of us. As had been said, when it comes to books, she’s more or less one to get too caught up in things... Could I possibly beg your forgiveness in this matter?”

	When the one who had blocked her mouth drew back, the woman remained silent, and a contemplative look floated across her face.		When the one who had blocked her mouth drew back, the woman remained silent, and a contemplative look floated across her face.

Gamesfreak26 at 07:49, 16 November 2010

2010-11-16T07:49:29Z

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	“If that’s what’s said, it must be true.”		“If that’s what’s said, it must be true.”

	“Women just get turned off easily. They don’t have the drive or whatever, to get a ton of something - especially when it’s something as friggin’ useless as books.” <!-- changed fullstop to dash (games) -->		“Women just get turned off easily. They don’t have the drive or whatever, to get a ton of something -- especially when it’s something as friggin’ useless as books.” <!-- changed fullstop to dash (games) -->

	At that last statement, the woman started a little. From the imaginary pleasure garden in which it had been meandering, her gaze snapped immediately to Woo.		At that last statement, the woman started a little. From the imaginary pleasure garden in which it had been meandering, her gaze snapped immediately to Woo.

124.150.75.20 at 23:30, 15 November 2010

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	“Well, let’s keep this moving along. <!-- I really want to add 'shall we?' here. T.T (gamesfreak26) --> Could you please show us the item in question?”		“Well, let’s keep this moving along, shall we? <!-- I really want to add 'shall we?' here. T.T (gamesfreak26) Gave into temptation--> Could you please show us the item in question?”

	Woo glanced at Lu. The latter nodded and lifted an attaché case onto the table.		Woo glanced at Lu. The latter nodded and lifted an attaché case onto the table.
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	“It’s mine, dammit!”		“It’s mine, dammit!”

	From the woman’s statement to the blond’s and then to Woo’s was the book’s status revised. As they had no intention of paying, Woo felt no need to hesitate. The finger that pulls the trigger has all the power. The gun’s line of fire shifted to the bridge of the woman’s glasses. <------------>		From the woman’s statement to the blond’s and then to Woo’s was the book’s status revised. As they had no intention of paying, Woo felt no need to hesitate. The finger that pulls the trigger has all the power. The gun’s line of fire shifted to the bridge of the woman’s glasses. <!------------>

	The woman’s hand shifted to grasp the paper that had struck her chest.		The woman’s hand shifted to grasp the paper that had struck her chest.

124.150.75.20 at 23:22, 15 November 2010

2010-11-15T23:22:35Z

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124.148.43.156 at 12:44, 13 November 2010

2010-11-13T12:44:17Z

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	“Oh, what you see before you? It’s paper. Nothing more.”		“Oh, what you see before you? It’s paper. Nothing more.”

	<!--p32~~--><!--up to here.~~ -->		<!--p32-->
	“Don’t mess around!”		“Don’t mess around!”

	That wasn’t so much a mere expression of anger as a raging roar. Woo crushed the paper packet and hurled it at the two across the table. With an effortless movement, he blond intercepted the paper that was aimed at him, but the paper that went toward the woman scored a direct hit on her chest, as she had both arms wrapped around the book.		That wasn’t so much a mere expression of anger as a raging roar. Woo crushed the paper packet and hurled it at the two across the table. With an effortless movement, the blond intercepted the paper that was aimed at him, but the paper that went toward the woman scored a direct hit on her chest, as she had both arms wrapped around the book.

	“So all you brought to pay for this book is this paper trash? That's how the English work, eh?”		“So all you brought to pay for this book is this paper trash? That's how the English work, eh?”
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	“The British way is one of courtesy and fair play. Not to be rude, but it doesn’t look like you two use either of those.”		“The British way is one of courtesy and fair play. Not to be rude, but it doesn’t look like you two use either of those.”

	“The hell?”		“The hell?” Woo’s voice had diminished after the blond’s statement.

	Woo’s voice had diminished after the blond’s statement.

	“This book was stolen 25 years ago from the British Library. According to our research, the theft had been carried out by a certain syndicate.”		“This book was stolen 25 years ago from the British Library. According to our research, the theft had been carried out by a certain syndicate.”
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	“What’re you trying to say?”		“What’re you trying to say?”

	“The British Library’s Special Operations Division , a division that we are a part of, will return this book to the place where it should be.”		“The British Library’s Special Operations Division, a division that we are a part of, will return this book to the place where it should be.”

	Woo remained silent and instead drew his own gun.		Woo remained silent and instead drew his own gun.
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	“It’s mine, dammit!”		“It’s mine, dammit!”

