Tsukumodo:Volume 1 Present - Revision history

EusthEnoptEron at 09:35, 22 May 2014

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	Tokiya and I were working together until closing time like we always do.		Tokiya and I were working together until closing time like we always do.

	Towako-san is away to acquire Relics again, and there were next to no customers as usual, so there was pretty much nothing to do.		Towako-san was away to acquire Relics again, and there were next to no customers as usual, so there was pretty much nothing to do.

	We really don't get many customers.		We really don't get many customers.

	I'm convinced that we ought to brighten both the interior and exterior to make it more appealing to customers. I also think it would be best if we included Asian merchandise and luxury items ~~into~~ our range of goods instead of sticking to forgeries of Relics.		I'm convinced that we ought to brighten both the interior and exterior to make it more appealing to customers. I also think it would be best if we included Asian merchandise and luxury items in our range of goods instead of sticking to forgeries of Relics.

	When I suggested this to Towako-san, she told me there was no need for it. Apparently, she didn't have any plans to make her shop flourish, despite her concern over its sales figures.		When I suggested this to Towako-san, she told me there was no need for it. Apparently, she didn't have any plans to make her shop flourish, despite her concern over its sales figures.
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	I also wondered if today was my birthday, but it isn't.		I also wondered if today was my birthday, but it isn't.

	Labor Thanksgivng Day<ref>Labor Thanksgiving Day (勤労感謝の日) is a national holiday in Japan. It takes place annually on November 23. The law establishing the holiday cites it as an occasion for commemorating labor and production and giving one another thanks. [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Labor_Thanksgiving_Day wikipedia.org]</ref>? Not really. To begin with, there's nothing he should thankful about.		Labor Thanksgivng Day<ref>Labor Thanksgiving Day (勤労感謝の日) is a national holiday in Japan. It takes place annually on November 23. The law establishing the holiday cites it as an occasion for commemorating labor and production and giving one another thanks. [http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Labor_Thanksgiving_Day wikipedia.org]</ref>? Not really. To begin with, there's nothing he should be thankful about.

	Mother's Day? I'm not his mother. Father's Day... goes without saying.		Mother's Day? I'm not his mother. Father's Day... goes without saying.
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	"As I said, never mind."		"As I said, never mind."

	"Whew, seeing a new side of my Saki-chan just set me up. I'm completely satisfied. Right, I'll leave the stage to the young folks now! I won't be back for three days. I can even keep away longer if I'd be intruding?"		"Whew, seeing a new side of my Saki-chan just set me up. I'm completely satisfied. Right, I'll leave the stage to the young folks now! I won't be back for three days. I can even keep away longer if I'd be intruding...?"

	"I'm awaiting an early return."		"I'm awaiting an early return."
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	"Don't say it! The important thing is to believe. Oh, that brings back memories of the time when I had no money and had to cut corners wherever possible."		"Don't say it! The important thing is to believe. Oh, that brings back memories of the time when I had no money and had to cut corners wherever possible."

	Tokiya looked out of the window with a nostalgic glance. I wondered how he had gotten by before earning money here<!-- it's more like "how he lived" as opposed to "what methods he used"-->, but I the thought became quite horrifying, so I stopped.		Tokiya looked out of the window with a nostalgic glance. I wondered how he had gotten by before earning money here<!-- it's more like "how he lived" as opposed to "what methods he used"-->, but the thought became quite horrifying, so I stopped.

	''But he's right, now that I think of it. If he has to spend his earnings the same day, he can't even buy himself a meal for tomorrow because it would disappear.''		''But he's right, now that I think of it. If he has to spend his earnings the same day, he can't even buy himself a meal for tomorrow because it would disappear.''
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	"Do you want me to lend you some money?"		"Do you want me to lend you some money?"

	"No, no need for that. I would borrow some if the situation was ''really'' hopeless, but if I only have to pass on my breakfast and lunch, I can do. That's nothing compared to earlier days when I had nothing to eat for three days and lived off water alone at times. For someone used to poverty, leaving out one or two meals is a piece of cake. If a poor guy cuts down on anything, its his food expenses!"		"No, no need for that. I would borrow some if the situation was ''really'' hopeless, but if I only have to pass on my breakfast and lunch, I can make do. That's nothing compared to earlier days when I had nothing to eat for three days and lived off water alone at times. For someone used to poverty, leaving out one or two meals is a piece of cake. If a poor guy cuts down on anything, its his food expenses!"

