Tasogare-iro no Uta Tsukai:Volume2 3rd Play - Revision history

Rxls at 06:02, 24 May 2018

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	==3rd Play - I Wanted to Escape, But For Some Reason, I Couldn't Abandon It==		==3rd Play: I Wanted to Escape, But For Some Reason, I Couldn't Abandon It==

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	The sea wasn’t blue like it had been at noon, and the horizon was dyed by the sunset. It was just before night fell. Therefore, it was probably during this time when he felt the closest to the sun.		The sea wasn’t blue like it had been at noon, and the horizon was dyed by the sunset. It was just before night fell. Therefore, it was probably during this time when he felt the closest to the sun.

	Suddenly~~. Mixed~~ in with the ocean spray, the sharp sound of something ~~cutting~~ air reached his ears.		Suddenly, mixed in with the ocean spray, the sharp sound of something slicing through the air reached his ears.

	—Eh?		—Eh?

	Directly ahead ~~in the direction he had been going~~, the figure of a person appeared on the beach ~~which~~ he ~~had~~ thought was empty. As he advanced closer, the ~~sounds~~ of ~~wind sped up~~. It didn’t just become faster, but also more powerful.		Directly ahead of him, the figure of a person appeared on the beach he'd previously thought was empty. As he advanced closer, the tempo of the sound increased. It didn’t just become faster, but also more powerful.

	Deja-vu.		Deja-vu.
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	Seeming like she felt both troubled and embarrassed, with a complicated expression, Ada smiled bitterly.		Seeming like she felt both troubled and embarrassed, with a complicated expression, Ada smiled bitterly.

	“U-Um. ~~It is~~ special training with your spear again?”		“U-Um. Is it special training with your spear again?”

	“Half right and half wrong. But I guess you could interpret it that way.”		“Half right and half wrong. But I guess you could interpret it that way.”
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	No matter how long he gazed at the girl’s face, the depths of her wavering eyes hid something important and only reflected a distant scenery.		No matter how long he gazed at the girl’s face, the depths of her wavering eyes hid something important and only reflected a distant scenery.


	===Part 5===		===Part 5===

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	Stone statues. Or at least, that was what they first thought. That’s right. Decorating the front lobby were things resembling monuments.		Stone statues. Or at least, that was what they first thought. That’s right. Decorating the front lobby were things resembling monuments.

	~~But after~~ carefully ~~gazing~~ at them, Enne and Zessel realized that those were not simply stone sculptures. Even if they didn’t want to, they couldn’t help but understand. The sculptures ~~looked~~ too realistic, and too repulsive.		After gazing carefully at them however, Enne and Zessel realized that those were not simply stone sculptures. Even if they didn’t want to, they couldn’t help but understand. The sculptures were just too realistic, and too repulsive.

	They had read about it many times in things like fairy tales. But until now, they hadn’t believed for an instant that such a phenomenon could become reality.		They had read about it many times in things like fairy tales. But until now, they hadn’t believed for an instant that such a phenomenon could become reality.
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	—Before Enne and Zessel’s eyes were the staff members of the research institute, who had turned to stone.		—Before Enne and Zessel’s eyes were the staff members of the research institute, who had turned to stone.


	===Part 4===		===Part 4===

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	Gazing at him with a wry smile, Kate asked, amused. This course was one that his other classmates had all finished taking before summer vacation. Because of that, the left out Neight had ended up coming to one-on-one lessons with Kate.		Gazing at him with a wry smile, Kate asked, amused. This course was one that his other classmates had all finished taking before summer vacation. Because of that, the left out Neight had ended up coming to one-on-one lessons with Kate.

	“……Difficulty-wise, it really is ~~difficult~~.”		“……Difficulty-wise, it really is hard.”

	“I’m glad you’re being honest.”		“I’m glad you’re being honest.”
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	“I don’t want something like this to happen! I didn’t call out the Divine Bird for this purpose……”		“I don’t want something like this to happen! I didn’t call out the Divine Bird for this purpose……”

	She felt like the higher-grade students she had seen at the recital contest, who relied on power and violence. What would she do if she overestimated herself and her Recitation ended up spontaneously discharging? It wouldn’t be like the five-colored hydra back then, but there was definitely a chance that she could call out something dangerous ~~like that~~.		She felt like the higher-grade students she had seen at the recital contest, who relied on power and violence. What would she do if she overestimated herself and her Recitation ended up spontaneously discharging? It wouldn’t be like the five-colored hydra back then, but there was definitely a chance that she could call out something dangerous.

