Zero no Tsukaima:Volume16 Chapter1 - Revision history

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	Louise growled. She was still worried about what Kirche had just said.		Louise growled. She was still worried about what Kirche had just said.

	''It's true that Saito has become manlier. He probably became like that through all his experiences. He sometimes goes loose, but he is a very responsible vice commander of the Ondine.		''It's true that Saito has become manlier. He probably became like that through all his experiences. He sometimes goes loose, but he is a very responsible vice commander of the Ondine. ''

	Maybe I’m troubled...'' Louise felt uncertain.		''Maybe I’m troubled...'' Louise felt uncertain.

	''That doesn't mean I'm letting him do what he wants with me. I'm still an aristocrat after all.		''That doesn't mean I'm letting him do what he wants with me. I'm still an aristocrat after all.''

	The one thing I cannot be is a loose woman.		''The one thing I cannot be is a loose woman.''

	But look at me right now. I just let Saito do anything with me.''		''But look at me right now. I just let Saito do anything with me.''

	Louise, after imagining the "do anything with me" part became red.		Louise, after imagining the "do anything with me" part became red.

	We finally got peace. So I should take my time with those things.		''We finally got peace. So I should take my time with those things.''

	Saito felt awkward after seeing Louise troubled, then blushed and called for Louise, but as he did so...		Saito felt awkward after seeing Louise troubled, then blushed and called for Louise, but as he did so...
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	Far away, she saw Tiffania. In front of her were many guys requesting a dance. Nobody feared her for being a half elf now. Although Louise and Saito were the only ones that knew that Tiffania is someone that has the blood of the Albion royalty, the male students just couldn't resist her huge bust and her nice personality.		Far away, she saw Tiffania. In front of her were many guys requesting a dance. Nobody feared her for being a half elf now. Although Louise and Saito were the only ones that knew that Tiffania is someone that has the blood of the Albion royalty, the male students just couldn't resist her huge bust and her nice personality.
	''
	I commend their effort, but none of them is fitting for Tiffania.''		''I commend their effort, but none of them is fitting for Tiffania.''

	Tiffania's beauty is just amazing, even a girl like Louise ends up looking at her and admitting it.		Tiffania's beauty is just amazing, even a girl like Louise ends up looking at her and admitting it.

	''Only some legendary person would actually fit next to Tiffania.		''Only some legendary person would actually fit next to Tiffania.''

			''Then what about me?''

	~~Then what about me?~~
	''
	Louise asked herself.		Louise asked herself.

	''Do I fit with the hero of Tristain?		''Do I fit with the hero of Tristain?''

	Now, Saito's achievements for Tristain are immeasurable. In the war against Gallia, Saito was pretty much fighting solo. Normally, he shouldn't only be a Chevalier, but probably a baron. His achievements aren't inferior to what the legendary heroes in history had done.		''Now, Saito's achievements for Tristain are immeasurable. In the war against Gallia, Saito was pretty much fighting solo. Normally, he shouldn't only be a Chevalier, but probably a baron. His achievements aren't inferior to what the legendary heroes in history had done.''

	In comparison to that, what am I? Aren't I just pulling Saito behind by not being true to my feelings?		''In comparison to that, what am I? Aren't I just pulling Saito behind by not being true to my feelings?''

	Did I do enough to gain a certificate of a priest?''		''Did I do enough to gain a certificate of a priest?''

	One part of Louise answered back no. ''Even though Saito didn't receive anything...''		One part of Louise answered back no. ''Even though Saito didn't receive anything...''

	Thinking that, her happiness started to fade away.		Thinking that, her happiness started to fade away.
	''
	Am I a match for Saito?''		''Am I a match for Saito?''

	"What's wrong?"		"What's wrong?"
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	Louise shook her head.		Louise shook her head.

	''I finally gained peace. I shouldn't worry too much. Saito is next to me anyways.		''I finally gained peace. I shouldn't worry too much. Saito is next to me anyways.''

	And... he also said he'll live with me after buying land after graduating.		''And... he also said he'll live with me after buying land after graduating.''

