ShadowZeroHeart wrote:If you ask me. I like the way he does things.
Plain, simple.
If he cares about every other person around him, he is the next one to die.
That is why there is the saying, good people die young.
He cannot save everyone... He blames himself that he cannot save Tsui-Ling...
So he does ANYTHING to save those he care from then on.
He is reminded of Tsui-Ling by the Fuuga's doing... thus he hates them all.
It was the simplest and most efficient way to stop all resistance.
If you ask me, the bad guy should release his control over Ren then =X
Then Ren will see how his brother brutely murder everyone, and Kazuma has a new enemy to take care of, the kind and merciful Ren!
Besides, if he didnt do this, Book 2 makes slightly less sense.
Anyways, so far no big problems? @@
well...i tried to keep everything in spoilers for other unsuspecting readers...but o well...
its fine if he cant save everyone...but he dosnt have to kill innocent people, which IS what they were
but i mean...he could have just as easily blown them away with wind...or he could have disabled them...he didnt have to kill them
and i thought Ren did see him do it
By now, the Fuga clan is but no more. But to Kazuma, the real problem begins only now.
“Bro……Brother, you really overdid it! There was no need to kill those people who were controlled, was there!?”
Kazuma had to comfort Ren, who was gleaming with tears and interrogating Kazuma.
“Oh? Is……Is that so?”
By Kazuma’s standards, what he did already had Ren’s feelings in mind, and prevented unnecessary killings……
“Lets…… Lets put this aside for now, lets take care of that old man first!”
and yeah...i did find something wierd while perusing this chapter
“However, it is just for today…… If it weren’t for a time like this, I would never……”
She tries her best to rebut, but Kazuma does not reply, his presence earlier seemed to have vanished without a trace, as though that was just a dream, Kazuma relaxed his whole body, and fiddles with his cigarette in a lazy posture. Ayano thinks to herself, just like a poisonous bug.
(------What a mean person.)
is that right?
and if it is....what exactly does that mean?
ive never heard of a description like that....and i cant even imagine what it would be like
Edit: wait wait! ah, i think i get it now....Ayano is callling Kazuma a poisonous bug in her mind....
haha, i thought it was saying she was thinking to herself, which is "just like a poisonous bug."
ah well...i guess i might have to reword it so someone like me dosnt make that mistake
Edit 2: OK! starting editing sequence...
and i found something...the word "quickly" dosnt make much sense
Even though it is impossible not to notice, Kazuma does not even look at Ayano. He shakes his leg comfortably, and is reading a magazine he bought from a stall quickly.
i thinkk the word is supposed to be "quietly", as in "and is quitely reading a magazine hebought from a stall"
Edit 3: AH! after thinking about it some more... it most likely meant he was reading at a fast pace
i dont know if it means he can just read fast or if he is just glancing through... but im going to change the word to skimming as in:
Even though it is impossible not to notice her, Kazuma does not even look at Ayano. He shakes his leg comfortably as he skims through a magazine he bought from a stall.
Edit 4: ok so here the exclamation point and the next line is contradictory
“Who…… Who would be happy! Just the fact that I am being with you makes me feel unhappy to the max!”
”Is that so!”
Rebutting the agitated Ayano, Kazuma replied faintly, as though nothing had happened and took out a cigarette from a hidden pocket in his jacket.
so im going to take out the exclamation mark and just makeit a period
also...i think "lightly" wuld be a better word...because faintly alludes to him speaking weakly, as if hes scared or oppressed
Edit 5: white isnt really a good word for this situation
Ayano furiously stared once more at Kazuma, who began to produce more smoke. And what is even more detestable, is that smoke went through the kekkai and began to taint her surroundings white.
"white" alludes to pureness and cleanlyness, so im going to change it to smoggy, but it might also be good to just take it out altogether
Edit 6:
After throwing down that sentence, Ayano dashed out. As she was running, she pulled out Enraiha, and shot a fireball to show her might.
“I told you, that won’t work!”
Kazuma grumbled in shock.
Ryuuya quietly stood before the approaching fireball. The scorching flames attacked Ryuuya, who did not take any defensive actions at all, staying motionless.
i dont think shock is the right word....so im going to change it into agitation.
just telling ya for confirmation.