Strike Witches:Volume1 Chapter1 - Revision history

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	“Well... I’m sure Takeko also wants to find out which Striker will end up superior in a real ‘dogfight’.”		“Well... I’m sure Takeko also wants to find out which Striker will end up superior in a real ‘dogfight’.”

	Tomoko replied with a smile. It was a warm smile, but at the same time it ~~was~~ also exuded a sense of challenge. At Akeno Flight Academy, where Tomoko was stationed as a test pilot, that charming smile was the cause of the many noisy cries of ‘Onee-sama!’ by female cadets at the academy.		Tomoko replied with a smile. It was a warm smile, but at the same time it also exuded a sense of challenge. At Akeno Flight Academy, where Tomoko was stationed as a test pilot, that charming smile was the cause of the many noisy cries of ‘Onee-sama!’ by female cadets at the academy.

	To the west, a small black spot could be seen in the distance.		To the west, a small black spot could be seen in the distance.

Evil-samurai at 08:54, 31 March 2009

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	She most likely wanted to put pressure on Tomoko by increasing her altitude. Not letting her do that, Tomoko began her own climb a moment later. Like two intertwining dragons, their paths crisscrossed as they shot upwards into the sky.		She most likely wanted to put pressure on Tomoko by increasing her altitude. Not letting her do that, Tomoko began her own climb a moment later. Like two intertwining dragons, their paths crisscrossed as they shot upwards into the sky.

	Tomoko’s engine began to give out with a loud whine first. Compared to Takeko’s Ki-43, the Ki-27 with its Ma-1b magic engine, ~~with~~ only 80% the engine power, was insufficient for such a steep climb. Takeko stopped her own ascent, and flipped around. She dived.		Tomoko’s engine began to give out with a loud whine first. Compared to Takeko’s Ki-43, the Ki-27 with its Ma-1b magic engine, had only 80% the engine power, and was insufficient for such a steep climb. Takeko stopped her own ascent, and flipped around. She dived.

	Tomoko glanced behind herself. Takeko’s Ki-43 did another flip, as if to say that she had been waiting. She had managed to get perfectly on Tomoko’s tail. Using her superior speed, Takeko began closing the distance between them.		Tomoko glanced behind herself. Takeko’s Ki-43 did another flip, as if to say that she had been waiting. She had managed to get perfectly on Tomoko’s tail. Using her superior speed, Takeko began closing the distance between them.
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	Takeko did not have her gun-camera ready... in other words, she was also aiming for the second victory condition.		Takeko did not have her gun-camera ready... in other words, she was also aiming for the second victory condition.

	Tomoko licked her lips lightly. Her sparring partner was 17, and the two of them had been rivals ever since they entered the Akeno Flight Academy in the same training cadre. Two years ago during the Neuroi invasion of Fuso, ~~what~~ was ~~more~~ likely a reconnaissance mission, the two had competed in everything from number of enemies downed to promotions, during a small skirmish known as the ‘Fuso Sea Incident’.		Tomoko licked her lips lightly. Her sparring partner was 17, and the two of them had been rivals ever since they entered the Akeno Flight Academy in the same training cadre. Two years ago during the Neuroi invasion of Fuso, which was most likely a reconnaissance mission, the two had competed in everything from the number of enemies they had downed to promotions, during a small skirmish known as the ‘Fuso Sea Incident’.

	They were the most competitive of rivals, but the second they landed ~~from the air,~~ they would become the best of friends, who would share all their worries ~~and~~ joys and ~~sadnesses~~ with each other.		They were the most competitive of rivals in the air, but the second they landed they would become the best of friends, who would share all their worries, joys ,and sorrows with each other.

	And because of that, neither could stand to fall behind the other.		And because of that, neither could stand to fall behind the other.
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	“Please tell us earlier if reporters ~~would~~ be coming.”		“Please tell us earlier if reporters will be coming.”

	Akeno Flight Academy, office of the Director of Research.		Akeno Flight Academy, office of the Director of Research.

Selkirk at 11:27, 28 February 2009

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	As she increased her altitude to 3000 ~~feet~~, Anabuki Tomoko felt grateful for being born a witch. Staring down at the vast scenery below her only strengthened those feelings.		As she increased her altitude to 3000 meters, Anabuki Tomoko felt grateful for being born a witch. Staring down at the vast scenery below her only strengthened those feelings.

	The Fuso Empire... Britannia in the west, and Fuso in the east, could both be placed under similar labels. One look at the landscape below was all that was needed to know why Fuso had journeyed out of its borders so quickly. In the valleys between the mountainous region, numerous villages and towns were nestled closely together.		The Fuso Empire... Britannia in the west, and Fuso in the east, could both be placed under similar labels. One look at the landscape below was all that was needed to know why Fuso had journeyed out of its borders so quickly. In the valleys between the mountainous region, numerous villages and towns were nestled closely together.

