Golden Time:Volume1 Chapter4 - Revision history

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	==Golden Time 1: Chapter 4==		==Golden Time 1: Chapter 4==
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	==Chapter 4==		===Chapter 4===


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	Perhaps it was just a little time to recover and come back, and the mail that Banri received was about Thursday night.		Perhaps it was just a little time to recover and come back, and the mail that Banri received was about Thursday night.


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Perfect Chaos at 07:51, 12 November 2013

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	"...You'll understand..."		"...You'll understand..."

	While he gazed down at Yanagisawa's stunned expression, Banri closed his eyes, exhausted. C-3PO, though, was unchanging inside, like Chinami, but ~~it's~~ specifications had to have been built in. At least Banri thought so, though unfortunately, it's shiny golden body was a bit too much.		While he gazed down at Yanagisawa's stunned expression, Banri closed his eyes, exhausted. C-3PO, though, was unchanging inside, like Chinami, but its specifications had to have been built in. At least Banri thought so, though unfortunately, it's shiny golden body was a bit too much.

	Rather, show off those wires! ...If he had anything to do with it, nobody else would be troubled.		Rather, show off those wires! ...If he had anything to do with it, nobody else would be troubled.

Perfect Chaos: The word "for" here makes it seem like certain sides of the room are for exclusive use of the 3rd years or something.

2013-11-12T07:12:02Z

The word "for" here makes it seem like certain sides of the room are for exclusive use of the 3rd years or something.

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	Linda waved Banri and Kouko towards the middle of the room,		Linda waved Banri and Kouko towards the middle of the room,

	"That side's ~~for~~ the third years, OK? Hi!"		"That side's the third years, OK? Hi!"

	The people in the area she pointed to gathered their voices.		The people in the area she pointed to gathered their voices.

Perfect Chaos at 07:07, 12 November 2013

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	Their voices in chorus, "Whoa!", a bunch of people sitting around on the floor looked back over their shoulders. There might have been all of ten people, some of whom they recognized from their disaster. "We're terribly grateful for your help at that time…", they said, once more bowing their heads deeply as they said "It's a newcomer!", "The first newbies of the year!", "She's a pretty one!" and so on, brandishing their chopsticks at them and all of them applauding together in greeting. The atmosphere overpowering him, "Thank you…", said Banri feeling small and taking off his shoes.		Their voices in chorus, "Whoa!", a bunch of people sitting around on the floor looked back over their shoulders. There might have been all of ten people, some of whom they recognized from their disaster. "We're terribly grateful for your help at that time…", they said, once more bowing their heads deeply as they said "It's a newcomer!", "The first newbies of the year!", "She's a pretty one!" and so on, brandishing their chopsticks at them and all of them applauding together in greeting. The atmosphere overpowering him, "Thank you…", said Banri feeling small and taking off his shoes.

	Of course, slippers weren't really needed in this room, with ~~it's~~ tatami floor. From wearing sandals that screamed "It's springtime!", Kouko was strangely uneasy going barefoot, suddenly becoming shorter, even more than Banri getting smaller and smaller as she came inside.		Of course, slippers weren't really needed in this room, with its tatami floor. From wearing sandals that screamed "It's springtime!", Kouko was strangely uneasy going barefoot, suddenly becoming shorter, even more than Banri getting smaller and smaller, as she came inside.

	Linda waved Banri and Kouko towards the middle of the room,		Linda waved Banri and Kouko towards the middle of the room,

Perfect Chaos: It's Kouko that's sweating here, not Banri. Also, the part after that was a bit awkward, so I tried to fix it a bit.

2013-11-12T03:10:13Z

It's Kouko that's sweating here, not Banri. Also, the part after that was a bit awkward, so I tried to fix it a bit.

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	Banri saw beige-pink claws, gripping like eagle's talons. There was no sound of crunching from Yanagisawa's bones, but there should have been from the force by which he was turned around.		Banri saw beige-pink claws, gripping like eagle's talons. There was no sound of crunching from Yanagisawa's bones, but there should have been from the force by which he was turned around.

