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	"—To tell the truth, it's not by the consensus of the police that I'm here. You could even call it a personal request from me. To be frank, I'm the only one at the station who bears Youko-chan in mind," he suddenly started talking after watching me eat for a while, "Well, it's not surprising, because that suicide kind of lacks peculiarity. If you just assume her motive was grief over losing her husband, it makes sense. We even have several statements that confirm that she was depressed since his death," Konan put on a self-ironic smile. "But what has to be noted is that her suicide note was written on the computer and not by hand. So it's physically possible that it was typed in by someone else who wanted to make the incident out to be suicide. But that's not enough to dig out the case. Keep in mind that many suicide victims don't leave behind a note at all. For another thing, the only fact that makes Youko-chan doubtable is that she's her daughter. It's not like her behavior raised any doubts."		"—To tell the truth, it's not by the consensus of the police that I'm here. You could even call it a personal request from me. To be frank, I'm the only one at the station who bears Youko-chan in mind," he suddenly started talking after watching me eat for a while, "Well, it's not surprising, because that suicide kind of lacks peculiarity. If you just assume her motive was grief over losing her husband, it makes sense. We even have several statements that confirm that she was depressed since his death," Konan put on a self-ironic smile. "But what has to be noted is that her suicide note was written on the computer and not by hand. So it's physically possible that it was typed in by someone else who wanted to make the incident out to be suicide. But that's not enough to dig out the case. Keep in mind that many suicide victims don't leave behind a note at all. For another thing, the only fact that makes Youko-chan doubtable is that she's her daughter. It's not like her behavior raised any doubts."

	I stopped my fork and knife and looked Konan straight into the eye, "Then I fail to understand why you doubt Tsukimori all the more. I don't want to help you as long as you can't give me a plausible explanation,."		I stopped my fork and knife and looked Konan straight into the eye, "Then I fail to understand why you doubt Tsukimori all the more. I don't want to help you as long as you can't give me a plausible explanation."

	Since learning about the murder recipe I had been observing Tsukimori day in, day out. So what should he, who had only just met Tsukimori, know that I didn't know? What trait of Tsukimori's should he know, which I, the holder of the murder recipe, didn't know?		Since learning about the murder recipe I had been observing Tsukimori day in, day out. So what should he, who had only just met Tsukimori, know that I didn't know? What trait of Tsukimori's should he know, which I, the holder of the murder recipe, didn't know?

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	Where she had been found implied that she had fallen from that park.		Where she had been found implied that she had fallen from that park.

