SOLARIS the Abyssal:Volume 1 Chapter 1 - Revision history

Manlyflower at 10:16, 31 August 2018

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SirGrant: /* Episode.1 - Onward/Myself/To Battle */

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Episode.1 - Onward/Myself/To Battle

Manlyflower: /* Episode.1 - Onward/Myself/To Battle */

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Episode.1 - Onward/Myself/To Battle

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	It was a lonely island out in the distant sea, crafted by mankind in the spot where Tokyo used to be some time ago.		It was a lonely island out in the distant sea, crafted by mankind in the spot where Tokyo used to be some time ago.

	During the Oceanic ~~Cataclysm~~ a hundred years ago, the island was hastily built by Japan to house a provisional government as their lands were being swallowed up by the sea, but the Orient Federation eventually abandoned the plan midway. The Federation government later repossessed this island made by Japan and resumed construction. The result was a water manipulator training facility with limited access to the outside world.		During the Oceanic Calamity a hundred years ago, the island was hastily built by Japan to house a provisional government as their lands were being swallowed up by the sea, but the Orient Federation eventually abandoned the plan midway. The Federation government later repossessed this island made by Japan and resumed construction. The result was a water manipulator training facility with limited access to the outside world.

	That meant that in all four cardinal directions was nothing but the sea. Even if I were suddenly overcome by the desire to see my sister again, a one way trip by airplane would take around five hours, and the cost of a round-trip would eat up half a month's wage—just the perfect location. Going back a couple times a year is probably the most I can manage.		That meant that in all four cardinal directions was nothing but the sea. Even if I were suddenly overcome by the desire to see my sister again, a one way trip by airplane would take around five hours, and the cost of a round-trip would eat up half a month's wage—just the perfect location. Going back a couple times a year is probably the most I can manage.
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	"I don't know why... I mean, I can dive and move underwater, but anything more than that, like hardening or changing the shape of my Territory... It just never works. I just don't have any talent, I think."		"I don't know why... I mean, I can dive and move underwater, but anything more than that, like hardening or changing the shape of my Territory... It just never works. I just don't have any talent, I think."

	"Are you really a ~~Zone-Specialist~~?"		"Are you really a zone specialist?"

	Water manipulators were categorized into four basic types, and the one Natsuka supposedly fell under—Zone-Specialization—included those who excelled at directly controlling their Territories, altering them, and so on.		Water manipulators were categorized into four basic types, and the one Natsuka supposedly fell under—Zone-Specialization—included those who excelled at directly controlling their Territories, altering them, and so on.
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	Those techniques included the very "hardening" and "changing the shape" that Natsuka found difficult. Controlling her territory was something she was supposed to be good at but had a hard time doing. That's a little much, even for someone as clumsy as her, Minato thought.		Those techniques included the very "hardening" and "changing the shape" that Natsuka found difficult. Controlling her territory was something she was supposed to be good at but had a hard time doing. That's a little much, even for someone as clumsy as her, Minato thought.

	"Are you sure you're not actually a ~~Perception-Specialist~~ like me, or some other type?"		"Are you sure you're not actually a perception specialist like me, or some other type?"

	"Can that happen?"		"Can that happen?"
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	Natsuka stared up at the night sky as if deep in thought.		Natsuka stared up at the night sky as if deep in thought.

	Though Minato had only just realized it, you could see the stars with impressive clarity on a fine evening like this one. I remember hearing about it before. While the planet's total land-area shrunk due to the Oceanic ~~Cataclysm~~, the starry sky apparently only grew more beautiful.		Though Minato had only just realized it, you could see the stars with impressive clarity on a fine evening like this one. I remember hearing about it before. While the planet's total land-area shrunk due to the Oceanic Calamity, the starry sky apparently only grew more beautiful.

	When he returned his gaze to the longtime friend sitting next to him, her face showed a sad smile as it pointed up towards the stars.		When he returned his gaze to the longtime friend sitting next to him, her face showed a sad smile as it pointed up towards the stars.
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	Until a hundred years ago, it was known as the Japanese city of Osaka.		Until a hundred years ago, it was known as the Japanese city of Osaka.

	Even an area as large and bustling as this one fell victim to the Oceanic ~~Cataclysm~~ and was now an empty shell submerged deep beneath the surface. It was unimaginably desolate—even scarce was aquatic life—and it was enveloped in a hellish silence.		Even an area as large and bustling as this one fell victim to the Oceanic Calamity and was now an empty shell submerged deep beneath the surface. It was unimaginably desolate—even scarce was aquatic life—and it was enveloped in a hellish silence.

