Absolute Duo:Volume 2 Chapter 5 - Revision history

JFerg: /* Part 1 */

2014-08-23T05:16:19Z

Part 1

Redak: How about you check the forum first? Undo revision 371842 by Simon (talk)

2014-07-21T20:36:24Z

How about you check the forum first? Undo revision 371842 by Simon (talk)

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	When I looked over to Tachibana sitting beside me, she replied back like that.		When I looked over to Tachibana sitting beside me, she replied back like that.

	As if to continue my words, ~~Yurie~~ and Tora gave their comments.		As if to continue my words, Julie and Tora gave their comments.

	“From what I can see, it seems they are just slightly slower than Tsukimi-sensei. If it is 1 on 1 then, then by no means are they unbeatable opponents even though there is a difference in <<Level>>”		“From what I can see, it seems they are just slightly slower than Tsukimi-sensei. If it is 1 on 1 then, then by no means are they unbeatable opponents even though there is a difference in <<Level>>”
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	“If it is okay with you all, how about it?”		“If it is okay with you all, how about it?”

	Tachibana turned her face around and looked at me, ~~Yurie~~, Tora and the rest.		Tachibana turned her face around and looked at me, Julie, Tora and the rest.

	“………….Well, I don’t mind but, how about you ~~Yurie~~?”		“………….Well, I don’t mind but, how about you Julie?”

	This had nothing to do with the <<Duo>> this time…………nevertheless, I’ll try asking ~~Yurie~~------		This had nothing to do with the <<Duo>> this time…………nevertheless, I’ll try asking Julie------

	“If Tooru wishes for it.”		“If Tooru wishes for it.”

	After she answered, it looked like ~~Yurie~~ was planning to fight as a <<Duo>>.		After she answered, it looked like Julie was planning to fight as a <<Duo>>.

	“If that is the case then let’s team up. Pleasure working with you, Tachibana.”		“If that is the case then let’s team up. Pleasure working with you, Tachibana.”
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	“Umu, it’s decided then.”		“Umu, it’s decided then.”

	“Fufu, let’s work hard together, ~~Yurie~~-chan.”		“Fufu, let’s work hard together, Julie-chan.”

	“Ja---”		“Ja---”
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	“Are you okay, Tooru?”		“Are you okay, Tooru?”

	I thanked ~~Yurie~~ who was rubbing my back.		I thanked Julie who was rubbing my back.

	“A-aah. Somehow………”		“A-aah. Somehow………”
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	“Ah……..aah, Thanks.”		“Ah……..aah, Thanks.”

	I regained myself when ~~Yurie~~ called out and stopped my thinking.		I regained myself when Julie called out and stopped my thinking.

	After taking the cup filled with apple tea, I took a sip.		After taking the cup filled with apple tea, I took a sip.
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	I clearly felt the hot fluid flowing down to my stomach.		I clearly felt the hot fluid flowing down to my stomach.

	Around the time I put my mouth on the cup for another sip, ~~Yurie~~ came over to the distance where our shoulders were touching.		Around the time I put my mouth on the cup for another sip, Julie came over to the distance where our shoulders were touching.

	After she sat down, ~~Yurie~~ drank the cup she was holding with her small mouth and Gulp that sound came from her throat.		After she sat down, Julie drank the cup she was holding with her small mouth and Gulp that sound came from her throat.

	“It is delicious.”		“It is delicious.”
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	(Although this is just an instant………….)		(Although this is just an instant………….)

	~~Yurie~~ probably felt the same, that this was delicious too.		Julie probably felt the same, that this was delicious too.

	The time I went through with the silver girl, sometimes felt gentle and calm so much that I felt guilty.		The time I went through with the silver girl, sometimes felt gentle and calm so much that I felt guilty.
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	“Is that so…………”		“Is that so…………”

	<nowiki></nowiki>Kupi ~~Yurie~~ took a sip of the apple tea and opened her mouth again.		<nowiki></nowiki>Kupi Julie took a sip of the apple tea and opened her mouth again.

	“Tomorrow……….for tomorrow-----let’s win, definitely.”		“Tomorrow……….for tomorrow-----let’s win, definitely.”
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	Let’s win, instead of working hard.		Let’s win, instead of working hard.

	Different from the way she pumped herself up during the <<{{Furigana\|New blade battle\|Newcomer battle}}>>, I thought ~~Yurie~~ was reliable.		Different from the way she pumped herself up during the <<{{Furigana\|New blade battle\|Newcomer battle}}>>, I thought Julie was reliable.


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	“………Tonight '''''too'''''?”		“………Tonight '''''too'''''?”

