Fuyuu Gakuen no Alice and Shirley:Volume1 Prologue - Revision history

Stellarroze: Minor s&g amongst other stuff

2013-10-18T20:20:02Z

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	They were all beings that couldn't be be part of reality. It was as if they had fallen out of a fairy-tale.		They were all beings that couldn't be be part of reality. It was as if they had fallen out of a fairy-tale.

	It seemed like they had ~~appears~~ when the classroom ceiling collapsed.		It seemed like they had appeared when the classroom ceiling collapsed.

	Masaki was the only person in the room, thus no one else was there to be injured. But the lined up desks and chairs were being stepped and trodden on by the ~~other worldly~~ beings, The room was overflowing and everything was being crushed to the point that they were no longer recognizable.		Masaki was the only person in the room, thus no one else was there to be injured. But the lined up desks and chairs were being stepped and trodden on by the otherworldly beings. The room was overflowing and everything was being crushed to the point that they were no longer recognizable.

	In the midst of the card soldiers, the hat wearing mice and other animals - those irrational, absurd and uncanny beings - was an enormous cat. It was about 6 meters long. The top of it's tofty-~~hair~~ covered head reached all the way to where the collapsed ceiling joists were supposed to have been.		In the midst of the card soldiers, the hat wearing mice and other animals - those irrational, absurd and uncanny beings - was an enormous cat. It was about 6 meters long. The top of it's tofty-haired covered head reached all the way to where the collapsed ceiling joists were supposed to have been.

	The large cat closed its almond shaped eyes, gave a complacent smile and lowered its head in what seemed to be a bow.		The large cat closed its almond shaped eyes, gave a complacent smile and lowered its head in what seemed to be a bow.
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	Her eyes ~~where~~ a clear bright blue like ~~Sapphires~~, ~~and~~ hair ~~that was~~ like a bundle of gold thread~~. Skin~~ as white as a ~~Porcelain Dolls~~.		Her eyes were a clear bright blue like sapphires, hair like a bundle of gold thread and skin as white as a porcelain doll.

	She clung to the tufts of hair on the ears of the big cat as it moved slowly.		She clung to the tufts of hair on the ears of the big cat as it moved slowly.

	Although the girl was shorter that Masaki, he had to look up at her since she was at a much higher ~~hight~~ than himself.		Although the girl was shorter that Masaki, he had to look up at her since she was at a much higher height than himself.

	She took a look over her surroundings––then her eyes met with Masaki's.		She took a look over her surroundings––then her eyes met with Masaki's.

	She tilted to her head to one side in what seemed to be curiosity.		She tilted her head to one side in what seemed to be curiosity.

	"...Who are you?"		"...Who are you?"

	Her voice sounded clear and transparent water.		Her voice sounded like clear and transparent water.

	"Well, I'm Kusunoki Masaki...I moved to this school today."		"Well, I'm Kusunoki Masaki...I moved to this school today."

TheForgetfulEditor: /* Crumbling Classroom Stage */

2013-10-13T02:40:46Z

Crumbling Classroom Stage

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	"...Who are you?"		"...Who are you?"

	Her voice sounded ~~like the sound~~ clear water ~~tricking in a stream~~.		Her voice sounded clear and transparent water.

	"Well, I'm Kusunoki Masaki...I moved to this school today."		"Well, I'm Kusunoki Masaki...I moved to this school today."

Nura rihan: Reverted edits by TheForgetfulEditor (talk) to last revision by 72.161.151.185

2013-10-13T02:28:33Z

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			== Crumbling Classroom Stage ==
			The ceiling collapsed and fell to the floor. It was 8:13 a.m. As the golden sunlight passed through the classroom window.

			The haze of dust weighed heavily on Kusunoki Masaki's mouth. He opened his eyes ever so slightly. The debris of the collapsed ceiling were scattered about on the floor as well as the top of the desks and chairs.

			And in the midst of it all this, were strange, dancing shadows.

			Card soldiers with long, thin limbs blew trumpets. The sound of the trumpets brought geese to life and from their open yellow beaks they spat out letters of the alphabet. Animals bigger than cats: Mice wearing hats, ducks, parrots, and crabs, they all laughed and sang.

