Major Edit to Chapter 1 Part 1
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Major Edit to Chapter 1 Part 1
My name is Daffyd ap Morgen.
I've made what would be considered a major edit to the first part of chapter 1.
I changed the "passive voice" to an active one. In the process I re-arranged subordinate clauses within sentences to eliminate excess commas.
"Nonsensically" (no such word) was changed to "ridiculous."
Unnecessary "that" and "had" were deleted.
Please check this over and provide feedback.
Thanks.
Daffyd ap Morgen
I've made what would be considered a major edit to the first part of chapter 1.
I changed the "passive voice" to an active one. In the process I re-arranged subordinate clauses within sentences to eliminate excess commas.
"Nonsensically" (no such word) was changed to "ridiculous."
Unnecessary "that" and "had" were deleted.
Please check this over and provide feedback.
Thanks.
Daffyd ap Morgen
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Re: Major Edit to Chapter 1 Part 1
I'll take a look at it later. Thanks for the update.
Is anyone still translating KnS? Or is it inactive?
Is anyone still translating KnS? Or is it inactive?
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Re: Major Edit to Chapter 1 Part 1
Part 2 of Chapter 1 has been edited. Again, changing passive voice to active voice and removing excess commas.
I've tried to respect the translator's word choice, especially nouns and verbs.
Daffyd ap Morgen
I've tried to respect the translator's word choice, especially nouns and verbs.
Daffyd ap Morgen
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Re: Major Edit to Chapter 1 Part 1
Part 3 of Chapter 1 has been edited.
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Re: Major Edit to Chapter 1 Part 1
Part 4 of Chapter 1 has been edited. Since there's no comment nor even objection to what I've done so far I'll assume there's no problem and continue.
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Re: Major Edit to Chapter 1 Part 1
Nope, no problem at all. I'm still curious if we have anyone translating this though. I don't think we do.
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Re: Major Edit to Chapter 1 Part 1
nobody translating this right now as far as I know... I used to, but schedule is too tight right now...
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Re: Major Edit to Chapter 1 Part 1
WOW! thanks for translating this novel!!! I hope you'll continue soon!!!
thanyou again!!!!!
thanyou again!!!!!