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EusthEnoptEron: Putting the title where it belongs to

2012-01-28T16:47:12Z

Putting the title where it belongs to

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	~~==Chapter 5 - The Book Burners <br><span style="font-style: italic; font-size: .8em">Extra Episode 01: Bibliocaust</span>==~~
	A tremendous roar shook the night air.		A tremendous roar shook the night air.

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	And at the time when she raised her gaze again, the two of them had already disappeared.		And at the time when she raised her gaze again, the two of them had already disappeared.


			==Chapter 5 - The Book Burners <br><span style="font-style: italic; font-size: .8em">Extra Episode 01: Bibliocaust</span>==
	===Part 1===		===Part 1===

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2012-01-23T12:07:26Z

space in header, 'Part' prefix for parts & intro after chapter header

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			==Chapter 5 - The Book Burners <br><span style="font-style: italic; font-size: .8em">Extra Episode 01: Bibliocaust</span>==
	A tremendous roar shook the night air.		A tremendous roar shook the night air.

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	And at the time when she raised her gaze again, the two of them had already disappeared.		And at the time when she raised her gaze again, the two of them had already disappeared.

			===Part 1===
	~~==Chapter 5 - The Book Burners<br /><span style="font-style: italic; font-size: .8em">Extra Episode 01: Bibliocaust</span>==~~
	===1===


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	Hal only gazed silently at those two, showing no expression in particular.		Hal only gazed silently at those two, showing no expression in particular.

	===2===		===Part 2===

	The town at dusk. Hal and Flamberge were walking on a street in the shopping district, led by Mabel.		The town at dusk. Hal and Flamberge were walking on a street in the shopping district, led by Mabel.
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	Bathing in the light of the stove, lights flickered on the silver staff - like flames.		Bathing in the light of the stove, lights flickered on the silver staff - like flames.

	===3===		===Part 3===

	After midnight, Hal slipped out of Mabel Nash's house.		After midnight, Hal slipped out of Mabel Nash's house.
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	What was left in the end was --- the remains of a scantily clad puppet.		What was left in the end was --- the remains of a scantily clad puppet.

	===4===		===Part 4===

	The night was already over when Hal returned to Mabel's home.		The night was already over when Hal returned to Mabel's home.
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	"I am not a sir. I am a book burner."		"I am not a sir. I am a book burner."

	===5===		===Part 5===

	Hal took Flam to the factory at the lake shore on the outskirts of the town.		Hal took Flam to the factory at the lake shore on the outskirts of the town.
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	Thereupon, the fire of the staff engulfed the phantom book and its owner without mercy.		Thereupon, the fire of the staff engulfed the phantom book and its owner without mercy.

	===6===		===Part 6===


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Unkani: Missed a few things from the last edit

2011-08-15T06:02:01Z

Missed a few things from the last edit

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	While driving the motorcycle along, the man peeked into each of the many, complicated intertwined side streets.		While driving the motorcycle along, the man peeked into each of the many, complicated intertwined side streets.

	This course of action resembled that of a hunting dog that's chasing its prey down much more than that a stranger who has gotten lost.		This course of action resembled that of a hunting dog that's chasing its prey down much more than that of a stranger who has gotten lost.

	Then, after cutting several corners, the driver suddenly slowed down his motorcycle.		Then, after cutting several corners, the driver suddenly slowed down his motorcycle.
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	The woman approached them easily after confirming that the motorcycle had stopped.		The woman approached them easily after confirming that the motorcycle had stopped.

	Her back was stretched and her look fixed at a certain height. It was style of walking of a person experienced in hand-to-hand fighting.		Her back was stretched and her look fixed at a certain height. It was the style of walking of a person experienced in hand-to-hand fighting.

	"...Who are you?" the driver asked plainly, gazing at her with a disagreeable look.		"...Who are you?" the driver asked plainly, gazing at her with a disagreeable look.
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	"Why?" Hal sighed, bored.		"Why?" Hal sighed, bored.

