Shurabara!:Volume 1 Chapter 2 - Revision history

Cheshire Caine: Mostly wording changes for a better flow

2016-02-24T23:21:30Z

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Cheshire Caine: Correction of grammar (syntax and tenses mostly) and some punctuation.

2016-01-09T19:11:47Z

Correction of grammar (syntax and tenses mostly) and some punctuation.

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2014-12-17T12:13:25Z

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	Having seen the stunning beauty who made her sudden entry, all boys in the classroom were stirred into a frenzy.		Having seen the stunning beauty who made her sudden entry, all boys in the classroom were stirred into a frenzy.

	~~“She…~~ she is Hoshikawa! Hoshikawa!”		“S-she is Hoshikawa! Hoshikawa!”

	“Kazuhiro, don’t speak in such an unfamiliar manner. ‘I’ thought we had agreed to be in a first-name basis?” Saotome, who had turned off her hugging mode, was smiling as she tilted her head.		“Kazuhiro, don’t speak in such an unfamiliar manner. ‘I’ thought we had agreed to be in a first-name basis?” Saotome, who had turned off her hugging mode, was smiling as she tilted her head.

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2014-12-06T01:38:22Z

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← Older revision		Revision as of 01:38, 6 December 2014
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	She carried a small, cute bag in her hands.		She carried a small, cute bag in her hands.

	“Eh? ~~Ehh…”~~		“Eh? Ehh—”

	Suddenly, whistles resounded the entire classroom.		Suddenly, whistles resounded the entire classroom.
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	There was no one on the roof. If she was acting, there was no audience.		There was no one on the roof. If she was acting, there was no audience.

	Without a doubt, this ~~was…~~		Without a doubt, this was—

	“I wanted to investigate about what kind of food a boy would like, and then experience the happiness when he dug into the food with a satisfied expression. That’s why I already looked into everything when I chose my fake boyfriend.”		“I wanted to investigate about what kind of food a boy would like, and then experience the happiness when he dug into the food with a satisfied expression. That’s why I already looked into everything when I chose my fake boyfriend.”
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	“Please call me Saotome. I can easily switch from I and ‘I’, but you probably can’t do the same as well as I can. You have to get used to calling me by my first name, or else you could make a mistake someday.”		“Please call me Saotome. I can easily switch from I and ‘I’, but you probably can’t do the same as well as I can. You have to get used to calling me by my first name, or else you could make a mistake someday.”

	~~“Oh…~~ so, Saotome.”		“Ok… so, Saotome.”

	“What?”		“What?”
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	“I don’t want to be a playboy, but it’s also not the best idea for you to act as a frivolous girl.”		“I don’t want to be a playboy, but it’s also not the best idea for you to act as a frivolous girl.”

	~~“Doesn’t~~ really matter. ~~Then…”~~		“Doesn't really matter. Then—”

	Then, Saotome’s expression changed. Her eyes were moist, and her arms were held on her chest. She stared intensely at Kazuhiro.		Then, Saotome’s expression changed. Her eyes were moist, and her arms were held on her chest. She stared intensely at Kazuhiro.
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	Although they were not a real couple, they still had tons of problems to be resolved afterward.		Although they were not a real couple, they still had tons of problems to be resolved afterward.

	In a genuine romance, one wouldn't think about the various problems that would follow after the breakup before it even began.		In a genuine romance, one wouldn't think about the various problems that would follow after the breakup before it even began.

	===References===		===References===

Bunny1ov3r at 01:20, 6 December 2014

2014-12-06T01:20:47Z

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 Although they were not a real couple, they still had tons of problems to be resolved afterward.
-In a genuine romance, one wouldn’t think about the various problems that would follow after the breakup before it even began.
+In a genuine romance, one wouldn't think about the various problems that would follow after the breakup before it even began.
-<references/>
+===References===

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2014-12-06T01:17:49Z

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