Golden Time:Volume1 Chapter3 - Revision history

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	==Golden Time 1: Chapter 3==		==Golden Time 1: Chapter 3==
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	==Chapter 3==		===Chapter 3===
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Hiro Hayase at 20:41, 7 November 2013

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	They exchanged glances, those upperclassmen--- or you might say, the believers, that seemed to be the right word.		They exchanged glances, those upperclassmen--- or you might say, the believers, that seemed to be the right word.

	They spoke quickly, now it had been decided. The luggage that had been stored was taken out at once, and all the freshmen and some of the believers left the dining room. Banri saw that the keys to the luggage room were in the hands of a one guy.		They spoke quickly, now it had been decided. The luggage that had been stored was taken out at once, and all the freshmen and some of the believers left the dining room. Banri saw that the keys to the luggage room were in the hands of one guy.

	Opened with the key, the freshmen went inside to pick up their luggage. A guy stuck to Banri's side, mouth shut, trying to look thoroughly scary, keeping an eye on him sidelong.		Opened with the key, the freshmen went inside to pick up their luggage. A guy stuck to Banri's side, mouth shut, trying to look thoroughly scary, keeping an eye on him sidelong.
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	"You there, what the heck--- huh!?"		"You there, what the heck--- huh!?"

	The door opened, the forgotten key still in the lock. Glimpsing the white face of the upperclassmen girl, Banri and Kouko both jumped about an inch of the floor. Their bodies reacted even quicker than their thoughts.		The door opened, the forgotten key still in the lock. Glimpsing the white face of the upperclassmen girl, Banri and Kouko both jumped about an inch off the floor. Their bodies reacted even quicker than their thoughts.

	"What's going on!? What about the roster... wa, wait!"		"What's going on!? What about the roster... wa, wait!"
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	"I can't get one either..."		"I can't get one either..."

	After ~~all of~~ two hours had passed, both Banri and Kouko were becoming aware that they had new problems.		After two hours had passed, both Banri and Kouko were becoming aware that they had new problems.

	Their reward for escaping from the suspicious new religion, quite simply said, was to be stranded--- the path they were walking down right now, it might really be a road, or maybe just a game trail, even that much they did not know. Without map, flashlight nor even shoes, having only determination, they depended on what little light came through between the trees to continue on.		Their reward for escaping from the suspicious new religion, quite simply said, was to be stranded--- the path they were walking down right now, it might really be a road, or maybe just a game trail, even that much they did not know. Without a map, flashlight nor even shoes, having only determination, they depended on what little light came through between the trees to continue on.

	Naturally, it was dark, at night with all kinds of trees growing thickly over the mountain trail, and underfoot it was awfully wet. Sliding in the slippery mud, many times the protruding rocks kept them from their way. Fearing pursuit, they stayed away from the brighter lit roads, Banri choosing to follow the trackless paths of the forest.		Naturally, it was dark, at night with all kinds of trees growing thickly over the mountain trail, and underfoot it was awfully wet. Sliding in the slippery mud, many times the protruding rocks kept them from their way. Fearing pursuit, they stayed away from the brighter lit roads, Banri choosing to follow the trackless paths of the forest.

Hiro Hayase at 19:45, 7 November 2013

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	"Ch, cheers..."		"Ch, cheers..."

	Giving another ~~glad~~ smile, she gulped down the delicious looking beer.		Giving another cheery smile, she gulped down the delicious looking beer.

	Kouko was looking his way with a startled look on her face. She was putting the chilled glass to her mouth, since she couldn't avoid doing so, but she looked back at Banri, her feelings exposed.		Kouko was looking his way with a startled look on her face. She was putting the chilled glass to her mouth, since she couldn't avoid doing so, but she looked back at Banri, her feelings exposed.

Hiro Hayase at 19:20, 7 November 2013

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	Banri, making hand signs by the side of his face about locomotives, looked cross-eyed.		Banri, making hand signs by the side of his face about locomotives, looked cross-eyed.