			They were all beings that couldn't be be part of reality. It was as if they had fallen out of a fairy-tale.

			It seemed like they had appears when the classroom ceiling collapsed.

			Masaki was the only person in the room, thus no one else was there to be injured. But the lined up desks and chairs were being stepped and trodden on by the other worldly beings, The room was overflowing and everything was being crushed to the point that they were no longer recognizable.

			In the midst of the card soldiers, the hat wearing mice and other animals - those irrational, absurd and uncanny beings - was an enormous cat. It was about 6 meters long. The top of it's tofty-hair covered head reached all the way to where the collapsed ceiling joists were supposed to have been.

			The large cat closed its almond shaped eyes, gave a complacent smile and lowered its head in what seemed to be a bow.

			Between its two triangular ears––was the shape of a human.

			The other person stood out in a different sense from the strange dancing beings in the middle of the rubble.

			Masaki held his breath.

			He forgot about what was going on around him as he was completely mesmerized; "she's beautiful", he thought.



			It was a girl that looked like a western doll.



			Her eyes where a clear bright blue like Sapphires, and hair that was like a bundle of gold thread. Skin as white as a Porcelain Dolls.

			She clung to the tufts of hair on the ears of the big cat as it moved slowly.

			Although the girl was shorter that Masaki, he had to look up at her since she was at a much higher hight than himself.

			She took a look over her surroundings––then her eyes met with Masaki's.

			She tilted to her head to one side in what seemed to be curiosity.

			"...Who are you?"

			Her voice sounded like the sound clear water tricking in a stream.

			"Well, I'm Kusunoki Masaki...I moved to this school today."

			"Okay. Were you a little surprised?"

			"I was really surprised. I thought that it had become a little ridiculous you know - who the hell are you?"

			"...I feel sorry for you."

			She didn't answer my question; instead she spoke words of pity.

			Masaki was puzzled so asked again.

			"Me? Why?"

			"You over there, you're going to die."

			"What?!"

			Masaki heard the faint sound of slicing wind and turned around.

			On the other side of the window––

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TheForgetfulEditor: /* Crumbling Classroom Stage */

2013-10-13T02:26:45Z

Crumbling Classroom Stage

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	~~== Crumbling Classroom Stage ==~~
	~~The ceiling collapsed and fell to the floor. It was 8:13 a.m. As the golden sunlight passed through the classroom window.~~

	The haze of dust weighed heavily on Kusunoki Masaki's mouth. He opened his eyes ever so slightly. The debris of the collapsed ceiling were scattered about on the floor as well as the top of the desks and chairs.

	~~And in the midst of it all this, were strange, dancing shadows.~~

	Card soldiers with long, thin limbs blew trumpets. The sound of the trumpets brought geese to life and from their open yellow beaks they spat out letters of the alphabet. Animals bigger than cats: Mice wearing hats, ducks, parrots, and crabs, they all laughed and sang.

	~~They were all beings that couldn't be be part of reality. It was as if they had fallen out of a fairy-tale.~~

	~~It seemed like they had appears when the classroom ceiling collapsed.~~

	Masaki was the only person in the room, thus no one else was there to be injured. But the lined up desks and chairs were being stepped and trodden on by the other worldly beings, The room was overflowing and everything was being crushed to the point that they were no longer recognizable.

	In the midst of the card soldiers, the hat wearing mice and other animals - those irrational, absurd and uncanny beings - was an enormous cat. It was about 6 meters long. The top of it's tofty-hair covered head reached all the way to where the collapsed ceiling joists were supposed to have been.