	Worrying might be rude to Saito who's doing that much for me.''		''Worrying might be rude to Saito who's doing that much for me.''

	"I'm fine, really. Let's continue dancing."		"I'm fine, really. Let's continue dancing."
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	Saito, calming down, started thinking carefully.		Saito, calming down, started thinking carefully.
	''
	How did I fail?''		''How did I fail?''

	"It's small."		"It's small."
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	Louise expressed, lacking her usual courage.		Louise expressed, lacking her usual courage.

	''Oh yeah, I've gotten into a lot of trouble because of what I say about her breasts.		''Oh yeah, I've gotten into a lot of trouble because of what I say about her breasts.''

	I must not tell, indirectly or not, that hers are small. I can't say things like "I agree". Absolutely not.''		''I must not tell, indirectly or not, that hers are small. I can't say things like "I agree". Absolutely not.''

	"I don't know about other people's, but I think yours are quite normal."		"I don't know about other people's, but I think yours are quite normal."
	''
	They aren’t quite normal at all, but...''		''They aren’t quite normal at all, but...''

	"Then that's fine."		"Then that's fine."
	''
	~~First gate, cleared.~~

	~~Next possible routes to failure… definitely Malicorne. However, he~~'~~s not here~~, ~~since it~~'~~s the girls~~' ~~dorm.~~		''First gate, cleared.''

	~~Second gate~~, ~~cleared~~.		''Next possible routes to failure… definitely Malicorne. However, he's not here, since it's the girls' dorm.''

	~~Now~~, ~~there must have been something else.~~.~~. I can~~'~~t remember. Whatever, it~~'~~ll work out somehow.~~		''Second gate, cleared.''

	So, I should start my engine?''		''Now, there must have been something else... I can't remember. Whatever, it'll work out somehow.''

			''So, I should start my engine?''

	Something unidentifiable exploded inside Saito's head.		Something unidentifiable exploded inside Saito's head.
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	''Should I say it?'' The devil part of him asked. The rational part tried to stop Saito's inner devil.		''Should I say it?'' The devil part of him asked. The rational part tried to stop Saito's inner devil.
	''
	~~No, it won't work out. She'll definitely look at me like I’m a creep.~~

	B-but... that's my dream. If I don't do what I want to do, it's like rebelling against god, who created us to be rational.''		''No, it won't work out. She'll definitely look at me like I’m a creep.''

			''B-but... that's my dream. If I don't do what I want to do, it's like rebelling against god, who created us to be rational.''

	A sound of a hammer arose inside his head.		A sound of a hammer arose inside his head.
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	''But...'' Louise thought hard.		''But...'' Louise thought hard.

	Even though he's like this right now, it was fun dancing with him. I don't know why, but I apparently have to be with this fool of a guy...		''Even though he's like this right now, it was fun dancing with him. I don't know why, but I apparently have to be with this fool of a guy...''

	"Say it, please say it. Sorry."		"Say it, please say it. Sorry."

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Tidying up

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	However, this ended. In the battle of Carcassonne, King Joseph died fighting. In an instant, a new queen was crowned and the war was over.		However, this ended. In the battle of Carcassonne, King Joseph died fighting. In an instant, a new queen was crowned and the war was over.

	"We fell in horror. I didn't want to become ashes, I mean, ~~didn~~'t you want to live longer? If I had become ashes, I wouldn't have been able to pet female hips. That's something I can't live without. All of you here also feel the same way, right?"		"We fell in horror. I didn't want to become ashes, I mean, don't you want to live longer? If I had become ashes, I wouldn't have been able to pet female hips. That's something I can't live without. All of you here also feel the same way, right?"

	The hall ~~becomes~~ silent. Osman, after faking a cough, continued.		The hall became silent. Osman, after faking a cough, continued.

	"However, god did not leave us! If there's a crazy king, there must be a hero! If there's a crazy conspiracy, then there's a justice that would defeat it! These people, are the ones who destroyed the ambition of that crazy king!"		"However, god did not leave us! If there's a crazy king, there must be a hero! If there's a crazy conspiracy, then there's a justice that would defeat it! These people, are the ones who destroyed the ambition of that crazy king!"

