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<p>207.81.116.253: edits (in bold, underneath the original text)</p> <hr /> <div>Just a few things I noticed. Let me know what you think.<br /> <br /> <br /> (3) A man with glasses smilingly looked into the boy's eyes.<br /> '''A man with glasses smiled, and looked into the boy's eyes'''<br /> <br /> <br /> (5) &quot;Indeed, for countless amounts.&quot;<br /> '''more clarification needed. this doesn't make any sense in context, i don't think'''<br /> <br /> (6) A man with dignified air answered in a low voice.<br /> '''not clear either... maybe A man with an air of dignity answered the boy in a low voice'''<br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> (7) &quot;All I need is a word to shatter that confident look of yours. Understand?&quot;<br /> '''maybe... I only need to say one word to shatter that confident look of yours ect.'''<br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> (11) A moment of silence. While watching the quiet applause of two other staff - the secretary and the Asian elder - the boy finally understood.<br /> '''There was a moment of silence, but when he saw (heard?) the quiet applause of the other two staff - the secratary and the Asian elder - the boy finally understood'''<br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> (12) A big, childish grin conquered his face.<br /> '''Maybe 'spread onto' is a better word'''<br /> <br /> <br /> <br /> (14) To shop for a hat with an executive staff. Such event held an extremely significant meaning in the Organization.<br /> '''to shop for a hat with an executive staff member... such an event held an extremely significant meaning in the organization.'''<br /> <br /> <br /> (15) The man with glasses approached the boy in great delight.<br /> '''The man with glasses, delighted, approached the boy.'''</div>

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