Talk:The Longing Of Shiina Ryo:Volume1 metamonogatari - Revision history

173.68.39.252 at 03:52, 17 November 2010

2010-11-17T03:52:34Z

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	* "Silence then happened" -> "Then it was silent" not sure how to explain. silence is there, it doesn't happen		* "Silence then happened" -> "Then it was silent" not sure how to explain. silence is there, it doesn't happen
	* "manically" -> "maniacal" I assume this was what you meant to say. manically is an adverb so it has to modify some verb but when you used "it", you were now referring to her "laughter" instead of her "laughing" so an adjective, "maniacal" works here. also in vs. on. not sure for other languages but in English, you're usually "in" a position/place rather than "on" a position/place (on would be for on top of something, like on a chair).		* "manically" -> "maniacal" I assume this was what you meant to say. manically is an adverb so it has to modify some verb but when you used "it", you were now referring to her "laughter" instead of her "laughing" so an adjective, "maniacal" works here. also in vs. on. not sure for other languages but in English, you're usually "in" a position/place rather than "on" a position/place (on would be for on top of something, like on a chair).
			* "stairs" refers to the refers to the stairs as a whole while the phrase "flight of stairs" refers to the number of steps.

173.68.39.252 at 03:10, 17 November 2010

2010-11-17T03:10:13Z

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	Edit explanation: made a few changes, some just word choice/spelling. with the "did she just imply taiyaki" part, you tried to say two different things at the same time so I just picked one (sidenote: I don't understand how what she just said relates to mandkind's evolution or computers).		Edit explanation: made a few changes, some just word choice/spelling. with the "did she just imply taiyaki" part, you tried to say two different things at the same time so I just picked one (sidenote: I don't understand how what she just said relates to mandkind's evolution or computers).
	* "Silence then happened" -> "Then it was silent" not sure how to explain. silence is there, it doesn't happen		* "Silence then happened" -> "Then it was silent" not sure how to explain. silence is there, it doesn't happen
			* "manically" -> "maniacal" I assume this was what you meant to say. manically is an adverb so it has to modify some verb but when you used "it", you were now referring to her "laughter" instead of her "laughing" so an adjective, "maniacal" works here. also in vs. on. not sure for other languages but in English, you're usually "in" a position/place rather than "on" a position/place (on would be for on top of something, like on a chair).

173.68.39.252 at 02:57, 17 November 2010

2010-11-17T02:57:22Z

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	Edit explanation: made a few changes, some just word choice/spelling. with the "did she just imply taiyaki" part, you tried to say two different things at the same time so I just picked one (sidenote: I don't understand how what she just said relates to mandkind's evolution or computers).		Edit explanation: made a few changes, some just word choice/spelling. with the "did she just imply taiyaki" part, you tried to say two different things at the same time so I just picked one (sidenote: I don't understand how what she just said relates to mandkind's evolution or computers).
			* "Silence then happened" -> "Then it was silent" not sure how to explain. silence is there, it doesn't happen

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2010-11-17T02:53:07Z

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Edit explanation: made a few changes, some just word choice/spelling. with the "did she just imply taiyaki" part, you tried to say two different things at the same time so I just picked one (sidenote: I don't understand how what she just said relates to mandkind's evolution or computers).