Absolute Duo:Volume 2 Prologue - Revision history

RikiNutcase at 01:35, 10 April 2014

2014-04-10T01:35:08Z

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	<nowiki></nowiki>Posha the sound of water dripping was produced; and at the same time, a shadow moved.		<nowiki></nowiki>Posha the sound of water dripping was produced; and at the same time, a shadow moved.

	~~In there, a beautiful girl without a single cloth on her. <!--~~A beautiful girl without a single cloth on her stood there.~~-->~~		A beautiful girl without a single cloth on her stood there.

	She has a nice style which can be said with just one look, a bountiful chest and slender limbs.		She has a nice style which can be said with just one look, a bountiful chest and slender limbs.
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	Yes, they were the prey, and the gold girl was waiting there to hunt them down.		Yes, they were the prey, and the gold girl was waiting there to hunt them down.

	However, a question regarding the hunt ~~pops out.<!--~~ comes to mind~~-->~~		However, a question regarding the hunt comes to mind.

	That’s because, not only is the girl not wearing any clothes, there is not a single gun, bow, or knife on her body.		That’s because, not only is the girl not wearing any clothes, there is not a single gun, bow, or knife on her body.

Drowzycow: suggestion for "pops out"

2014-04-09T23:56:10Z

suggestion for "pops out"

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	Yes, they were the prey, and the gold girl was waiting there to hunt them down.		Yes, they were the prey, and the gold girl was waiting there to hunt them down.

	However, a question regarding the hunt pops out.		However, a question regarding the hunt pops out.<!-- comes to mind-->

	That’s because, not only is the girl not wearing any clothes, there is not a single gun, bow, or knife on her body.		That’s because, not only is the girl not wearing any clothes, there is not a single gun, bow, or knife on her body.
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	The moment, the fawn licked the tip of the nose after some time, the doe twitched its ears and immediately blinked its eyes.		The moment, the fawn licked the tip of the nose after some time, the doe twitched its ears and immediately blinked its eyes.

	After a while, the doe raised its head and after slowly getting up and reconciling with the fawn several times, it will soon depart from the waterside and ~~entere~~ deep into the forest--------and ~~run~~ towards the group.		After a while, the doe raised its head and after slowly getting up and reconciling with the fawn several times, it will soon depart from the waterside and enter deep into the forest--------and runs towards the group.

	On the body of the doe running through the gaps between the trees, '''there is not even a single wound on it'''.		On the body of the doe running through the gaps between the trees, '''there is not even a single wound on it'''.

Yoyoyo5678: tenses ( stop change thing in the present into the past + things which continue till this moment should be written in the present - since they don't end yet) + grammar

2014-04-09T21:47:34Z

tenses ( stop change thing in the present into the past + things which continue till this moment should be written in the present - since they don't end yet) + grammar

Drowzycow: conscious seems a bit weird here

2014-04-09T20:35:42Z

conscious seems a bit weird here

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	Her hunt ended right here.		Her hunt ended right here.

	She had no ~~conscious to bring~~ back the prey she hunted down.		She had no thought on bringing back the prey she hunted down.

	Finally, after taking a glance at the doe lying down on her side, the girl made a big swipe with her {{Furigana\|blonde hair\|Yellow Topaz}} using her hands and water droplets fell off.		Finally, after taking a glance at the doe lying down on her side, the girl made a big swipe with her {{Furigana\|blonde hair\|Yellow Topaz}} using her hands and water droplets fell off.

Drowzycow: /* Prologue */ mainly tenses, removed some redundant wording.

2014-04-09T20:32:20Z

Prologue: mainly tenses, removed some redundant wording.

Morgi: /* Prologue */

2014-04-01T15:52:38Z

Prologue

RikiNutcase at 14:41, 7 March 2014

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	“<<{{Furigana\|One kind of a blaze\|~~Absolute~~ Blaze}}>>…………. Same as me but at the same time isn’t the same. However------“		“<<{{Furigana\|One kind of a blaze\|Unrivaled Blaze}}>>…………. Same as me but at the same time isn’t the same. However------“

RikiNutcase at 15:21, 24 December 2013

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	The next moment the gold girl mumbled something with her lips------		The next moment the gold girl mumbled something with her lips------

	A <<Rifle>> was being held on her hand as if it was a magic trick.		A <<{{Furigana\|Gun\|Rifle}}>> was being held on her hand as if it was a magic trick.

