Fuyuu Gakuen no Alice and Shirley:Volume1 Chapter1 - Revision history

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2013-10-22T08:56:59Z

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	As soon as Shirley left Masaki, he started feeling a little lonely.		As soon as Shirley left Masaki, he started feeling a little lonely.

	However, he was ~~originally~~ a student who transferred half-way through the year, so it was natural for him to feel that way.		However, he was a student who transferred half-way through the school year, so it was natural for him to feel that way.

	He silently walked up the stairs.		He silently walked up the stairs.
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	He heard a loud voice.		He heard a loud voice.

	"Hey, look! Ha...ha...did you see?! That's my power. What do you think now...I can still do it right!? It's useful, isn't it!! So...so...I'll do more!"		"Hey, look! Ha...ha...did you see it?! That's my power. What do you think now...I can still do it right!? It's useful, isn't it!! So...so...I'll do more!"

	It was a shrill, urgent voice.		It was a shrill, urgent voice.
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	Masaki heard what they were saying from the corridor.		Masaki heard what they were saying from the corridor.

	He didn't want to get anywhere near trouble on ~~the~~ first day ~~transferring to the~~ school––but he thought that it was a bit shameful for him not to see what was happening even though ~~trouble~~ might be taking place.		He didn't want to get anywhere near trouble on his first day at this school––but he thought that it was a bit shameful for him not to see what was happening, even though there might be trouble taking place.

	If things got violent he couldn't leave it alone and even if there wasn't a problem it would only be a little detour. He should still have some time to spare.		If things got violent he couldn't just leave it alone, and even if there wasn't a problem, it would only be a little detour. He should still have some time to spare.

	Masaki left the staircase and went into the corridor.		Masaki left the staircase and went into the corridor.

	His footsteps resounded in the silent corridor.		His footsteps resounded within the silent corridor.

	Since he was on the floor where there were only specials classrooms, ~~below the 30th~~ and it was the morning, it was quiet.		Since he was below the 30th floor, where there were only specials classrooms, and it was the morning, it was quite quiet.

	Someone jumped out from the open door of a classroom.		Someone jumped out from the open door of a classroom.
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	"Shit! Shit! Ah...I get it now! I'll take care of it right away! So, I'll! It's fine, since it's a promise right?"		"Shit! Shit! Ah...I get it now! I'll take care of it right away! So, I'll! It's fine, since it's a promise right?"

	He called out to inside the classroom. As Masaki ~~thought,~~ someone must be there.		He called out to inside the classroom. Because of that, Masaki assumed someone must be inside there.

	The man glared at Masaki.		The man glared at Masaki.
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	"...Erm...What's going on?"		"...Erm...What's going on?"

	Masaki presumed that there was something unusual going on so he called out ~~from~~ a ~~place well away from him~~.		Masaki presumed that there was something unusual going on, so he called out this while standing a ways back.

	The other person was about ten steps away.		The other person was about ten steps away.
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	"Huh?"		"Huh?"

	"And, ~~from~~ now...you too..."		"And, for now...you too..."

	"Wh, what are you saying?"		"Wh, what are you saying?"
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	"What's going on...?"		"What's going on...?"

	"Cut! ~~Sliced~~ up! I'll...waaah! Slice and tear him up! <<~~Noise Cut~~>>!		"Cut! Slice up! I'll...waaah! Slice and tear him up! <<Cutting noise>>!

	At the same time as the twitching man's scream, a whooshing sound started. It was the sound of wind.		At the same time as the twitching man's scream, a whooshing sound started. It was the sound of wind.
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	There was only a white afterglow drawn in the shape of a circle.		There was only a white afterglow drawn in the shape of a circle.

	It was about one ~~metre~~ wide.		It was about one meter wide.

	All of the windows, walls and doors in the surroundings broke and crumbled down.		All of the windows, walls and doors in the surroundings area broke and crumbled down to the ground.

	He took a peek around the corner and saw that it looked as if there were completely different objects from the beginning; the concrete walls and metal door lay scattered on the floor.		He took a peek around the corner and saw that it looked as if there were completely different objects from the beginning; the concrete walls and metal door lay scattered on the floor.

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	It was a paranormal phenomenon.		It was a paranormal phenomenon.

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	It was a dangerous place.		It was a dangerous place.

	Now that he had ~~shortened~~ the distance, he was close enough for him to confront him, but did he have a knife?––Is what Masaki thought.		Now that he had closed the distance, he was close enough for him to confront him, but did he have a knife?––Is what Masaki thought.

