Masterupc: punctuation

2018-02-11T05:36:31Z

punctuation

Txtracer: fix typos and grammatical errors

2017-09-09T04:23:54Z

fix typos and grammatical errors

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Shadowys: TLC edit

2017-02-04T14:08:51Z

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JFerg: /* Chapter 1: Boat for Two */

2017-01-31T03:45:13Z

Chapter 1: Boat for Two

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Bygghandel: Edited for spelling mistakes and wrong tenses. It should be edited enough now.

2017-01-08T14:04:16Z

Edited for spelling mistakes and wrong tenses. It should be edited enough now.

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Vaelis at 10:38, 12 January 2014

2014-01-12T10:38:48Z

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	"It's me, Mother Sea."		"It's me, Mother Sea."

	"Mother Sea? Oh... you long-eared rascal, my little girl, welcome."		"Mother Sea?"

			"Oh... you long-eared rascal, my little girl, welcome."

	A feeling that something huge awoke permeated the area. Heavy footsteps followed, and within the darkness, a sparkling, deep blue huge body could be seen.		A feeling that something huge awoke permeated the area. Heavy footsteps followed, and within the darkness, a sparkling, deep blue huge body could be seen.

Vaelis at 10:35, 12 January 2014

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 After escaping from Adil, the capital of Nephthys, Saito and the rest continued on with their journey in a small boat towed by a dolphin.
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 "Woah!"
 Just then, the boat shook after passing through a wave. Saito almost fell to the ground completely flat, and naturally pulled Tiffania down as well.
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 A feeling that something huge awoke permeated the area. Heavy footsteps followed, and within the darkness, a sparkling, deep blue huge body could be seen.

Kira477 at 10:05, 12 January 2014

2014-01-12T10:05:50Z

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	Kachi...		Kachi...

	A sound of a large object moving could be heard.		Deep within the space, a sound of a large object moving could be heard.

	Tiffania jumped, and leaned onto Saito. He also instinctively reached for Derflinger on his back.		Tiffania jumped, and leaned onto Saito. He also instinctively reached for Derflinger on his back.

Kira477 at 09:32, 12 January 2014

2014-01-12T09:32:56Z

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Kira477: /* Chapter 1: Boat for Two */

2014-01-12T09:29:46Z

Chapter 1: Boat for Two

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	After escaping from Adyl, the capital of Nephthys, Saito and the others continued on with their journey in a small boat towed by a dolphin.		After escaping from Adyl, the capital of Nephthys, Saito and the others continued on with their journey in a small boat towed by a dolphin.

	Saito and Tiffania, who were imprisoned by the elves, were nearly forced to drink a mind impairment medicine. Fortunately, Luctiana saved them in the nick of time. Along the way Luctiana's fiancee, Ari, attacked them~~; but~~ thanks to a revived Derflinger they managed to escape.		Saito and Tiffania, who were imprisoned by the elves, were nearly forced to drink a mind impairment medicine. Fortunately, Luctiana saved them in the nick of time. Along the way Luctiana's fiancee, Ari, attacked them. But thanks to a revived Derflinger they managed to escape.

	In the small boat Saito began talking about a lot of things with Derflinger, whose consciousness had transferred into Saito's favorite katana.		In the small boat Saito began talking about a lot of things with Derflinger, whose consciousness had transferred into Saito's favorite katana.
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	They talked about everything since the time they fought the Elemental Siblings, and the night after Derflinger got destroyed.		They talked about everything since the time they fought the Elemental Siblings, and the night after Derflinger got destroyed.

	Surprisingly, Derflinger knew all about this. And whenever it was brought up, he would just reply with 'At that time...'. But if it was related to the elves, Derflinger would remain silent.		Surprisingly, Derflinger knew all about this. And whenever it was brought up, he would just reply with "At that time...". But if it was related to the elves, Derflinger would remain silent.

	——Sasha, who was his Gandálfr, had killed her master Brimir.		——Sasha, who was his Gandálfr, had killed her master Brimir.

	After abruptly having said that, no matter how Saito tried, Derflinger, who had "restored his consciousness", refused to elaborate on what happened.		After abruptly having said that, no matter how Saito tried, Derflinger, who had 'restored his consciousness', refused to elaborate on what happened.

	Instead, he kept on beating around the bush as if he was escaping from some great sadness.		Instead, he kept on beating around the bush as if he was escaping from some great sadness.
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	"What will happen to us after this?" said Tiffania, who was wearing loose Elven clothing, in a low voice.		"What will happen to us after this?" said Tiffania, who was wearing loose Elven clothing, in a low voice.

	"First, we have to find the Holy Land and confirm what we're supposed to find there. Then we'll report all that information back to Louise," ~~said~~ Saito while looking at Luctiana.		"First, we have to find the Holy Land and confirm what we're supposed to find there. Then we'll report all that information back to Louise." Said Saito while looking at Luctiana.

