Seirei Tsukai no Blade Dance

[Darklor]

It is as you said. I have kept it as close to the actual texts (placing 'comma' when there is 'comma' in the raw) There is a big difference in the reading/ writing style. One can better understand it when reading zzhk's.

But you know that a comma depends on the grammar you use?

[delacroix01]

Hm? Mind showing an example?

Because there are expressions that are not really use in English. So sometimes, it's better to change them.

There are some clueless people as always, but at this stage, there's no need yet to lock the chapters, except maybe the first or second volume.

Yeah, I know localization is needed sometimes, but too much is too much.

Spoiler! :

眠そうにまぶたをこするその姿は、まるで雪の妖精のような可憐さだ。

That very figure, who was rubbing her drowsy-looking eyelids, was lovely just like a snow fairy.

The figure in question, who was rubbing her drowsy-looking eyelids, was lovely just like a snow fairy.

The lovely snow fairy-like figure who was rubbing her eyes was Est a sword spirit.

As you see, the edits made by registered editors didn't change much of what I intended, and not much different from the author's idea (although I couldn't think of a good way to convey the emphasis in the phrase その姿). However, the anon's edit was different because it failed to express the idea. The most important part of the sentence was まるで雪の妖精のような可憐さだ, and it should be placed at the end of the sentence, not part of the noun phrase like in the anon's sentence, not to mention that he even merged it with something that was not in the sentence, but the next "sentence":

剣精霊エスト。〈魔王殺しの聖剣【デモン・スレイヤー】〉の称号を冠するカミトの契約精霊だ。

Sword spirit Est. She was Kamito's contracted spirit, who was entitled the «Demon Slayer».

She was Kamito's contracted spirit, who had the title «Demon Slayer».

Another case:

なにしろ、あのエストがここまで恥ずかしがるのだ。

Anyhow, it's because Est, not any other girl, was bashful to this extent.

Anyhow, it's because Est, unlike any other girl, was bashful to this extent.

Obviously he got it wrong. Since the author used あの, が and のだ, the emphasis was heavily stressed on the part that it was Est who was getting embarrassed, not anyone else, while she's usually expressionless.

Or

容姿だけなら抜群に可愛い、掛け値なしの超美少女。

If it's appearance alone, she's exceptionally cute, an ultra beautiful girl without any exaggeration.

If it was appearance alone, she was exceptionally cute, an ultra beautiful girl without a doubt.

掛け値なし means "without exaggeration", not "without doubt".

There are plenty more, but I guess this should be enough for now.

[Darklor]

Chapter 1 and 2 of vol. 4 are now protected against anonymous edits...

[Hiyono]

Have to say, it's one thing to make edits that fail to preserve meaning, but even for the innocently clueless, it's another thing entirely to make edits that aren't even proper English.

[Mystes]

@delacroix Oh, I see.

Though at the same time, I wonder if it's possible to change the sentence "Sword spirit Est.".

[florza]

@delacroix Oh, I see.

Though at the same time, I wonder if it's possible to change the sentence "Sword spirit Est.".

The Sword Spirit, Est. She who carries the title of the Demon King Killing Sacred Sword, Demon Slayer, was Kamito's contracted spirit.

What's wrong with that?

[delacroix01]

Well, I see the point. The use of punctuation mark after a phrase is common practice in Japanese creative writing, but it can be different in English. If needed, you can turn it into a complete sentence, although I'm not sure if that will keep the flow of the translated text, since I once tried and it didn't go smoothly.

[Hiyono]

Sentence fragments are an oft-used literary element. Read enough and you'll see that at times grammatical rules can be broken to great effect, when used correctly of course.

[Sniper221]

Hello this is Sniper221 and Vermiculo, we would like to inform you that we have exams this week and would not be able to translate/ edit/ post the Light novel volumes
but it will be posted latest by December 26th.
we are sorry for any inconvenience caused.
*we wish you all a merry Christmas, or holidays if you don't celebrate Christmas.

[DoomCalibur]

Good grief! Why should my exam start on the same day as the Christmas

[d34thw1ng]

Hello this is Sniper221 and Vermiculo, we would like to inform you that we have exams this week and would not be able to translate/ edit/ post the Light novel volumes
but it will be posted latest by December 26th.
we are sorry for any inconvenience caused.
*we wish you all a merry Christmas, or holidays if you don't celebrate Christmas.

success on ur terms , merry Christmas and take care

[latos1117]

Hello this is Sniper221 and Vermiculo, we would like to inform you that we have exams this week and would not be able to translate/ edit/ post the Light novel volumes
but it will be posted latest by December 26th.
we are sorry for any inconvenience caused.
*we wish you all a merry Christmas, or holidays if you don't celebrate Christmas.

Its all good after all we know you'll also have RL, well good luck on your exams. Al hapy holidays.

[chancs]

It is as you said. I have kept it as close to the actual texts (placing 'comma' when there is 'comma' in the raw) There is a big difference in the reading/ writing style. One can better understand it when reading zzhk's.

But you know that a comma depends on the grammar you use?

Umm...at the places wherever possible ( no point if the sentence doesn't make sense)

And I see we have a new translator. Hurraaayyy

[TJP1600]

And I see we have a new translator. Hurraaayyy

I have a friend of mine translating this without reading the other volumes and is new to LNs as a whole (yeah I know its bad to do this which is why I have edited it for format, terminology and when knowledge of previous volumes come into play, although blade dance is easy to translate). They wanted to give it a shot so might as well right? Don't expect long term translations from the new translator outside of winter break. I think we did a pretty good job with it barring a few errors. Anyways, I hope you guys like the translation after it gets put up soon.

[TJP1600]

The chapter is up (Vol 5 CH 1), knock yourself out.