[Original Story]: Complex School Days

[virgo327]

This is my first story so pls don't judge meee
It is an adventure, action, romance(a little), and fiction story

[virgo327]

first part

Spoiler! :

()-thoughts
**-actions
Prologue
Girl: *huffing* must.. keep running...
Bandit:Hurry! Get her!
Girl:(why do they want me so much? What did I do to them?)
Bandits shoot plenty of beams at Kris.
Girl:*dodges*(Somebody please help me....)*fell*
Beam about to hit her, but...
Dragon Spirit: *blocks with shield* You okay?
Girl:I-I'm fine.
Bandits: the smoke! over there!
Dragon Spirit: What did they do to you? or vise-versa?
Girl: nothing*tries to stand* I just did fishing then now they're chasing me all of a sudden
Dragon Spirit: (These guys chasing an 8 year old kid? What are they thinking?) Duck
Girl: what? there's no ducks in a forest!
Dragon spirit: *shoots Fire beam*
Girl: Waaah!*ducks* You should've told me that earlier!
Dragon Spirit: I did, didn't I?
Bandits get hit by the beam. Big explosion.
Girl: That's so gotta hurt.
Dragon Spirit: Well, I think they're gone for now. Anyways, you're quite good in dodging, for a kid like you.
Girl: Of course, I am! If I'm going to be a bladesmaster then I have to be quick!
Dragon spirit: Yah Yah, Whatever, you should have a partner like me. I'll be your Guardian Spirit, and you'll be my Meister.
Girl:*scratches head* ?? I kinda don't get the last part.
Dragon Spirit: Let's say you *gets a contract* sign this for me to be your partner.*gets pen* How's that?
Girl:(This guy's too young to be one guardian,but...) I don't know, look, I just met you. How would I know you're not lying?
Dragon Spirit: well,hello? I'm a spirit! Of course, I'm an honest to goodness person/spirit!
Girl: What is your name first?
Dragon spirit: For now, you can call me Energy Dragon. I can't tell you yet what is my true name because of the law.
Girl: (Think twice. Think twice...) *gets pen* Fine, I hope you can be a good spirit. *signs contract*
Energy Dragon: Perfect! Now I'm done with my introduction. Now your's please?
Kris: *coughs once* Well, my name's Kris, and I'm 8 yrs old. There. Happy?
Energy Dragon: ummm... Fine.
Both walks back to the forest.

[virgo327]

Announcement!!!
I will postpone my story chapters to March 13-16!
I'm sorry for this sudden changes because of the final exams and projects in school.
Thank you for your understanding

[mania_]

Is there a plot summary? Right now the title and what you've written so far give off completely different vibes (which, in turn, makes it more interesting somehow!). It'd be great to read a short synopsis of where exactly the story will be going, or have more information about the setting and characters in it.

Kris seems really tough for an 8-year-old... Nice! lol

Are you planning on continuing the writing the way you wrote the prologue? It seems more like screenplay, and while it's easy to read and imagine things this way, it's not that fitting for a light novel.

[virgo327]

ok, take two

Spoiler! :

For now in this first part, it talks about how Kris's life in Machelon village since after the previous head of the orphanage died; she gets to be the next. Why? simple, the others either left/found other jobs, etc.
Now, along her daily routine, she founds out that her limits of magic is not what she thinks. During her chase, she found out that there are such things called "spirits", "elemental magic", etc.

Spoiler! :

(note: If i say more of it I'll feel like it's a spoiler, so.... next time after i put the first chapter?)

oh yah answer(s) to your question(s):
1) yes i'm gonna write the half-script half paragraph style since i'm quite suckish in doing paragraph (Sorry)
and no, i'm not writing like I'm making a light novel because you know....

Last....I like script type a lot because yah, it really helps boosts imagination
Thank you for asking, by the way

[virgo327]

Announcement#2!!!
Yes, maybe some of you might think that: The heck??? I thought she's studying? Why is she posting/replying other's story? How about she post hers? (ouch true, but) So, I hope you'll understand why i'm suddenly online at this time; it's because...

Spoiler! :

I'm kinda having a very very short break from my very long research paper+long test of 11 subjects!+long test and quizzes in chines too! Double dead X-X-----> I can't believe I have to use spoiler tag ''-_-....

