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Incredible Loli Change

PostPosted: Thu Jun 18, 2015 9:25 am
by Aldenc
This is the feedback thread for Incredible Loli Change (https://www.baka-tsuki.org/project/inde ... oli_Change)
Please tell me how you think of it.

This is a popular Chinese web series with about 2.3 million read count to date!

Synopsis:

The main character is called Azumabashi Jin-ichi, he's just a completely normal guy that has the uncontrollable ability transform into a cute loli, by getting hit by a shooting star. Then Weird things start to happen around him, which pretty much just ruined his life.

Author: LOSly.Hoy

Re: Incredible Loli Change

PostPosted: Fri Jun 19, 2015 7:20 am
by Aldenc
Chapter 3 Added!

Re: Incredible Loli Change

PostPosted: Sat Jun 20, 2015 3:58 am
by jirka642
Guy with the power to transform into cute loli? That's instant 10/10 masterpiece.

Re: Incredible Loli Change

PostPosted: Mon Jun 22, 2015 6:33 am
by SouthernL
I enjoyed the work you did, so much that I went and edited the story myself!
There's one place where I didn't get the sentence
After experiencing the “Change to a Loli~ One Night Trip”, I was already very tired, now I’m experiencing “Get hungry! No Breakfast No Lunch No Dinner, ‘Stomach Dying’ One Day Trip!”, I
can’t anymore…

It's the start of chapter 3. Is it really only "I can't anymore"? Or is there a verb that you forgot to put in?
Also,
Jabbing at my sister has became my daily routine. Is Rin-ichi even tired of it? It’s like this everyday, I can’t even anymore…

I don't think "I can't even anymore" is a complete sentence.
(I'm BelialBook, btw)

Re: Incredible Loli Change

PostPosted: Tue Jun 23, 2015 3:49 pm
by Aldenc
Chapter 4-5 up!

Also BelialBook, are there anyways of contacting you?
I just don't think posting on forum is a efficient way to communicate.

Re: Incredible Loli Change

PostPosted: Tue Jun 23, 2015 10:24 pm
by SouthernL
If you count Facebook and/or Twitter as a way of communication, then yes.