	~~The large cat closed its almond shaped eyes, gave a complacent smile and lowered its head in what seemed to be a bow.~~

	~~Between its two triangular ears––was the shape of a human.~~

	~~The other person stood out in a different sense from the strange dancing beings in the middle of the rubble.~~

	~~Masaki held his breath.~~

	~~He forgot about what was going on around him as he was completely mesmerized; "she's beautiful", he thought.~~



	~~It was a girl that looked like a western doll.~~



	~~Her eyes where a clear bright blue like Sapphires, and hair that was like a bundle of gold thread. Skin as white as a Porcelain Dolls.~~

	~~She clung to the tufts of hair on the ears of the big cat as it moved slowly.~~

	~~Although the girl was shorter that Masaki, he had to look up at her since she was at a much higher hight than himself.~~

	~~She took a look over her surroundings––then her eyes met with Masaki's.~~

	~~She tilted to her head to one side in what seemed to be curiosity.~~

	~~"...Who are you?"~~

	~~Her voice sounded like the sound clear water tricking in a stream.~~

	~~"Well, I'm Kusunoki Masaki...I moved to this school today."~~

	~~"Okay. Were you a little surprised?"~~

	~~"I was really surprised. I thought that it had become a little ridiculous you know - who the hell are you?"~~

	~~"...I feel sorry for you."~~

	~~She didn't answer my question; instead she spoke words of pity.~~

	~~Masaki was puzzled so asked again.~~

	~~"Me? Why?"~~

	~~"You over there, you're going to die."~~

	~~"What?!"~~

	~~Masaki heard the faint sound of slicing wind and turned around.~~

	~~On the other side of the window––~~

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72.161.151.185: /* Crumbling Classroom Stage */

2013-10-13T02:12:48Z

Crumbling Classroom Stage

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	== Crumbling Classroom Stage ==		== Crumbling Classroom Stage ==
	The ceiling fell. It was 8:13 a.m. ~~when~~ the golden sunlight passed through the classroom window.		The ceiling collapsed and fell to the floor. It was 8:13 a.m. As the golden sunlight passed through the classroom window.

	The ~~enshrouding~~ dust weighed heavily on Kusunoki Masaki's mouth ~~and he~~ opened his eyes slightly. The ~~broken~~ ceiling ~~debris was~~ scattered on the floor as well as on top of the desks and chairs.		The haze of dust weighed heavily on Kusunoki Masaki's mouth. He opened his eyes ever so slightly. The debris of the collapsed ceiling were scattered about on the floor as well as the top of the desks and chairs.

	And in the midst of it all ~~was a~~ strange, dancing ~~shadow~~.		And in the midst of it all this, were strange, dancing shadows.

	Card soldiers with long, thin limbs blew trumpets. The trumpets brought geese to life and from their open yellow beaks they spat out letters of the alphabet. Animals bigger than cats: ~~hat~~ wearing ~~mice~~, ducks, ~~parrot~~, crabs, laughed and ~~sung~~		Card soldiers with long, thin limbs blew trumpets. The sound of the trumpets brought geese to life and from their open yellow beaks they spat out letters of the alphabet. Animals bigger than cats: Mice wearing hats, ducks, parrots, and crabs, they all laughed and sang.

	They were ~~only~~ beings that couldn't be ~~real~~. It was as if they had fallen out of a fairy-tale.		They were all beings that couldn't be be part of reality. It was as if they had fallen out of a fairy-tale.

	It seemed like they ~~fell~~ when the classroom ceiling collapsed.		It seemed like they had appears when the classroom ceiling collapsed.

	Masaki was the only person in the room thus ~~luckily~~ no one was injured. But the lined up desks and chairs were stepped and trodden on, overflowing and being crushed ~~flat~~ to the point that they were no longer ~~recognisable~~.		Masaki was the only person in the room, thus no one else was there to be injured. But the lined up desks and chairs were being stepped and trodden on by the other worldly beings, The room was overflowing and everything was being crushed to the point that they were no longer recognizable.

	In the midst of the card soldiers, hat wearing mice and other animals - those irrational, absurd and uncanny beings - was an enormous cat. It was about 6 meters long. The top of it's tofty-~~haired round~~ head reached all the way to the ~~top of the joist bay whose bottom had fallen out~~.		In the midst of the card soldiers, the hat wearing mice and other animals - those irrational, absurd and uncanny beings - was an enormous cat. It was about 6 meters long. The top of it's tofty-hair covered head reached all the way to where the collapsed ceiling joists were supposed to have been.