	From the woman’s statement to the blond’s and then to Woo’s was the book’s status revised. As they had no intention of paying, Woo felt no need to hesitate. The finger that pulls the trigger has all the power. The gun’s line of fire shifted to the bridge of the woman’s glasses.		From the woman’s statement to the blond’s and then to Woo’s was the book’s status revised. As they had no intention of paying, Woo felt no need to hesitate. The finger that pulls the trigger has all the power. The gun’s line of fire shifted to the bridge of the woman’s glasses. <------------>

	The woman’s hand shifted to grasp the paper that had struck her chest.		The woman’s hand shifted to grasp the paper that had struck her chest.
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	Woo’s eyes widened.		Woo’s eyes widened.

	The woman’s face had lost all color, but not due to the expected blood loss from a gunshot wound. The bullet that should have smashed her glasses and opened a hole in her ~~face~~ was lost in a mass of whiteness.		The woman’s face had lost all color, but not due to the expected blood loss from a gunshot wound. The bullet that should have smashed her glasses and opened a hole in her forehead was lost in a mass of whiteness. <!-- Replaced 'face' with 'forehead' (gamesfreak26) -->

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	A single raised piece of paper held before the woman’s face had stopped it.		A single, raised piece of paper that was held before the woman’s face had stopped it. <!-- added 'that was' -->

	“Wha.......?!”		“Wha.......?!”

	It was definitely the same paper that he had thrown at her. By all appearances, it was the sort of paper you would find anywhere~~. Where~~ it had stopped the bullet, it looked as if it had been ripped by a cat’s claws.		It was definitely the same paper that he had thrown at her. By all appearances, it was the sort of paper you would find anywhere and where it had stopped the bullet, it looked as if it had been ripped by a cat’s claws. <!-- added 'and' and joined sentence two and three -->

	However, before his very eyes that paper had managed to stop the bullet he had just fired.		However, before his very eyes that paper had managed to stop the bullet he had just fired.
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	If they both fired at once, surely she wouldn’t be able to completely handle the assault. That was how his current plan went.		If they both fired at once, surely she wouldn’t be able to completely handle the assault. That was how his current plan went.

	However, the woman had, right at that moment, begun to catch on.		However, the woman had, right at that moment, begun to catch on. <!-- Should I combine these three sentences into one paragraph? (games)-->

	“Really now!”		“Really now!”
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	“I’ve heard of ‘em. Like the name says, they’ve got some unnatural power that lets them use paper as weaponry.”		“I’ve heard of ‘em. Like the name says, they’ve got some unnatural power that lets them use paper as weaponry.”

	A paper airplane flew by and tacked toward Lu’s feet. On its surface it bore the words ~~“that~~ is ~~correct”~~.		A paper airplane flew by and tacked toward Lu’s feet. On its surface, it bore the words, “That is correct.”

	“?!”		“?!”
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	“Agent Paper, Negotiation would be meaningless. Please don’t try to speed up the process.”		“Agent Paper, Negotiation would be meaningless. Please don’t try to speed up the process.”

	~~“Yes~~...”		“Ok...” <!-- Changed to 'Ok'. Was previously 'Yes'. (games) -->

	“We can’t win now! Who the hell could get a monster like they have, anyway?”		“We can’t win now! Who the hell could get a monster like they have, anyway?”
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	After a paper-like silence, a pitiful crying noise was heard.		After a paper-like silence, a pitiful crying noise was heard.

	“.................. Sniff, sniff.”		“..................Sniff, sniff.” <!-- Need to think of something better to put here. -->

	~~“Err~~, please don’t hurt my agent’s feelings, thank you.”		“Er, I would like you not to hurt my agent’s feelings, thank you.” <!-- Previously 'Err, please don’t hurt my agent’s feelings, thank you.' I just can't see Joker saying that. (Games) -->

	<!--p37-->		<!--p37--><!-- Up to here. I'll have more time now. (games) -->
	“Shuddup!”		“Shuddup!”

124.150.101.202 at 10:39, 11 November 2010

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	About 30 stories up, a single lit floor wrapped the building in a band of brightness~~. Apart~~ from that one floor, the rest of the area remained unlit. <!-- changed 'Other than' to 'Apart from' (gamesfreak26) -->		About 30 stories up, a single lit floor wrapped the building in a band of brightness and apart from that one floor, the rest of the area remained unlit. <!-- changed 'Other than' to 'Apart from' added 'and'(gamesfreak26) -->

	"Shit!"		"Shit!"

Gamesfreak26 at 21:17, 4 November 2010

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	There may as well have not been an answer, as the woman began to produce small noises from within the cracked-open book. It was clear that she was in ecstasy.		There may as well have not been an answer, as the woman began to produce small noises from within the cracked-open book. It was clear that she was in ecstasy.