	~~Yurie~~ nodded when I asked again.		Julie nodded when I asked again.

	Yes, tonight “Too”.		Yes, tonight “Too”.

	Actually for the past few days, ~~Yurie~~ had been saying she wanted to sleep together.		Actually for the past few days, Julie had been saying she wanted to sleep together.

	This became frequent, ever since the time ~~Yurie~~ told me the reason why she was an <<Avenger>> like me on that night.		This became frequent, ever since the time Julie told me the reason why she was an <<Avenger>> like me on that night.

	“……………I understand. Let’s sleep together.”		“……………I understand. Let’s sleep together.”
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	“Ja--. Thank you very much, Tooru.”		“Ja--. Thank you very much, Tooru.”

	~~Yurie~~ made a happy smile.		Julie made a happy smile.

	(Well, I guess I have no choice………….)		(Well, I guess I have no choice………….)
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	Her feelings were probably unstable because of that.		Her feelings were probably unstable because of that.

	In order to divert that sad feeling even if it was little, I continued patting ~~Yurie’s~~ head until she fell asleep for tonight too.		In order to divert that sad feeling even if it was little, I continued patting Julie’s head until she fell asleep for tonight too.


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	But, I only took a backward glance at everyone and did not move from my spot.		But, I only took a backward glance at everyone and did not move from my spot.

	“It’s okay to head inside with everyone first, ~~Yurie~~.”		“It’s okay to head inside with everyone first, Julie.”

	“Tooru…………”		“Tooru…………”
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	Lilith turned back and looked towards the entrance to the building.		Lilith turned back and looked towards the entrance to the building.

	~~Yurie~~ was being pointed at by her {{Furigana\|blue gemstone eyes\|Sapphire blue}}.		Julie was being pointed at by her {{Furigana\|blue gemstone eyes\|Sapphire blue}}.

	“Then prove it.”		“Then prove it.”

	The gold girl took a glance at ~~Yurie~~ and stared at me.		The gold girl took a glance at Julie and stared at me.

	“But I will not forgive that-------I will have you know how useless you are.”		“But I will not forgive that-------I will have you know how useless you are.”

	I did not reply to those words and ran towards ~~Yurie~~.		I did not reply to those words and ran towards Julie.

	I muttered to no one in particular.		I muttered to no one in particular.

Simon: /* Part 1 */Reverting the changes made to the characters name., replaced: Julie → Yurie (22)

2014-07-21T20:26:20Z

Part 1: Reverting the changes made to the characters name., replaced: Julie → Yurie (22)

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	When I looked over to Tachibana sitting beside me, she replied back like that.		When I looked over to Tachibana sitting beside me, she replied back like that.

	As if to continue my words, ~~Julie~~ and Tora gave their comments.		As if to continue my words, Yurie and Tora gave their comments.

	“From what I can see, it seems they are just slightly slower than Tsukimi-sensei. If it is 1 on 1 then, then by no means are they unbeatable opponents even though there is a difference in <<Level>>”		“From what I can see, it seems they are just slightly slower than Tsukimi-sensei. If it is 1 on 1 then, then by no means are they unbeatable opponents even though there is a difference in <<Level>>”
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	“If it is okay with you all, how about it?”		“If it is okay with you all, how about it?”

	Tachibana turned her face around and looked at me, ~~Julie~~, Tora and the rest.		Tachibana turned her face around and looked at me, Yurie, Tora and the rest.

	“………….Well, I don’t mind but, how about you ~~Julie~~?”		“………….Well, I don’t mind but, how about you Yurie?”

	This had nothing to do with the <<Duo>> this time…………nevertheless, I’ll try asking ~~Julie~~------		This had nothing to do with the <<Duo>> this time…………nevertheless, I’ll try asking Yurie------

	“If Tooru wishes for it.”		“If Tooru wishes for it.”

	After she answered, it looked like ~~Julie~~ was planning to fight as a <<Duo>>.		After she answered, it looked like Yurie was planning to fight as a <<Duo>>.

	“If that is the case then let’s team up. Pleasure working with you, Tachibana.”		“If that is the case then let’s team up. Pleasure working with you, Tachibana.”
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	“Umu, it’s decided then.”		“Umu, it’s decided then.”

	“Fufu, let’s work hard together, ~~Julie~~-chan.”		“Fufu, let’s work hard together, Yurie-chan.”

	“Ja---”		“Ja---”
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	“Are you okay, Tooru?”		“Are you okay, Tooru?”

	I thanked ~~Julie~~ who was rubbing my back.		I thanked Yurie who was rubbing my back.