	She quietly directed the gun she was more accustomed to, compared to any other guns towards the group of deers------		She quietly directed the gun she was more accustomed to, compared to any other guns towards the group of deers------
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	“Fufu, Perfect”		“Fufu, Perfect”

	The girl made a satisfied smile and lowered her gun------in the next moment, this time the <<Rifle>> disappeared as if it was dispersed.		The girl made a satisfied smile and lowered her gun------in the next moment, this time the <<{{Furigana\|Gun\|Rifle}}>> disappeared as if it was dispersed.

	Her hunting ended right here.		Her hunting ended right here.

RikiNutcase at 14:33, 19 December 2013

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	“…………..Japan?”		“…………..Japan?”

	Towards the butler pondering about that, the girl made a big swing with her {{Furigana\|~~gold~~ hair\|Yellow Topaz}} using her hands.		Towards the butler pondering about that, the girl made a big swing with her {{Furigana\|blonde hair\|Yellow Topaz}} using her hands.

	“I heard of someone being the ''same kind as me''”		“I heard of someone being the ''same kind as me''”

RikiNutcase at 09:31, 2 December 2013

2013-12-02T09:31:36Z

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	Further up her sights, a group of young deer brimming with life appeared to moisten their throat through the spring deep inside the forest.		Further up her sights, a group of young deer brimming with life appeared to moisten their throat through the spring deep inside the forest.

	Yes, they were the prey, and the ~~blonde~~ girl was waiting there to hunt them down.		Yes, they were the prey, and the gold girl was waiting there to hunt them down.

	However, a question regarding the hunt pops out.		However, a question regarding the hunt pops out.
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	But-----		But-----

	The next moment the ~~blonde~~ girl mumbled something with her lips------		The next moment the gold girl mumbled something with her lips------

	A <<Rifle>> was being held on her hand as if it was a magic trick.		A <<Rifle>> was being held on her hand as if it was a magic trick.
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	She has no conscious to bring back the prey she hunted down.		She has no conscious to bring back the prey she hunted down.

	Finally, after taking a glance at the doe lying down on her sides, the girl made a big swipe with her {{Furigana\|~~gold~~ hair\|Yellow Topaz}} using her hands and water droplets falls off.		Finally, after taking a glance at the doe lying down on her sides, the girl made a big swipe with her {{Furigana\|blonde hair\|Yellow Topaz}} using her hands and water droplets falls off.

	She then wears the clothes she threw at the waterside, and leaves the spring.		She then wears the clothes she threw at the waterside, and leaves the spring.

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	She has a nice style which can be said with just one look, a bountiful chest and slender limbs.		She has a nice style which can be said with just one look, a bountiful chest and slender limbs.

	The water ~~dropped~~ along all of that were KiraKira* dazzlingly ~~and~~ reflecting the sunlight.		The water drops along all of that were KiraKira* dazzlingly reflecting the sunlight.

	Half of the girl, who ~~had~~ the beauty of the sun, was soaked in water starting from her thighs, and occasionally, she would dive her head into the water and would swim like a fish.		Half of the girl, who has the beauty of the sun, was soaked in water starting from her thighs, and occasionally, she would dive her head into the water and would swim like a fish.

	Why ~~was~~ such a person inside an untouched forest like this, playing with the water.		Why is such a person inside an untouched forest like this, playing with the water.

	The gold girl was '''waiting there'''.		The gold girl was '''waiting there'''.
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	Yes, they were the prey, and the gold girl was waiting there to hunt them down.		Yes, they were the prey, and the gold girl was waiting there to hunt them down.

	However, a question regarding the hunt ~~popped~~ out.		However, a question regarding the hunt pops out.

	That’s because, not only ~~was~~ the girl not wearing any clothes, there ~~was~~ not a single gun, bow, or knife on her body.		That’s because, not only is the girl not wearing any clothes, there is not a single gun, bow, or knife on her body.

	But-----		But-----
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	The next moment the gold girl mumbled something with her lips------		The next moment the gold girl mumbled something with her lips------

	A <<{{Furigana\|Gun\|Rifle}}>> ~~was~~ being held in her hand as if it was a magic trick.		A <<{{Furigana\|Gun\|Rifle}}>> is being held in her hand as if it was a magic trick.