So, there, pls forgive me for the "time stop of my story" Thank you

[virgo327]

Yey! Finally done with 5 long tests and that quiz too!
well too bad I can't post my story yet, cuz I'm not yet done with those 6 long tests!!!(all major subjects, I'm gonna die X--X)
I'll try to post the preview so you won't get bored.

Spoiler! :

Hey, we have a new classmate with some blood related relationships
Girls: Heeeehh??? Your cousin?!
K: ....(I feel like I'm in a land minefield -_-"
And... New subjects too!
Teacher: your new teacher is.....
(Skip some..)
Master: Ok, now give me 200 push-ups right NOW!
Boy: *raises hand* But we're in a classroom...
Master: A good person should learn how to improvise. Now class, Push-up or I'll give you a double.
K: (oh, crud. Can this day GET ANY WORSE?!

That's all i can do for now. and.. Brainstorm mode+study mode on
(Don't worry, just 2 more weeks.....I'll tolerate that....Hopefully)

[bakabaka]

What can I say? This is definitely the most unique one

[virgo327]

Arigatou for the comments so far.. Now summer's here and Chapter 1 too!
Finally Chapter 1 starts... pls correct me/comment if it's boring/missing storyline,etc.(whether good or bad) thank you!

Spoiler! :

Chapter 1
Part 1
This starts already 8 years after the incident in the forest. Kris is now the head of the orphanage after the previous head died. Other kids traveled, found new jobs, etc. So, there's only very few people who will go there and ask her to take care of the kids, temporarily.(like daycare) Anyways, of course, a student is still a student, so she still has to go to school. People might ask, How will she earn money? One, she joins community tournaments, which is like a community service in through fighting. Two, the mayor of the village would give her some money every month.(well, the orphanage is like a public infrastructure there) And three, "Use what you know/learned" she applies her lessons in alchemy and basic smiting and sell weapons, armor, potions, and other mixtures to the shops nearby.
Anyway, back to the story, Kris went to school-the Elemental Masteral Meisters Academy, and found out that...
K:*enters room* I'm sorry I'm late *huffing*
Lance: Hey, Cuz. Now, girls, Yes I know she's my cousin. Suprise, isn't it?
Girls:*glares at Kris* Don't go an incest relationship with our Lance
Girl: yah, He's mine!
K:(Lance, after this I'll really kill you...) ok...( why will I fall in love with him?)
L: Chillax, girls it'll be fine. And, besides, classes are about to begin so, sit back, listen , or sleep.

Few minutes later...
Home Room Teacher: Well, class, seems like this semester, you will all be scattered to different class of your own choice of Elemental class. Now, let me discussed to you the rules and some tips.
K: This is gonna take a long time....
L: *looks outside* ...
K: ''-_- (Is he trying to daydream at a time like this??)
*******
15 minutes later...
Kris: so, what class are you taking?
Lance: Fire, of course.
K: Fire and Lightning?
L: Nah, that's too common. How about Fire and Ice?
K: Weird combination, but it's your choice, anyways.(Fire and Ice by Robert Frost....Oh, why did I suddenly thought of that?)
L: How about you?
K: Water and-
L: Earth?
K: No, um... Fire and Lightning?
L: Whoah, I didn't know you can pick 3? I mean you're the type of person who doesn't wanna learn much.
K: This is Element, Lance. Look deeper....
L: Enchant Blades?
K: NO! Enhancement Blades!
L: ohhh...That I remembered. Fine, you win. Catch 'ya later! *runs off*
K: (Aiyaiyai...Lance, always forgetful..)
Tessy:*from behind* BOO!
K:0o0..Tess, what the heck???
T: yes, I knew it work. So, *checks watch* 5 minutes and i'm going to Nature Element Class! See ya! *runs*
K:(Nature?? That's quite unusual..)

2nd part.. Later..