	<!--p28~~--> <!-- up to here (games)~~ -->		<!--p28-->
	Woo was starting to feel some undefinable unease with the deal at hand. From the moment he first saw the building, the impression of wrongness had been there. This feeling caused something poisonous and serpentine to stir within him.		Woo was starting to feel some undefinable unease with the deal at hand. From the moment he first saw the building, the impression of wrongness had been there. This feeling caused something poisonous and serpentine to stir within him.

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	“Books - the damn things take up space, they’re heavy, and they’re just a waste of paper which <!-- 'that' to 'which' --> doesn’t serve any real purpose whatsoever.” <!-- changed comma to dash (games) and changed 'paper waste' to 'waste of paper' for flow (games) -->		“Books - the damn things take up space, they’re heavy, and they’re just a waste of paper which <!-- 'that' to 'which' --> doesn’t serve any real purpose whatsoever.” <!-- changed comma to dash (games) and changed 'paper waste' to 'waste of paper' for flow (games) -->

	<!-- “Books - the damn things take up space, they’re heavy, and they’re just paper waste that doesn't <!-- 'that' to 'which' --> doesn’t serve any real purpose whatsoever.” <!-- changed comma to dash (games) and changed 'paper waste' to 'waste of paper' (games) --> -->

	“Alright. However, don’t you at least read with some measure of frequency?”		“Alright. However, don’t you at least read with some measure of frequency?”
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	Woo let loose an ironic laugh.		Woo let loose an ironic laugh.

	“I ~~don’t~~ read ‘em and I don’t write ‘em. They’re just merchandise. It’s just that they only really make money this way, ya know. My father and grandfather, they did the same.”		“I don't read ‘em and I don’t write ‘em. They’re just merchandise. It’s just that they only really make money this way, ya know. My father and grandfather, they did the same.”

	“I see...”		“I see...”
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	Woo’s eyes bulged at the woman’s vehemence. The last time he’d heard a woman raise her voice in anger was when his female schoolteachers had scolded him. Next to him, Lu’s face grew angry out of a sense of brotherhood with his comrade.		Woo’s eyes bulged at the woman’s vehemence. The last time he’d heard a woman raise her voice in anger was when his female schoolteachers had scolded him. Next to him, Lu’s face grew angry out of a sense of brotherhood with his comrade.

	“For decades, for centuries, since antiquity, people from the underworld have thought of paper as something to pass along, to use to communicate, and then, to destroy! Sometimes through intelligence, sometimes through devotion, meaningful thoughts have been drawn from a universe of possibilities! With the depth of feeling that is imparted by such as thing as a book, you call it trash?! You had best take that back!”		“For decades, for centuries, since antiquity, people from the underworld have thought of paper as something to pass along, to use to communicate, and then, to destroy! Sometimes through intelligence, sometimes through devotion, meaningful thoughts have been drawn from a universe of possibilities! With the depth of feeling that is imparted by such as thing as a book, you call it trash?! You had best take that back!” <!-- You know? I considered myself a bibliomanic until I read/watched this series. -->

	Her angry words built up to a crescendo. However, the expression that drifted across Woo’s face wasn’t of anger, so much as overwhelming surprise.		Her angry words built up to a crescendo. However, the expression that drifted across Woo’s face wasn’t of anger, so much as overwhelming surprise.
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	“Just as I’d expected of Master Woo. No, no, it’s truly been an honor to meet you.”		“Just as I’d expected of Master Woo. No, no, it’s truly been an honor to meet you.”

	“Not so fast with the ‘has been’ ~~—how~~ about paying up first?”		“Not so fast with the ‘has been’ — how about paying up first?”

	Woo’s gaze began to regain its focus. Now that the situation was returning to his preferred pace, that gaze was able to cling to a clear goal.		Woo’s gaze began to regain its focus. Now that the situation was returning to his preferred pace, that gaze was able to cling to a clear goal.
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	“..........................”		“..........................”

	His facial expression did not change~~. However~~, the atmosphere was suddenly heavy and oppressive. Lu thrust the upturned back of the bundle toward Woo.		His facial expression did not change; however, the atmosphere was suddenly heavy and oppressive. Lu thrust the upturned back of the bundle toward Woo. <!-- added semicolon (games) -->

	“.................. The hell is with this, you British bastard?”		“.................. The hell is with this, you British bastard?”
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	“Oh, what you see before you? It’s paper. Nothing more.”		“Oh, what you see before you? It’s paper. Nothing more.”

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	“Don’t mess around!”		“Don’t mess around!”