OLN: Yuugare Contract
Moderators: Fringe Security Bureau, Senior Editors, Senior Translators, Alt. Language Translator/Editor, Executive Council, Project Translators, Project Editors
- Arcsol93
- Kyonite - The Haruhi Pacifier
- Posts: 165
- Joined: Sat Mar 22, 2014 11:18 am
- Favourite Light Novel: Ahouka!
- Location: Minnesota
Re: OLN: Yuugare Contract
...My god, I proofread that at least five times...and yet I never...*Facepalm*
Fixed now, thanks lol.
Fixed now, thanks lol.
"It's true that the real world is a shitty game. It's both unreasonable...and illogical...But a happy end will never come to those who want to finish a difficult game with ease." -The World God Only Knows
- Calculatrix
- Elite Haruhiist
- Posts: 82
- Joined: Sun Apr 13, 2014 2:02 pm
- Favourite Light Novel:
Re: OLN: Yuugare Contract
No problem, happens to me sometimes too:D
Author of "Weaver of Chaos" and "Code : Reality"
-
- Vice Commander Itsuki
- Posts: 48
- Joined: Sun Feb 23, 2014 9:26 pm
- Favourite Light Novel:
Re: OLN: Yuugare Contract
Glad to helpArcsol93 wrote: Thanks for those opinions.
![Very Happy :D](./images/smilies/icon_biggrin.gif)
Waiting for next chapter.
- Arcsol93
- Kyonite - The Haruhi Pacifier
- Posts: 165
- Joined: Sat Mar 22, 2014 11:18 am
- Favourite Light Novel: Ahouka!
- Location: Minnesota
Re: OLN: Yuugare Contract
Just hopped on to give a quick update. Was getting a few loose ends tied up with the plot, and was brainstorming how I wanted to approach chapter 3. Got the gist of what I want to do down so it should be up sometime this week. Expect an interesting surprise lol.
"It's true that the real world is a shitty game. It's both unreasonable...and illogical...But a happy end will never come to those who want to finish a difficult game with ease." -The World God Only Knows
- Arcsol93
- Kyonite - The Haruhi Pacifier
- Posts: 165
- Joined: Sat Mar 22, 2014 11:18 am
- Favourite Light Novel: Ahouka!
- Location: Minnesota
Re: OLN: Yuugare Contract
Chapter 3 is finally finished, took me a while but I finally have it written the way I intended. Also when you get at the end...yes its exactly as you think, well the identity anyway, can't say anything on the circumstances.
Anyway I hope you like it and I'll try to have 4 up as soon as I can.
Anyway I hope you like it and I'll try to have 4 up as soon as I can.
Spoiler! :
Last edited by Arcsol93 on Mon Jul 07, 2014 2:06 pm, edited 1 time in total.
"It's true that the real world is a shitty game. It's both unreasonable...and illogical...But a happy end will never come to those who want to finish a difficult game with ease." -The World God Only Knows
- Calculatrix
- Elite Haruhiist
- Posts: 82
- Joined: Sun Apr 13, 2014 2:02 pm
- Favourite Light Novel:
Re: OLN: Yuugare Contract
Come on...longer chapters!:D I'm starting to really enjoy this story, and Kaiden's personality is one of my favorites...which makes it even better. I'm waiting for the next chapter.
Author of "Weaver of Chaos" and "Code : Reality"
- Arcsol93
- Kyonite - The Haruhi Pacifier
- Posts: 165
- Joined: Sat Mar 22, 2014 11:18 am
- Favourite Light Novel: Ahouka!
- Location: Minnesota
Re: OLN: Yuugare Contract
Lol to be honest when I finished writing it I thought it was longer than the other two but when I posted it on here I did a double take and noticed it was only 6 pages T.T smallest of them yet. With how I have it planned though 4 -should- be longer since I have a few things planned with Brianna and a little sibling rivalry, if not then for certain 5.Calculatrix wrote:Come on...longer chapters!:D I'm starting to really enjoy this story, and Kaiden's personality is one of my favorites...which makes it even better. I'm waiting for the next chapter.
"It's true that the real world is a shitty game. It's both unreasonable...and illogical...But a happy end will never come to those who want to finish a difficult game with ease." -The World God Only Knows
- Himeko Inaba
- Mikuru's Master
- Posts: 29
- Joined: Wed Apr 09, 2014 6:22 pm
- Favourite Light Novel: Ahouka!
Re: OLN: Yuugare Contract
I just skimmed it
but "gauged" (measured) > "gouged" (deeply cut). Unless your characters were fighting with measuring tapes.
but "gauged" (measured) > "gouged" (deeply cut). Unless your characters were fighting with measuring tapes.
- Arcsol93
- Kyonite - The Haruhi Pacifier
- Posts: 165
- Joined: Sat Mar 22, 2014 11:18 am
- Favourite Light Novel: Ahouka!
- Location: Minnesota
Re: OLN: Yuugare Contract
Bah how do I keep missing simple errors like that. I swear I'm dyslexic or something, thanks I'll fix that error now. (Though them fighting with measuring tapes, hmm...I think I'll sleep on that, maybe a spoof chapter. lol)
"It's true that the real world is a shitty game. It's both unreasonable...and illogical...But a happy end will never come to those who want to finish a difficult game with ease." -The World God Only Knows
- Himeko Inaba
- Mikuru's Master
- Posts: 29
- Joined: Wed Apr 09, 2014 6:22 pm
- Favourite Light Novel: Ahouka!