	The prostitute looked in ~~surprised~~ at Hal's face.		The prostitute looked in surprise at Hal's face.

	"Huh?"		"Huh?"

Unkani: Grammar, sentence structure fixes

2011-08-15T05:22:12Z

Grammar, sentence structure fixes

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EusthEnoptEron at 04:58, 12 August 2011

2011-08-12T04:58:23Z

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	Mabel was clearly bewildered.		Mabel was clearly bewildered.

	Hal didn't care and continued: "We purposely rode around in town with an eye-catching motorcycle and informed each and every citizen we met that we were searching for someone. We considered it probable for someone who has met the '''~~Yomihime~~''' to approach us when hearing about us."		Hal didn't care and continued: "We purposely rode around in town with an eye-catching motorcycle and informed each and every citizen we met that we were searching for someone. We considered it probable for someone who has met the '''Biblioprincess''' to approach us when hearing about us."

	"...So you lured me out, huh." Mabel sighed after hearing Hal out.		"...So you lured me out, huh." Mabel sighed after hearing Hal out.

	"By '~~Yomihime~~', do you mean that armored girl with a lock and looks like a beautiful doll...?"		"By 'Biblioprincess', do you mean that armored girl with a lock and looks like a beautiful doll...?"

	For the first time a change occurred in Hal's expression.		For the first time a change occurred in Hal's expression.
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	Immense hatred and anger surged up deep within his usually expressionless eyes. However, this lasted only a short moment. His mien immediately returned to his usual one, whereupon he posed a question to Mabel.		Immense hatred and anger surged up deep within his usually expressionless eyes. However, this lasted only a short moment. His mien immediately returned to his usual one, whereupon he posed a question to Mabel.

	"You received a phantom book from the ~~Yomihime~~, didn't you?"		"You received a phantom book from the Biblioprincess, didn't you?"

	"You mean this?"		"You mean this?"
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	He clenched his right fist and when he opened his hand again, he was holding a golden bunch of keys. All of these old keys had mysterious letters engraved in them.		He clenched his right fist and when he opened his hand again, he was holding a golden bunch of keys. All of these old keys had mysterious letters engraved in them.

	"<span style="position:absolute; margin-top: -12px; margin-left: 10px; font-size: 0.7em;">Long Lost Library</span>'Broken ~~Yomihime~~', Flamberge! I ask of thee, Art thou mankind---?" He shouted at the confined girl.		"<span style="position:absolute; margin-top: -12px; margin-left: 10px; font-size: 0.7em;">Long Lost Library</span>'Broken Biblioprincess', Flamberge! I ask of thee, Art thou mankind---?" He shouted at the confined girl.

	Flam shook her silver-shining hair wildly and started laughing out loud. The factory resounded with her madness-filled, loud laughter, which was a complete mismatch for her beautiful appearance.		Flam shook her silver-shining hair wildly and started laughing out loud. The factory resounded with her madness-filled, loud laughter, which was a complete mismatch for her beautiful appearance.
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	Hal reached out for her left side and pulled the zipper all way down in a breath. A dark and endlessly deep black space opened up between the split zipper.		Hal reached out for her left side and pulled the zipper all way down in a breath. A dark and endlessly deep black space opened up between the split zipper.

	"The ~~silver~~... ~~Yomihime~~...!"		"The Silver... Biblioprincess...!"

	It was Mabel who muttered these words with a contorted face.		It was Mabel who muttered these words with a contorted face.

Starkiller4299 at 16:32, 5 August 2011

2011-08-05T16:32:47Z

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Zero2001: A gift

2011-07-28T21:57:52Z

A gift

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	Their backs were dyed red all the while by the flickering light of the setting sun.		Their backs were dyed red all the while by the flickering light of the setting sun.


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EusthEnoptEron: /* 5 */

2010-12-26T11:12:53Z

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	For the first time a change occurred in Hal's expression.		For the first time a change occurred in Hal's expression.