	"Mitsuoo! ...It's not that I thought it was getting better. Instead, quite the ~~reverse~~,"		"Mitsuoo! ...It's not that I thought it was getting better. Instead, quite the contrary,"

	She was fluttering about, talking with her mouth while waving both hands and contorting her body in a way that called attention to herself.		She was fluttering about, talking with her mouth while waving both hands and contorting her body in a way that called attention to herself.

Perfect Chaos: This line is more like she's correcting him for making a silly mistake, and not just her starting who she is as if he doesn't know. Can't think of a better way to explain that at the moment.

2013-11-02T08:49:38Z

This line is more like she's correcting him for making a silly mistake, and not just her starting who she is as if he doesn't know. Can't think of a better way to explain that at the moment.

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	"Barbara!?"		"Barbara!?"

	"It's ~~me,~~ Linda!"		"It's Linda!"

Perfect Chaos at 08:40, 2 November 2013

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Perfect Chaos at 06:19, 2 November 2013

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	He'd answered the upperclassman, saying, "Let's go together!", he told himself. Nonetheless, Kouko was confused.		He'd answered the upperclassman, saying, "Let's go together!", he told himself. Nonetheless, Kouko was confused.

	Besides, it would have been a better to have chatted some more back at the coffee shop. Caught as they were, if he thought about it now, it was suspicious. Wasn't it written in plain sight? This time for sure, he had to be on guard about the strange upperclassman who stuck too close for comfort. Even so, his nervousness at finding himself together with Kouko, his hopes of being able to be friends with her, everything combined to blind his radar.		Besides, it would have been better to have chatted some more back at the coffee shop. Caught as they were, if he thought about it now, it was suspicious. Wasn't it written in plain sight? This time for sure, he had to be on guard about the strange upperclassman who stuck too close for comfort. Even so, his nervousness at finding himself together with Kouko, his hopes of being able to be friends with her, everything combined to blind his radar.

	Since they'd decided to come and participate in the training camp, he'd been dumb. Exhausted, unable to think and with his judgement lost, if he so much as nodded it would be over, and... swept away, to such a state he'd been brought. And now, he was regretting it to death.		Since they'd decided to come and participate in the training camp, he'd been dumb. Exhausted, unable to think and with his judgement lost, if he so much as nodded it would be over, and... swept away, to such a state he'd been brought. And now, he was regretting it to death.

	Banri considered not swallowing the beer touching his mouth.		Banri considered not swallowing the beer touching his mouth.

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	Already, he wouldn't do things like that.		Already, he wouldn't do things like that.

	If he had been patient enough while they'd been speaking of such things, maybe they wouldn't have gone so far. From the beginning, the purpose of isolating the training camp, wearing out its participants, making them give up, stopping their thought processes, appeared to be a trap.		If he had been patient enough while they'd been speaking of such things, maybe they wouldn't have gone so far. From the beginning, the purpose of isolating the training camp, wearing out its participants, making them give up, stopping their thought processes, appeared to be a trap.

	And then... no, no way, they can't just brainwash me when I don't understand what they're teaching, he thought. Still, Banri looked sidelong at the upperclassman next to him. He started drinking the delicious beer, eating their cooking and talking with the other upperclassmen.		And then... no, no way, they can't just brainwash me when I don't understand what they're teaching, he thought. Still, Banri looked sidelong at the upperclassman next to him. He started drinking the delicious beer, eating their cooking and talking with the other upperclassmen.

Perfect Chaos: This line sounded so awkward (and somewhat incorrect here and there) that I had to fix it up a bit.

2013-11-02T06:10:25Z

This line sounded so awkward (and somewhat incorrect here and there) that I had to fix it up a bit.