[Ryzx]

uhh why you skip the elemental explanation?
It make me curious about the unusual nature and the weird combination

[virgo327]

Sorry for the cliffhanger thing... I need to pack my stuffs since school's over so gone offline for a few hours
Anyways, I'll try to explain some terms (Note to self: No essay cuz I suck there)

Spoiler! :

Meisters and Spirits
- A person can only be called a Meister if he/she signed a contract with a Spirit(not gonna say the whole contract though)
- A wandering spirit is a spirit that has no Meister (or broke many contracts)
- Every Spirit has 3 contracts: one main and 2 spare
- Every Meister and Spirit have a unique mark per pair, and when the contract breaks the mark will burn out and remains like a scar
- Spirits are like animals that can talk and transform to human form
- Note: don't think that spirits can float/transparent like that.
-For advanced ones: a spirit can embed himself to the Meister's weapon if he/she allows and can control it.
Elements
-Like Pokemon we say "types" right (ex Chimchar=fire type)? So, same here, there are 10 elements: Fire, Water(includes Ice too), Thunder/Wind, Nature, Ground/Earth, Dark, Energy, Crystal, Divine, and Celestial. the basic elements are the first 7 ones.

Next the combination of elements to weapons:

Spoiler! :

(I like this one )
Just as what Kris said, the Enhancement Blades skill is a process that when mastered the 5 or 7 elements, it is possible to let an ordinary dagger (example) to an elemental one by just putting your magic there instead of combining stones bla bla.That's more convenient.

I'll explain the others in the later chapters...

[Ryzx]

I get it now

Spoiler! :

its like mana khemia but with elemental things, right?

I'm curious about the conflict in the story. Well, i will be waiting for the next chapter.

[virgo327]

Really sorry for super long waiting. Internet crashed when I'm supposed to post already :'(
I'll try to post at night instead ok? Really sorry for the cliffhanger there

[virgo327]

~Let's get down to business and to make another part~

Spoiler! :