	She quietly directed the gun she ~~was~~ more accustomed to, compared to any other gun towards the group of deer------		She quietly directed the gun she is more accustomed to, compared to any other gun towards the group of deer------

	She then set the gun nozzle towards the head of a doe.		She then set the gun nozzle towards the head of a doe.

	Those eyes that ~~showed~~ strong determination slightly narrowed down and--------		Those eyes that showing strong determination slightly narrowed down and--------

	The gunshot destroyed the silence.		The gunshot destroyed the silence.
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	The girl made a satisfied smile and lowered her gun------in the next moment, this time the <<{{Furigana\|Gun\|Rifle}}>> disappeared as if it was dispersed.		The girl made a satisfied smile and lowered her gun------in the next moment, this time the <<{{Furigana\|Gun\|Rifle}}>> disappeared as if it was dispersed.

	Her ~~hunt~~ ended right here.		Her hunting ended right here.

	She ~~had~~ no thought on bringing back the prey she hunted down.		She has no thought of bringing back the prey she hunted down.

	Finally, after taking a glance at the doe lying down on her side, the girl made a big swipe with her {{Furigana\|blonde hair\|Yellow Topaz}} using her hands and water droplets fell off.		Finally, after taking a glance at the doe lying down on her side, the girl made a big swipe with her {{Furigana\|blonde hair\|Yellow Topaz}} using her hands and water droplets fell off.
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	After half an hour the girl left the forest------		After half an hour the girl left the forest------

	Beside the doe lying on its side at the waterside, a small deer ~~was~~ standing there cuddling closer.		Beside the doe lying on its side at the waterside, a small deer is standing there cuddling closer.

	It probably did not understand its mother’s death yet, it continuously licked the mother's face many times.		It probably did not understand its mother’s death yet, it continuously licked the mother's face many times.
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	The moment, the fawn licked the tip of the nose after some time, the doe twitched its ears and immediately blinked its eyes.		The moment, the fawn licked the tip of the nose after some time, the doe twitched its ears and immediately blinked its eyes.

	After a while, the doe raised its head and after slowly getting up and reconciling with the fawn several times, it soon ~~departed~~ from the waterside and ~~entered~~ deep into the forest--------and ~~ran~~ towards the group.		After a while, the doe raised its head and after slowly getting up and reconciling with the fawn several times, it will soon depart from the waterside and entere deep into the forest--------and run towards the group.

	On the body of the doe running through the gaps between the trees, '''there ~~was~~ not even a single wound on it'''.		On the body of the doe running through the gaps between the trees, '''there is not even a single wound on it'''.

	Even though it was certain that the gold girl had shot through its heart.		Even though it was certain that the gold girl had shot through its heart.
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	“Welcome back, Ojou-sama.”		“Welcome back, Ojou-sama.”

	The person who greeted the girl who ~~had~~ returned back to the mansion was a female butler wearing a waistcoat and a wing collar shirt.		The person who greeted the girl who has returned back to the mansion was a female butler wearing a waistcoat and a wing collar shirt.

	“I am back, Sara…………..even if I say this, I am going to head out again immediately.”		“I am back, Sara…………..even if I say this, I am going to head out again immediately.”

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	“<<{{Furigana\|One kind of a blaze\|Unrivaled Blaze}}>>…………. Same as me but at the same time isn’t the same. However------“		“<<{{Furigana\|One kind of a blaze\|Unrivaled Blaze}}>>…………. Same as me but at the same time isn’t the same. However------”


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	A peaceful forest covered with a clear cold atmosphere.		A peaceful forest covered with a clear cold atmosphere.

	A ~~Nature~~ untouched by man; and deep inside the forest filled with life, a spring was there.		A nature untouched by man; and deep inside the forest filled with life, a spring was there.

	<nowiki></nowiki>Posha the sound of water dripping was produced; and at the same time, a shadow moved.		<nowiki></nowiki>Posha the sound of water dripping was produced; and at the same time, a shadow moved.

	In there, a beautiful girl without a single cloth on her.		In there, a beautiful girl without a single cloth on her. <!--A beautiful girl without a single cloth on her stood there.-->

	She has a nice style which can be said with just one look, a bountiful chest ~~bulge~~ and slender limbs.		She has a nice style which can be said with just one look, a bountiful chest and slender limbs.