	When she had realized that possibility, she had felt cold and light-headed.		When she had realized that possibility, she had felt cold and light-headed.
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	“I love Kluele-san’s Recitations. They are more gentle and beautiful than anyone else’s. They’re lovely. ……That’s why, please, don’t say that you can’t believe in yourself.”		“I love Kluele-san’s Recitations. They are more gentle and beautiful than anyone else’s. They’re lovely. ……That’s why, please, don’t say that you can’t believe in yourself.”

	He spoke in a stammering manner, ~~in a way that couldn’t be called flowing smoothly~~. ~~But even~~ so, he tried his best to convey ~~as much of~~ his feelings as ~~possible~~. And those feelings reached her.		He spoke in a stammering manner, the flow of his words anything but smooth. Even so, he tried his best to convey his feelings as strongly as he could..... And those feelings reached her.

	—I see.		—I see.
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	So you believe in me that much.		So you believe in me that much.

	~~Along with a small prickling pain~~, something blossomed in her chest. ~~It was painful~~ at first, a strange feeling that couldn’t be put into words~~. But~~ that feeling gradually changed into a gentle warmth.		With an odd sensation, something blossomed in her chest. Painful at first, it was a strange feeling that couldn’t be put into words, but that feeling gradually changed into a gentle warmth.

	I had always thought that I wanted to do what I could for you. ……But, I was wrong. I was actually making you worry so much about me, wasn’t I?		I had always thought that I wanted to do what I could for you. ……But, I was wrong. I was actually making you worry so much about me, wasn’t I?
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	“Um, could it be that you’ve forgotten what happened that time?”		“Um, could it be that you’ve forgotten what happened that time?”

	Neight looked up ~~with lonely eyes~~ at her, who had been silent all this time.		With lonely eyes Neight looked up at her, who had been silent all this time.

	“Don’t be silly. There’s no way I would forget.”		“Don’t be silly. There’s no way I would forget.”
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	“Come on, we have to hurry and eat lunch. After all, aren’t we going to play at the beach with everyone else in our class this afternoon?”		“Come on, we have to hurry and eat lunch. After all, aren’t we going to play at the beach with everyone else in our class this afternoon?”


	===Part 3===		===Part 3===

Arczyx at 06:16, 31 July 2013

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	Looking down at her page, the student muttered.		Looking down at her page, the student muttered.

	“It was fine to only write about [{{Furigana\|Arzus\|White}}], so isn’t it already excellent that you can write about the other colors ~~also~~?”		“It was fine to only write about [{{Furigana\|Arzus\|White}}], so isn’t it already excellent that you can write about the other colors as well?”

	“……Umm, but that’s the problem, Sensei.”		“……Umm, but that’s the problem, Sensei.”
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	The student finally raised her head. Her tanned, boyish features gazed straight at Enne.		The student finally raised her head. Her tanned, boyish features gazed straight at Enne.

	“I wrote about all the colors other than [{{Furigana\|Arzus\|White}}]. But I can’t remember what to write for the required one, [{{Furigana\|Arzus\|White}}].”		“I wrote about all the colors other than [{{Furigana\|Arzus\|White}}]. But I can’t remember what to write for the required one, [{{Furigana\|Arzus\|White}}].”

	—Ada Yung.		—Ada Yung.
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	“Well. Since you’ve written so much already, just add something like ‘……Compared to what’s written above, there are few of [{{Furigana\|Arzus\|White’s}}] small spirits that have offensive characteristics.’ You can hand it in like that.”		“Well. Since you’ve written so much already, just add something like ‘……Compared to what’s written above, there are few of [{{Furigana\|Arzus\|White’s}}] small spirits that have offensive characteristics.’ You can hand it in like that.”

	“Ah, I see! So something like that works ~~also~~!”		“Ah, I see! So something like that also works!”

	Nodding vigorously, the girl turned her focus back to the pages.		Nodding vigorously, the girl turned her focus back to the pages.
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	“Eh?”		“Eh?”

	“If that was the case, then there would be no reason for Zessel-sensei to come ~~also~~. You said it was at the last minute, so I have to accept that. Sure, there is a teacher in charge of first-year students who didn’t come to summer school this time, but that teacher used to talk happily about coming on this trip, so it doesn’t make sense that the teacher’s health is the reason.”		“If that was the case, then there would be no reason for Zessel-sensei to come as well. You said it was at the last minute, so I have to accept that. Sure, there is a teacher in charge of first-year students who didn’t come to summer school this time, but that teacher used to talk happily about coming on this trip, so it doesn’t make sense that the teacher’s health is the reason.”