	There's no way that he could swing an invisible knife and cut everything up in the area! It was surprising to find the doors and walls completely destroyed.		There's no way that he could swing an invisible knife and cut everything up in the area! It was surprising to find the doors and walls completely destroyed.
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	That guy is dangerous!		That guy is dangerous!

	He ~~might~~ be killed if he's careless.		He could be killed if he's careless.

	He didn't understand why but the moment he shouted, the invisible knife dropped.		He didn't understand why but the moment he shouted, the invisible knife dropped.
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	Masaki didn't understand what he was saying.		Masaki didn't understand what he was saying.

	As for what he could guess from his speech and ~~behaviour~~. He thought that he seemed to be acting like ~~that~~ in response to someone's incentive. Maybe that person was in the other classroom.		As for what he could guess from his speech and behavior. He thought that the man seemed to be acting like this in response to someone's incentive. Maybe that person was in the other classroom.

	Even though the man had lost all sense of reason, his ~~judgement~~ seemed to be fine. He slowly came closer to drive him into a corner.		Even though the man had lost all sense of reason, his judgment seemed to be fine. He slowly came closer to drive him into a corner.

	"Cut...cut...cut...I'll cut...this guy too...one person...two people...anyone..."		"Cut...cut...cut...I'll cut...this guy too...one person...two people...anyone..."
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	The ceiling collapsed.		The ceiling collapsed.


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Stellarroze: /* Part 2 */ Minor stuff, etc.

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Part 2: Minor stuff, etc.

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	=== Part 2 ===		=== Part 2 ===

	He took the automatic bus from the station plaza and fifteen minutes later he got off at <Alrescha> bus stop.		He took the automatic bus from the station plaza and fifteen minutes later he got off at <Alrescha> bus stop.

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	Since he was new and his arm was intertwined with Shirley's, everyone's attention was on him.		Since he was new and his arm was intertwined with Shirley's, everyone's attention was on him.

	"Masaki, have you heard about the classes yet?"		"Masaki, have you heard about the classes yet?"

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	"Is it all classrooms!? I thought this was a corporation building, not a school."		"Is it all classrooms!? I thought this was a corporation building, not a school."

	"Ahaha. From the 1st to the 29th floor there nothing but special classrooms, from the 30th to the 35th are the teacher's rooms, then up to the 40th are the 1st year classrooms, up to the 45th are the second year classrooms and up to the 50th are the 3rd year classrooms."		"Ahaha. From the 1st to the 29th floor there's nothing but special classrooms, from the 30th to the 35th are the teacher's rooms, then up to the 40th are the 1st year classrooms, up to the 45th are the second year classrooms and up to the 50th are the 3rd year classrooms."

	"Woah~...what about from the 51st floor to the top?"		"Woah~...what about from the 51st floor to the top?"
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	They passed through the entrance and into a passage that was wide enough to be called a station concourse, and again they went through a large hall. This seemed to be the heart of the skyscraper.		They passed through the entrance and into a passage that was wide enough to be called a station concourse, and again they went through a large hall. This seemed to be the heart of the skyscraper.
	In the center of the hall was a wall where a curve was drawn, or maybe it should be called a round pillar. Many elevators were lined up, and on the wall ~~where~~ the words <<ELEVATOR PILLAR>> ~~was written~~.
			In the center of the hall was a wall where a curve was drawn, or maybe it should be called a round pillar. Many elevators were lined up, and on the wall were the words <<ELEVATOR PILLAR>>.

	One by one, the students went inside them.		One by one, the students went inside them.
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	"It isn't mountain climbing you know."		"It isn't mountain climbing you know."

	While they ~~where~~ standing there talking, somebody at the back loudly exclaimed "Wha–!?" in a sharp		While they were standing there talking, somebody at the back loudly exclaimed "Wha–!?" in a sharp voice.
	voice.

	As soon as he turned around, he saw a man's eyes widen in shock.		As soon as he turned around, he saw a man's eyes widen in shock.

	The man seemed to have a well-built physique, had short evenly cut hair and had a ~~square-ish~~ face, all of this together gave off a grim impression. Everyone's eyes were turned towards Masaki and Shirley.		The man seemed to have a well-built physique, had short evenly cut hair and had a squareish face, all of this together gave off a grim impression. Everyone's eyes were turned towards Masaki and Shirley.

	He talked like he wanted to wring every last drop out of Masaki.		He talked like he wanted to wring every last drop out of Masaki.
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	"Hmm? He's Masaki."		"Hmm? He's Masaki."