Selkirk at 11:18, 28 February 2009

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	“...You’re a sailor, I suppose.”		“...You’re a sailor, I suppose.”

	“Y-Yes, ma’am! I’m Ittou Hikou Heisou Sakomizu Haruka, of the Fuso Imperial Navy Yokohama ~~Air Squadron~~!”		“Y-Yes, ma’am! I’m Ittou Hikou Heisou Sakomizu Haruka, of the Fuso Imperial Navy Yokohama Flotilla!”

	“Oh?”		“Oh?”
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	That was still a sore subject.		That was still a sore subject.

	“I’m sure the Neuroi will be kicked right out of Karlsland in one blow, with the aces of the Army Air Service heading there. Some of the elite pilots from the Yokohama ~~Air Squadron~~ were selected to head there as well, it seems.		“I’m sure the Neuroi will be kicked right out of Karlsland in one blow, with the aces of the Army Air Service heading there. Some of the elite pilots from the Yokohama Flotilla were selected to head there as well, it seems.

	“‘''It seems''’...? How about you?”		“‘''It seems''’...? How about you?”

	“...Ma’am. Well, actually... I’ve been a hopeless member of the Yokohama ~~Air Squadron~~ ever since I joined. Marskmanship, dogfighting, navigation... if you start from the bottom, well, you could say I’m number one in all of those.”		“...Ma’am. Well, actually... I’ve been a hopeless member of the Yokohama Flotilla ever since I joined. Marskmanship, dogfighting, navigation... if you start from the bottom, well, you could say I’m number one in all of those.”

	“Eh?”		“Eh?”

Selkirk at 10:48, 28 February 2009

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Selkirk at 05:47, 28 September 2008

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	She most likely wanted to put pressure on Tomoko by increasing her altitude. Not letting her do that, Tomoko began her own climb a moment later. Like two intertwining dragons, their paths crisscrossed as they shot upwards into the sky.		She most likely wanted to put pressure on Tomoko by increasing her altitude. Not letting her do that, Tomoko began her own climb a moment later. Like two intertwining dragons, their paths crisscrossed as they shot upwards into the sky.

	Tomoko’s engine began to give out with a loud whine first. Compared to Takeko’s Ki-43, the Ma-~~27b~~ magic engine, with only 80% the engine power, was insufficient for such a steep climb. Takeko stopped her own ascent, and flipped around. She dived.		Tomoko’s engine began to give out with a loud whine first. Compared to Takeko’s Ki-43, the Ki-27 with its Ma-1b magic engine, with only 80% the engine power, was insufficient for such a steep climb. Takeko stopped her own ascent, and flipped around. She dived.

	Tomoko glanced behind herself. Takeko’s Ki-43 did another flip, as if to say that she had been waiting. She had managed to get perfectly on Tomoko’s tail. Using her superior speed, Takeko began closing the distance between them.		Tomoko glanced behind herself. Takeko’s Ki-43 did another flip, as if to say that she had been waiting. She had managed to get perfectly on Tomoko’s tail. Using her superior speed, Takeko began closing the distance between them.

Piroko at 05:46, 16 September 2008

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	Her eyes brimming with tears, Takeko ran off. Tomoko was left alone in the corridor, looking hurt.		Her eyes brimming with tears, Takeko ran off. Tomoko was left alone in the corridor, looking hurt.

	''~~Haa~~, what is happening?''		''Sigh, what is happening?''

	''It’s been my dream to fight together with Takeko, my best friend.''		''It’s been my dream to fight together with Takeko, my best friend.''
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	Numerous reporters were there to cover the event, the flashes from their cameras lighting up the area. However, standing a bit away from the festival-like commotion, on the opposite side of the ship, a girl stood sighing.		Numerous reporters were there to cover the event, the flashes from their cameras lighting up the area. However, standing a bit away from the festival-like commotion, on the opposite side of the ship, a girl stood sighing.

	~~“Haa~~... The main stars sure are lucky...”		“Sigh... The main stars sure are lucky...”

	It was Anabuki Tomoko.		It was Anabuki Tomoko.

Selkirk at 11:30, 15 September 2008

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	Takeko did not have her gun-camera ready... in other words, she was also aiming for the second victory condition.		Takeko did not have her gun-camera ready... in other words, she was also aiming for the second victory condition.

