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	She had always imagined that she would fall for someone one day------like that.		She had always imagined that she would fall for someone one day------like that.

	Even though she was not conscious about this, her head turned completely blank when she saw the target of her affections getting kissed----even though it was just on the cheek. To Miyabi, who has only slowly gotten used to having conversations with the opposite sex, a kiss was a very high level action.		Even though she was not conscious about this, her head turned completely blank when she saw the target of her affections getting kissed----even though it was just on the cheek. To Miyabi, who has only slowly gotten used to having conversations with a member of the opposite sex, a kiss was a very high level action.

	The moment she regained her composure, the criticism that came from her mouth was-------a cute shout calling him pervert. Of course, it’s not like there were any bad intentions in it and those were the only words that Miyabi could have thought of in her half-panicked state.		The moment she regained her composure, the criticism that came from her mouth was-------a cute shout calling him a pervert. Of course, it’s not like there were any bad intentions in it and those were the only words that Miyabi could have thought of in her half-panicked state.

	However, she encountered a different kind of emotion in her chest when she recalled the event calmly after some time had passed and it had become night time. As if being covered in a haze, those emotions made it feel hard for her to breathe and at the same time made her thoughts heavier.		However, she encountered a different kind of emotion in her chest when she recalled the event calmly after some time had passed and it had become night time. As if being covered in a haze, those emotions made it feel hard for her to breathe and at the same time made her thoughts heavier.

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	The girl-----Hotaka Miyabi was bad with the opposite sex.		The girl-----Hotaka Miyabi was bad with the opposite sex.

	It’s not like she has an inerasable trauma from her ~~childhood…………but, it’s~~ just that she was bad with strangers and shy. ~~Beyond that, another~~ reason for it was that she went to a girls only middle school the same as her sister.		It’s not like she has an inerasable trauma from her childhood…………it’s just that she was bad with strangers and shy. Another reason for it was that she went to a girls only middle school the same as her sister.

	Because of that, the existence of males of the same age as the middle-school Miyabi only appeared in stories like drama or manga.		Because of that, the existence of males of the same age as the middle-school Miyabi only appeared in stories like drama or manga.

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Levant08 at 09:22, 20 May 2014

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	Miyabi tried her best to smile and Tooru felt saved when he saw that expression.		Miyabi tried her best to smile and Tooru felt saved when he saw that expression.

	“I get it. Alright, I look forward to that day………..~~the day~~ the day Miyabi's lap times are shorter than mine.”		“I get it. Alright, I look forward to that day……….. the day Miyabi's lap times are shorter than mine.”

	“-----E-eeeeeeeeeeeeh!? To-Tooru-kun, don’t make such an unreasonable demand<nowiki>～～～～</nowiki>”		“-----E-eeeeeeeeeeeeh!? To-Tooru-kun, don’t make such an unreasonable demand<nowiki>～～～～</nowiki>”

RikiNutcase at 04:22, 19 April 2014

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	Being born in the martial family of the Tachibana style, Tomoe had devoted most of her childhood days training to succeed in the family’s name. Fortunately she was blessed with the talent of martial arts and the tough training certainly bore fruit even though it was little by little.		Being born in the martial family of the Tachibana style, Tomoe had devoted most of her childhood days training to succeed in the family’s name. Fortunately she was blessed with the talent of martial arts and the tough training certainly bore fruit even though it was little by little.

	However, it became Tomoe’s misfortune. ~~The training of the Tachibana style was to give girls the strength enough to make males in the same age as them run away barefooted. <!--~~The training of the Tachibana style was to give girls the strength, strength that would make males the same age as them run away barefooted.~~-->~~		However, it became Tomoe’s misfortune. The training of the Tachibana style was to give girls the strength, strength that would make males the same age as them run away barefooted.