K:(Nature?? That's quite unusual..)
Teacher: Hey, you! Get to your class now!
K: Yes! Sorry! *runs*(I'm sooo dead if I'm late..)
In the classroom...
K: *sighs* (That was a close call...)
Boy: Yo, Kris, you're done signing up?
K: Yup,you?
Boy: Yah, done too. I hope our teacher's a good one.
K: Of course it will be. They always pick the best teachers from other cities that have a better education than ours.
Boy: True..I also do hope that ours will improve too. *sighs*
Crazy teacher enters the classroom.
CT: Trivia class: I like plenty of elements, especially Lightning.
Boy: Well, no doubt about it. How about you go to other class instead?
Class: *whispers* True, true.. He should have gone-
CT: I'm not yet done, right? I'm the teacher, and you should let me finish.
Class: Oooooooohhhh...
Boy: *feels embarrassed* Whatever, continue.
K: *shakes head**raises hand* Then, what's your position?
CT: I was just getting to the good part. I'm just gonna supervised you guys and provide whatever materials you need, that's all.
Class: YESSS!!!!
CT: Now, everybody, sit back cuz you're going to learn the ART of Lightning. *Kung-fu pose*
K: *raises hand* Excuse me, this is a Water element class, not Lightning.
Class:*giggles*
CT: Riiiight you go there. Anyways, meet your teacher or should I say 'Master'.
K: (Is it me or this teacher drinks too much booze?)
Boy:*whispers* You don't call this teacher a booze addict for nothing.
Master Fabiach enters and whispered something to CT...
CT: *clears throat* People, ladies and gentlemen, I present to you, Master Fabiach! He will teach you the ART of Water!!
K:(Just pretend I didn't see or hear that, but who's Master Fabiach?)
Boy: He's one of the great trio masters in this village. Trust me, don't challenge him unless you're prepared.
Master: Ok, now give me 200 push-ups right NOW!
Boy: *raises hand* But we're in a classroom...
Master: A good person should learn how to improvise. Now class, Push-up or I'll give you a double.
K: (oh, crud. Can this day GET ANY WORSE?!
Master is driving the class crazy with 200 push-ups! (Dude, even I can't do that, too..)
After 90 push-ups..
K: Seriously?! You're driving us crazy!! Master, can we just skip to the element part?
Boy: Kris, are you crazy? you still call him 'Master' even though he's driving us dead tired?!
M: Hey, you two *points both* If you keep talking I'll triple that.
Both: Yes, Master!
After 200 push-ups, everyone was sooo..... dead tired!
Class:*huffing*
K: *sits on floor* That was too much..(but I wasn't that tired like the others... Thank you Master Chaos.)
Boy: WAY too much. *lies down*
K: If you say this is practical test in sports, then we all fail. And, lying down during cooldown's bad.
M: Ok, 5 mins break and we go to lesson.
Class: 5 minutes only?!
Boy 2: I don't like this.
Girl: You think? Who else would like that?
M:*looks around* (Who could.. there)Hey you! *points at boy 2* What's your name?
Boy 2: ME? Um... Billy, sir.
M: You'll be the Class President. And, you *points at girl*-
Girl: Catherine, sir.
M: Yah, you will be the Vice president.
C: yes, Master.
Boy: Hmmmm... Billy and Cathy.. I won't like this. It's better if you're the President.
K: No, you know I don't like leading people, especially our chaotic class.
C:*whacks boy's head* I heard that!
Boy: Aww! And, you don't have to hit me like that!
Billy: Oooohhh... ~Fight, Fight, Fight!~
K: Guys, stop it. *goes in between* If you're gonna fight, fight me instead.
C: Hey,Kris you're not involved. Get out of the way.
K: Won't let ya.
M: (Hmmm...)Enough. No fights or I'll give 85 sit- ups.
K: (Thanks, Master.)
M: Did I see you before?
K: We did, I think, during Master's Chaos's-
M: So, you're his student?
K: Yes...*looks outside*
M: Oh, sorry to bring that up..*looks down*
Boy: What happened?
Billy: If I were you, I wouldn't ask.
C: We'll tell you a bit.
Billy: All I heard is that Kris was under Master Chaos of Silverdale Village before she enrolled here.
C: The 3 great master-Master Chaos, Master Fabiach, and Master Fei Long. They were really good friends until both Masters died and..
Billy: The village's defenses and everything weakened.
Boy: Did Kris saw what really happened?
C: Don't ask any stupid questions.
K: Yes, I saw it.
Billy: What? you mean-
K: Yes, I saw that myself. That's the reason why I came to this school next to finish my education.
Boy: Why did you not choose the schools in Silverdale?
K: Long story, and I really live here first before I went to live in the dojo in Silverdale.
M: Ok,break's over, and let's continue.
Billy: Yuck, lesson time...
M: I'm not like others who give orientation so let's skip that.
Class: YES!!!
M: (students these days are quite lazy..) Instead, I'll give you free time.
Class: YES!!! Thank you, Master!
Boy: Sweet! 3 hours of free time!
Billy: Including lunch break that's 4 hours.
C: Double Awesomeness!
M: (Let's see who can be the strategist and who can be the leader during training...)
K: Guys, I'll just check the others for awhile.*leaves* (This is a great opportunity! I'll try to sit in other classes...)
Meanwhile...
Lance: Take this! Fire Cannon!
Teacher: *dodges* Not bad, but *closes in* Blazing Kick!
L: (Shoot!) Gah!!*fell*
T: Hey, at least you're brave enough to try. You also improved a lot too. Keep it up! Now, class, Lunch time! *leaves*
L: Ouch... I just feel like I'm in a Taekwondo class.
K:Or a Karate class.
L: Hey, Cuz. Mind if you help me?
K: *Giggles* That's what you get for being too excited. *Helps Lance*
L: Thanks. So, what brings you here? You have a bento box for me?
K: *pokes Lance's forehead* In your dreams...
L: haha, I was just joking. So, really, what do you want?
K: Can I join your class for today? You see, we're having free time for like the whole afternoon, so...
L: Unfair! That's like approximately 4 hours! And, no, you can't that's the rules...unless you want to delay one year?
K: No!! Then, could you teach me?
L: You just asked the wrong person. You know I'm bad in teaching..-
K: C'mon,please please, I'll... make lunch for you every other day for this 3 months...
L: You promised that?
K: Yah yah, just teach me properly, ok?
L: Sure, I'll try my best.
K:*hugs Lance* Thank you, thank you, thank you!
L: Ehehe, umm... Kris, you better run now cuz...
K:*releases* Huh? what do you mean?-
Girls: Hey! No one hugs our Lance!!
K: I didn't mean to! I was just asking for a request!
Girls: Get her!
K: Emergency time! *uses crystal* Teleport! *disappears*
Girls: *fell* Aww.. Couldn't catch her!
L: (Nice timing, Cuz)
M: (Not bad for someone who uses crystals..Hmm...Maybe she could be our team captain..)(No, not too fast yet. Must observe her in performance wise.)
-To be continued

Yes! finally! I hope the internet won't crash this time...*crosses fingers*

[Hitomi]

you need to work on your grammar. your writing is really confusing. i only understand half of what's going on
but anyway, keep it up