	"That's nothing to brag about!"		"That's nothing to brag about!"
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	"Saki?"		"Saki?"

	At first I wondered if I was late for work, but my alarm clock inside ~~was indicating~~ 9am. It didn't seem to have stopped, either.		At first I wondered if I was late for work, but my alarm clock inside indicated 9am. It didn't seem to have stopped, either.

	"It's nine in the morning, isn't it?" I asked.		"It's nine in the morning, isn't it?" I asked.
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	"What are you doing here?"		"What are you doing here?"

	"Nothing in particular?"		"Nothing in particular."

	I peeked in the glass case as she had been doing. Inside I found various reasonably-priced accessories shaped like stars, swords, roses and so on.		I peeked in the glass case as she had been doing. Inside I found various reasonably-priced accessories shaped like stars, swords, roses and so on.
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	"Bed hair, huh."		"Bed hair, huh."

	I took a look at the glass case ~~glass~~ and then looked past it. There was a sign hanging from the ceiling right over there that indicated the way to the ladies room.		I took a look at the glass case and then looked past it. There was a sign hanging from the ceiling right over there that indicated the way to the ladies room.

	"Can I help you?"		"Can I help you?"

EusthEnoptEron at 18:48, 29 April 2014

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	It was a wallet. A normal brown leather wallet like you can get at any store. Knowing that Saki's was black, I supposed that it was Towako-sans'.		It was a wallet. A normal brown leather wallet like you can get at any store. Knowing that Saki's was black, I supposed that it was Towako-sans'.

	~~While wondering~~ how ~~it was that~~ she could ~~only~~ forget her wallet when she was making purchases, I took a peek at its contents. It was completely empty.		Dumbfounded how she could forget her wallet when she was making purchases, I took a peek at its contents. It was completely empty; no credit cards or cash slips even, let alone money.

	~~Of course there was~~ no ~~money, but there weren't any~~ credit cards or cash slips ~~either~~.

	Apparently, she had bought a new one and left the old one here.		Apparently, she had bought a new one and left the old one here.
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	I was going to need a new wallet when I bid farewell to the Relic. Of course I was interested in a normal, proper one that was also cheap. I hoped to spend about 1000 yen.		I was going to need a new wallet when I bid farewell to the Relic. Of course I was interested in a normal, proper one that was also cheap. I hoped to spend about 1000 yen.

	After looking up at the elevator, I ~~headed to~~ the floor with general merchandise.		After looking up at the elevator, I entered it and selected the floor with general merchandise.

	There was also a floor with fashion for gentlemen and accessories, but they only carried branded stuff that was out of my reach and not my style anyway.<!-- this is a little different usage between JP and EN. In a department store, the whole store is one business (Harrod's is the archetype), as distinct from a shopping mall which has many different vendors (shops) on its premises. One doesn't call Harrod's a shop (too big), but one doesn't call its divisions shops either. The noun 'shop' is a small mercantile or industrial enterprise, among other things. So, if we're going with it being a ''department store'' (=store with different departments in it) and not an indoor mall, then we have to change the sections to 'floors,' 'counters,' etc. -ss -->		There was also a floor with fashion for gentlemen and accessories, but they only carried branded stuff that was out of my reach and not my style anyway.<!-- this is a little different usage between JP and EN. In a department store, the whole store is one business (Harrod's is the archetype), as distinct from a shopping mall which has many different vendors (shops) on its premises. One doesn't call Harrod's a shop (too big), but one doesn't call its divisions shops either. The noun 'shop' is a small mercantile or industrial enterprise, among other things. So, if we're going with it being a ''department store'' (=store with different departments in it) and not an indoor mall, then we have to change the sections to 'floors,' 'counters,' etc. -ss -->

EusthEnoptEron at 22:46, 17 April 2014

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	Looked at in that light, it was no big deal to endure an empty stomach for one more day.		Looked at in that light, it was no big deal to endure an empty stomach for one more day.