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	Urged by the upperclassmen, they got down out of the cars. The older girl tried to join hands with Banri, reaching out for him, but Banri pretended not to notice, calling out "Kaga-saan!" and trotting, chasing after Kouko, who had walked ahead, in order to escape from the her. As soon as Kouko saw Banri's face, she stopped walking and they stood side by side, and in a whisper,		Urged by the upperclassmen, they got down out of the cars. The older girl tried to join hands with Banri, reaching out for him, but Banri pretended not to notice, calling out "Kaga-saan!" and trotting, chasing after Kouko, who had walked ahead, in order to escape from the her. As soon as Kouko saw Banri's face, she stopped walking and they stood side by side, and in a whisper,

	"Ah, I ~~finally~~ was able to talk to somebody ~~who~~ knew. The upperclassman next to me, he just kept talking to me the whole time... ~~but it~~ wasn't boring, I ~~had been~~ somewhat ~~tired~~... How was it for you?"		"Ah, I was able to talk to somebody I barely knew. The upperclassman next to me, he just kept talking to me the whole time... It wasn't boring, but I became somewhat worn out... How was it for you?"

	"As for me..."		"As for me..."

Perfect Chaos: Minor typo

2013-11-02T05:45:20Z

Minor typo

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	Where they had arrived wasn't particularly big, but judging by the brickwork, it was evidently a pretty nice facility, two buildings set side by side.		Where they had arrived wasn't particularly big, but judging by the brickwork, it was evidently a pretty nice facility, two buildings set side by side.

	Urged by the upperclassmen, they got down out of the cars. The older girl tried to join hands with Banri, reaching out for him, but Banri pretended not notice, calling out "Kaga-saan!" and trotting, chasing after Kouko, who had walked ahead, in order to escape from the her. As soon as Kouko saw Banri's face, she stopped walking and they stood side by side, and in a whisper,		Urged by the upperclassmen, they got down out of the cars. The older girl tried to join hands with Banri, reaching out for him, but Banri pretended not to notice, calling out "Kaga-saan!" and trotting, chasing after Kouko, who had walked ahead, in order to escape from the her. As soon as Kouko saw Banri's face, she stopped walking and they stood side by side, and in a whisper,

	"Ah, I finally was able to talk to somebody who knew. The upperclassman next to me, he just kept talking to me the whole time... but it wasn't boring, I had been somewhat tired... How was it for you?"		"Ah, I finally was able to talk to somebody who knew. The upperclassman next to me, he just kept talking to me the whole time... but it wasn't boring, I had been somewhat tired... How was it for you?"

Perfect Chaos: There were two instances of this that was romanized instead of translated like all other instances so I changed it to be completely consistent.

2013-11-02T05:20:32Z

There were two instances of this that was romanized instead of translated like all other instances so I changed it to be completely consistent.

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	That, despite the fact that she didn't have interest in anybody apart from Yanagisawa Mitsuo!		That, despite the fact that she didn't have interest in anybody apart from Yanagisawa Mitsuo!

	"But, from here on out, you won't be able to get away with that!", Banri declared in his mind to Kouko's smiling face. Neither Banri nor ~~Nijigen-kun~~ were simply creatures that weren't Mitsuo, and over the next two days and one night together with Kouko, participating in the training camp, they should be able to become "friends" instead.		"But, from here on out, you won't be able to get away with that!", Banri declared in his mind to Kouko's smiling face. Neither Banri nor Mr. Two Dimensions were simply creatures that weren't Mitsuo, and over the next two days and one night together with Kouko, participating in the training camp, they should be able to become "friends" instead.

	"Er, well, whatever, we can talk with Mr. Two Dimensions too, right? The world's not all that bad a place."		"Er, well, whatever, we can talk with Mr. Two Dimensions too, right? The world's not all that bad a place."
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	--- realized he ought to do something.		--- realized he ought to do something.

