Untitled story wants opinion

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Untitled story wants opinion

Postby mvandii » Thu Aug 08, 2019 10:48 am

I'm writing a story in my spare time and would like opinions on it, I've been posting at https://dxxshore.blogspot.com, I've just started the second chapter any feedback would be much appreciated. I feel that my conversations are too shallow, that I should describe body language more, and add more environmental detail. Thank you.
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