	The large cat closed its almond shaped eyes, gave a complacent smile and lowered its head in what seemed to be a bow.		The large cat closed its almond shaped eyes, gave a complacent smile and lowered its head in what seemed to be a bow.
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	Masaki held his breath.		Masaki held his breath.

	He forgot about what was going on around him as he was completely ~~fascinated~~; "she's beautiful", he thought.		He forgot about what was going on around him as he was completely mesmerized; "she's beautiful", he thought.


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	~~Sapphire-like~~ clear blue ~~eyes~~ and hair like a bundle of gold thread. Skin as white as a ~~plaster figure~~.		Her eyes where a clear bright blue like Sapphires, and hair that was like a bundle of gold thread. Skin as white as a Porcelain Dolls.

	She clung to the tufts of hair on the ears of the big cat as it moved slowly.		She clung to the tufts of hair on the ears of the big cat as it moved slowly.

	Although the girl was shorter that Masaki, he had to look up at her since she was at a much higher ~~angle~~ than ~~him~~.		Although the girl was shorter that Masaki, he had to look up at her since she was at a much higher hight than himself.

	She took a look over her surroundings––then her eyes met with Masaki's.		She took a look over her surroundings––then her eyes met with Masaki's.
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	"...Who are you?"		"...Who are you?"

	Her voice sounded like clear water.		Her voice sounded like the sound clear water tricking in a stream.

	"Well, I'm Kusunoki Masaki...I moved to this school today."		"Well, I'm Kusunoki Masaki...I moved to this school today."
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	"Me? Why?"		"Me? Why?"

	"You over there, ~~are~~ going to die."		"You over there, you're going to die."

	"What?!"		"What?!"

Stellarroze at 15:53, 6 October 2013

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	On the other side of the window––		On the other side of the window––

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== Crumbling Classroom Stage ==
The ceiling fell. It was 8:13 a.m. when the golden sunlight passed through the classroom window.

The enshrouding dust weighed heavily on Kusunoki Masaki's mouth and he opened his eyes slightly. The broken ceiling debris was scattered on the floor as well as on top of the desks and chairs.

And in the midst of it all was a strange, dancing shadow.

Card soldiers with long, thin limbs blew trumpets. The trumpets brought geese to life and from their open yellow beaks they spat out letters of the alphabet. Animals bigger than cats: hat wearing mice, ducks, parrot, crabs, laughed and sung

They were only beings that couldn't be real. It was as if they had fallen out of a fairy-tale.

It seemed like they fell when the classroom ceiling collapsed.

Masaki was the only person in the room thus luckily no one was injured. But the lined up desks and chairs were stepped and trodden on, overflowing and being crushed flat to the point that they were no longer recognisable.

In the midst of the card soldiers, hat wearing mice and other animals - those irrational, absurd and uncanny beings - was an enormous cat. It was about 6 meters long. The top of it's tofty-haired round head reached all the way to the top of the joist bay whose bottom had fallen out.

The large cat closed its almond shaped eyes, gave a complacent smile and lowered its head in what seemed to be a bow.

Between its two triangular ears––was the shape of a human.

The other person stood out in a different sense from the strange dancing beings in the middle of the rubble.

Masaki held his breath.

He forgot about what was going on around him as he was completely fascinated; "she's beautiful", he thought.

It was a girl that looked like a western doll.

Sapphire-like clear blue eyes and hair like a bundle of gold thread. Skin as white as a plaster figure.

She clung to the tufts of hair on the ears of the big cat as it moved slowly.

Although the girl was shorter that Masaki, he had to look up at her since she was at a much higher angle than him.

She took a look over her surroundings––then her eyes met with Masaki's.

She tilted to her head to one side in what seemed to be curiosity.

"...Who are you?"

Her voice sounded like clear water.

"Well, I'm Kusunoki Masaki...I moved to this school today."

"Okay. Were you a little surprised?"

"I was really surprised. I thought that it had become a little ridiculous you know - who the hell are you?"

"...I feel sorry for you."

She didn't answer my question; instead she spoke words of pity.

Masaki was puzzled so asked again.

"Me? Why?"

"You over there, are going to die."

"What?!"

Masaki heard the faint sound of slicing wind and turned around.

On the other side of the window––