	The water ~~drops~~ along all of that were KiraKira* dazzlingly reflecting the sunlight.		The water dropped along all of that were KiraKira* dazzlingly and reflecting the sunlight.

	Half of the girl, who ~~has~~ the beauty of the sun, was soaked in water starting from her thighs, and occasionally, she would dive her head into the water and would swim like a fish.		Half of the girl, who had the beauty of the sun, was soaked in water starting from her thighs, and occasionally, she would dive her head into the water and would swim like a fish.

	Why is such a person inside an untouched forest like this, playing with water.		Why was such a person inside an untouched forest like this, playing with the water.

	The gold girl was '''waiting there'''.		The gold girl was '''waiting there'''.
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	She was adapting to the presence of the forest by playing with the water, and waiting for her '''prey'''.		She was adapting to the presence of the forest by playing with the water, and waiting for her '''prey'''.

	“……………It’s ~~here”~~		“……………It’s here.”

	She grasped the presence of the long-awaited prey, and muttered.		She grasped the presence of the long-awaited prey, and muttered.
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	Yes, they were the prey, and the gold girl was waiting there to hunt them down.		Yes, they were the prey, and the gold girl was waiting there to hunt them down.

	However, a question regarding the hunt ~~pops~~ out.		However, a question regarding the hunt popped out.

	That’s because, not only is the girl not wearing any clothes, there was not a single gun, bow, or knife on her body.		That’s because, not only was the girl not wearing any clothes, there was not a single gun, bow, or knife on her body.

	But-----		But-----
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	The next moment the gold girl mumbled something with her lips------		The next moment the gold girl mumbled something with her lips------

	A <<{{Furigana\|Gun\|Rifle}}>> was being held on her hand as if it was a magic trick.		A <<{{Furigana\|Gun\|Rifle}}>> was being held in her hand as if it was a magic trick.

	She quietly directed the gun she was more accustomed to, compared to any other ~~guns~~ towards the group of ~~deers~~------		She quietly directed the gun she was more accustomed to, compared to any other gun towards the group of deer------

	She then set the gun nozzle towards the head of a doe.		She then set the gun nozzle towards the head of a doe.

	Those eyes that ~~show~~ strong determination slightly narrowed down and--------		Those eyes that showed strong determination slightly narrowed down and--------

	The gunshot destroyed the silence.		The gunshot destroyed the silence.

	In an instant, the doe with its heart pierced through collapsed, and luckily the other deer which weren’t the target ran away; because of the gunshot the forest was then filled with noise from the ~~sound of~~ birds flapping their wings.		In an instant, the doe with its heart pierced through collapsed, and luckily the other deer which weren’t the target ran away; because of the gunshot the forest was then filled with noise from the birds flapping their wings.

	“Fufu, ~~Perfect”~~		“Fufu, Perfect.”

	The girl made a satisfied smile and lowered her gun------in the next moment, this time the <<{{Furigana\|Gun\|Rifle}}>> disappeared as if it was dispersed.		The girl made a satisfied smile and lowered her gun------in the next moment, this time the <<{{Furigana\|Gun\|Rifle}}>> disappeared as if it was dispersed.

	Her ~~hunting~~ ended right here.		Her hunt ended right here.

	She ~~has~~ no conscious to bring back the prey she hunted down.		She had no conscious to bring back the prey she hunted down.

	Finally, after taking a glance at the doe lying down on her ~~sides~~, the girl made a big swipe with her {{Furigana\|blonde hair\|Yellow Topaz}} using her hands and water droplets ~~fall~~ off.		Finally, after taking a glance at the doe lying down on her side, the girl made a big swipe with her {{Furigana\|blonde hair\|Yellow Topaz}} using her hands and water droplets fell off.

	She then ~~wears~~ the clothes she threw at the waterside, and ~~leaves~~ the spring.		She then wore the clothes she threw at the waterside, and left the spring.

	After half an hour the girl left the forest------		After half an hour the girl left the forest------

	Beside the doe lying on its ~~sides~~ at the waterside, a small deer is standing there cuddling closer.		Beside the doe lying on its side at the waterside, a small deer was standing there cuddling closer.

