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Polarem: /* Text */ Expressions

2011-05-19T14:23:57Z

Text: Expressions

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	Which we shared with the emotions of this town...		Which we shared with the emotions of this town...
			// Alt: Where we shared in the emotions of this town...
	// 町の思いに連れられて...		// 町の思いに連れられて...

Polarem: /* Text */ Translations, Expressions, Consistency -- First step of conversion "Fuuko" --> "Fuko"

2011-04-22T04:52:07Z

Text: Translations, Expressions, Consistency -- First step of conversion "Fuuko" --> "Fuko"

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	// The following 6 lines are found in the same image file, but displayed separately in the game.		// The following 6 lines are found in the same image file, but displayed separately in the game.
	// The XML metadata file will have to be edited to account for the different lengths of the English text.		// The XML metadata file will have to be edited to account for the different lengths of the English text.
	"Yeah..."
			"Yes, let's go..."
			// Polarem: I finally realized that this is the response to the previous 2 lines. Took me long enough x_x
			// Orig: "Yeah..."
	// 「ああ...」		// 「ああ...」

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	// FGMS35.g00 -- FGMS41.g00		// FGMS35.g00 -- FGMS41.g00
	// SEEN6803, after 0312		// SEEN6803, after 0312
	// Epilogue: ~~Fuuko~~ finding the girl under the tree		// Epilogue: Fuko finding the girl under the tree
	//---------------------------------------------------------------		//---------------------------------------------------------------
	// This text is white, to be displayed on a black background		// This text is white, to be displayed on a black background
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	// 「いますか」		// 「いますか」

	"This is ~~Fuuko~~."		"This is Fuko."
	// 「風子です」		// 「風子です」

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	// 「教えてください」		// 「教えてください」

	"Become Fuuko's friend so we can play together."		"Be Fuko's friend, and let's play together."
			// Prev: "Become Fuuko's friend so we can play together."
	// 「風子とお友達になって、一緒に遊びましょう」		// 「風子とお友達になって、一緒に遊びましょう」

Polarem: /* Text */ Expressions -- "This" sounds more personal than "The"

2011-04-12T17:28:18Z

Text: Expressions -- "This" sounds more personal than "The"

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	// 俺たちは登リ始める。		// 俺たちは登リ始める。

	~~The~~ long,		This long,
	// 長い、		// 長い、

	~~The~~ long, long uphill slope.		This long, long uphill slope.
	// Polarem: Using "slope", as it's a recurring image in the game		// Polarem: Using "slope", as it's a recurring image in the game
	// Prev: The long, long uphill road.		// Prev: The long, long uphill road.
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	// 俺たちは登っていく。		// 俺たちは登っていく。

	~~The~~ long,		This long,
	// Re-use the file from SEEN0414		// Re-use the file from SEEN0414
	// 長い、		// 長い、

	~~The~~ long, long uphill ~~road~~.		This long, long uphill slope.
	// Re-use the file from SEEN0414		// Re-use the file from SEEN0414
	// 長い、長い坂道を。		// 長い、長い坂道を。

Polarem: /* Text */ Expressions -- Swap in alts

2011-04-12T17:19:06Z

Text: Expressions -- Swap in alts

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	// 長い、		// 長い、

	The long, long uphill road.		The long, long uphill slope.
			// Polarem: Using "slope", as it's a recurring image in the game
			// Prev: The long, long uphill road.
	// 長い、長い坂道を。		// 長い、長い坂道を。

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	// Tomoya in depression		// Tomoya in depression
	//---------------------------------------------------------------		//---------------------------------------------------------------
	~~I am living like an automaton~~... // *		My life goes on mechanically.
	// Alt 1: I live mechanically.		// Alt 1: I live mechanically.
	// ~~Alt 2~~: ~~My life goes on mechanically~~. ~~--Polarem~~		// Orig: I am living like an automaton...
	// だた、惰性のように生きていた。		// だた、惰性のように生きていた。

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	// 「風子とお友達になって、一緒に遊びましょう」		// 「風子とお友達になって、一緒に遊びましょう」

	~~As for something fun~~... // *		From now on...
	// ~~Alt~~: ~~From now on~~... ~~// Rearrange the final 2 lines? --Polarem~~		// Orig: As for something fun...
	// XCN: I'd use the alts, or rephrase.		// XCN: I'd use the alts, or rephrase.
	// Agreeing with XCN, the alt translation sounds better. The other sounds like an awkward fragment. -Komari		// Agreeing with XCN, the alt translation sounds better. The other sounds like an awkward fragment. -Komari
			// Polarem: Done!
	// 「楽しいことは...」		// 「楽しいことは...」