	Tomoko licked her lips lightly. ~~The~~ two of them ~~were 17, and~~ had been rivals ever since they entered the Akeno Flight Academy in the same training cadre. Two years ago during the Neuroi invasion of Fuso, what was more likely a reconnaissance mission, the two had competed in everything from number of enemies downed to promotions, during a small skirmish known as the ‘Fuso Sea Incident’.		Tomoko licked her lips lightly. Her sparring partner was 17, and the two of them had been rivals ever since they entered the Akeno Flight Academy in the same training cadre. Two years ago during the Neuroi invasion of Fuso, what was more likely a reconnaissance mission, the two had competed in everything from number of enemies downed to promotions, during a small skirmish known as the ‘Fuso Sea Incident’.

	They were the most competitive of rivals, but the second they landed from the air, they would become the best of friends, who would share all their worries and joys and sadnesses with each other.		They were the most competitive of rivals, but the second they landed from the air, they would become the best of friends, who would share all their worries and joys and sadnesses with each other.

Selkirk at 14:55, 12 September 2008

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Piroko at 04:39, 11 September 2008

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	With loud cries and shouts, the schoolgirls rushed towards Tomoko and Takeko.		With loud cries and shouts, the schoolgirls rushed towards Tomoko and Takeko.

	“I made some ~~dangos~~ for you!”		“I made some dango for you!”

	“I’ve made ohagi! Please have some!”		“I’ve made ohagi! Please have some!”

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	The first to make their way to the two were not the landing maintenance crews, nor the high-ranking visitors who had come to watch the test, but the throngs of female students clustered about the field.		The first to make their way to the two were not the landing maintenance crews, nor the high-ranking visitors who had come to watch the test, but the throngs of female students clustered about the field.

	The flight this time was also serving as the debut performance of the new unit. The airfield was filled to the brim with visitors chosen by lottery, who had come to watch the new Striker and the dashing mechanized air infantry in action. The majority of these tourists were in fact schoolgirls. They crowded around ~~the~~ Tomoko and Takeko, each of them pressing dozens of postcards into their hands.		The flight this time was also serving as the debut performance of the new unit. The airfield was filled to the brim with visitors chosen by lottery, who had come to watch the new Striker and the dashing mechanized air infantry in action. The majority of these tourists were in fact schoolgirls. They crowded around Tomoko and Takeko, each of them pressing dozens of postcards into their hands.

	“Ace Tomoko-sama! It’s Ace Tomoko-oneesama! Tomoe-Gozen of the Fuso Sea!”		“Ace Tomoko-sama! It’s Ace Tomoko-oneesama! Tomoe-Gozen of the Fuso Sea!”
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	“Fuso Empire, banzai!”		“Fuso Empire, banzai!”
	[[Image:SW_vol1c01_02.jpg\|thumb\|''The officers and troops lined up on the side of the ship saluted as one.'']]		[[Image:SW_vol1c01_02.jpg\|thumb\|''The officers and troops lined up on the side of the ship saluted as one.'']]
	Those cheers reached their climax as the witches of the ~~mechanize~~ air infantry appeared. As the focus of the European detachment, these infantrywomen were assembled in orderly ranks of Army and Navy troops. They saluted.		Those cheers reached their climax as the witches of the mechanized air infantry appeared. As the focus of the European detachment, these infantrywomen were assembled in orderly ranks of Army and Navy troops. They saluted.

	“Kiyaaaaaaaah! They’re so magnificent!”		“Kiyaaaaaaaah! They’re so magnificent!”
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	While the crowds cheered, the troops lined up in orderly ranks along the ship. They were the infantrywomen being deployed to Karlsland. Tomoko unfolded the newspaper in her hands. The words ‘Fuso Imperial Army and Navy to send troops to gasping Karlsland after Neuroi invasion’ were plastered in huge letters at the top of the front page, and much of the rest of the page was made up of long lists of the names of the infantrywomen who were being deployed. Finally, in small letters below that... a few lines were left to write ‘At the same time, a flight will be deployed to Suomus in Northern Europe’. Of course, the reporters had not bothered to write any names there, including Tomoko’s.		While the crowds cheered, the troops lined up in orderly ranks along the ship. They were the infantrywomen being deployed to Karlsland. Tomoko unfolded the newspaper in her hands. The words ‘Fuso Imperial Army and Navy to send troops to gasping Karlsland after Neuroi invasion’ were plastered in huge letters at the top of the front page, and much of the rest of the page was made up of long lists of the names of the infantrywomen who were being deployed. Finally, in small letters below that... a few lines were left to write ‘At the same time, a flight will be deployed to Suomus in Northern Europe’. Of course, the reporters had not bothered to write any names there, including Tomoko’s.

	“I guess that means I’m just part of an insignificant ~~‘squad’~~...”		“I guess that means I’m just part of an insignificant ‘flight’...”

	She mumbled to herself in a self-deprecating manner.		She mumbled to herself in a self-deprecating manner.
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	As Haruka said that, she rubbed the spot where she had bumped her head.		As Haruka said that, she rubbed the spot where she had bumped her head.