Neojimmy6: Haha! I've fixed a bunch of errors I found, trying to improve this text. I might do so for other texts as well. If you find any errors I didn't see(I'm sure there are a lot), please do. Thank you!

2012-03-08T03:27:49Z

Haha! I've fixed a bunch of errors I found, trying to improve this text. I might do so for other texts as well. If you find any errors I didn't see(I'm sure there are a lot), please do. Thank you!

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148.87.19.202 at 23:51, 23 February 2012

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	"You know already. I was assigned Saito's maid by her majesty. So if you dismiss me or fire me, it's as if telling her majesty that you are about to rebel."		"You know already. I was assigned Saito's maid by her majesty. So if you dismiss me or fire me, it's as if telling her majesty that you are about to rebel."

	Louise ~~shaked~~. It's true, Louise alone couldn't dismiss Siesta.		Louise shook. It's true, Louise alone couldn't dismiss Siesta.

	Siesta, feeling like a victor, told Louise.		Siesta, feeling like a victor, told Louise.

148.87.19.210 at 00:14, 3 February 2012

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	"This war was definitely a harsh one. The war that started by former King of Gallia, Joseph's conspiracy included turning not only Romalia, but also ~~Halkeginea~~ into ashes."		"This war was definitely a harsh one. The war that started by former King of Gallia, Joseph's conspiracy included turning not only Romalia, but also Halkeginia into ashes."

	Osman's voice resounded throughout the hall.		Osman's voice resounded throughout the hall.
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	The fighting of the Knights, especially the vice commander Chevalier de Hiraga's achievements were passed down to everybody.		The fighting of the Knights, especially the vice commander Chevalier de Hiraga's achievements were passed down to everybody.

	This was the first instance in which a single knight, a group of knights to lead a victory in war. Moreover, rumors say that the new queen is Tabitha who recently were the same students as them. Although nobody knows what kind of drama ~~occured~~, the knights of Ondine must have played a part on helping Tabitha becoming the queen.		This was the first instance in which a single knight, a group of knights to lead a victory in war. Moreover, rumors say that the new queen is Tabitha who recently were the same students as them. Although nobody knows what kind of drama occurred, the knights of Ondine must have played a part on helping Tabitha becoming the queen.

	The beautiful... glorious victory's outcome.		The beautiful... glorious victory's outcome.
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	"You are a very nice student. I'll give you a prize."		"You are a very nice student. I'll give you a prize."

	Guiche ~~shaked~~ with happiness. Not only did he already have a medal from Albion, he receives another big honor. What will it be? Will it be the treasure wand made of gold and diamond tips that is only given to the top student of the academy? If he does receive such treasure, it's as if his path for success is promised......		Guiche shook with happiness. Not only did he already have a medal from Albion, he receives another big honor. What will it be? Will it be the treasure wand made of gold and diamond tips that is only given to the top student of the academy? If he does receive such treasure, it's as if his path for success is promised......

	However, Osman's words betrayed Guiche's thoughts.		However, Osman's words betrayed Guiche's thoughts.

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	Her maid friends stayed frozen for a little bit, and then they burst out laughing. Siesta whispers in a voice filled with malicious intent.		Her maid friends stayed frozen for a little bit, and then they burst out laughing. Siesta whispers in a voice filled with malicious intent.

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	"Welcome back, meow."		"Welcome back, meow."

Wolfpup at 04:42, 26 November 2011

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 "Well anyways, if you are looking for a mansion, I'll come with you guys. Since it'll be my new workplace!"

Chuta: /* Chapter 1: The Reward of the Campaign */

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Chapter 1: The Reward of the Campaign

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	The hall became silent. Osman, after faking a cough, continued.		The hall became silent. Osman, after faking a cough, continued.