	Her thorough reasoning put Enne at a loss for words. As she was arranging it with Zessel, she had certainly thought of this. But, she didn’t think there would be a student who would think this deeply about it in the first place. In her mind, she had underestimated them.		Her thorough reasoning put Enne at a loss for words. As she was arranging it with Zessel, she had certainly thought of this. But, she didn’t think there would be a student who would think this deeply about it in the first place. In her mind, she had underestimated them.
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	“Kululu, you didn’t come even though it was already lunchtime, so we were looking for you.”		“Kululu, you didn’t come even though it was already lunchtime, so we were looking for you.”

	“Eh, it’s ~~already~~ that time?”		“Eh, it’s that time already?”

	Rubbing her eyes, Kluele stepped away from the beam she had been leaning against.		Rubbing her eyes, Kluele stepped away from the beam she had been leaning against.
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	In the afternoon, the male students had all planned to go to the beach together during their free time. When they had gathered, amongst almost all of the students, Neight had been nowhere to be seen.		In the afternoon, the male students had all planned to go to the beach together during their free time. When they had gathered, amongst almost all of the students, Neight had been nowhere to be seen.

	When all of the boys ~~who~~ Ouma gathered had gone looking for him— They had suddenly heard a grating shriek. When they went to take a look…… There was the figure of a boy whose limbs had been bound by several female students and was being dragged far away.		When all of the boys Ouma gathered had gone looking for him— They had suddenly heard a grating shriek. When they went to take a look…… There was the figure of a boy whose limbs had been bound by several female students and was being dragged far away.

	Although they had tried negotiating with the kidnappers for the hostage, unfortunately, the girls’ true intention didn’t seem to be a ransom, but the boy himself.		Although they had tried negotiating with the kidnappers for the hostage, unfortunately, the girls’ true intention didn’t seem to be a ransom, but the boy himself.
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	They had read about it many times in things like fairy tales. But until now, they hadn’t believed for an instant that such a phenomenon could become reality.		They had read about it many times in things like fairy tales. But until now, they hadn’t believed for an instant that such a phenomenon could become reality.

	The features of the stone statue looked afraid. The forms of the stone sculptures looked like they were running for their lives.		The features of the stone statue looked afraid. The forms of the stone sculptures looked like they were running for their lives.

	—Before Enne and Zessel’s eyes were the staff members of the research institute, who had turned to stone.		—Before Enne and Zessel’s eyes were the staff members of the research institute, who had turned to stone.

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	—Their destination was the place where the <Egg> had been manufactured, Kelberk Research Institute.		—Their destination was the place where the <Egg> had been manufactured, Kelberk Research Institute.


	===Part 2===		===Part 2===

Mystrael at 06:30, 29 June 2013

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	Ten-odd years? She should have joined the spear-wielding club after entering Tremia Academy, and not more than half a year should have passed since then.		Ten-odd years? She should have joined the spear-wielding club after entering Tremia Academy, and not more than half a year should have passed since then.

	“For Chibi-kun, it’s that, right? You want to become a Reciter because you want to complete the Recitation that your mother left you.”		“For Chibi-kun, it’s because of that, right? You want to become a Reciter because you want to complete the Recitation that your mother left you.”

	“Yes. I haven’t decided whether I should become a Reciter or what, but first I want to be able to conduct Mother’s Recitation.”		“Yes. I haven’t decided whether I should become a Reciter or what, but first I want to be able to conduct Mother’s Recitation.”
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	Her hoarse voice softly flowed out from her small lips.		Her hoarse voice softly flowed out from her small lips.

	“For just a little while, I wanted to try going down a path other than what my heritage decided for me. The truth is, my mother has qualifications as a Reciter, so I was interested in Recitation ~~Schools~~ ever since I was young.”		“For just a little while, I wanted to try going down a path other than what my heritage decided for me. The truth is, my mother has qualifications as a Reciter, so I was interested in Recitation schools ever since I was young.”

	“……I see.”		“……I see.”

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	As if Zessel seemed happy, his voice rose in pitch.		As if Zessel seemed happy, his voice rose in pitch.

	“Next year at this time, she will undoubtedly surpass other students of higher grades and become one of the top ‘{{Furigana\|Keinez\|Red}}’ students. No, that might even happen in the middle of this year instead of next year. Anyways, in my point of view it’s slightly scary. She’s just an unpolished gem.”		“Next year at this time, she will undoubtedly surpass other students of higher grades and become one of the top [{{Furigana\|Keinez\|Red}}] students. No, that might even happen in the middle of this year instead of next year. Anyways, in my point of view it’s slightly scary. She’s just an unpolished gem.”

	“As a teacher, isn’t this a good time to show off your skill?”		“As a teacher, isn’t this a good time to show off your skill?”

