Seirei Tsukai no Blade Dance:Volume2 Prologue Draft - Revision history

Asiorx22 at 15:32, 3 September 2013

2013-09-03T15:32:05Z

27.122.13.129: /* Prologue */

2013-06-04T12:29:19Z

Prologue

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	"Haa, haa, haa—"		"Haa, haa, haa—"

	A girl was running through a forest in Astral Zero, ~~where~~ many ~~types of~~ twisted trees ~~were~~ lined up in rows.		A girl was running through a forest in Astral Zero, full of many twisted trees lined up in rows.

	Her shoes had long since slipped off, and the soles of her bare feet were covered with injuries.		Her shoes had long since slipped off, and the soles of her bare feet were covered with injuries.
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	Since her long black hair had been done up at both sides of her long-sleeved, extravagant, yet courteous attire, she did not run smoothly.		Since her long black hair had been done up at both sides of her long-sleeved, extravagant, yet courteous attire, she did not run smoothly.

	From behind, violent sounds of many trees being mowed down were approaching.		From behind her, the violent sounds of many trees being mowed down were approaching.

	Being caught up in this situation was just a matter of time.		Being caught up in this situation was just a matter of time.
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	Falling out of the candidacy of «Divine Ritual Institute»— the Queens’ training organization, she was the imperial family's excess baggage.		Falling out of the candidacy of «Divine Ritual Institute»— the Queens’ training organization, she was the imperial family's excess baggage.

	She had nothing special other than the title of former second princess and she was just a mere thirteen year-old girl.		She had nothing special other than the title of former second princess and the fact that she was just a mere thirteen year-old girl.

	Her noble colleagues, who by right should have pledged allegiance to the imperial family, were sending her looks of contempt.		Her noble colleagues, who by right should have pledged allegiance to the imperial family, were sending her looks of contempt.
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	He told her bluntly and turned toward the spirit before him.		He told her bluntly and turned toward the spirit before him.

	That Dryad, who had its arm cut off, ~~let out an angry roar~~ and attacked the boy.		That Dryad, who had its arm cut off, roared in anger and attacked the boy.

	As it swung down its other arm, the girl reflexively covered her eyes.		As it swung down its other arm, the girl reflexively covered her eyes.
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	The boy was stopping the blow that came from that Dryad with all its might, single-handedly, with one sword. <!--the tense is in continuous state -->		The boy was stopping the blow that came from that Dryad with all its might, single-handedly, with one sword. <!--the tense is in continuous state -->

	And then— he exhaled and kicked the ground ~~together~~.		And then— he exhaled and kicked off the ground.

	With all his strength, he cut off its arm and hit its torso very hard with the center of the sword.		With all his strength, he cut off its arm and hit its torso very hard with the center of the sword.

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 Because he, who should have been granted his «Wish», suddenly disappeared.

Rukiabankai: /* Prologue */

2013-05-30T14:20:21Z

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KuroiHikari at 00:23, 29 May 2013

2013-05-29T00:23:30Z

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	KH: Feeling limited by my restrictions? Well, you, editors, are totally free to work up your creative editing skills here. Just rewrite the lines to way you feel is best. Then, I'll be crosschecking for accuracy before merging it to the main version. Thank you for your efforts.		KH: Feeling limited by my restrictions? Well, you, editors, are totally free to work up your creative editing skills here. Just rewrite the lines to way you feel is best. Then, I'll be crosschecking for accuracy before merging it to the main version. Thank you for your efforts.

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