	“A-aah. Somehow………”		“A-aah. Somehow………”
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	“Ah……..aah, Thanks.”		“Ah……..aah, Thanks.”

	I regained myself when ~~Julie~~ called out and stopped my thinking.		I regained myself when Yurie called out and stopped my thinking.

	After taking the cup filled with apple tea, I took a sip.		After taking the cup filled with apple tea, I took a sip.
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	I clearly felt the hot fluid flowing down to my stomach.		I clearly felt the hot fluid flowing down to my stomach.

	Around the time I put my mouth on the cup for another sip, ~~Julie~~ came over to the distance where our shoulders were touching.		Around the time I put my mouth on the cup for another sip, Yurie came over to the distance where our shoulders were touching.

	After she sat down, ~~Julie~~ drank the cup she was holding with her small mouth and Gulp that sound came from her throat.		After she sat down, Yurie drank the cup she was holding with her small mouth and Gulp that sound came from her throat.

	“It is delicious.”		“It is delicious.”
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	(Although this is just an instant………….)		(Although this is just an instant………….)

	~~Julie~~ probably felt the same, that this was delicious too.		Yurie probably felt the same, that this was delicious too.

	The time I went through with the silver girl, sometimes felt gentle and calm so much that I felt guilty.		The time I went through with the silver girl, sometimes felt gentle and calm so much that I felt guilty.
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	“Is that so…………”		“Is that so…………”

	<nowiki></nowiki>Kupi ~~Julie~~ took a sip of the apple tea and opened her mouth again.		<nowiki></nowiki>Kupi Yurie took a sip of the apple tea and opened her mouth again.

	“Tomorrow……….for tomorrow-----let’s win, definitely.”		“Tomorrow……….for tomorrow-----let’s win, definitely.”
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	Let’s win, instead of working hard.		Let’s win, instead of working hard.

	Different from the way she pumped herself up during the <<{{Furigana\|New blade battle\|Newcomer battle}}>>, I thought ~~Julie~~ was reliable.		Different from the way she pumped herself up during the <<{{Furigana\|New blade battle\|Newcomer battle}}>>, I thought Yurie was reliable.


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	“………Tonight '''''too'''''?”		“………Tonight '''''too'''''?”

	~~Julie~~ nodded when I asked again.		Yurie nodded when I asked again.

	Yes, tonight “Too”.		Yes, tonight “Too”.

	Actually for the past few days, ~~Julie~~ had been saying she wanted to sleep together.		Actually for the past few days, Yurie had been saying she wanted to sleep together.

	This became frequent, ever since the time ~~Julie~~ told me the reason why she was an <<Avenger>> like me on that night.		This became frequent, ever since the time Yurie told me the reason why she was an <<Avenger>> like me on that night.

	“……………I understand. Let’s sleep together.”		“……………I understand. Let’s sleep together.”
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	“Ja--. Thank you very much, Tooru.”		“Ja--. Thank you very much, Tooru.”

	~~Julie~~ made a happy smile.		Yurie made a happy smile.

	(Well, I guess I have no choice………….)		(Well, I guess I have no choice………….)
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	Her feelings were probably unstable because of that.		Her feelings were probably unstable because of that.

	In order to divert that sad feeling even if it was little, I continued patting ~~Julie’s~~ head until she fell asleep for tonight too.		In order to divert that sad feeling even if it was little, I continued patting Yurie’s head until she fell asleep for tonight too.


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	But, I only took a backward glance at everyone and did not move from my spot.		But, I only took a backward glance at everyone and did not move from my spot.

	“It’s okay to head inside with everyone first, ~~Julie~~.”		“It’s okay to head inside with everyone first, Yurie.”

	“Tooru…………”		“Tooru…………”
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	Lilith turned back and looked towards the entrance to the building.		Lilith turned back and looked towards the entrance to the building.

	~~Julie~~ was being pointed at by her {{Furigana\|blue gemstone eyes\|Sapphire blue}}.		Yurie was being pointed at by her {{Furigana\|blue gemstone eyes\|Sapphire blue}}.

	“Then prove it.”		“Then prove it.”

	The gold girl took a glance at ~~Julie~~ and stared at me.		The gold girl took a glance at Yurie and stared at me.

	“But I will not forgive that-------I will have you know how useless you are.”		“But I will not forgive that-------I will have you know how useless you are.”

	I did not reply to those words and ran towards ~~Julie~~.		I did not reply to those words and ran towards Yurie.

	I muttered to no one in particular.		I muttered to no one in particular.

Acolyte at 21:31, 20 July 2014

2014-07-20T21:31:45Z

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	Miyabi looked troubled at our appearance.		Miyabi looked troubled at our appearance.