	''It'll be time for work in no time if I just hang around in my crumbly 9 square feet apartment.''<!-- go ahead and put the tatami measure and a footnote in. After 四畳半神話大系 we have an excuse for a note. -ss --><!-- TL question: crumbly, crumbling, or crummy? -ss -->		''It'll be time for work in no time if I just hang around in my crumbly 80 square feet apartment.''<!-- go ahead and put the tatami measure and a footnote in. After 四畳半神話大系 we have an excuse for a note. -ss --><!-- TL question: crumbly, crumbling, or crummy? -ss -->

	As I was thinking that, someone knocked on the door.		As I was thinking that, someone knocked on the door.

Idiffer at 20:33, 17 April 2014

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	I retreated into my room without listening.		I retreated into my room without listening.

	After switching on the light ~~and~~ took a look in the mirror. A dress, a white hat, a pair of red glasses, a picture watch—in there was a Saki wearing things that didn't suit her at all.		After switching on the light I took a look in the mirror. A dress, a white hat, a pair of red glasses, a picture watch—in there was a Saki wearing things that didn't suit her at all.

	I felt like laughing. But I couldn't.		I felt like laughing. But I couldn't.

Idiffer at 16:25, 17 April 2014

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	He took out the Relic wallet, took out its contents, and hatefully said, "You caused me a lot of trouble!"		He took out the Relic wallet, took out its contents, and hatefully said, "You caused me a lot of trouble!"

	After putting it on a shelf, he unboxed the one had given him. It was a folding black leather wallet.		After putting it on a shelf, he unboxed the one I had given him. It was a folding black leather wallet.

	He then put his money into his new wallet.		He then put his money into his new wallet.

EusthEnoptEron at 22:59, 4 December 2012

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	<i>What should I say when I hand it over? It will seem strange if I just give it to her out of the blue. She might get the wrong idea. Not that I'm used to giving presents to girls. In fact, it's a first. No, this may be a present, but it's not a present. It's only "sort of a present". But it's still a present.		<i>What should I say when I hand it over? It will seem strange if I just give it to her out of the blue. She might get the wrong idea. Not that I'm used to giving presents to girls. In fact, it's a first. No, this may be a present, but it's not a present. It's only "sort of a present". But it's still a present.

	I just completely tensed up.</u>		I just completely tensed up.</i>

	Suddenly, the door opened and Saki appeared.		Suddenly, the door opened and Saki appeared.

EusthEnoptEron at 22:58, 4 December 2012

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EusthEnoptEron: "right" doesn't sound right.

2012-09-08T09:12:39Z

"right" doesn't sound right.

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	I nodded instinctively, although I had no idea what he had been talking about.		I nodded instinctively, although I had no idea what he had been talking about.

	"Anyway, that's all there is to it, ~~right~~?" he said and left, perhaps embarrassed.		"Anyway, that's all there is to it, okay?" he said and left, perhaps embarrassed.

	Left alone, I was at a loss of what to do with the present which—by his words—he had given me and kept standing in one spot.		Left alone, I was at a loss of what to do with the present which—by his words—he had given me and kept standing in one spot.
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	(All right! Looks like she understood.)		(All right! Looks like she understood.)

	"Anyway, that's all there is to it, ~~right~~?" I said and left.		"Anyway, that's all there is to it, okay?" I said and left.

Senile seinen at 01:30, 26 July 2012

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	On my return from buying Tokiya's wallet, a glass case in a silver accessory store happened to catch my eye. Inside was a range of different accessories. But only that pendant drew my interest.		On my return from buying Tokiya's wallet, a glass case in a silver accessory store happened to catch my eye. Inside was a range of different accessories. But only that pendant drew my interest.

	All his presents so far hadn't been to my taste, but this one was a bull's eye.<!-- can we even use "strike" like this? --><!-- nope - it sounds like a miss in baseball. You want 'bullseye' -ss -->		All his presents so far hadn't been to my taste, but this one was a bull's eye.<!-- can we even use "strike" like this? --><!-- nope - it sounds like a miss in baseball. You want 'bullseye.' 'Spot on' would also work, but is UK only. -ss -->

	Suddenly, the pendulum clock chimed midnight.		Suddenly, the pendulum clock chimed midnight.

Senile seinen: cleaned up some redundant comments, tightened up more prose, asked more questions.

2012-07-26T01:04:07Z

cleaned up some redundant comments, tightened up more prose, asked more questions.

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