	It was an ~~unenergetic~~ answer. Since she didn't use a lot of words, Masaki decided to add to it.		It was an lethargic answer. Since she didn't use a lot of words, Masaki decided to add to it.

	"I'm Kusunoki Masaki. Today is my first day at this school."		"I'm Kusunoki Masaki. Today is my first day at this school."

	"A transfer student? Then have you just awoken? This guy is entwined with Sakurazaka-san's a,		"A transfer student? Then have you just awoken? This guy is entwined with Sakurazaka-san's a, arm..."
	arm..."

	His shoulders started shaking.		His shoulders started shaking.
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	"Who...is he?"		"Who...is he?"

	"This guys name is Ishounuma, and he is classmate ~~to me~~, and now ~~you~~. That's all."		"This guys name is Ishounuma, and he is my classmate, and now yours. That's all."

	"Sakurazaka-san, that isn't all, right?"		"Sakurazaka-san, that isn't all, right?"
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	Even though this was his first time meeting Masaki, he acted really aggressive towards him.		Even though this was his first time meeting Masaki, he acted really aggressive towards him.

	Masaki shrunk back.		Masaki shrunk back.

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	However, even that didn't settle Ishounuma's anger. Instead, his eyes became bloodshot.		However, even that didn't settle Ishounuma's anger. Instead, his eyes became bloodshot.

	"Yo, You're not using honorifics with her name...!? Hey, you! Even though you've been Sakurazaka-san's acquaintance for some time, it doesn't mean that you can act over-familiar with her ~~right~~!?"		"Yo, You're not using honorifics with her name...!? Hey, you! Even though you've been Sakurazaka-san's acquaintance for some time, it doesn't mean that you can act over-familiar with her does it!?"

	"I didn't mean to do that."		"I didn't mean to do that."

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	The first day at a new school, 7:22 a.m.		The first day at a new school, 7:22 a.m.

	Masaki ~~Landed~~ at Canaan, the floating academy city.		Masaki landed at Canaan, the floating academy city.

	"Phew, it's so hot..."		"Phew, it's so hot..."
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	Canaan was a huge town, floating 1000 meters up in the sky.		Canaan was a huge town, floating 1000 meters up in the sky.

	The entire area was said to be 24 square kilometers big which is almost the size of ~~one wards~~ in the Tokyo Metropolitan area.		The entire area was said to be 24 square kilometers big which is almost the size of a ward in the Tokyo Metropolitan area.

	The only way to get there was by taking an Air Train.		The only way to get there was by taking an Air Train.
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	In front of the main gates of the train station, there was a plaza, in it’s center was a water fountain, and beyond that there were department stores, restaurants and recreational buildings. It was a place that bustled business, and a happy aura hung in the air.		In front of the main gates of the train station, there was a plaza, in it’s center was a water fountain, and beyond that there were department stores, restaurants and recreational buildings. It was a place that bustled business, and a happy aura hung in the air.

	The second floor was composed of nothing but walkways and plazas, while the vehicles moved about beneath them on the ground floor. The walkways and roadways were completely separated from each other; which was a rare cutting-edge design in this era.		The second floor was composed of nothing but walkways and plazas, while the vehicles moved about beneath them on the ground floor. The walkways and roadways were completely separated from each other; which was a rare cutting-edge design in this era.

	––A cool cup of ice tea would be great.		––A cool cup of ice tea would be great.
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	Was it because of her family heritage?		Was it because of her family heritage?

	She was called "Sakurazaka Shirley", and ~~I’m~~ pretty sure her mother was an American.		She was called "Sakurazaka Shirley", and Masaki was pretty sure her mother was an American.

	"...Well of course you’ve changed, you've grown up after all."		"...Well of course you’ve changed, you've grown up after all."
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	While they were walking.		While they were walking.

	Shirley told Masaki about the town that she had lived in for seven years, as they made there way towards ~~there~~ school.		Shirley told Masaki about the town that she had lived in for seven years, as they made there way towards their school.

	Well, this is the Floating Academy Town Canaan. So they quickly reached the school.		Well, this is the Floating Academy Town Canaan. So they quickly reached the school.

	Masaki and the other people around him faced one of the huge school buildings that were in the town.		Masaki and the other people around him faced one of the huge school buildings that were in the town.

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	He didn't hear the voice of her colleague that she was getting in touch with as her running footsteps instantly faded into the corridor.		He didn't hear the voice of her colleague that she was getting in touch with as her running footsteps instantly faded into the corridor.

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