	Strength was simply something standard to males-----especially teenagers.		Strength was simply something standard to males-----especially teenagers.
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	Anyways-------as a result of being born in the environment she was raised in with that talent, Tomoe grew up without knowing about love. Different from Miyabi, one of the reasons was that she had no chance to touch any works that made her yearn for love.		Anyways-------as a result of being born in the environment she was raised in with that talent, Tomoe grew up without knowing about love. Different from Miyabi, one of the reasons was that she had no chance to touch any works that made her yearn for love.

	~~That was why; the~~ trigger of this was being treated as a girl by a teenage boy she met in Kouryou academy. ~~<!--needs rewording but don't really know what it should say //That was why; the first signs of girlishness was triggered by a teenage boy she met in Kouryou academy.-->~~		The trigger for this was being treated as a girl by a teenage boy she met in Kouryou academy.

	Even though it was not like she fell in love, it was just strong enough to show concern over the boy unconsciously.		Even though it was not like she fell in love, it was just strong enough to show concern over the boy unconsciously.
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	When Miyabi thought about Tooru, her chest ached. It felt itchy and did not calm down.		When Miyabi thought about Tooru, her chest ached. It felt itchy and did not calm down.

	Strangely enough, those feelings vanished off when Tooru actually stands in front of her and she gets wrapped ~~in an uplifting fluffy and comfortable feeling as a replacement.<!--Strangely enough, those feelings vanished when Tooru actually stood in front of her and she got wrapped up~~ in an uplifting fluffy and comfortable feeling instead.~~-->~~		Strangely enough, those feelings vanished off when Tooru actually stands in front of her and she gets wrapped in an uplifting fluffy and comfortable feeling instead.

	It '''''was''''' the same thing when Tooru called out to her when she headed to the cafeteria alone during the evening.		It '''''was''''' the same thing when Tooru called out to her when she headed to the cafeteria alone during the evening.
	~~<!--Those feelings '''''used to''''' also occur when Tooru called out to her when she headed to the cafeteria alone during the evenings.-->~~

	---Yes, in past tense.		---Yes, in past tense.
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	Miyabi tried her best to smile and Tooru felt saved when he saw that expression.		Miyabi tried her best to smile and Tooru felt saved when he saw that expression.

	“I get it. Alright, I look forward to that day………..the day ~~Miyabi would make me run laps slower than her.” <!--~~the day Miyabi's lap times are shorter than mine.~~-->~~		“I get it. Alright, I look forward to that day………..the day the day Miyabi's lap times are shorter than mine.”

	“-----E-eeeeeeeeeeeeh!? To-Tooru-kun, don’t make such an unreasonable demand<nowiki>～～～～</nowiki>”		“-----E-eeeeeeeeeeeeh!? To-Tooru-kun, don’t make such an unreasonable demand<nowiki>～～～～</nowiki>”
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	(Fufu, Looks like he will progress fast by this pace.)		(Fufu, Looks like he will progress fast by this pace.)

	No matter what skills it may be, it took time for the body to really get it. However that time changes ~~<!--shortens-->~~greatly by the enthusiasm of the heart of wanting to learn.		No matter what skills it may be, it took time for the body to really get it. However that time changes greatly by the enthusiasm of the heart of wanting to learn.

	After a while, the guidance for the next technique-----the way of the eight style’s basics started.		After a while, the guidance for the next technique-----the way of the eight style’s basics started.
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	It was Miyabi.		It was Miyabi.

	She would normally be running outside the school in this time slot ~~<!--around this time-->~~ by now but, she got curious about Tooru and Tomoe today and took up an unfunny action of peeking like this.		She would normally be running outside the school in this time slot by now but, she got curious about Tooru and Tomoe today and took up an unfunny action of peeking like this.

	(What am I doing…………)		(What am I doing…………)

Drowzycow: more edits/suggestions, kinda tricky compared to earlier chapters I feel

2014-04-19T03:56:20Z

more edits/suggestions, kinda tricky compared to earlier chapters I feel

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Scr.zero at 14:33, 10 April 2014

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	Even though she was not conscious about this, her head turned completely blank when she saw the target of her affections getting kissed----even though it’s just on the cheeks. To Miyabi who has slowly gotten used to having a conversation with the opposite sex, a kiss is a very high level action for her.		Even though she was not conscious about this, her head turned completely blank when she saw the target of her affections getting kissed----even though it’s just on the cheeks. To Miyabi who has slowly gotten used to having a conversation with the opposite sex, a kiss is a very high level action for her.