	"However, ~~god~~ did not leave us! If there's a crazy king, there must be a hero! If there's a crazy conspiracy, then there's a justice that would defeat it! These people, are the ones who destroyed the ambition of that crazy king!"		"However, God did not leave us! If there's a crazy king, there must be a hero! If there's a crazy conspiracy, then there's a justice that would defeat it! These people, are the ones who destroyed the ambition of that crazy king!"

	The students gulped.		The students gulped.
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	The citizens of Gallia welcomed them with great cheers.		The citizens of Gallia welcomed them with great cheers.

	After that, they guarded her Majesty ~~queen~~ Henrietta to Tristain, and finally came back.		After that, they guarded her Majesty Queen Henrietta to Tristain, and finally came back.

	"Hooray for the Ondine!"		"Hooray for the Ondine!"
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	Osman stood in front of the boys and congratulated every one of them.		Osman stood in front of the boys and congratulated every one of them.

	"Yes yes, I feel honored as if I am you all. Since you guys are me! I, the principal of this magic academy have raised you single ~~handily~~... yes yes!"		"Yes yes, I feel honored as if I am you all. Since you guys are me! I, the principal of this magic academy have raised you single handedly... yes yes!"

	Osman nodded happily as he congratulated.		Osman nodded happily as he congratulated.
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	"The government gave all of you honor befitting your performances."		"The government gave all of you honor befitting your performances."

	Ms. Chevreuse, who was dressed in formal attire just like the knights of Ondine appeared. She had something in her hand. The knights of Ondine when seeing what she held widened their eyes out of surprise. There was black writing along with a silver pentagon, shining across.		Ms. Chevreuse, who was dressed in formal attire just like the knights of Ondine appeared. She had something in her hand. The knights of Ondine, when seeing what she held, widened their eyes out of surprise. There was black writing along with a silver pentagon, shining across.

	"Is this... the cape for a Chevalier!?"		"Is this... the cape for a Chevalier!?"
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	~~Huge~~ banquet came after. Around the knights of Ondine, students gathered.		A huge banquet came after. Around the knights of Ondine, students gathered.

	"Lord Guiche! Please tell us about your achievements on the battlefield!"		"Lord Guiche! Please tell us about your achievements on the battlefield!"
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	"Malicorne! Please tell us more of the stories!"		"Malicorne! Please tell us more of the stories!"

	With few girls surrounding him, Malicorne was literally crying of joy.		With a few girls surrounding him, Malicorne was literally crying of joy.

	It couldn't have been helped, since after that incident with the knights of Ondine peeking at the girl's bath, their fame dropped down to the ground. It dropped so far that Saito's achievement in Albion, and the fight against Beatriz's dragon knights were completely forgotten.		It couldn't have been helped, since after that incident with the knights of Ondine peeking at the girl's bath, their fame dropped down to the ground. It dropped so far that Saito's achievement in Albion, and the fight against Beatriz's dragon knights were completely forgotten.
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	"... Sorry..."		"... Sorry..."

	"It's fine...... While you were at war, I was thinking all this time. Since you’re someone like that, it's normal for you to peek at the girl's bath. No, I'd rather be thankful that that's all you did, so I'll ~~bare~~ with it. So, I'm very sorry for what I said to you before."		"It's fine...... While you were at war, I was thinking all this time. Since you’re someone like that, it's normal for you to peek at the girl's bath. No, I'd rather be thankful that that's all you did, so I'll bear with it. So, I'm very sorry for what I said to you before."

	She said so in such a brave way that Malicorne felt sorry for what he had done. He realized how much he was living only for his own greed after seeing her cry like this.		She said so in such a brave way that Malicorne felt sorry for what he had done. He realized how much he was living only for his own greed after seeing her cry like this.
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	"Today is special; since it's the day I have gone through a rebirth."		"Today is special; since it's the day I have gone through a rebirth."

	Brigitta finally tipped her wine glass. As she did so, she said things like '~~wow~~ I'm starting to feel drunk' so Malicorne took her to the balcony.		Brigitta finally tipped her wine glass. As she did so, she said things like 'Wow, I'm starting to feel drunk' so Malicorne took her to the balcony.