	"Even though I feel bad about doing this to her... I feel that this is what we should be doing."		"Even though I feel bad about doing this to her... I feel that this is what we should be doing."
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	"You... You said that before, right? Really?"		"You... You said that before, right? Really?"

	"Yes... At first, I thought that it was because my brain was in a mess~~; but~~ after thinking about it calmly, the answer is still the same. Although my heart would thump wildly, I don't feel disgusted."		"Yes... At first, I thought that it was because my brain was in a mess. But after thinking about it calmly, the answer is still the same. Although my heart would thump wildly, I don't feel disgusted."

	Because Tiffania said this kind of thing right beside Saito, he also felt his mind gradually boiling.		Because Tiffania said this kind of thing right beside Saito, he also felt his mind gradually boiling.
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	"But it's impossible for Louise to accept this; and Saito, you also don't like me, right? Then what should I do with my feelings then?		"But it's impossible for Louise to accept this; and Saito, you also don't like me, right? Then what should I do with my feelings then?

	Seeing Tiffania being like that, Saito felt conflicted. It's not that he didn't like Tiffania~~; there~~ was no other girl in this world as attractive as her. But he still couldn't acknowledge this feeling because he had already promised that he would never do anything that would make Louise sad. Saito thought about that time with Henrietta, and mentally shook his head.		Seeing Tiffania being like that, Saito felt conflicted. It's not that he didn't like Tiffania. There was no other girl in this world as attractive as her. But he still couldn't acknowledge this feeling because he had already promised that he would never do anything that would make Louise sad. Saito thought about that time with Henrietta, and mentally shook his head.

	However, it would be a lie to say he didn't like Tiffania. After all, like means like. Tiffania was just that attractive, and there was an irresistible, instinctive feeling within him towards her~~; something~~ felt wrong about denying that feeling.		However, it would be a lie to say he didn't like Tiffania. After all, like means like. Tiffania was just that attractive, and there was an irresistible, instinctive feeling within him towards her. Something felt wrong about denying that feeling.

	If that was the case, there was only one way left. He had to make Tiffania lose all her feelings towards him. He must make her feel that Hiraga Saito actually was an incorrigible bastard.		If that was the case, there was only one way left. He had to make Tiffania lose all her feelings towards him. He must make her feel that Hiraga Saito actually was an incorrigible bastard.
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	"Tiffa."		"Tiffa."

	Saito had tears in his eyes, staring at Tiffania. On one hand, he was touched by Tiffania's strong will, so he felt that harboring evil thoughts about Tiffania's chest was shameful~~; at~~ the same time, he instinctively retorted that her chest was simply too incredible, so it was not his fault. In the end he realized that he was simply too shameful to come up with this warped reasoning.		Saito had tears in his eyes, staring at Tiffania. On one hand, he was touched by Tiffania's strong will, so he felt that harboring evil thoughts about Tiffania's chest was shameful. At the same time, he instinctively retorted that her chest was simply too incredible, so it was not his fault. In the end he realized that he was simply too shameful to come up with this warped reasoning.

	When he came to his senses, he was already holding Tiffania's hand.		When he came to his senses, he was already holding Tiffania's hand.
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	"It's extremely huge, and there's four or five blue, sparkling eyes."		"It's extremely huge, and there's four or five blue, sparkling eyes."

	"Mr. Sword, please don't say anymore..." ~~she~~ pouted, showing a troubled expression.		"Mr. Sword, please don't say anymore..." She pouted, showing a troubled expression.

	"And it has ten times more tentacles than an octopus. It'd reach out and grab you in an instant."		"And it has ten times more tentacles than an octopus. It'd reach out and grab you in an instant."
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	The sea was peaceful, the surface sparkled brilliantly like a mirror reflecting the scorching sunlight.		The sea was peaceful, the surface sparkled brilliantly like a mirror reflecting the scorching sunlight.

	"There was once a huge volcanic island which went dormant around this area~~; that~~ means we are now above the vent."		"There was once a huge volcanic island which went dormant around this area. That means we are now above the vent."

	"Oh, no wonder the ocean is so calm." Saito said.		"Oh, no wonder the ocean is so calm." Saito said.
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Zero no Tsukaima:Volume20 Chapter1 - Revision history

Masterupc: punctuation

Txtracer: fix typos and grammatical errors

Shadowys: TLC edit

JFerg: /* Chapter 1: Boat for Two */

Bygghandel: Edited for spelling mistakes and wrong tenses. It should be edited enough now.

Vaelis at 10:38, 12 January 2014

Vaelis at 10:35, 12 January 2014

Kira477 at 10:05, 12 January 2014

Kira477 at 09:32, 12 January 2014

Kira477: /* Chapter 1: Boat for Two */