	The moment she regained her composure the criticism that came out from her mouth was-------a cute shout calling him pervert. Of course, it’s not like there were any bad intentions in it and those were the only words that Miyabi could have thought off in her half-panic state.		The moment she regained her composure, the criticism that came out from her mouth was-------a cute shout calling him pervert. Of course, it’s not like there were any bad intentions in it and those were the only words that Miyabi could have thought off in her half-panic state.

	However, she encountered a different kind of emotion in her chest when she recalled the event calmly after some time passed and it became night time. As if being covered in a haze, those hazy emotions made her feel hard to breathe and at the same time made her feelings heavier.		However, she encountered a different kind of emotion in her chest when she recalled the event calmly after some time passed and it became night time. As if being covered in a haze, those hazy emotions made her feel hard to breathe and at the same time made her feelings heavier.
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	……………….judging from the point of telling their feelings, there were several times she got letters and chocolates from other girls and that made her confused.		……………….judging from the point of telling their feelings, there were several times she got letters and chocolates from other girls and that made her confused.

	Anyways-------as a result ~~of being~~ of being born in the environment she was raised in with that talent, Tomoe grew up without knowing about love. Different from Miyabi, one of the reasons was that she had no chance to touch any works that made her yearn for love.		Anyways-------as a result of being born in the environment she was raised in with that talent, Tomoe grew up without knowing about love. Different from Miyabi, one of the reasons was that she had no chance to touch any works that made her yearn for love.

	That is why; the trigger of this was being treated as a girl by a teenage boy she met in Kouryou academy.		That is why; the trigger of this was being treated as a girl by a teenage boy she met in Kouryou academy.
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	“Haha, I got told something close to that by my master before. Well, mine is a tree instead of a sword though”		“Haha, I got told something close to that by my master before. Well, mine is a tree instead of a sword though”

	When Tooru talked about the proverb he told to Miyabi before, Tomoe made a agreeing nod.		When Tooru talked about the proverb he told to Miyabi before, Tomoe made an agreeing nod.

	And at the same time, she had a favorable impression to Tooru who understood the importance of basics which are easily overlooked and forgotten even though it was a normal thing to do.		And at the same time, she had a favorable impression to Tooru who understood the importance of basics which are easily overlooked and forgotten even though it was a normal thing to do.
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	(Umu, it’s a good face. The spirit of wanting to acquire this move as fast as possible is being told)		(Umu, it’s a good face. The spirit of wanting to acquire this move as fast as possible is being told)

	“………….okay, since we gone this way, let’s add in 10 more times!”		“………….okay, since we’ve gone this way, let’s add in 10 more times!”

	Tooru shouted in his heart at Tomoe’s suggestion.		Tooru shouted in his heart at Tomoe’s suggestion.
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	“Haa……….”		“Haa……….”

	~~Miyabi~~ feelings sank together with that, and leaked a big sigh------she then mumbled this.		Miyabi’s feelings sank together with that, and leaked a big sigh------she then mumbled this.

	“How nice…………”		“How nice…………”
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	Rather, it was something enough to make her get embarrassed and look away when she sees males and females-----couples bringing their body closer in the city.		Rather, it was something enough to make her get embarrassed and look away when she sees males and females-----couples bringing their body closer in the city.

	But even so, Miyabi continuing ~~thinking~~ why and------the answer came out.		But even so, Miyabi continuing to think why and------the answer came out.

	The answer was shown from the words she said unconsciously.		The answer was shown from the words she said unconsciously.
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	And to find what kind of emotion it was, Miyabi applied the knowledge she had in herself before----		And to find what kind of emotion it was, Miyabi applied the knowledge she had in herself before----

	(Ah-re…………? ~~That’~~ means……….I, might have……..)		(Ah-re…………? That means……….I, might have……..)