	It probably did not understand its mother’s death yet, it continuously licked the mother's face many times.		It probably did not understand its mother’s death yet, it continuously licked the mother's face many times.
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	But-------		But-------

	The moment, the fawn licked the tip of the nose after some ~~times~~, the doe twitched its ears and immediately blinked its eyes.		The moment, the fawn licked the tip of the nose after some time, the doe twitched its ears and immediately blinked its eyes.

	After a while, the doe ~~raises~~ its head and after slowly getting up and reconciling with the fawn several times, it soon ~~departs~~ from the waterside and ~~enters~~ deep into the forest--------and ~~runs~~ towards the group.		After a while, the doe raised its head and after slowly getting up and reconciling with the fawn several times, it soon departed from the waterside and entered deep into the forest--------and ran towards the group.

	On the body of the doe running through the gaps between the trees, '''there was not even a single wound on it'''.		On the body of the doe running through the gaps between the trees, '''there was not even a single wound on it'''.
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	“Welcome back, Ojou-~~sama”~~		“Welcome back, Ojou-sama.”

	The person who greeted the girl who ~~has~~ returned back to the mansion was a female butler wearing a waistcoat and a wing collar shirt.		The person who greeted the girl who had returned back to the mansion was a female butler wearing a waistcoat and a wing collar shirt.

	“I am back, Sara…………..even if I say this, I am going to head out again ~~immediately”~~		“I am back, Sara…………..even if I say this, I am going to head out again immediately.”

	“Where are you heading to this time?”		“Where are you heading to this time?”

	The butler asked her master who said she would be heading out again immediately after she ~~has~~ just returned home.		The butler asked her master who said she would be heading out again immediately after she had just returned home.

	“It’s ~~Japan”~~		“It’s Japan.”

	“…………..Japan?”		“…………..Japan?”
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	Towards the butler pondering about that, the girl made a big swing with her {{Furigana\|blonde hair\|Yellow Topaz}} using her hands.		Towards the butler pondering about that, the girl made a big swing with her {{Furigana\|blonde hair\|Yellow Topaz}} using her hands.

	“I heard of someone being the ''same kind as me''”		“I heard of someone being the ''same kind as me''.”

	“Same as Ojou-sama, you ~~say”~~		“Same as Ojou-sama, you say?”

	“Yes. Now that I have heard about it, I will have to go and meet up with ~~him”~~		“Yes. Now that I have heard about it, I will have to go and meet up with him.”

	Making a smile, the gold girl said her own alias.		Making a smile, the gold girl said her own alias.

	“Same as me and at the same time isn’t the same…………as an <<Exception>>”		“Same as me and at the same time isn’t the same…………as an <<Exception>>.”

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	She then set the gun nozzle towards the head of a doe.		She then set the gun nozzle towards the head of a doe.

	Those eyes that ~~shows~~ strong determination slightly narrowed down and--------		Those eyes that show strong determination slightly narrowed down and--------

	The gunshot destroyed the silence.		The gunshot destroyed the silence.
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	She has no conscious to bring back the prey she hunted down.		She has no conscious to bring back the prey she hunted down.

	Finally, after taking a glance at the doe lying down on her sides, the girl made a big swipe with her {{Furigana\|blonde hair\|Yellow Topaz}} using her hands and water droplets ~~falls~~ off.		Finally, after taking a glance at the doe lying down on her sides, the girl made a big swipe with her {{Furigana\|blonde hair\|Yellow Topaz}} using her hands and water droplets fall off.

	She then wears the clothes she threw at the waterside, and leaves the spring.		She then wears the clothes she threw at the waterside, and leaves the spring.
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	On the body of the doe running through the gaps between the trees, '''there was not even a single wound on it'''.		On the body of the doe running through the gaps between the trees, '''there was not even a single wound on it'''.

	Even though it was certain that the gold girl ~~has~~ shot through its heart.		Even though it was certain that the gold girl had shot through its heart.

	The forest soon regained its silence.		The forest soon regained its silence.
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	Making a smile, the gold girl said her own alias.		Making a smile, the gold girl said her own alias.

	“Same as me and at the same time isn’t the same…………as a <<Exception>>”		“Same as me and at the same time isn’t the same…………as an <<Exception>>”