	It was midnight.		It was midnight.
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	Stella also prepared herself for combat. The brightness of the Territory covering her increased in intensity and then started to mold itself into armaments.		Stella also prepared herself for combat. The brightness of the Territory covering her increased in intensity and then started to mold itself into armaments.

	She was a ~~Zone-Specialist~~.		She was a zone specialist.

	The energy took the shape of two dignified blades, reminiscent of the gladius used by swordsmen of old.		The energy took the shape of two dignified blades, reminiscent of the gladius used by swordsmen of old.

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	Even an area as large and bustling as this one fell victim to the Oceanic Cataclysm and was now an empty shell submerged deep beneath the surface. It was unimaginably desolate—even scarce was aquatic life—and it was enveloped in a hellish silence.		Even an area as large and bustling as this one fell victim to the Oceanic Cataclysm and was now an empty shell submerged deep beneath the surface. It was unimaginably desolate—even scarce was aquatic life—and it was enveloped in a hellish silence.

	~~And yet, it~~ was midnight.		It was midnight.

	The quiet was suddenly broken.		The quiet was suddenly broken.
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	"Roger!"		"Roger!"

	~~An figure~~ continued to ~~remain~~ in their ~~view~~.		They continued to keep a large figure in their line of sight.

	The creature resembled a massive tadpole. The difference, however, was that it possessed forelegs with which it charged as if crawling along the seafloor.		The creature resembled a massive tadpole. The difference, however, was that it possessed forelegs with which it charged as if crawling along the seafloor.
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	She was a Zone-Specialist.		She was a Zone-Specialist.

	The energy took the shape of two ~~magnificent~~ blades, reminiscent of the gladius used by swordsmen of old.		The energy took the shape of two dignified blades, reminiscent of the gladius used by swordsmen of old.

	It was the solidification of her Territory. The ability itself was common among water manipulators, but Stella especially turned into a formidable fighter with the swords in hand. ~~Even in this kind of battle,~~ Tachibana's ability ~~would only prove~~ to be an ~~asset, and~~ she could be tasked with delivering the finishing blow against Unders.		It was the solidification of her Territory. The ability itself was common among water manipulators, but Stella especially turned into a formidable fighter with the swords in hand. Tachibana's ability also proved to be an asset—in even this kind of battle—as she could be tasked with delivering the finishing blow against Unders.

	As if trying to avoid the repeated explosions, the Under launched itself up above the buildings and ended up in a wide-open area.		As if trying to avoid the repeated explosions, the Under launched itself up above the buildings and ended up in a wide-open area.

	There was nowhere left to hide. It was the perfect chance to finish it off.		There was nowhere left to hide. This was the perfect chance to finish it off.

	"Whoops."		"Whoops."

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	There was the sense of camaraderie and an introduction to the hardships of not having everything go your way. Minato wanted to have her experience both of these ingredients vital to her growth through training sessions with a buddy.		There was the sense of camaraderie and an introduction to the hardships of not having everything go your way. Minato wanted to have her experience both of these ingredients vital to her growth through training sessions with a buddy.

	They might ~~have~~ even ~~became~~ lasting friends.		They might even become lasting friends.

	~~That is~~, had not even ~~their fates then cursed them so~~...		Rather, they almost certainly would have, had they not been later forsaken by even fate itself...

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	This kind of thing isn't good for me, honestly, Minato thought.		This kind of thing isn't good for me, honestly, Minato thought.

	For as long as I can remember, I haven't been able to resist people with that kind of card up in their sleeve—namely, huge, over-exaggerated reactions. Maybe it was something like how little boys always ~~want~~ to bully their crushes... Maybe it was because she got cuter and cuter the more he messed with... Whatever the reason, he eventually developed this bad habit of his. Whenever he asked her, "Don't those boobs get in the way," her reaction was priceless, and the payoff felt divine.		For as long as I can remember, I haven't been able to resist people with that kind of card up their sleeve—namely, huge, over-exaggerated reactions. Maybe it was something like how little boys always wanted to bully their crushes... Maybe it was because she got cuter and cuter the more he messed with her... Whatever the reason, he eventually developed this bad habit of his. Whenever he asked her something like, "Don't those boobs get in the way," her reaction was priceless, and the payoff felt divine.

	Likely due to that teacher-student relationship of theirs, Minato eventually ended up getting branded a perverted monster all throughout the academy, and most of the female trainees that saw him would wind up running away as if trying to avoid a spider. Not to mention his ability essentially made him a walking three-sizes detector.		Likely due to that teacher-student relationship of theirs, Minato eventually ended up getting branded a perverted monster all throughout the academy, and most of the female trainees that saw him would wind up running away as if trying to avoid a spider. Not to mention his ability essentially made him a walking three-sizes detector.