	"Are you okay?"		"Are you okay?"

	"This pi... made me feel drunk."		"This pig... made me feel drunk."

	Malicorne heard a nostalgic word.		Malicorne heard a nostalgic word.
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	Saito, looking at the ruckus on the balcony next to him let out a deep sigh. Over there was Malicorne on his hands and feet saying things like” I'm sorry for living” and “This pig is sorry” to a girl with black hair. The girl was screaming through her lungs and making fun of Malicorne.		Saito, looking at the ruckus on the balcony next to him, let out a deep sigh. Over there was Malicorne on his hands and feet saying things like” I'm sorry for living” and “This pig is sorry” to a girl with black hair. The girl was screaming through her lungs and making fun of Malicorne.

	"Damn it, Guiche and Malicorne, enjoying their peace already."		"Damn it, Guiche and Malicorne, enjoying their peace already."
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	"Isn't it fine? King Joseph died. Peace is finally achieved. Let them go wild for a little bit."		"Isn't it fine? King Joseph died. Peace is finally achieved. Let them go wild for a little bit."

	Next to Saito saying "whatever," was Louise. She tied her hair with a valet and wore a white dress. Seeing her like this still ~~speeds~~ up Saito's heart.		Next to Saito saying "whatever," was Louise. She tied her hair with a valet and wore a white dress. Seeing her like this still sped up Saito's heart.

	"But doesn't Romalia plan to continue the so called 'Holy War'?"		"But doesn't Romalia plan to continue the so called 'Holy War'?"
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	Saito told Louise about what he was wondering about.		Saito told Louise about what he was wondering about.

	"Think about it. They knew that King Joseph wouldn't help them, and yet they still fought against him knowing well that he would die. Doesn't that mean they have a way to proceed without him?"		"Think about it. They knew that King Joseph wouldn't help them, and yet they still fought against him knowing full well that he would die. Doesn't that mean they have a way to proceed without him?"

	"Think about it..."		"Think about it..."
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	When Saito realized right at the end that King Joseph was the void user... He didn't have time to be surprised because of all the murders that had just occurred but...		When Saito realized right at the end that King Joseph was the void user... He didn't have time to be surprised because of all the murders that had just occurred but...

	"Romalia is also the same. They thought that the void user wasn’t King Joseph. They were planning to become allies with them after they ~~defeat~~ that ~~King~~, but too bad for them. The void user was in fact King Joseph. They killed the void user they needed. Well, they had no choice that time. If they didn't kill him, they'd have been killed. Their speech for the Gallian Army at the end was just them being sore losers."		"Romalia is also the same. They thought that the void user wasn’t King Joseph. They were planning to become allies with them after they defeated that king, but too bad for them. The void user was in fact King Joseph. They killed the void user they needed. Well, they had no choice that time. If they didn't kill him, they'd have been killed. Their speech for the Gallian Army at the end was just them being sore losers."

	Saito nodded a little bit. Furthermore, only Saito and Tabitha knew of the letter, so Romalia literally had no way of knowing King Joseph was the void user.		Saito nodded a little bit. Furthermore, only Saito and Tabitha knew of the letter, so Romalia literally had no way of knowing King Joseph was the void user.
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	Louise yelled in fury.		Louise yelled in fury.

	"Oh Louise, you don't have time to lie about your feelings now. If you keep lying, some day another girl will steal him from of you!"		"Oh Louise, you don't have time to lie about your feelings now. If you keep lying, some day another girl will steal him from you!"

	Kirche lightly chuckled and left.		Kirche lightly chuckled and left.
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	''No, it won't work out. She'll definitely look at me like I’m a creep.''		''No, it won't work out. She'll definitely look at me like I’m a creep.''

	''B-but... that's my dream. If I don't do what I want to do, it's like rebelling against ~~god~~, who created us to be rational.''		''B-but... that's my dream. If I don't do what I want to do, it's like rebelling against God, who created us to be rational.''

	A sound of a hammer arose inside his head.		A sound of a hammer arose inside his head.