	Immense hatred and anger surged up deep within his usually expressionless eyes. However, this lasted only a short moment. His mien immediately returned to his usual one, whereupon he posed ~~Mabel~~ a question.		Immense hatred and anger surged up deep within his usually expressionless eyes. However, this lasted only a short moment. His mien immediately returned to his usual one, whereupon he posed a question to Mabel.

	"You received a phantom book from the Yomihime, didn't you?"		"You received a phantom book from the Yomihime, didn't you?"
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	Mabel took out the book she had been hiding behind her and held it at chest's height. A slightly triumphant　smile flashed over her face.		Mabel took out the book she had been hiding behind her and held it at chest's height. A slightly triumphant　smile flashed over her face.

	"The 'Rahouto Reihou Kaigen', huh... a long lost Taoist scripture that contains techniques to control ~~''familiars''~~---"<!-- 羅惇都霊宝會元らほうとれいほうかいげん. Don't like familiars. 使鬼-->　Flam said impressed.		"The 'Rahouto Reihou Kaigen', huh... a long lost Taoist scripture that contains techniques to control famili<span style="font-variant: small-caps;">ars</span>---"<!-- 羅惇都霊宝會元らほうとれいほうかいげん. Don't like familiars. 使鬼-->　Flam said impressed.

	Hal's face darkened.		Hal's face darkened.
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	Mabel smiled.		Mabel smiled.

	"Exactly! To keep everything as ~~peacefully~~ as it was in past ~~times~~. How is this a bad thing? The other survivors gladly accepted them, too! Well, of course. Their beloved family and friends returned to them safe and sound after all---"		"Exactly! To keep everything as peaceful as it was in times past. How is this a bad thing? The other survivors gladly accepted them, too! Well, of course. Their beloved family and friends returned to them safe and sound after all---"

	"Puppets are and will remain just puppets."		"Puppets are and will remain just puppets."

EusthEnoptEron: /* 1 */

2010-12-26T10:59:59Z

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	However, Mabel shook her head regretfully.		However, Mabel shook her head regretfully.

	"There are no gas stations in this town. Private ~~automobile~~ aren't that widespread yet... but a traveling merchant is coming here the day after tomorrow. You should be able to buy some from him."		"There are no gas stations in this town. Private automobiles aren't that widespread yet... but a traveling merchant is coming here the day after tomorrow. You should be able to buy some from him."

	"I see... got it," he nodded promptly.		"I see... got it," he nodded promptly.

EusthEnoptEron: /* 5 */

2010-12-25T17:55:31Z

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	"Hmpf... what's the point in making puppets any<span style="font-variant: small-caps;">way</span>?"		"Hmpf... what's the point in making puppets any<span style="font-variant: small-caps;">way</span>?"

	"To replace the inhabitants of this town."		"It's to replace the inhabitants of this town."

	"To replace the inhabitants with pu<span style="font-variant: small-caps;">ppets</span>...?" Flam cocked her head, whereupon the lock at her collar produced a metallic sound.		"To replace the inhabitants with pu<span style="font-variant: small-caps;">ppets</span>...?" Flam cocked her head, whereupon the lock at her collar produced a metallic sound.
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	The woman was wearing a police uniform. Flam raised a laugh upon seeing Mabel's tensed expression.		The woman was wearing a police uniform. Flam raised a laugh upon seeing Mabel's tensed expression.

	"<span style="font-variant: small-caps;">Oh</span>? The police officers of these days also show you around facto<span style="font-variant: small-caps;">ries</span>?"		"<span style="font-variant: small-caps;">Oh</span>? The police officers these days also show you around facto<span style="font-variant: small-caps;">ries</span>?"

	Mabel looked a little distressed while listening to Flam's words that did not give off an impression of ill will.		Mabel looked a little distressed while listening to Flam's words that did not give off an impression of ill will.