	She got perplexed when she reached the answer.		She got perplexed when she reached the answer.

Yoyoyo5678: Undo revision 342459 by Bunnybacon (talk) You changed the meaning of many parts + there were too much new grammar mistakes.

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Undo revision 342459 by Bunnybacon (talk) You changed the meaning of many parts + there were too much new grammar mistakes.

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	The girl-----Hotaka Miyabi was bad with the opposite sex.		The girl-----Hotaka Miyabi was bad with the opposite sex.

	It’s not like she ~~has~~ an inerasable trauma from her childhood…………it’s just that she was bad with strangers and shy. Another reason for it was that she went to a girls only middle school the same as her sister.		It’s not like she had an inerasable trauma from her childhood…………it’s just that she was bad with strangers and shy. Another reason for it was that she went to a girls only middle school the same as her sister.

	Because of that, the existence of males of the same age as the middle-school Miyabi only appeared in stories like drama or manga.		Because of that, the existence of males of the same age as the middle-school Miyabi only appeared in stories like drama or manga.
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	But even if she was bad with them, it’s not like she had no interest in love.		But even if she was bad with them, it’s not like she had no interest in love.

	She ~~has~~ always imagined that she would fall for someone one day------like that.		She had always imagined that she would fall for someone one day------like that.

	Even though she was not conscious about this, her head turned completely blank when she saw the target of her affections getting kissed----even though ~~it’s~~ just on the cheek. To Miyabi, who has only slowly gotten used to having conversations with the opposite sex, a kiss was a very high level action.		Even though she was not conscious about this, her head turned completely blank when she saw the target of her affections getting kissed----even though it was just on the cheek. To Miyabi, who has only slowly gotten used to having conversations with the opposite sex, a kiss was a very high level action.

	The moment she regained her composure, the criticism that came from her mouth was-------a cute shout calling him pervert. Of course, it’s not like there were any bad intentions in it and those were the only words that Miyabi could have thought of in her half-panicked state.		The moment she regained her composure, the criticism that came from her mouth was-------a cute shout calling him pervert. Of course, it’s not like there were any bad intentions in it and those were the only words that Miyabi could have thought of in her half-panicked state.

	However, she encountered a different kind of emotion in her chest when she recalled the event calmly after some time had passed and it ~~became~~ night time. As if being covered in a haze, those ~~hazy~~ emotions made it feel hard to breathe and at the same time made her ~~feelings~~ heavier.		However, she encountered a different kind of emotion in her chest when she recalled the event calmly after some time had passed and it had become night time. As if being covered in a haze, those emotions made it feel hard for her to breathe and at the same time made her thoughts heavier.

	Thanks to that, Miyabi felt troubled.		Thanks to that, Miyabi felt troubled.
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	(What is this feeling………)		(What is this feeling………)

	“Miyabi, I am turning off the lights.”		“Miyabi, I'm turning off the lights.”

	“Ah, un………….”		“Ah, un………….”

	Since she was daydreaming about the ~~emotions~~ in her chest ~~on the bed~~, it passed the time for lights out before she knew it, and Tachibana her roommate and at the same time <<Duo>> called out to her.		Since she was daydreaming on the bed about the feelings in her chest, it had passed the time for lights out before she knew it, and Tachibana, her roommate and at the same time her <<Duo>>, called out to her.

	After Miyabi nodded, Tomoe turned off the lights and the room was covered in darkness.		After Miyabi nodded, Tomoe turned off the lights and the room was covered in darkness.

	She closed her eyes. But, the event that happened in the afternoon did not vanish. The image of the boy who ~~gave~~ her the feelings to make her work harder in Kouryou academy and who was her first male friend, getting kissed.		She closed her eyes. But, the event that happened in the afternoon did not vanish. The image of the boy, who had given her the feelings to make her work harder in Kouryou academy and who was her first male friend, getting kissed.

	The haze in her chest would not clear up.		The haze in her chest would not clear up.