	“Isn’t it a bit unbelievable for someone in the Navy to hit ~~their~~ head on a pipe on a ship, and collapse?”		“Isn’t it a bit unbelievable for someone in the Navy to hit her head on a pipe on a ship, and collapse?”

	Tomoko glanced at Haruka, who was blushing and looking embarrassed, and she fell deeper into her misery.		Tomoko glanced at Haruka, who was blushing and looking embarrassed, and she fell deeper into her misery.

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	Below her skirt, shimmering whitely with a soft radiance, was the ‘Ki-27’.		Below her skirt, shimmering whitely with a soft radiance, was the ‘Ki-27’.

	It was a Striker unit which was adopted by the Fuso Imperial Army as the ~~Kyuunana-shiki (~~Type-97) Fighter Leg. With the rising trend in producing high-speed units, its top speed would never amount to much, though...		It was a Striker unit which was adopted by the Fuso Imperial Army as the Type-97 Fighter Leg. With the rising trend in producing high-speed units, its top speed would never amount to much, though...

	“With her superior speed, Shou-i~~(Pilot Officer)~~ Takeko will try to gain the initiative over ojou-sama by using a height advantage and repeatedly diving and climbing, won’t she.”		“With her superior speed, Shou-i Takeko will try to gain the initiative over ojou-sama by using a height advantage and repeatedly diving and climbing, won’t she.”

	“That would be the normal way of thinking, yes.” Tomoko replied absently.		“That would be the normal way of thinking, yes.” Tomoko replied absently.

	Her friend, Katoh Takeko would be using the newly adopted Ki-43... designated the ~~“Isshikisen” (~~Type-1 Fighter). Equipped with a 1000 spellpower ‘Ma-25’, it would have a speed advantage of nearly 30 km/h over Tomoko’s Ki-27.		Her friend, Katoh Takeko would be using the newly adopted Ki-43... designated the Type-1 Fighter. Equipped with a 1000 spellpower ‘Ma-25’, it would have a speed advantage of nearly 30 km/h over Tomoko’s Ki-27.

	“...Well then, follow my lead, just like we've always done in our dogfights .”		“...Well then, follow my lead, just like we've always done in our dogfights .”
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	It was a bold ascent, just like that of a powerful bird of prey, a nickname Takeko was often referred to as.		It was a bold ascent, just like that of a powerful bird of prey, a nickname Takeko was often referred to as.

	“Exactly what I’d expect from you, ‘Hayabusa’.” ~~(Falcon)~~		“Exactly what I’d expect from you, ‘Hayabusa’.”

	She most likely wanted to put pressure on Tomoko by increasing her altitude. Not letting her do that, Tomoko began her own climb a moment later. Like two intertwining dragons, their paths crisscrossed as they shot upwards into the sky.		She most likely wanted to put pressure on Tomoko by increasing her altitude. Not letting her do that, Tomoko began her own climb a moment later. Like two intertwining dragons, their paths crisscrossed as they shot upwards into the sky.
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	Akeno Flight Academy, office of the Director of Research.		Akeno Flight Academy, office of the Director of Research.

	Tomoko frowned at Chuu-sa ~~(Wing Commander)~~ Washizumi, who managed the various flight-related experiments at the academy. Chuu-sa Washizumi was a middle-aged man in his mid-forties, with a receding hairline. He was dressed in a khaki uniform, which looked uncomfortably tight for his heavyset frame.		Tomoko frowned at Chuu-sa Washizumi, who managed the various flight-related experiments at the academy. Chuu-sa Washizumi was a middle-aged man in his mid-forties, with a receding hairline. He was dressed in a khaki uniform, which looked uncomfortably tight for his heavyset frame.

	“Well, we only just received word from Operations Planning at Headquarters, that the official deployment decisions had been completed. It seems those reporters rushed here the second they received word from Public Relations at Ichigaya, just before noon. Those fellows are always quick to catch wind of any information.”		“Well, we only just received word from Operations Planning at Headquarters, that the official deployment decisions had been completed. It seems those reporters rushed here the second they received word from Public Relations at Ichigaya, just before noon. Those fellows are always quick to catch wind of any information.”
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	“...You’re a sailor, I suppose.”		“...You’re a sailor, I suppose.”

	“Y-Yes, ma’am! I’m Ittou Hikou Heisou ~~(Flight Sergeant)~~ Sakomizu Haruka, of the Fuso Imperial Navy Yokohama Air Squadron!”		“Y-Yes, ma’am! I’m Ittou Hikou Heisou Sakomizu Haruka, of the Fuso Imperial Navy Yokohama Air Squadron!”

	“Oh?”		“Oh?”