	[Well, I guess I want to fight since we are at it anyway] [Ya---. That’s right] [Fuun, I’ll fight and win it]		[Well, I guess I want to fight since we are at it anyway] [Ja---. That’s right] [Fuun, I’ll fight and win it]

	“Ya-re Ya-re…………I understand your feelings but, everyone in the class are comrades in the <<Kouryou battle>>. There might be one vs one when it is needed in the strategy but, it would be helpful if you all prioritize the victory of the class as our basis.”		“Ya-re Ya-re…………I understand your feelings but, everyone in the class are comrades in the <<Kouryou battle>>. There might be one vs one when it is needed in the strategy but, it would be helpful if you all prioritize the victory of the class as our basis.”
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	“Fufu, let’s work hard together, Julie-chan.”		“Fufu, let’s work hard together, Julie-chan.”

	~~“Ya~~---”		“Ja---”

	“What about you Tora?”		“What about you Tora?”
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	“Alright, then………let’s go to sleep already.”		“Alright, then………let’s go to sleep already.”

	~~“Ya~~---”		“Ja---”

	Around the time when the date was about to change, I was going to get to bed but-----		Around the time when the date was about to change, I was going to get to bed but-----
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	“……………I understand. Let’s sleep together.”		“……………I understand. Let’s sleep together.”

	~~“Ya~~--. Thank you very much, Tooru.”		“Ja--. Thank you very much, Tooru.”

	Julie made a happy smile.		Julie made a happy smile.

Mashiro: /* Chapter 5 『《{{Furigana|Kouryou Battle|Game}}》,Start』 */

2014-07-20T16:13:21Z

Chapter 5 『《{{Furigana|Kouryou Battle|Game}}》,Start』

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Drowzycow: /* Part 2 */

2014-04-17T23:27:11Z

Part 2

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	In that instant-----		In that instant-----

	The sound of the air and her thoughts ~~cutting~~ through ~~appeared~~.		The sound of the air and her thoughts were cut through.

	A surprise attack. It was an <<Arrow>> aimed towards Lealith.		A surprise attack. It was an <<Arrow>> aimed towards Lealith.

RikiNutcase at 13:18, 17 April 2014

2014-04-17T13:18:43Z

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	“Ya---”		“Ya---”

	Around the time when the date was about to change~~<!--Around midnight-->~~, I was going to get to bed but-----		Around the time when the date was about to change, I was going to get to bed but-----

	“Tooru. Err……….is it okay to sleep together?”		“Tooru. Err……….is it okay to sleep together?”
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	We went outside the premises to head to the place where <<Survive>> was going to be held.		We went outside the premises to head to the place where <<Survive>> was going to be held.

	We got off the monorail and after we got on the ~~personal<!--~~private~~-->~~ bus that was waiting in front of the station, the bus reached the ~~rooftop parking stop <!--~~rooftop carpark~~/rooftop bus stop-->~~ in the A La Mode in around 10 minutes.		We got off the monorail and after we got on the private bus that was waiting in front of the station, the bus reached the rooftop carpark in the A La Mode in around 10 minutes.

	The bus we were riding on now was the only one in this place which usually had many cars parked too.		The bus we were riding on now was the only one in this place which usually had many cars parked too.
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	“And, looks like the organizer is here.”		“And, looks like the organizer is here.”

	I don’t know what car model it was but, a high-class looking black car was reflecting the sunlight while showing itself on the rooftop ~~parking spot~~.~~<!--match earlier word choice if changed-->~~		I don’t know what car model it was but, a high-class looking black car was reflecting the sunlight while showing itself on the rooftop carpark.

	The car then slowly stopped beside the bus we rode on.		The car then slowly stopped beside the bus we rode on.
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	“Maybe they didn’t want to let you on because you would cause a ruckus?”		“Maybe they didn’t want to let you on because you would cause a ruckus?”

	“I’ll crush you……………primarily with one of the 3 great desires.” ~~<!--3 great desires ref?-->~~		“I’ll crush you……………primarily with one of the 3 great desires.”

	“Please no.”		“Please no.”
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	I thrust my fist at the gold girl.		I thrust my fist at the gold girl.

	“I will go at full strength too. If both of us go at full strength, I feel we will accept each other without any reservations and stop being in the winning and losing~~<!--winners and losers?-->~~ relationship once the <<Survive>> is over.”		“I will go at full strength too. If both of us go at full strength, I feel we will accept each other without any reservations and stop being in the winning and losing relationship once the <<Survive>> is over.”