	"Mitsuo, what you doing?"		"Mitsuo, what are you doing?"

	Smiling sweetly--- a beauty, no longer a deadly weapon.		Smiling sweetly--- a beauty, no longer a deadly weapon.
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	The detested side of Kaga Kouko, the villian, was standing behind him.		The detested side of Kaga Kouko, the villian, was standing behind him.

	He was so scared that sweat was running on ~~his~~ forehead, on ~~his~~ neck, in fact, from all over ~~his~~ body. ~~Trying to understand it all~~, ~~and~~ now, wham! ~~Looking self-important,~~ her arms ~~folded~~, perhaps by chance that pose,		She was so scared that sweat was running on her forehead, on her neck, in fact, from all over her body. I could tell since, right now, wham! I was able to see that she was proudly folding her arms, perhaps by chance that pose,

	"...By chance are you hiding the sweat of your armpits...?"		"...By chance are you hiding the sweat of your armpits...?"

Perfect Chaos at 22:41, 8 November 2013

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	Every now and then, Banri searches for me.		Every now and then, Banri searches for me.

	It's getting to feel as if by holding on to his dreams he ~~were~~ getting clues, as if he thinks that by not moving, he might catch his quarry unprepared, so with his eyes alone he is searching for me. He is understanding that it is futile, and he is planning to stop, but he searches anyway.		It's getting to feel as if by holding on to his dreams he was getting clues, as if he thinks that by not moving, he might catch his quarry unprepared, so with his eyes alone he is searching for me. He is understanding that it is futile, and he is planning to stop, but he searches anyway.

	"How does he hope to find me?", as if he could hear me if he tried. But even if he could hear, "What in the world? Why are you searching?", he wouldn't understand. Finding and catching me, would that return me to inside of him? Or perhaps, would he erase me entirely? Even so, that guy would not even understand my so-called existence. Such a thing he just cannot do.		"How does he hope to find me?", as if he could hear me if he tried. But even if he could hear, "What in the world? Why are you searching?", he wouldn't understand. Finding and catching me, would that return me to inside of him? Or perhaps, would he erase me entirely? Even so, that guy would not even understand my so-called existence. Such a thing he just cannot do.
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	For a first meeting with the girl, she was somehow excessively cute. The more you looked at her, the prettier she seemed. While Banri without thinking focused on what he was seeing, yet he wanted Mr. Two Dimensions to see, as he thought these dimensions took cuteness to a new level.		For a first meeting with the girl, she was somehow excessively cute. The more you looked at her, the prettier she seemed. While Banri without thinking focused on what he was seeing, yet he wanted Mr. Two Dimensions to see, as he thought these dimensions took cuteness to a new level.

	Her visibly long, soft hair was only loosely gathered, and in spite of not wearing makeup her skin seemed to glow. Her looks and small build made her seem a child from some foreign country. Showing a boyish silhouette in worn demins, but matched with a handmade lace-collared blouse, she had some sort of rustic outfitter's day-pack on her back, the which made her delicate form stand out in the crowd.		Her visibly long, soft hair was only loosely gathered, and in spite of not wearing makeup her skin seemed to glow. Her looks and small build made her seem like a child from some foreign country. Showing a boyish silhouette in worn demins, but matched with a handmade lace-collared blouse, she had some sort of rustic outfitter's day-pack on her back, the which made her delicate form stand out in the crowd.

	Whether that was stylish or not as girls go, for the time being, if you looked at it through Banri's eyes as a boy, it was a bit clumsy, or rather, to put it bluntly, primitive, he was thinking, but strangely, it was good. Setting aside whether it suited his taste or not, if there were a hundred guys, ninety-five of them would be trying to get her attention, trying to touch or poke, trying to get a reaction. Wouldn't he be thinking of such things? Of course Banri was amongst the ninety-five.		Whether that was stylish or not as girls go, for the time being, if you looked at it through Banri's eyes as a boy, it was a bit clumsy, or rather, to put it bluntly, primitive, he was thinking, but strangely, it was good. Setting aside whether it suited his taste or not, if there were a hundred guys, ninety-five of them would be trying to get her attention, trying to touch or poke, trying to get a reaction. Wouldn't he be thinking of such things? Of course Banri was amongst the ninety-five.