	The reasons given for her late discovery were that she hadn't reached the foot of the slope and that she had been concealed by the wildly blooming azaleas <!--what was the Japanese name here?--><!-- ツツジ http://ja.wikipedia.org/wiki/%E3%83%84%E3%83%84%E3%82%B8 ... which makes me wonder why I didn't use "Rhododendron", or even better "Azalea" --><!-- I didn't recognize the Linnean family so looked it up and was surprised to see a bunch of plants I knew well (I have azaleas in my yard - no purple ones, though). But they were so different from each other. I assumed that there had to be some better name. Turns out that the proper name of the native, purple Japanese evergreen rhododendron is ''Ericaceae Rhododendron Tsutsuji.'' I found this bit from the en.wikipedia Azalea article interesting: "Tatebayashi, Gunma is famous for its Azalea Hill Park, Tsutsuji-ga-oka." Also found this interesting: http://blog.alientimes.org/2011/05/azalea-tsutsuji-%E8%BA%91%E8%BA%85-japans-late-spring-and-early-summer-regalia/ "For the ancient Japanese poets, azaleas, especially those which dotted wild mountainsides with patches of brilliant pink and red, symbolized the flame of burning passion." So yeah, go with Azalea.--> that covered the entire side of the hill.		The reasons given for her late discovery were that she hadn't reached the foot of the slope and that she had been concealed by the wildly blooming azaleas <!--what was the Japanese name here?--><!-- ツツジ http://ja.wikipedia.org/wiki/%E3%83%84%E3%83%84%E3%82%B8 ... which makes me wonder why I didn't use "Rhododendron", or even better "Azalea" --><!-- I didn't recognize the Linnean family so looked it up and was surprised to see a bunch of plants I knew well (I have azaleas in my yard - no purple ones, though). But they were so different from each other. I assumed that there had to be some better name. Turns out that the proper name of the native, purple Japanese evergreen rhododendron is ''Ericaceae Rhododendron Tsutsuji.'' I found this bit from the en.wikipedia Azalea article interesting: "Tatebayashi, Gunma is famous for its Azalea Hill Park, Tsutsuji-ga-oka." Also found this interesting: http://blog.alientimes.org/2011/05/azalea-tsutsuji-%E8%BA%91%E8%BA%85-japans-late-spring-and-early-summer-regalia/ "For the ancient Japanese poets, azaleas, especially those which dotted wild mountainsides with patches of brilliant pink and red, symbolized the flame of burning passion." So yeah, go with Azalea.--><!-- Those various flower names never cease to surprise me. Also reminds me of a Japanese novel I've recently read; in each chapter one to three flowers/plants were introduced and used to strengthen the bonds between the protagonists. On a related note, there's a fan-made drawing depicting Tsukimori standing in a group of azaleas, though they somewhat lack colorfulness - http://zomg.ch/iwant/tsukimori.png--> that covered the entire side of the hill.

	According to the officer who went to confirm the find, he had never seen such a beautiful corpse. The appearance of her mother, decorated by purple flowers, compared to a framed western painting, he stated. He had found himself forgetting that it was a corpse for several moments, probably bemused by the smell of the blooming azaleas.		According to the officer who went to confirm the find, he had never seen such a beautiful corpse. The appearance of her mother, decorated by purple flowers, compared to a framed western painting, he stated. He had found himself forgetting that it was a corpse for several moments, probably bemused by the smell of the blooming azaleas.
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	In that case, there was no need to pity her mother. She got what she deserved, coldly speaking. There was no particular emotion in my heart with the exception of a slight cling to the cat-and-mouse game that had ended now.		In that case, there was no need to pity her mother. She got what she deserved, coldly speaking. There was no particular emotion in my heart with the exception of a slight cling to the cat-and-mouse game that had ended now.

	The murder recipe lost its ~~luster~~. My delusions around it had come to a close with the death of her mother.		The murder recipe lost its lustre. My delusions around it had come to a close with the death of her mother.

	I supposed that it would end up as a memento deep in one of my drawers and never see the light of day again.		I supposed that it would end up as a memento deep in one of my drawers and never see the light of day again.
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	"But it's not idle talk; I'm honest about it. Of course it's also true that I do have an ulterior motive of sorts, specifically that I would like to have you on my side."		"But it's not idle talk; I'm honest about it. Of course it's also true that I do have an ulterior motive of sorts, specifically that I would like to have you on my side."

	On hearing the word "ulterior motive", I immediately recalled our first encounter several days ago. ~~«Ah~~, 'just wanted to have a quick chat,» <!-- Why the French quotes? -->he had said at the time.		On hearing the word "ulterior motive", I immediately recalled our first encounter several days ago. "Ah, 'just wanted to have a quick chat," <!-- Why the French quotes? --><!-- I tend to use those when I run out of other quote marks, but true, they're not necessary here. -->he had said at the time.

	"During the search, you know, I've been nosing around here and there and I arrived at the conclusion that no one is closer to Youko-chan than you at the moment. So I thought you'd be my man if I wanted to know something about her."		"During the search, you know, I've been nosing around here and there and I arrived at the conclusion that no one is closer to Youko-chan than you at the moment. So I thought you'd be my man if I wanted to know something about her."