	“…………You’re an idiot right.”		“…………You’re an idiot right.”
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	In that instant-----		In that instant-----

	The sound of ~~something cutting through~~ the air, and her thoughts ~~was produced~~.~~<!--her thoughts were interrupted-->~~		The sound of the air and her thoughts cutting through appeared.

	A surprise attack. It was an <<Arrow>> aimed towards Lealith.		A surprise attack. It was an <<Arrow>> aimed towards Lealith.

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RikiNutcase at 04:56, 17 April 2014

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	“Alright………who wants to be the next one to be hunted?”		“Alright………who wants to be the next one to be hunted?”

	At the same time as she ~~rotated<!--~~spun~~-->~~ her <<{{Furigana\|Gun\|Rifle}}>>, Come on she beckoned them with her hand.		At the same time as she spun her <<{{Furigana\|Gun\|Rifle}}>>, Come on she beckoned them with her hand.

	2 people were provoked by her.		2 people were provoked by her.
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	Agitated, which meant it was a chance.		Agitated, which meant it was a chance.

	“Like I said, if you day dream………..~~wait, I don’t have the duty to say it twice.” <!--~~wait, I'm not obligated to say it twice.~~-->~~		“Like I said, if you day dream………..wait, I'm not obligated to say it twice.”

	Before the 2nd years regained their composure, Lealith pulled the trigger and another person collapsed-----		Before the 2nd years regained their composure, Lealith pulled the trigger and another person collapsed-----

	She then easily dodged the attack of the comrade she made an enemy out of and ~~countered back~~.~~<!--counterattacked-->~~		She then easily dodged the attack of the comrade she made an enemy out of and counterattacked.

	The only ones remaining were the <<{{Furigana\|III\|Level 3}}>> <<Duo>>.		The only ones remaining were the <<{{Furigana\|III\|Level 3}}>> <<Duo>>.
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	Lealith will have to continue running around and hiding, and needs to eliminate everyone one of us who just need to survive.		Lealith will have to continue running around and hiding, and needs to eliminate everyone one of us who just need to survive.

	~~If I think by standing on her position<!--If I think of it from her point of view/If I were in her shoes?-->,~~ it was not hard to imagine how annoying that would be.		it was not hard to imagine how annoying that would be, if I were in her shoes.

	(Nonetheless, I have no intention of running around.)		(Nonetheless, I have no intention of running around.)
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	“Mental strength enhancement will start from <<{{Furigana\|IV\|Level 4}}>> and it would bring out the true power of the <<Blaze>>.”		“Mental strength enhancement will start from <<{{Furigana\|IV\|Level 4}}>> and it would bring out the true power of the <<Blaze>>.”

	<<Blaze>>------a weapon that was able to defeat someone without ~~hurting them.<!--~~physically injuring them~~-->~~		<<Blaze>>------a weapon that was able to defeat someone without physically injuring them.

	However it has highly classified information that, if killing intent was put inside, it would become just as a deadly a weapon.		However it has highly classified information that, if killing intent was put inside, it would become just as a deadly a weapon.
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	(True power--------what kind of power is within the <<Blaze>>………..?)		(True power--------what kind of power is within the <<Blaze>>………..?)

	However unfortunately, the chance to ~~know<!--~~find out~~-->~~ about that was postponed.		However unfortunately, the chance to find out about that was postponed.

	“Well, if you want to know the true powers at <<<{{Furigana\|IV\|Level 4}}>> then confirm it yourself with your eyes when you get to that, and class is going to end any time now ♪”		“Well, if you want to know the true powers at <<<{{Furigana\|IV\|Level 4}}>> then confirm it yourself with your eyes when you get to that, and class is going to end any time now ♪”
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	“Dodge with your spirit ♥”		“Dodge with your spirit ♥”

	She told~~<!--revealed-->~~ a completely useless method.		She told us a completely useless method.

	(I was an idiot to expect something…………)		(I was an idiot to expect something…………)
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	After I said that while picking up the octopus sandwich, Tachibana I have waited for this made a smile.		After I said that while picking up the octopus sandwich, Tachibana I have waited for this made a smile.

	“Fufu actually, I have already thought of several plans already. Would you let me explain it together with the building map? Of course, you all can say anything you want ~~once~~ you ~~all thought of anything~~.” ~~<!--'you all thought of anything' needs rephrasing: you all can say anything you want once you've heard my thoughts?-->~~		“Fufu actually, I have already thought of several plans already. Would you let me explain it together with the building map? Of course, you all can say anything you want if you have an idea or something.”

	“You’re really into this.”		“You’re really into this.”

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