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Grrarr at 22:01, 31 March 2013

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	I sit down on a cushion ~~and~~ with my head in my hands<!--libedit-grrarr-->, at a complete loss as to how to respond.		I sit down on a cushion with my head in my hands<!--libedit-grrarr-->, at a complete loss as to how to respond.<!--EEE: Arrg, sorry - extraneous "and" grrarr-->

	"......tch!"		"......tch!"

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Grrarr at 21:07, 31 March 2013

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	<div style="border: 2px solid #220022; z-index: 2;background: #660066; padding: 3px; color: #EE0; width: 200px; font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><span style="font-size: 1.5em;">Kokone Kirino</span><br />		<div style="border: 2px solid #220022; z-index: 2;background: #660066; padding: 3px; color: #EE0; width: 200px; font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><span style="font-size: 1.5em;">Kokone Kirino</span><br />
	One of Kazuki's friends; bright, sociable and popular. ~~She has known~~ Daiya ~~Oomine~~ since kindergarten, ~~and~~ their current ~~relationship is...complicated?~~<!--EEE:the and…? part seems a bit…Engrishy?-grrarr--><!-- Good point. Maybe something à la "[...], which has left them as...?" would be better, but doesn't really fix the essential problem. -EEE --><!--EEE: hm. how's this? if not, I can come up w/... something else ...? :D-grrarr--><!-- How about something like "and/but/so there seems to be more to their relationship"? -EEE -->		One of Kazuki's friends; bright, sociable and popular. She’s been Daiya Oomine’s friend since kindergarten, but there’s something more to their current relationship…<!--EEE:the and…? part seems a bit…Engrishy?-grrarr--><!-- Good point. Maybe something à la "[...], which has left them as...?" would be better, but doesn't really fix the essential problem. -EEE --><!--EEE: hm. how's this? if not, I can come up w/... something else ...? :D-grrarr--><!-- How about something like "and/but/so there seems to be more to their relationship"? -EEE --><!--I like that - also need to make it more clear that they’re friends before that-grrarr-->
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EusthEnoptEron at 21:03, 31 March 2013

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	<div style="border: 2px solid #220022; z-index: 2;background: #660066; padding: 3px; color: #EE0; width: 200px; font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><span style="font-size: 1.5em;">Kokone Kirino</span><br />		<div style="border: 2px solid #220022; z-index: 2;background: #660066; padding: 3px; color: #EE0; width: 200px; font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><span style="font-size: 1.5em;">Kokone Kirino</span><br />
	One of Kazuki's friends; bright, sociable and popular. She has known Daiya Oomine since kindergarten, and their current relationship is...complicated?<!--EEE:the and…? part seems a bit…Engrishy?-grrarr--><!-- Good point. Maybe something à la "[...], which has left them as...?" would be better, but doesn't really fix the essential problem. -EEE --><!--EEE: hm. how's this? if not, I can come up w/... something else ...? :D-grrarr-->		One of Kazuki's friends; bright, sociable and popular. She has known Daiya Oomine since kindergarten, and their current relationship is...complicated?<!--EEE:the and…? part seems a bit…Engrishy?-grrarr--><!-- Good point. Maybe something à la "[...], which has left them as...?" would be better, but doesn't really fix the essential problem. -EEE --><!--EEE: hm. how's this? if not, I can come up w/... something else ...? :D-grrarr--><!-- How about something like "and/but/so there seems to be more to their relationship"? -EEE -->
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Grrarr at 20:56, 31 March 2013