Manlyflower: /* Episode.1 - Onward/Myself/To Battle */

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	With the sound of Komaki's impressed voice in her ears, Stella flew into the darkness of the deep.		With the sound of Komaki's impressed voice in her ears, Stella flew into the darkness of the deep.

	"I'm going go to finish this up."		"I'm going to go finish this up."

	It was past midnight. Countless shapes mingled amongst themselves in the depths of the submerged Osaka.		It was past midnight. Countless shapes mingled amongst themselves in the depths of the submerged Osaka.

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	"This is why I hate whitetips..."		"This is why I hate whitetips..."

	Unlike other sharks, they tended to defy theory. Because they often lived out in the ocean where food was scarce, their frequent hunger caused them to occasionally get frighteningly aggressive. In cases where water manipulators wound up hurt after a run in with sharks, the culprit was almost always the oceanic ~~whitefin~~.		Unlike other sharks, they tended to defy theory. Because they often lived out in the ocean where food was scarce, their frequent hunger caused them to occasionally get frighteningly aggressive. In cases where water manipulators wound up hurt after a run in with sharks, the culprit was almost always the oceanic whitetip.

	Out of other options, Minato pulled out the knife from his belt. He'll just have to kill it.		Out of other options, Minato pulled out the knife from his belt. He'll just have to kill it.

Manlyflower: /* Episode.1 - Onward/Myself/To Battle */

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	He demonstrated this right after. The shark approached him from the front, and Minato landed his fist square between the eyes.		He demonstrated this right after. The shark approached him from the front, and Minato landed his fist square between the eyes.

	The shark twisted ~~it's~~ body on impact and changed direction, likely out of surprise. It swam farther and farther away, convulsing as it did.		The shark twisted its body on impact and changed direction, likely out of surprise. It swam farther and farther away, convulsing as it did.

	Ignoring the retreating shark, Minato turned towards the trainees and followed it up with an explanation.		Ignoring the retreating shark, Minato turned towards the trainees and followed it up with an explanation.
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	The creature resembled a massive tadpole. The difference, however, was that it possessed forelegs with which it charged as if crawling along the seafloor.		The creature resembled a massive tadpole. The difference, however, was that it possessed forelegs with which it charged as if crawling along the seafloor.

	~~It's~~ movements were chaotic and seemed almost irrational. Occasionally it would barrel into one of the dilapidated buildings and destroy the walls. There likely weren't any goals motivating ~~it's~~ actions. It simply lived.		Its movements were chaotic and seemed almost irrational. Occasionally it would barrel into one of the dilapidated buildings and destroy the walls. There likely weren't any goals motivating its actions. It simply lived.

	Humans were the ones that gave them a purpose.		Humans were the ones that gave them a purpose.

Manlyflower at 01:30, 9 July 2017

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	It hasn't even been two years since she entered the academy and already her grades were nothing other than extraordinary. Her practical and written exam results were virtually perfect, and the control she possessed over her Territory was immaculate enough to already warrant receiving a license.		It hasn't even been two years since she entered the academy and already her grades were nothing other than extraordinary. Her practical and written exam results were virtually perfect, and the control she possessed over her Territory was immaculate enough to already warrant receiving a license.

	It was ~~possibly~~ because of this skill, however, that her pride prevented her from cooperating with others. You could find evidence of this anywhere.		It was possible that because of this skill, however, that her pride prevented her from cooperating with others. You could find evidence of this anywhere.

	"I didn't mean to imply that I find writing the apology difficult in any way. It's just that I'd rather not take unfair punishments lying down."		"I didn't mean to imply that I find writing the apology difficult in any way. It's just that I'd rather not take unfair punishments lying down."
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	"First day on the job and you're already making the Knightley girl write an apology. Boy, you're something else."		"First day on the job and you're already making the Knightley girl write an apology. Boy, you're something else."

	Minato sighed at the half-sarcasm and responded while arranging ~~the~~ the things on his desk.		Minato sighed at the half-sarcasm and responded while arranging the things on his desk.

	"It looks like she's his daughter... The director of the Solaris Applications Agency."		"It looks like she's his daughter... The director of the Solaris Applications Agency."
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	"Interesting."		"Interesting."