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EusthEnoptEron at 04:58, 11 July 2011

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	Where she had been found implied that she had fallen from that park.		Where she had been found implied that she had fallen from that park.

	The reasons given for her late discovery were that she hadn't reached the foot of the slope and that she had been concealed by the wildly blooming Ericaceae <!--what was the Japanese name here?--><!-- ツツジ http://ja.wikipedia.org/wiki/%E3%83%84%E3%83%84%E3%82%B8 ... which makes me wonder why I didn't use "Rhododendron" -->flowers that covered the entire side.		The reasons given for her late discovery were that she hadn't reached the foot of the slope and that she had been concealed by the wildly blooming Ericaceae <!--what was the Japanese name here?--><!-- ツツジ http://ja.wikipedia.org/wiki/%E3%83%84%E3%83%84%E3%82%B8 ... which makes me wonder why I didn't use "Rhododendron", or even better "Azalea" -->flowers that covered the entire side.

	According to the officer who went there to confirm the find, he had never seen such a beautiful corpse. The appearance of her mother, decorated by purple flowers, compared to a framed western painting, he stated. He had found himself forgetting that it was a corpse for several moments, probably bemused by the smell of the Ericaceae.		According to the officer who went there to confirm the find, he had never seen such a beautiful corpse. The appearance of her mother, decorated by purple flowers, compared to a framed western painting, he stated. He had found himself forgetting that it was a corpse for several moments, probably bemused by the smell of the Ericaceae.

EusthEnoptEron at 04:57, 11 July 2011

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	Hadn't she said herself that murder <!--subjunctive used in cases of a possible future act. Definition involves past and present as well, so the subjunctive does not apply. The other instance would be a plurality, say 'murder and rape' which is absent here.-->was a "foolish and careless method"? As clever as she was — cleverer than anyone else I knew in fact — she would have never — under no circumstances — have relied on murder. At least I couldn't explain to myself why she would have done it.		Hadn't she said herself that murder <!--subjunctive used in cases of a possible future act. Definition involves past and present as well, so the subjunctive does not apply. The other instance would be a plurality, say 'murder and rape' which is absent here.-->was a "foolish and careless method"? As clever as she was — cleverer than anyone else I knew in fact — she would have never — under no circumstances — have relied on murder. At least I couldn't explain to myself why she would have done it.

	In the end, I could not view her as someone who would kill<!-- this is important - 'would' is volitional, 'could' is conditional. I'm guessing 'would' is correct here, but you might check your TL just to be sure.-->.		In the end, I could not view her as someone who would kill<!-- this is important - 'would' is volitional, 'could' is conditional. I'm guessing 'would' is correct here, but you might check your TL just to be sure.--><!-- Had a look, but seems to be correct. -->.


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	Where she had been found implied that she had fallen from that park.		Where she had been found implied that she had fallen from that park.

	The reasons given for her late discovery were that she hadn't reached the foot of the slope and that she had been concealed by the wildly blooming Ericaceae <!--what was the Japanese name here?-->flowers that covered the entire side.		The reasons given for her late discovery were that she hadn't reached the foot of the slope and that she had been concealed by the wildly blooming Ericaceae <!--what was the Japanese name here?--><!-- ツツジ http://ja.wikipedia.org/wiki/%E3%83%84%E3%83%84%E3%82%B8 ... which makes me wonder why I didn't use "Rhododendron" -->flowers that covered the entire side.

	According to the officer who went there to confirm the find, he had never seen such a beautiful corpse. The appearance of her mother, decorated by purple flowers, compared to a framed western painting, he stated. He had found himself forgetting that it was a corpse for several moments, probably bemused by the smell of the Ericaceae.		According to the officer who went there to confirm the find, he had never seen such a beautiful corpse. The appearance of her mother, decorated by purple flowers, compared to a framed western painting, he stated. He had found himself forgetting that it was a corpse for several moments, probably bemused by the smell of the Ericaceae.

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