	... that will begin right now. // *		There will be lots of fun!
	~~// Alt: There will be lots of fun!~~ // Whichever way, we need an exclamation mark to end the game with a bang --Polarem		// Orig: ... that will begin right now.
			// Whichever way, we need an exclamation mark to end the game with a bang --Polarem
	// 「...これから始まりますよ」		// 「...これから始まりますよ」
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Komari at 19:38, 10 April 2011

2011-04-10T19:38:29Z

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	// Alt: From now on... // Rearrange the final 2 lines? --Polarem		// Alt: From now on... // Rearrange the final 2 lines? --Polarem
	// XCN: I'd use the alts, or rephrase.		// XCN: I'd use the alts, or rephrase.
			// Agreeing with XCN, the alt translation sounds better. The other sounds like an awkward fragment. -Komari
	// 「楽しいことは...」		// 「楽しいことは...」

Polarem: /* Text */ More Kotomi

2011-03-27T16:19:24Z

Text: More Kotomi

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	//---------------------------------------------------------------		//---------------------------------------------------------------
	This suitcase has traveled around the world.		This suitcase has traveled around the world.
	~~// Alt: "That suitcase"?~~
	// その鞄は、世界中を旅してきた。		// その鞄は、世界中を旅してきた。

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	// たくさんの人の手から手へ、		// たくさんの人の手から手へ、

	~~From~~ one hand to another...		Passed from one hand to another...
	// XCN: I think it should be made explicit by saying "Passed from", because there's no mention of people anywhere else in the paragraph, and it feels a little off.		// XCN: I think it should be made explicit by saying "Passed from", because there's no mention of people anywhere else in the paragraph, and it feels a little off.
	// 大切に託されてまた...		// 大切に託されてまた...
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	// If you find this suitcase, please take it to our daughter.		// If you find this suitcase, please take it to our daughter.
	// XCN: In the anime, this is written in English, on the front of the envelope holding the letter. (Not correctly though; they spell it "Suitscase" ;) I guess that changed from the VN?		// XCN: In the anime, this is written in English, on the front of the envelope holding the letter. (Not correctly though; they spell it "Suitscase" ;) I guess that changed from the VN?
			// Polarem: Probably an animators' oversight :-P This is KEY's version, which they rendered (correctly) in English

	//---------------------------------------------------------------		//---------------------------------------------------------------

Xcandescent: /* Text */ Minor fixes and notes.

2011-03-24T03:41:54Z

Text: Minor fixes and notes.

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	From one hand to another...		From one hand to another...
			// XCN: I think it should be made explicit by saying "Passed from", because there's no mention of people anywhere else in the paragraph, and it feels a little off.
	// 大切に託されてまた...		// 大切に託されてまた...

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	この鞄を見つけたら、どうか娘に届けてください。		この鞄を見つけたら、どうか娘に届けてください。
	// If you find this suitcase, please take it to our daughter.		// If you find this suitcase, please take it to our daughter.
			// XCN: In the anime, this is written in English, on the front of the envelope holding the letter. (Not correctly though; they spell it "Suitscase" ;) I guess that changed from the VN?


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	// 友達を見つけなさい		// 友達を見つけなさい

	Don't rush things and grow up slowly		Don't rush things, and grow up slowly
	// 焦らずにゆっくりと大人になりなさい		// 焦らずにゆっくりと大人になりなさい

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	As for something fun... // *		As for something fun... // *
	// Alt: From now on... // Rearrange the final 2 lines? --Polarem		// Alt: From now on... // Rearrange the final 2 lines? --Polarem
			// XCN: I'd use the alts, or rephrase.
	// 「楽しいことは...」		// 「楽しいことは...」

Polarem: /* Text */ Translations --Finalize Kotomi's suitcase and Saving Nagisa

2011-03-19T01:58:29Z

Text: Translations --Finalize Kotomi's suitcase and Saving Nagisa

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	// 険しい山も、緑の大地も...		// 険しい山も、緑の大地も...

	Passing from one hand to another // *		Entrusted with great care,
	~~// Alt (swap):~~ Entrusted with great care, ~~--Polarem~~
	// lit: Many people's; from hand to hand		// lit: Many people's; from hand to hand
	// たくさんの人の手から手へ、		// たくさんの人の手から手へ、

	Entrusted with great care... // *		From one hand to another...
	~~// Alt (swap):~~ From one hand to another... ~~--Polarem~~
	// 大切に託されてまた...		// 大切に託されてまた...