	It ~~make~~ sense. While looking through her records, I saw lots of passages that hinted towards her breaking the rules, but strangely enough, there wasn't a single official violation to her name. The director of the Solaris Applications Agency could be considered the boss of every professional water manipulator. As a result, it's possible her other instructors never called her out even if they thought she did something wrong out of fear for their position. How sad. When it comes to disobeying authority, water manipulators and office workers are pretty much one in the same.		It makes sense. While looking through her records, I saw lots of passages that hinted towards her breaking the rules, but strangely enough, there wasn't a single official violation to her name. The director of the Solaris Applications Agency could be considered the boss of every professional water manipulator. As a result, it's possible her other instructors never called her out even if they thought she did something wrong out of fear for their position. How sad. When it comes to disobeying authority, water manipulators and office workers are pretty much one in the same.

	"You know, she's definitely stubborn, but she doesn't seem like the kind of girl who would flaunt her family's position around like that."		"You know, she's definitely stubborn, but she doesn't seem like the kind of girl who would flaunt her family's position around like that."
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	"When I first met you, I remember how everyone thought you were so cool and collected."		"When I first met you, I remember how everyone thought you were so cool and collected."

	"Yeah, well thanks a lot asshole. Just get eaten by a shark already."		"Yeah, well thanks a lot, asshole. Just get eaten by a shark already."

	"Oh, speaking of sharks, I just remembered..."		"Oh, speaking of sharks, I just remembered..."
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	"Have you mentioned this to her?" I asked.		"Have you mentioned this to her?" I asked.

	"Yeah right. Talk about a pain in the ass." She waved her hand dismissively. "I'm not in the habit of looking out for pupils that aren't mine. Besides, even if I did tell her that, there's no way she'd take it seriously. You've seen how ~~see~~ looks down on the instructors. Hate to say it, but I have absolutely zero interest in dealing with her."		"Yeah right. Talk about a pain in the ass." She waved her hand dismissively. "I'm not in the habit of looking out for pupils that aren't mine. Besides, even if I did tell her that, there's no way she'd take it seriously. You've seen how she looks down on the instructors. Hate to say it, but I have absolutely zero interest in dealing with her."

	That's true.		That's true.
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	The discussion of Chloe continued.		The discussion of Chloe continued.

	"I think she's an ~~easily~~ girl to understand, though," Minato said.		"I think she's an easy girl to understand, though," Minato said.

	"That's exactly why it's such a hassle. She's convinced she's the best and won't listen to anything that says otherwise. Just like you said, I think putting together a curriculum for her that focuses more on developing her mindset will be better for her growth in the long run. For example, giving her a environment where she can interact with classmates like at a normal school."		"That's exactly why it's such a hassle. She's convinced she's the best and won't listen to anything that says otherwise. Just like you said, I think putting together a curriculum for her that focuses more on developing her mindset will be better for her growth in the long run. For example, giving her an environment where she can interact with classmates like at a normal school."

	Interesting idea...		Interesting idea...
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	This was the true face of the "buddy system" that Minato put together.		This was the true face of the "buddy system" that Minato put together.

	"I've ~~giving~~ you a new rule: you're only allowed to take a subject's practical exam once your partner has passed it. The more Natsuka stumbles around, the longer it's going to take for you to graduate. Seems pretty difficult, but I'll be rooting for you!"		"I've given you a new rule: you're only allowed to take a subject's practical exam once your partner has passed it. The more Natsuka stumbles around, the longer it's going to take for you to graduate. Seems pretty difficult, but I'll be rooting for you!"

	"W-W-Wait a moment!" Chloe's expression finally changed for the worse. "You're expecting me to teach someone this boring and forgettable?!"		"W-W-Wait a moment!" Chloe's expression finally changed for the worse. "You're expecting me to teach someone this boring and forgettable?!"
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	"Yeah, can't really find it in me to laugh... Let's just hurry up and get this over with."		"Yeah, can't really find it in me to laugh... Let's just hurry up and get this over with."

	The two headed towards the transformed ruins of Osaka. As they propelled themselves through ~~the~~ the gaps in the buildings, they almost looked as if they were flying.		The two headed towards the transformed ruins of Osaka. As they propelled themselves through the gaps in the buildings, they almost looked as if they were flying.

	"Well, on the bright side, at least the one that escaped was only Class D trash. You could totally take care of it, no problem."		"Well, on the bright side, at least the one that escaped was only Class D trash. You could totally take care of it, no problem."
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	Humans were the ones that gave them a purpose.		Humans were the ones that gave them a purpose.

	"You know, I have an teeny question."		"You know, I have a teeny question."

	"What?"		"What?"