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	<div style="border: 2px solid #220022; z-index: 2;background: #660066; padding: 3px; color: #EE0; width: 200px; font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><span style="font-size: 1.5em;">Kokone Kirino</span><br />		<div style="border: 2px solid #220022; z-index: 2;background: #660066; padding: 3px; color: #EE0; width: 200px; font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><span style="font-size: 1.5em;">Kokone Kirino</span><br />
	One of Kazuki's friends; bright, sociable and popular. She has known Daiya Oomine since kindergarten, and...?<!--EEE:the and…? part seems a bit…Engrishy?-grrarr--><!-- Good point. Maybe something à la "[...], which has left them as...?" would be better, but doesn't really fix the essential problem. -EEE -->		One of Kazuki's friends; bright, sociable and popular. She has known Daiya Oomine since kindergarten, and their current relationship is...complicated?<!--EEE:the and…? part seems a bit…Engrishy?-grrarr--><!-- Good point. Maybe something à la "[...], which has left them as...?" would be better, but doesn't really fix the essential problem. -EEE --><!--EEE: hm. how's this? if not, I can come up w/... something else ...? :D-grrarr-->
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EusthEnoptEron at 09:49, 31 March 2013

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	I end the call.~~<!-- Can we say this for cell phones? -EEE --><!--I think so, but changing it to avoid confusion-grrarr-->~~		I end the call.


	Unable to calm the throbbing of my heart, I dive into bed and bury my head in my pillow.		Unable to calm the throbbing of my heart, I dive into bed and bury my head in my pillow.

	"What am I... What am I supposed to do now!" I yell into the pillow as I furiously kick my legs up and down.<!-- replace "bounce" with a better word. If the sentence doesn't make any sense to begin with, hold out two fingers so as if to poke sb into his eyes and quickly move the two fingers up and down, but each in the other direction. Those are her legs. -EEE -->		"What am I... What am I supposed to do now!" I yell into the pillow as I furiously kick my legs up and down.

	I don't dislike him. Otherwise, I wouldn't be so troubled right now.		I don't dislike him. Otherwise, I wouldn't be so troubled right now.
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	<div style="border: 2px solid #220022; z-index: 2;background: #660066; padding: 3px; color: #EE0; width: 200px; font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><span style="font-size: 1.5em;">Kokone Kirino</span><br />		<div style="border: 2px solid #220022; z-index: 2;background: #660066; padding: 3px; color: #EE0; width: 200px; font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><span style="font-size: 1.5em;">Kokone Kirino</span><br />
	One of Kazuki's friends; bright, sociable and popular. She has known Daiya Oomine since kindergarten, and...?<!--EEE:the and…? part seems a bit…Engrishy?-grrarr-->		One of Kazuki's friends; bright, sociable and popular. She has known Daiya Oomine since kindergarten, and...?<!--EEE:the and…? part seems a bit…Engrishy?-grrarr--><!-- Good point. Maybe something à la "[...], which has left them as...?" would be better, but doesn't really fix the essential problem. -EEE -->
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Grrarr at 03:13, 31 March 2013

2013-03-31T03:13:48Z

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	I ~~hang up~~.<!-- Can we say this for cell phones? -EEE -->		I end the call.<!-- Can we say this for cell phones? -EEE --><!--I think so, but changing it to avoid confusion-grrarr-->


	Unable to calm ~~down~~ my ~~throbbing~~ heart, I dive into my bed and bury my head in my pillow.		Unable to calm the throbbing of my heart, I dive into bed and bury my head in my pillow.

	"What am I... What am I supposed to do now!" I yell into the pillow as I furiously ~~bounce~~ my legs up and down.<!-- replace "bounce" with a better word. If the sentence doesn't make any sense to begin with, hold out two fingers so as if to poke sb into his eyes and quickly move the two fingers up and down, but each in the other direction. Those are her legs. -EEE -->		"What am I... What am I supposed to do now!" I yell into the pillow as I furiously kick my legs up and down.<!-- replace "bounce" with a better word. If the sentence doesn't make any sense to begin with, hold out two fingers so as if to poke sb into his eyes and quickly move the two fingers up and down, but each in the other direction. Those are her legs. -EEE -->

	I don't dislike him. Otherwise, I wouldn't be troubled now.		I don't dislike him. Otherwise, I wouldn't be so troubled right now.

	I considered him a friend; I had drawn a distinct line in my head.		I considered him a friend; I had drawn a distinct line in my head.
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	But that's no longer enough for Kazu-kun...?		But that's no longer enough for Kazu-kun...?