Re: OLN: Yuugare Contract
Sharpened tapes could be dangerous for sneak attacks. I've already sliced my finger open with a normal one at work.
-
- Vice Commander Itsuki
- Posts: 48
- Joined: Sun Feb 23, 2014 9:26 pm
- Favourite Light Novel:
Re: OLN: Yuugare Contract
I agree with Calculatrix - It's too short!Arcsol93 wrote:Lol to be honest when I finished writing it I thought it was longer than the other two but when I posted it on here I did a double take and noticed it was only 6 pages T.T smallest of them yet. With how I have it planned though 4 -should- be longer since I have a few things planned with Brianna and a little sibling rivalry, if not then for certain 5.Calculatrix wrote:Come on...longer chapters!:D I'm starting to really enjoy this story, and Kaiden's personality is one of my favorites...which makes it even better. I'm waiting for the next chapter.
Your plans sounds intriguing. Keep these chapters coming.
- Arcsol93
- Kyonite - The Haruhi Pacifier
- Posts: 165
- Joined: Sat Mar 22, 2014 11:18 am
- Favourite Light Novel: Ahouka!
- Location: Minnesota
Re: OLN: Yuugare Contract
I'm sorrrrrrry XD I could have sworn it was longer on my ipod but I was deceived! Though I'm satisfied as long as it doesn't go any lower than six, less than that will make me feel I rushed it.
I'm fairly sure 4 will be a bit longer as it will touch on a few aspects of the story, though 5 will touch on more, so if 4 is short 5 will definitely make up for it. Though I don't know if I will finish the volume up with 5 and the epilogue or if I brainstorm on this other thought and put in a sixth and then the epilogue, depends on how well it flows with the rest of the story I guess.
I'm fairly sure 4 will be a bit longer as it will touch on a few aspects of the story, though 5 will touch on more, so if 4 is short 5 will definitely make up for it. Though I don't know if I will finish the volume up with 5 and the epilogue or if I brainstorm on this other thought and put in a sixth and then the epilogue, depends on how well it flows with the rest of the story I guess.
"It's true that the real world is a shitty game. It's both unreasonable...and illogical...But a happy end will never come to those who want to finish a difficult game with ease." -The World God Only Knows
- Arcsol93
- Kyonite - The Haruhi Pacifier
- Posts: 165
- Joined: Sat Mar 22, 2014 11:18 am
- Favourite Light Novel: Ahouka!
- Location: Minnesota
Re: OLN: Yuugare Contract
Chapter 4 is done, though I still need to get it edited. This one will be the largest of them yet at 15 pages lol, for some reason it seems I either write too few or too many pages. Should be up soon if I feel I'm satisfied with what I have down.
(Mods if any are looking at this thread can you delete this message? Noticed I triple posted, will cool it with the heads up messages from here on in.)
(Mods if any are looking at this thread can you delete this message? Noticed I triple posted, will cool it with the heads up messages from here on in.)
Last edited by Arcsol93 on Sat Jul 12, 2014 9:51 am, edited 1 time in total.
"It's true that the real world is a shitty game. It's both unreasonable...and illogical...But a happy end will never come to those who want to finish a difficult game with ease." -The World God Only Knows
- Arcsol93
- Kyonite - The Haruhi Pacifier
- Posts: 165
- Joined: Sat Mar 22, 2014 11:18 am
- Favourite Light Novel: Ahouka!
- Location: Minnesota
Re: OLN: Yuugare Contract
And here is chapter 4! There may be some things still subject to change with it but overall I'm satisfied with it. Don't know what I would do without bitter and their editing lol.
Alsooooo in case people ignored the first post or many other times I put it I will say it here. TRIGGER WARNING! This chapter does contain suicide! Do NOT say I didn't warn you, you have been warned. Any complaints on it will be ignored and this sentence will be quoted in response.
And with that who are reading it, I hope you enjoy it.
Alsooooo in case people ignored the first post or many other times I put it I will say it here. TRIGGER WARNING! This chapter does contain suicide! Do NOT say I didn't warn you, you have been warned. Any complaints on it will be ignored and this sentence will be quoted in response.
And with that who are reading it, I hope you enjoy it.
Spoiler! :
"It's true that the real world is a shitty game. It's both unreasonable...and illogical...But a happy end will never come to those who want to finish a difficult game with ease." -The World God Only Knows
- Arcsol93
- Kyonite - The Haruhi Pacifier
- Posts: 165
- Joined: Sat Mar 22, 2014 11:18 am
- Favourite Light Novel: Ahouka!
- Location: Minnesota
Re: OLN: Yuugare Contract
And chapter 5 is done! Though its not the end of the volume just yet, I still have about one or two chapters planned left, though it will be from a different persons perspective. Anyway hope you enjoy.
Spoiler! :
"It's true that the real world is a shitty game. It's both unreasonable...and illogical...But a happy end will never come to those who want to finish a difficult game with ease." -The World God Only Knows