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chapter 1 - clarifications

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I searched for the other lunch mate Taniguchi, but he was not in the classroom; perhaps he went to the school canteen.
By canteen did you mean cafeteria? I assume you were using the definition of canteen where the definition is: a small cafeteria or snack bar, but I haven't heard canteen used for that definition that very often. I believe cafeteria or snack bar is more appropriate.
Then the fellow turned to Kunikida, who was trying to tidy up his Tupperware.
Fellow seems to have a positive connotation. I think that "person" would be more fitting, as it's more neutral. Also, I think "that person" might be more correct than "the person" (Assuming fellow is altered to person).
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1. Cafeteria sounds good.

2. Yes, that person is fine.
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Post by Nandeyanen »

Hmm, I have never heard of a name called Suzumiya.
I suggest changing it to either, "Hmm, I have never before heard of a person named Suzumiya." or, "Hmm, I have never heard of the name Suzumiya before."
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Post by harunako »

"Hmm, I have never before heard of a person named Suzumiya"
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Post by Guest »

How about: "Hmm, I have never heard a person by the name of Suzumiya before."
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Post by filthychimp »

I see two choices for that, depending on interpretation.

"Hmm, I haven't heard of anyone named Suzumiya before." Emphasizes that he doesn't know a specific person by that name.

"Hmm, I've never heard of a Suzumiya before." Emphasizes that he hasn't heard the name ever.

"A person" should be replaced be "anyone" because of the ambiguity. "Before" definitely needs to go at the end since it breaks up the flow of the sentence. He should be using a contraction here, since this is a casual conversation.
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Post by harunako »

"Hmm, I've never heard of a Suzumiya before." sounds better.
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