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	//---------------------------------------------------------------		//---------------------------------------------------------------
	"Let me take you..."		"Let me take you..."
	~~// Prev: "Let me take you away..."~~
	// 「お連れしましょう...」		// 「お連れしましょう...」

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	// The XML metadata file will have to be edited to account for the different lengths of the English text.		// The XML metadata file will have to be edited to account for the different lengths of the English text.
	"Yeah..."		"Yeah..."
	~~// Prev: "Yes..."~~
	// 「ああ...」		// 「ああ...」

	~~That~~ long, long journey...		This long, long journey...
	~~// Move down 2 lines~~
	~~// Prev: Now, it is ending~~.
	// 今、終わる。		// 今、終わる。

	~~Alongside~~ the ~~feelings~~ of the town... // *		Which we shared with the emotions of this town...
	~~// Prev: Taking along the thoughts of the~~ town...
	// 町の思いに連れられて...		// 町の思いに連れられて...

	Is now ~~over.~~		Is over now.
	~~// Move 2 lines up~~
	~~// Prev: Is that long, long journey~~.
	// その長い、長い旅が。		// その長い、長い旅が。

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	// 手を伸ばす。		// 手を伸ばす。

	~~Together~~ with... the countless lights. // *		And join with... the countless lights.
	// と共に="together with"		// と共に="together with"
	// Prev: Towards... the countless lights.		// Prev: Towards... the countless lights.
	// 無数の...光と共に。		// 無数の...光と共に。


	~~// XCN: Lines 3 and 4 make no sense, and absolutely need to be fixed before this becomes a graphic.~~
	~~// The anime summarizes this section into a single line about a long, long journey coming to an end.~~

	~~// Sounds better now, but I want to double-check 2 lines --Polarem~~

	//---------------------------------------------------------------		//---------------------------------------------------------------

Polarem: /* Text */ Translations -- Saving Nagisa (by GundamAce)

2011-02-22T02:11:52Z

Text: Translations -- Saving Nagisa (by GundamAce)

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	// Make consistent with SEEN6416 and SEEN6511		// Make consistent with SEEN6416 and SEEN6511
	//---------------------------------------------------------------		//---------------------------------------------------------------
	"Let me take you ~~away~~..." // *		"Let me take you..."
			// Prev: "Let me take you away..."
	// 「お連れしましょう...」		// 「お連れしましょう...」

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	// The following 6 lines are found in the same image file, but displayed separately in the game.		// The following 6 lines are found in the same image file, but displayed separately in the game.
	// The XML metadata file will have to be edited to account for the different lengths of the English text.		// The XML metadata file will have to be edited to account for the different lengths of the English text.
	"~~Yes~~..." // *		"Yeah..."
			// Prev: "Yes..."
	// 「ああ...」		// 「ああ...」

	Now, it is ending. // *		That long, long journey...
			// Move down 2 lines
			// Prev: Now, it is ending.
	// 今、終わる。		// 今、終わる。

	Taking along the thoughts of the town... // *		Alongside the feelings of the town... // *
			// Prev: Taking along the thoughts of the town...
	// 町の思いに連れられて...		// 町の思いに連れられて...

	Is that long, long journey. // *		Is now over.
			// Move 2 lines up
			// Prev: Is that long, long journey.
	// その長い、長い旅が。		// その長い、長い旅が。

	Reach out with your hand... // *		Reach out with your hand...
	// 手を伸ばす。		// 手を伸ばす。

	Towards... the countless lights.		Together with... the countless lights. // *
			// と共に="together with"
			// Prev: Towards... the countless lights.
	// 無数の...光と共に。		// 無数の...光と共に。


	// XCN: Lines 3 and 4 make no sense, and absolutely need to be fixed before this becomes a graphic.		// XCN: Lines 3 and 4 make no sense, and absolutely need to be fixed before this becomes a graphic.
	// The anime summarizes this section into a single line about a long, long journey coming to an end.		// The anime summarizes this section into a single line about a long, long journey coming to an end.

			// Sounds better now, but I want to double-check 2 lines --Polarem

	//---------------------------------------------------------------		//---------------------------------------------------------------

Xcandescent: /* Text */ Requesting alt TL on the ending section in SZZD00, 10, 20.

2011-02-09T02:29:31Z

Text: Requesting alt TL on the ending section in SZZD00, 10, 20.

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	// The following 6 lines are found on the same image file, but displayed separately in the game.		// The following 6 lines are found in the same image file, but displayed separately in the game.
	// The XML metadata file will have to be edited to account for the different lengths of the English text.		// The XML metadata file will have to be edited to account for the different lengths of the English text.
	"Yes..." // *		"Yes..." // *
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	// その長い、長い旅が。		// その長い、長い旅が。

	Reach out with your hand. // *		Reach out with your hand... // *
	// 手を伸ばす。		// 手を伸ばす。

	Towards... the countless lights.		Towards... the countless lights.
	// 無数の...光と共に。		// 無数の...光と共に。

			// XCN: Lines 3 and 4 make no sense, and absolutely need to be fixed before this becomes a graphic.
			// The anime summarizes this section into a single line about a long, long journey coming to an end.