	~~In that case, he should have said it earlier.~~ He should have said it before our friendship had grown so strong that ~~it would~~ hurt when ~~it broke~~.		He should have said something sooner, before our friendship had grown so strong. Now, those bonds are so tight that they’ll hurt when they break.<!--v libedit-grrarr-->

	Why did he ~~had~~ to ~~come~~ out ~~with it~~ after so long...?		Why did he have to speak out after staying silent for so long...?<!--libedit-grrarr-->


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	I ~~hang up~~.		I end the call.


	I sit down on a cushion and ~~hold~~ my head, at a complete loss ~~about~~ how to respond.		I sit down on a cushion and with my head in my hands<!--libedit-grrarr-->, at a complete loss as to how to respond.

	"......tch!"		"......tch!"

	~~We're male~~ and ~~female~~, ~~so there are certain difficulties that could emerge. Nonetheless~~, I was so naïve as to believe that ~~this wouldn't be the case for~~ Kazuki.		I know people always say that men and women can never be just friends<!--EEE: fyi, very liberal edit -grrarr-->; nevertheless, I was naïve enough to believe that nothing would happen with Kazuki.

	Perhaps~~, I have~~ been tormenting him all along, failing to understand ~~him properly~~.		Perhaps I’ve been tormenting him all along by failing to properly understand how he felt.

	But why? ~~Optimally,~~ he ~~should feel~~ nothing at all ~~for~~ me, yet he got trapped by the silliest of all feelings!		But why? It’d be best if he felt nothing at all toward me, yet he got trapped by the silliest of all feelings!


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	<div style="border: 2px solid #220022; z-index: 2;background: #660066; padding: 3px; color: #EE0; width: 200px; font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><span style="font-size: 1.5em;">Kokone Kirino</span><br />		<div style="border: 2px solid #220022; z-index: 2;background: #660066; padding: 3px; color: #EE0; width: 200px; font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><span style="font-size: 1.5em;">Kokone Kirino</span><br />
	One of Kazuki's friends; bright, ~~social~~ and popular ~~with her classmates~~. She has known Daiya Oomine since kindergarten, and...?		One of Kazuki's friends; bright, sociable and popular. She has known Daiya Oomine since kindergarten, and...?<!--EEE:the and…? part seems a bit…Engrishy?-grrarr-->
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EusthEnoptEron at 23:24, 30 March 2013

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	~~The phone disconnected~~.		I hang up.<!-- Can we say this for cell phones? -EEE -->


	~~My heart beat didn't seem~~ to calm down ~~a bit~~, so I ~~dived~~ into my bed and ~~buried~~ my head in ~~the~~ pillow.		Unable to calm down my throbbing heart, I dive into my bed and bury my head in my pillow.

	"What ~~should~~ I do... What ~~should~~ I do ~~what should~~ I ~~do!~~!"		"What am I... What am I supposed to do now!" I yell into the pillow as I furiously bounce my legs up and down.<!-- replace "bounce" with a better word. If the sentence doesn't make any sense to begin with, hold out two fingers so as if to poke sb into his eyes and quickly move the two fingers up and down, but each in the other direction. Those are her legs. -EEE -->

	I ~~talked into the pillow and shook around~~.		I don't dislike him. Otherwise, I wouldn't be troubled now.

	~~It's not like~~ I ~~don't like~~ him~~. If~~ I ~~didn't, then I wouldn't be troubled to begin with~~.		I considered him a friend; I had drawn a distinct line in my head.

	But ~~I considered him a friend~~. ~~In my mind I had already drawn a distinct line~~.		But that's no longer enough for Kazu-kun...?

	~~So Kazu-kun won't allow this anymore~~...?		In that case, he should have said it earlier. He should have said it before our friendship had grown so strong that it would hurt when it broke.

	~~In that case,~~ he ~~should have said~~ it ~~earlier~~. ~~He should have said it before our current relationship breaks and gets bitter~~.		Why did he had to come out with it after so long...?