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	Excitedly shouting "No way!", they applauded.		Excitedly shouting "No way!", they applauded.

	"That's just it--- we will be in the Dance of Fools. You will ~~be come~~ fools and dance like crazy, newcomers."		"That's just it--- we will be in the Dance of Fools. You will become fools and dance like crazy, newcomers."

	From the beginning Banri had been a fool anyhow, but would Kouko be all right with that?		From the beginning Banri had been a fool anyhow, but would Kouko be all right with that?

Hiro Hayase at 21:18, 7 November 2013

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	Emphasizing more than usual her luxuriant hair, a snow white hair-band. Sandals and bag also snow white. Even at a distance clearly beautiful, lips painted deep red, today's Kouko again was perfectly lovely.		Emphasizing more than usual her luxuriant hair, a snow white hair-band. Sandals and bag also snow white. Even at a distance clearly beautiful, lips painted deep red, today's Kouko again was perfectly lovely.

	Yanagisawa turned his back, not noticing. Kouko, in effusively good humor and spirits, showed her sparkling smile and spun herself around so as to show the hem of her skirt especially for Banri. She looked for all the world like a matador. The other students passing behind her looked with ~~suspicious~~, even hostile glares at the strangely behaving, gorgeous, perfect Kouko. Banri, however, understood the meaning of Kouko's mysterious behavior. The girl hadn't even replied to the text messages from her beloved Yanagisawa.		Yanagisawa turned his back, not noticing. Kouko, in effusively good humor and spirits, showed her sparkling smile and spun herself around so as to show the hem of her skirt especially for Banri. She looked for all the world like a matador. The other students passing behind her looked with skepticism, even hostile glares at the strangely behaving, gorgeous, perfect Kouko. Banri, however, understood the meaning of Kouko's mysterious behavior. The girl hadn't even replied to the text messages from her beloved Yanagisawa.

	Shortly Kouko frowned, troubled by the situation with Yanagisawa, but trying to move on. That scenario would eventually have to result in "Kuoukuoo!" In short, moving on to the stage of "Look here, take me!" Yanagisawa was the bull. The matador, Kouko.		Shortly Kouko frowned, troubled by the situation with Yanagisawa, but trying to move on. That scenario would eventually have to result in "Kuoukuoo!" In short, moving on to the stage of "Look here, take me!" Yanagisawa was the bull. The matador, Kouko.
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	This feeling. This ''Yana'' fellow. It seemed like---		This feeling. This ''Yana'' fellow. It seemed like---

	"No way! We said it harmony, didn’t we? Pleased to meet you. I'm Oka Chinami. ''Yana'' and I met at a film research club recruiting party."		"No way! We said it in harmony, didn’t we? Pleased to meet you. I'm Oka Chinami. ''Yana'' and I met at a film research club recruiting party."

	---She was just right for him.		---She was just right for him.
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	"Ah. Then hey Chinami, China... excuse me, but this is a little awkward. I'll call you Chinami then. Chinami, ...excuse me, even this is hard to stop. Eh, Oka..."		"Ah. Then hey Chinami, China... excuse me, but this is a little awkward. I'll call you Chinami then. Chinami, ...excuse me, even this is hard to stop. Eh, Oka..."

	Chinami looked at Banri's face, apparently with great curiosity as he spoke stupidly. Her dark eyes were a little bleary from being a natural airhead. It gave the impression of little letters spinning around in the middle of pupils of her eyes. Inside such as little Chinami, around five hundred little heart marks wanted to call out. No no no, come back to earth.		Chinami looked at Banri's face, apparently with great curiosity as he spoke stupidly. Her dark eyes were a little bleary from being a natural airhead. It gave the impression of little letters spinning around in the middle of the pupils in her eyes. Inside such as little Chinami, around five hundred little heart marks wanted to call out. No no no, come back to earth.