	The upperclassmen, seated in a row, showed no surprise. They were all watching ~~Nijigen-kun~~'s composed smile, Banri's raised voice and the state of the other freshmen. It had all been arranged for, even this situation. This 'facility in the mountains' was their place of power, and what with the talk of their planning to make an offering, Banri was rather scared. But he couldn't do more than that, since nothing had been decided. He had no other choice for now.		The upperclassmen, seated in a row, showed no surprise. They were all watching Mr. Two Dimensions' composed smile, Banri's raised voice and the state of the other freshmen. It had all been arranged for, even this situation. This 'facility in the mountains' was their place of power, and what with the talk of their planning to make an offering, Banri was rather scared. But he couldn't do more than that, since nothing had been decided. He had no other choice for now.

	Himself, he would do something unexpected.		Himself, he would do something unexpected.

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	"Put these on?"		"Put these on?"

	He tried to take off his socks and hand them over. It would have been good if he'd noticed a little sooner. Her feet were definitely bare. However, ~~but she didn't put~~ them on, nor ~~return~~ them, she gazed at him, in the same pose as when she received them.		He tried to take off his socks and hand them over. It would have been good if he'd noticed a little sooner. Her feet were definitely bare. However, without putting them on, nor returning them, she gazed at him, in the same pose as when she received them.

	Her messed up hair clinging to her cheeks, she wasn't bothering now to cover things up with a smile,		Her messed up hair clinging to her cheeks, she wasn't bothering now to cover things up with a smile,
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	"It's my fault that things turned out this way."		"It's my fault that things turned out this way."

	Looking away from herself again, she looked straight at Banri once more. Being prettily put back in order, indeed with a serious frown, "I'm sorry", she repeated once again. Even in this moment, her large eyes were flashing darkly.		Looking away from herself again, she looked straight at Banri once more. Being prettily put back in order, indeed with a serious frown, "I'm sorry," she repeated once again. Even in this moment, her large eyes were flashing darkly.

	"...That's not right. 'It wasn't Kaga-san's fault', saying such things."		"...That's not right. 'It wasn't Kaga-san's fault', saying such things."
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	"That's wrong!"		"That's wrong!"

	"I thought it would be good if Kaga-san could make some friends in that club. Therefore, in spite of the strange feeling they gave me, I stopped worrying about it, it's OK, let's go~~, you~~'~~re bothering Kaga-san~~. Therefore, it's my responsibility, of course."		"I thought it would be good if Kaga-san could make some friends in that club. Therefore, in spite of the strange feeling they gave me, I stopped worrying about it, and I instigated Kaga-san with, 'it's OK', 'let's go'. Therefore, it's my responsibility, of course."

	"That's not right, that's wrong. ...You're just wrong!"		"That's not right, that's wrong. ...You're just wrong!"
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	Tired of talking after that, her next breath was a like a gasp. Her gaze trembled.		Tired of talking after that, her next breath was a like a gasp. Her gaze trembled.

	"...Understanding, ~~from~~ this spring ~~arrived~~ until yesterday, that there was only one person who bothered to speak with me. Only Tada-kun. Tada-kun called out to me, though it was news about how Mitsuo being excessively defiant... but, even though I found it hard to understand... you talked to me, ...and I was happy for that. That too is true."		"...Understanding, since the coming of this spring until yesterday, that there was only one person who bothered to speak with me. Only Tada-kun. Tada-kun called out to me, though it was news about how Mitsuo being excessively defiant... but, even though I found it hard to understand... you talked to me, ...and I was happy for that. That too is true."

	"If so, then of course trying to call out to you was good."		"If so, then of course trying to call out to you was good."
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	Banri, because he saw that, today's Kouko, yesterday's Kouko--- the Kouko around Yanagisawa was a different person, he thought.		Banri, because he saw that, today's Kouko, yesterday's Kouko--- the Kouko around Yanagisawa was a different person, he thought.

	But Yanagisawa, if he had seen the same thing, he probably would have thought the "Now-Kouko" ~~different~~.		But Yanagisawa, if he had seen the same thing, he probably would have thought the "Now-Kouko" differently.

	"If so, I think he'd be wrong."		"If so, I think he'd be wrong."