	~~Why does he say it so late...?~~

			Saying that he loves me...
	~~To say~~ he~~'d love~~ me.
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	~~The phone disconnected.~~		I hang up.


	I ~~sat on the cushion and held my head.~~

	~~I have no idea how I should react~~.

	~~"......gh!"~~

	~~It's not like~~ I ~~didn't consider this possibility~~, ~~since we're male and female~~.		I sit down on a cushion and hold my head, at a complete loss about how to respond.

	~~Nonetheless, I held a baseless conviction that this wouldn't happen with Kazuki~~.		"......tch!"

	~~This lack of consideration might have hurt him~~.		We're male and female, so there are certain difficulties that could emerge. Nonetheless, I was so naïve as to believe that this wouldn't be the case for Kazuki.

	~~Why? It would be the best~~ to ~~feel nothing for me at all~~.		Perhaps, I have been tormenting him all along, failing to understand him properly.

	~~Despite this~~, ~~why of~~ all ~~things did~~ he ~~get captured~~ by ~~this foolish feeling?~~		But why? Optimally, he should feel nothing at all for me, yet he got trapped by the silliest of all feelings!


	~~To say~~ he~~'d love~~ me.		Saying that he loves me!
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	<div style="border: 2px solid #220022; z-index: 2;background: #660066; padding: 3px; color: #EE0; width: 200px; font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><span style="font-size: 1.5em;">Kokone Kirino</span><br />		<div style="border: 2px solid #220022; z-index: 2;background: #660066; padding: 3px; color: #EE0; width: 200px; font-family: 'Times New Roman';"><span style="font-size: 1.5em;">Kokone Kirino</span><br />
	One of Kazuki's friends; bright, social and popular with ~~the class~~. She ~~is childhood friend of~~ Daiya Oomine since kindergarten, and...?		One of Kazuki's friends; bright, social and popular with her classmates. She has known Daiya Oomine since kindergarten, and...?
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Mane: "But" and "nonetheless" are redundant in the same sentence.

2012-03-26T20:47:22Z

"But" and "nonetheless" are redundant in the same sentence.

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	It's not like I didn't consider this possibility, since we're male and female.		It's not like I didn't consider this possibility, since we're male and female.

	~~But nonetheless~~, I held a baseless conviction that this wouldn't happen with Kazuki.		Nonetheless, I held a baseless conviction that this wouldn't happen with Kazuki.

	This lack of consideration might have hurt him.		This lack of consideration might have hurt him.

Mane: Fixed incorrect semi-colon use and improved readability

2012-03-26T20:46:41Z

Fixed incorrect semi-colon use and improved readability

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	I talked into the pillow and shook around.		I talked into the pillow and shook around.

	It's not like I don't like him. If I didn't, then I wouldn't be troubled to begin with.		It's not like I don't like him. If I didn't, then I wouldn't be troubled to begin with.

	But I considered him a friend. In my mind I had already drawn a distinct line.		But I considered him a friend. In my mind I had already drawn a distinct line.

	So Kazu-kun won't allow this anymore...?		So Kazu-kun won't allow this anymore...?

	In that case, he should have said it earlier. He should have said it before our current relationship ~~would break~~ and ~~get~~ bitter.		In that case, he should have said it earlier. He should have said it before our current relationship breaks and gets bitter.

	Why does he say it so late...?		Why does he say it so late...?
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	It's not like I didn't consider this possibility, since we're male and female.		It's not like I didn't consider this possibility, since we're male and female.

	But nonetheless, I ~~was convinced without foundation~~ that this wouldn't happen with Kazuki.		But nonetheless, I held a baseless conviction that this wouldn't happen with Kazuki.

	This lack of consideration might have hurt him.		This lack of consideration might have hurt him.

	Why? It would be the best to feel nothing for me at all.		Why? It would be the best to feel nothing for me at all.

	Despite this, why of all things did he get captured by this foolish feeling?		Despite this, why of all things did he get captured by this foolish feeling?