	"With Oka, that makes the third person with a two-syllable last name. There's Tada, Oka, and one more person, ...Kaga..."		"With Oka, that makes the third person with a two-syllable last name. There's Tada, Oka, and one more person, ...Kaga..."

Rpapo: Word order change. Omaken doesn't research "Cultural Festivals", but rather the culture behind festivals.

2013-09-03T12:25:13Z

Word order change. Omaken doesn't research "Cultural Festivals", but rather the culture behind festivals.

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	Regarding the rescue of Banri and Kouko after they got into their mess in the mountains, the start of term training camp for the "Japanese Cultural ~~Festival~~ Research Society" was going on in the seminar house. ...Their nickname, Omaken. The nickname came from '<span id="back_omaken">[[Golden Time:Volume1_Translator%27s_Notes#Omaken\|Festival Research Society]]</span>'. She said, "There was talk going around the student affairs office right away, you see. 'A strange bogus club was trying to infiltrate the school, scattering pamphlets around, inviting people to join.' "		Regarding the rescue of Banri and Kouko after they got into their mess in the mountains, the start of term training camp for the "Japanese Festival Cultural Research Society" was going on in the seminar house. ...Their nickname, Omaken. The nickname came from '<span id="back_omaken">[[Golden Time:Volume1_Translator%27s_Notes#Omaken\|Festival Research Society]]</span>'. She said, "There was talk going around the student affairs office right away, you see. 'A strange bogus club was trying to infiltrate the school, scattering pamphlets around, inviting people to join.' "

	She was Hayashida-senpai.		She was Hayashida-senpai.

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	"How does he hope to find me?", as if he could hear me if he tried. But even if he could hear, "What in the world? Why are you searching?", he wouldn't understand. Finding and catching me, would that return me to inside of him? Or perhaps, would he erase me entirely? Even so, that guy would not even understand my so-called existence. Such a thing he just cannot do.		"How does he hope to find me?", as if he could hear me if he tried. But even if he could hear, "What in the world? Why are you searching?", he wouldn't understand. Finding and catching me, would that return me to inside of him? Or perhaps, would he erase me entirely? Even so, that guy would not even understand my so-called existence. Such a thing he just cannot do.

	So then, Banri, realizing the impossibility of what he was doing, as usual became dejected. Taking a breath, he closed his eyes once more, as if he were awfully tired, bothered by nothing working, and before long crawled under the sheets once more. However many times he did it, even leaving his ~~parent~~'s home and living alone, Banri still didn't change. Still, here he was.		So then, Banri, realizing the impossibility of what he was doing, as usual became dejected. Taking a breath, he closed his eyes once more, as if he were awfully tired, bothered by nothing working, and before long crawled under the sheets once more. However many times he did it, even leaving his parents' home and living alone, Banri still didn't change. Still, here he was.

	I knew what Banri was going to do next. After all, haven't I seen this show so many times before? Hiding under the sheets, Banri has after a while fallen asleep again. In the time I've existed, after all, how many times has he fallen into this trap? It's called falling back to sleep. This sleep is strangely powerful, heavy and deep, hitting Banri all at once. Even having set his cell-phone alarm to wake him up, with a required exposition on criminal law that he hadn't even started on, Banri doesn't even twitch.		I knew what Banri was going to do next. After all, haven't I seen this show so many times before? Hiding under the sheets, Banri has after a while fallen asleep again. In the time I've existed, after all, how many times has he fallen into this trap? It's called falling back to sleep. This sleep is strangely powerful, heavy and deep, hitting Banri all at once. Even having set his cell-phone alarm to wake him up, with a required exposition on criminal law that he hadn't even started on, Banri doesn't even twitch.
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	"For sure, brought back together in the car of an Omaken senpai, an older girl."		"For sure, brought back together in the car of an Omaken senpai, an older girl."

	"You went together to her house? Her ~~parent~~'s home?"		"You went together to her house? Her parents' home?"

	"Well, maybe, what of it? She called, ‘It's over there, this is good enough, thanks for the help!' and got out at the intersection, though."		"Well, maybe, what of it? She called, ‘It's over there, this is good enough, thanks for the help!' and got out at the intersection, though."