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Mystrael at 20:29, 22 June 2013

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	There was just one thing, one thing that he couldn’t understand at all.		There was just one thing, one thing that he couldn’t understand at all.

	“But if that’s so, why do you still ~~practice~~ with the {{Furigana\|Exorcist Spear\|Gil}} ~~even now~~?”		“But if that’s so, why are you still practicing like this with the {{Furigana\|Exorcist Spear\|Gil}}?”

	That’s right. Why? With trembling lips, Ada muttered to herself as if she were speaking a soliloquy.		That’s right. Why? With trembling lips, Ada muttered to herself as if she were speaking a soliloquy.

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	“No, it’s not really a bad thing to write.”		“No, it’s not really a bad thing to write.”

	She flipped through the pages. Things about the ~~recited~~ creatures of other Recitation colors were written there. All of them consisted of detailed descriptions. They also didn’t mention catalysts or <{{Furigana\|Songs of Praise\|Oratorios}}>. It was simply a thorough, overwhelming list of biological data.		She flipped through the pages. Things about the Recited creatures of other Recitation colors were written there. All of them consisted of detailed descriptions. They also didn’t mention catalysts or <{{Furigana\|Songs of Praise\|Oratorios}}>. It was simply a thorough, overwhelming list of biological data.

	Perhaps she didn’t have enough time to write about [{{Furigana\|Arzus\|White}}]?		Perhaps she didn’t have enough time to write about [{{Furigana\|Arzus\|White}}]?
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	{{Furigana\|Small red spirits\|Salamandes}}, {{Furigana\|Small green spirits\|Aerials}}.		{{Furigana\|Small red spirits\|Salamandes}}, {{Furigana\|Small green spirits\|Aerials}}.

	“Everything written on here is about offensive ~~recited~~ creatures, isn’t it?”		“Everything written on here is about offensive Recited creatures, isn’t it?”

	The girl gave no reply. More than anything, her silence confirmed Enne’s guess.		The girl gave no reply. More than anything, her silence confirmed Enne’s guess.
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	That’s right. Pegasi and unicorns included in [{{Furigana\|Arzus’s\|White’s}}] Second Scale Recitations did not possess offensive traits. Therefore, she hadn’t learned about them.		That’s right. Pegasi and unicorns included in [{{Furigana\|Arzus’s\|White’s}}] Second Scale Recitations did not possess offensive traits. Therefore, she hadn’t learned about them.

	It was like Enne had thought. All of this girl’s knowledge of ~~recited~~ creatures was for the sake of fighting against them.		It was like Enne had thought. All of this girl’s knowledge of Recited creatures was for the sake of fighting against them.

	“Must I write about [{{Furigana\|Arzus\|White}}]?”		“Must I write about [{{Furigana\|Arzus\|White}}]?”
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	{{Furigana\|Exorcists\|Gillshe}}— They were people who had the closest connection to Reciters but at the same time were also complete opposites.		{{Furigana\|Exorcists\|Gillshe}}— They were people who had the closest connection to Reciters but at the same time were also complete opposites.

	[Nussis], also called the Reverse Song, is a technique to send back ~~recited~~ creatures. It can be conducted by holding a catalyst and directly touching the creature. For example, in the incident during the recital contest, in order to save Enne, Xins had used the Reverse Song by sacrificing his left arm. That technique was always dangerous.		[Nussis], also called the Reverse Song, is a technique to send back Recited creatures. It can be conducted by holding a catalyst and directly touching the creature. For example, in the incident during the recital contest, in order to save Enne, Xins had used the Reverse Song by sacrificing his left arm. That technique was always dangerous.

	“Do you also have an {{Furigana\|Exorcist Spear\|Gil}}?”		“Do you also have an {{Furigana\|Exorcist Spear\|Gil}}?”
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	He recalled the mountains of ash in the hallway. Had they been hiding inside? But there was one thing he couldn’t understand. What was the reason behind going so far to prevent intruders from leaving?		He recalled the mountains of ash in the hallway. Had they been hiding inside? But there was one thing he couldn’t understand. What was the reason behind going so far to prevent intruders from leaving?

	If their purpose had been to prevent people from entering the research institute, then there would be no need to hide these ~~recited~~ creatures. They should have acted threatening from the very beginning, in the entrance hall. Rather, it seemed like they had been inviting people inside the research institute—		If their purpose had been to prevent people from entering the research institute, then there would be no need to hide these Recited creatures. They should have acted threatening from the very beginning, in the entrance hall. Rather, it seemed like they had been inviting people inside the research institute—

	“……I see.”		“……I see.”