Talk:Date A Live:Volume 5 Epilogue - Revision history

RikiNutcase at 00:20, 18 October 2013

2013-10-18T00:20:11Z

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	that is the meaning in the sentence : "it would seems, your brother has manifested an Angel" ???		that is the meaning in the sentence : "it would seems, your brother has manifested an Angel" ???
	how 'Angel' connected to the first part of the sentence??		how 'Angel' connected to the first part of the sentence??

			.....what are you talking about....everything is there unless you skip contexts--[[User:RikiNutcase\|RikiNutcase]] ([[User talk:RikiNutcase\|talk]]) 19:20, 17 October 2013 (CDT)

Yoyoyo5678: note about - wrong translating or missing part

2013-10-17T20:51:45Z

note about - wrong translating or missing part

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	I'll be back later for the other lines. And I'm still not even done through the other parts of Chapter 5 XD --- [[User:Daylighter\|Daylighter]] ([[User talk:Daylighter\|talk]]) 8:05, 5 May, 2013 (GMT +8:00)		I'll be back later for the other lines. And I'm still not even done through the other parts of Chapter 5 XD --- [[User:Daylighter\|Daylighter]] ([[User talk:Daylighter\|talk]]) 8:05, 5 May, 2013 (GMT +8:00)

			that is the meaning in the sentence : "it would seems, your brother has manifested an Angel" ???
			how 'Angel' connected to the first part of the sentence??

Daylighter: OTL I always forget to format my suggeestions...

2013-05-05T12:10:15Z

OTL I always forget to format my suggeestions...

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	Re arranged and reworded stuff to make it better. Though I removed some of the detail in Edit [2], if you want you can just insert it.		Re arranged and reworded stuff to make it better. Though I removed some of the detail in Edit [2], if you want you can just insert it.
	[1] "" Shidou and the group who has departed from the hotel, was looking at the trees mowed down from the buss window while moving and reached the airport in order to go back to Tenguu city. ""
			''[1] "" Shidou and the group who has departed from the hotel, was looking at the trees mowed down from the buss window while moving and reached the airport in order to go back to Tenguu city. ""''

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	"" Shidou and the group had departed from the hotel were looking at the mowed-down trees from the Bus' window while moving towards the airport in order to go back to Tenguu city. ""		"" Shidou and the group had departed from the hotel were looking at the mowed-down trees from the Bus' window while moving towards the airport in order to go back to Tenguu city. ""

	Better?		Better?
	[2] ""Checking in their large luggage filled with clothes and stuff, and after being explained some important points, the students that was told to stand-by at the lobby during the time before the airplane takes off, although they should have bought enough already, they went scavenging for souvenir’s in sale spaces or was smacking their lips in the airport food court gourmet.""
			''[2] ""Checking in their large luggage filled with clothes and stuff, and after being explained some important points, the students that was told to stand-by at the lobby during the time before the airplane takes off, although they should have bought enough already, they went scavenging for souvenir’s in sale spaces or was smacking their lips in the airport food court gourmet.""''

	change to		change to

	""After the students listened to some important reminders and Checked-In there luggage, The students were told to stand-by at the lobby while waiting for their airplane to take off. Although they should have bought enough stuff already, they either went scavenging in the sale spaces or were smacking their lips in the Airport's food court gourmet.""		""After the students listened to some important reminders and Checked-In there luggage, The students were told to stand-by at the lobby while waiting for their airplane to take off. Although they should have bought enough stuff already, they either went scavenging in the sale spaces or were smacking their lips in the Airport's food court gourmet.""



	I'll be back later for the other lines. And I'm still not even done through the other parts of Chapter 5 XD --- [[User:Daylighter\|Daylighter]] ([[User talk:Daylighter\|talk]]) 8:05, 5 May, 2013 (GMT +8:00)		I'll be back later for the other lines. And I'm still not even done through the other parts of Chapter 5 XD --- [[User:Daylighter\|Daylighter]] ([[User talk:Daylighter\|talk]]) 8:05, 5 May, 2013 (GMT +8:00)

Daylighter: Restructured sentences suggestions.

2013-05-05T12:07:38Z

Restructured sentences suggestions.

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Re arranged and reworded stuff to make it better. Though I removed some of the detail in Edit [2], if you want you can just insert it.
[1] "" Shidou and the group who has departed from the hotel, was looking at the trees mowed down from the buss window while moving and reached the airport in order to go back to Tenguu city. ""

change to
"" Shidou and the group had departed from the hotel were looking at the mowed-down trees from the Bus' window while moving towards the airport in order to go back to Tenguu city. ""

Better?
[2] ""Checking in their large luggage filled with clothes and stuff, and after being explained some important points, the students that was told to stand-by at the lobby during the time before the airplane takes off, although they should have bought enough already, they went scavenging for souvenir’s in sale spaces or was smacking their lips in the airport food court gourmet.""

change to

""After the students listened to some important reminders and Checked-In there luggage, The students were told to stand-by at the lobby while waiting for their airplane to take off. Although they should have bought enough stuff already, they either went scavenging in the sale spaces or were smacking their lips in the Airport's food court gourmet.""

I'll be back later for the other lines. And I'm still not even done through the other parts of Chapter 5 XD --- [[User:Daylighter|Daylighter]] ([[User talk:Daylighter|talk]]) 8:05, 5 May, 2013 (GMT +8:00)