Golden Time:Volume4 Chapter1 - Revision history

Rpapo at 15:28, 1 May 2014

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	Without thinking about it shrugging her shoulders like a little girl, she looked at the trembling Banri, her smiling, rose-pink lips like a flower bud opening. There was a lipstick mark there now, right in the middle of his forehead.		Without thinking about it shrugging her shoulders like a little girl, she looked at the trembling Banri, her smiling, rose-pink lips like a flower bud opening. There was a lipstick mark there now, right in the middle of his forehead.

	Backing away slightly, Kouko, like a ~~childing~~ finding fault,		Backing away slightly, Kouko, like a child finding fault,

	"Honestly Tada-kun, what in the world happened to you that you had to go to the hospital? You shouldn't be so reckless when I'm not watching you."		"Honestly Tada-kun, what in the world happened to you that you had to go to the hospital? You shouldn't be so reckless when I'm not watching you."

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2014-04-28T17:46:53Z

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 She was grinning.  But perfectly.
-Her long and wavy hair set off her milky white skin prettily with a dark brown.  She was wearing a beige satin hairband.  And a white, all-lace mini one-piece dress with an ascot style collar, no slip and a high waist.  She had an antique Gucci bag slung by her side, in what Kouko called her 'Jackie style'... not Chan, of course.  It was not kung-fu clothing.  She emulated the classic fashion model personified in Jacqueline, who was originally the wife of a president and, after his assassination, the wife of a shipping magnate.  Even if her feet happened to be in rose-motif slippers (980 yen) bought expressly for her use.
+Her long and wavy hair set off her milky white skin prettily with a dark brown.  She was wearing a beige satin hairband.  And a white, all-lace mini one-piece dress with an ascot style collar, no slip and a high waist.  She had an antique Gucci bag slung by her side, in what Kouko called her 'Jackie style'... not Chan, of course.  It was ''not'' kung-fu clothing.  She emulated the classic fashion model personified in Jacqueline, who was originally the wife of a president and, after his assassination, the wife of a shipping magnate.  Even if her feet happened to be in rose-motif slippers (980 yen) bought expressly for her use.
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	Just like with the point of a sword.		Just like with the point of a sword.

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	Banri, practically dumbfounded, opened his eyes wide. Still laying on the bed, he stiffened.		Banri, practically dumbfounded, opened his eyes wide. Still laying on the bed, he stiffened.

			How, he wondered, could he have thought that this person's existence may have been something out of a dream? How could he forget, he wondered?

	<nowiki><~~93% Completed~~></nowiki><!-- 38 of 41 pages -->		Something so vivid, the existence of a lover so magnificent, aaah, at any rate...

			"Good morning, Tada-kun. Even though you have a lover, you're together with somebody else like this. I ask you once more, perfectly, are you cheating on me?"

			What should he do? The queen of roses was in full wrath. There was only one choice for the background music inside the endangered Banri's head: Dark Vader's Theme. Though you are C-3PO, the music and the character didn't go together, so he couldn't even laugh.

			The contours of her cheeks were drawn perfectly. Her skin was of flawless marble. Her face was shaped beautifully and perfect.

			Radiant, she was a lovely person.

			Her almond shaped eyes, clearly emphasized by jet black mascara and eyeliner, sparkled like stars as they focused on Banri... or rather, glittering like those of a carnivore that had already spotted its prey, having that same terrible glint in her eyes.

			She was grinning. But perfectly.

			Her long and wavy hair set off her milky white skin prettily with a dark brown. She was wearing a beige satin hairband. And a white, all-lace mini one-piece dress with an ascot style collar, no slip and a high waist. She had an antique Gucci bag slung by her side, in what Kouko called her 'Jackie style'... not Chan, of course. It was not kung-fu clothing. She emulated the classic fashion model personified in Jacqueline, who was originally the wife of a president and, after his assassination, the wife of a shipping magnate. Even if her feet happened to be in rose-motif slippers (980 yen) bought expressly for her use.


			<nowiki><~~95% Completed~~></nowiki><!-- 39 of 41 pages -->

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 If you called the particular world where Kaga Kouko lived reality, then he wanted her to try and appear before him.  But in that case, then just about everything he could see was getting messed up by this high fever.  He was in an embarrassing state, he felt like he should not even be there, and had a guilty conscience as well.  What had been happening up to a moment ago, even if it was something he could have sworn had happened, the colors had swiftly washed out.  The dream had gone pale and faded away.  His dense self had a hard time accepting that it had happened like that.
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+Banri opened his fever-bleary eyes.  Slowly turning his head, he looked over at Linda, seated on the stool.
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 But even so, he wondered why was Linda nice to him like this.  Did she miss him?  Was it trauma from having lost him once?
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+Once again in the mode of saying nothing, Banri slowly closed his eyes.  He felt Linda's anxious gaze on the area of his eyelids.
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2014-04-20T15:21:36Z

Chapter 1: a correction

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	Even knowing how strong the feelings were that he carried, and what he himself wished for, was scary. He wondered what in the world would happen, what it would take to satisfy him. Like his throat when it wanted water, just what he would try to drink down?		Even knowing how strong the feelings were that he carried, and what he himself wished for, was scary. He wondered what in the world would happen, what it would take to satisfy him. Like his throat when it wanted water, just what he would try to drink down?

	He also thought of the place he wanted to be at. Where he wanted something, and was ready to try and reach his hand out for it, but which was probably not there to take his hand. So it was. From the very start he alone wanted to go back there, but there was no promise to await him there. He should make sure to get clear word about that.		He also thought of the place he wanted to be at. Where he wanted something, and was ready to try and reach his hand out for it, but which was probably not there to take his hand. So it was. From the very start he alone wanted to go back there, but there was no promise to await him there. He should make sure to get a clear word about that.

	But even so, he wondered why was Linda nice to him like this. Did she miss him? Was it trauma from having lost him once?		But even so, he wondered why was Linda nice to him like this. Did she miss him? Was it trauma from having lost him once?

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 Linda stared blankly back, puzzled, at Banri and the cryptic words he had spouted out.
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+"...Ah, well, sort of."
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 The look of her hair in the summer sunlight coming through the glass was the soft grey of squirrel's fur mixed with brown.  Her cheeks too, they seemed to glitter whitely.  Or rather, with a light voice, she talked by the side of Banri's bed.
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+"Ah..., well, I've only known she was my neighbor since the other day, but my first encounter,"
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